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By : Tru6768
  • From Camui on May 08, 2009
    Ooooh let's see what happens in the morning after.
    TRUNKS DO NOT IMAGINE GOTEN WHILE GIVING GOHAN FELLATIO.
    Er
    performing fellatio
    ......... man I wish I was good at grammar
    did grammar well
    had good grammar.
    O_o;;;;
    uhmmmmmm...

    GO PORN
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  • From chayron on May 08, 2009
    Mama mia! The while chapter of pure delicious sex. Whoa.
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  • From ANON - avril27 on May 08, 2009
    A beautifully written story with well developed characters.I hope to see frequent updates! Thank you for the hard work.
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  • From TheAngryBuddha on May 08, 2009
    Woah! This is one spicy but tasteful lemon chapter. Gohan has finally succumbed to his growing feelings for Trunks....and what better way to express those feelings than one-on-one boinking *grins*? I am eager to read Goten's reaction to Trunks and Gohan's budding relationship.

    You're making this Gohan/Trunks shipper very happy. Keep it up :).

    P.S. You deserve the praise, no ifs, ands, or buts :). This story does the Gohan/Trunks pairing AND the Dragonball fanfiction community great justice.
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  • From MoonFace on May 08, 2009
    I feel like doing a girly squeal for updating lmao but I won't hurt your ear drums ;)
    My gosh that was a lemony chapter! Truhan definitely makes DBZ sex the hottest haha
    It shocked me how fast they got together but I wasn't disappointed!! XD
    This is my favourite chapter by far haha great job!

    Cyn
    xoxo
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  • From VixenzxMasqueradex on May 07, 2009
    Well here I thought that good DBZ yaoi was all be dead!!!! OMG I got a hankering to find a good story a while back and LET ME TELL YOU! I must have reread this one about five times!!! Yea. . . don't ask where I was either at the DBZ yaoi glory days LOL! You have me hook, line, and sinker!!! Dear Kami in the clouds PLEASE get more up soon!!!

    Ahem. . . forgive my ramblings. YOU ROCK!
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  • From quatreofdoom on April 24, 2009
    Just leaving another review to let you know that this line:

    “If you must know, Gohan,” he admitted quietly, “the only time I feel truly alive is when I’m doubled over at his feet, gasping for air and choking on my own blood.” Trunks closed his eyes and leaned his head back. “Father. He knows how to make it hurt so good.”

    is the best thing I have ever read in my life.

    That is all.
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  • From TheAngryBuddha on April 21, 2009
    I've already left you a review at the BoxerxRice site, but it wouldn't hurt to leave you another one on this site. I am seriously hooked on this story. I love the fact that the relationship between Gohan and Trunks is forming at a realistic pace (none of that "love at first sight" nonsense......though, I do enjoy such stories occasionally *grins*). Goten squandered his chance, as far as I'm concerned. Time for Trunks to move on :).

    I am looking forward to the next chapter.
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  • From quatreofdoom on April 20, 2009
    I just feel so, so sad for Goten. He's so confused and pathetic. Somebody needs to sit that boy down and explain life to him! He's not smart, guys! He needs this stuff spelled out for him!
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  • From glasseyeviolet on April 20, 2009
    Oh wow! This is getting intense(as in love intensity XD)! I was happy that Gohan is finding more about himself
    and the same goes for Trunks. But I do hope Goten and Trunks make amends..Oooh what if Goten finds out about Gohan and Trunks's kiss? Hurmmm. Story is amazing! Cannot wait for the next chapter!
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  • From Camui on April 14, 2009
    JESUS CHRIST GOHAN WHERE DID YOU GET ALL OF THOSE BRAINS IN THEM THAR HEAD.
    I SWEAR IT WAS A GENETIC DEFECT.
    DE. FECT.
    URRRRRGGGGH.
    (capslock denotes extreme emotion)
    I've been reading your story for a while but now that Trunks is actually getting somewhere I decided to review. xD;; I'm so bad. ee;;

    Anyway I'm excited to watch Gohan slowly start to fall for our charming and slightly benevolent Prince~
    but alas what will happen to Goten? will it be too late when he finally realizes that he made the wrong decision? will he feel betrayed by his brother? will he finally submit to Vegeta and become a royal concubine? all on the next episode of DRAGON BALLLL ZEEEEEEEEEE.

    ♥
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  • From LadyWolf on April 14, 2009
    OMG...!! I love Trunks!!! I laughed my ass off when he was whispering to that pansy ass sharper...and when he ran out...geez what a dork!
    Videl is a bitch! And that's all I have to say about that...

    NOW....

    THAT KISS WAS SMOKIN'!!!! ABOUT TIME!!!! WAHOO!!! I swear to the FanFic Beings out there....I think they make a hot ass pairing here...much..MUCH better then Goten...

    Oh yea, Goten is a cofused ass...I mean how can you NOT know which hole to stick it in???!!! WOW..but they never said he was a genius after all he IS Goku's son....oh that's mean...oh well..never said I was nice :oP

    P.S...Oh yea Gohan is hot!!!!

    XD

    Post soon!!!
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  • From ANON - Toki Mirage () on April 13, 2009
    *grins* oh mah gawd, u are AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!! *glomps* Like, seriously! Seriously seriously!!! ^^ I hope there's more to come *cough*cum*cough* because I'm on the edge! *grins* Of my seat, of course.
    Love the fic ^^
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  • From MoonFace on April 13, 2009
    Your story is fan effin' tastic!
    I love how you've detailed the characters so close to the manga/anime versions.
    Great job ;)
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  • From chayron on April 12, 2009

    chapter 7

    1. [Trunks awoke to the sound of that voice that was becoming so familiar to him these days. It was low and close to his ear. “My bed comfortable, Sleeping Beauty?”]
    You know, I don’t blame Trunks anymore for teasing the crap out of Gohan. Just look at this! –Gohan is begging to be teased! No man can expect to be seen as straight after saying something like this to another male. Poor Videl. She had no idea what she was getting into ^_^

    2. [He knew that Trunks and Goten had always been super comfortable with one another, sleeping in the same bed and sprawled all over each other, as if they were still kids. So he figured Trunks was probably used to having someone to curl up to upon waking [...].
    Poor oblivious Gohan.

    3. "I don't want to be like Videl, kicking you out of your own bed."
    Trunks sure is Mr. Subtle. If I were Gohan… Well, yeah, I don’t think I can even compare myself to Gohan… But anyway, the world would be doomed and Trunks would have been Kamehamehaed long ago.

    4. [He glanced down at the newspaper again and felt that familiar feeling of jealousy burning in his stomach. Most eligible bachelor? Goten should be so lucky as to be featured in the school paper as the campus's most worthy catch.]
    It seems that Goten is jealous. I bet it’s not easy to have a best friend who is Mr. Popularity. Goten must be tired of living in his shadow. On the other hand, the thought about Trunks being the interest of so many potential lovers unnerves Goten.

    5. Shoes. ^_^ Hell, it’s so childish what Trunks did, but Trunks is childish in a way. Like a royally pissed off child.

    Chapter 8

    1. [Trunks swallowed loudly. “When there’s no war, I guess,” he muttered, then immediately regretted having answered. If there was one person he should know to hold his tongue around, it was Vegeta. Really, though, what would his father have him eat? The flesh of his enemies?

    A second piece of cheese sandwich stuck in his throat. Come to think of it, hadn’t he once heard Vegeta brag about doing just that?]
    As said, I am totally enamored of this sentence ^_^ I really am.

    2. [“Trouble? Trunks? Oh, no . . . never.” Gohan rolled his eyes, not managing to keep the sarcasm from saturating his tone.]
    Hehehehehe

    3. [He once heard someone in his high school gym class say that the most intimate contact one could have with another person, short of having sex, was to work out with them. The unwelcome thought entered his mind as his eyes locked with his roommate’s.]
    Uh-oh. And then Gohan went to train with Vegeta into the gravity room. Alone.

    4. [“I’m sure Videl knows I’m coming and will have saved up several weeks’ worth of nasty comments to unleash on me when I get there. Not to mention . . . .” Well, he really didn’t have to mention his mother. Trunks knew her well enough himself. The teen nodded sympathetically as they rounded the building and entered the lobby.]
    [“Videl!” she cooed. “You know you don’t have to knock. You’re family, you silly girl.” Videl looked at her with derision but didn’t say anything. Then her stare came to rest on the eldest boy.]
    [“No,” Videl said, not turning around as she exited. Then, at least managing to have some respect for her elders, she added a quick, “thank you” before closing the door.]
    [He supposed that when Gohan had lost Videl, Chichi had lost the younger woman’s money and her womb.]

    Chichi hater holding out a glass of wine:” Cheers!”
    Videl hater clinks their glasses together: “Cheers! Well done!”

    5. […]Sinking into the pile of down pillows, he thought of how glorious it would be if the brick wall of Gohan’s resolve ever crumbled and all that passion was allowed to hit him like a tidal wave. Then he smiled to himself. It was bound to happen sooner or later.]
    Hell, Trunks is like a cockroach – not even an A-bomb would change his thinking.

    Chapter 9

    1. [“Why do you wish to leave your present college or university?” he read aloud to himself.

    How to explain this one?

    He spoke the words aloud as he pecked the corresponding keys. “Goten is fucking some blond tramp.” Trunks looked at the cursor. Yup, that was about right. He tabbed down to the next question.

    “Describe your family and its influence on you.”

    His fingers moved across the keyboard quickly. “Daddy didn’t hug me enough, and mommy gave me everything I wanted. Do the math.”]
    Hahahaha

    2.[ So, after some thought, he had decided to surprise his roommate to a home-cooked, sit-down dinner and he was very happy with his plan. It would be the perfect mix of thoughtfulness and effort and Gohan would just have to be floored.]
    Trunks is sure trying to prove his point. Just to flatter himself and prove others wrong.

    3.[ “Yeah, so you at least have to stay for a half hour or so. You know, make me look good.” He winked.]
    Heeeeee ^_^

    4. [He stared at the screen in disbelief, a cold feeling of dread settling in the pit of his stomach. He was positive that he had not submitted that application. He never would have done so; not with the things he had written.]
    This one has just made me roar with laughter. But hell, Gohan is a klutz! Hahaha Totally didn’t see this coming. I should have, though, hahaha

    5. [“Guess who,” he challenged, covering Trunks’ eyes with his hands. Trunks ceased stirring the pot he stood over for a moment and a smile spread across face. “Gohan!”]
    And then Trunks turns around and gives him a kiss like a good housewife should :D

    6. [ “And where the hell did you learn to dance like that?” he asked softly at Trunks’ ear.]
    I swear Gohan is begging to be molested! Acting like this and then playing coy all of a sudden! Either he’s trying to drive Trunks mad or is the most oblivious person in the world. Oh wait, must be Goku’s genes.

    Chapter 10

    1. [It seemed he was finally going to meet the mystery man that was so much better than him. ]
    Thanks for including this. Really. It makes one think that the characters are really thinking and living creatures. Just like us.

    2. A lot of self-search going on in this chapter. I think it might be true, Gohan trying to realize himself everywhere just so he wouldn’t need to think about himself.

    Chapter 11

    1. [“What?” Trunks looked down at his torso. “Oh, you mean this?” Then he looked apprehensively around the room before lowering his voice. “I can’t really talk about it here.”

    “Why not?” Sharpener asked anxiously.

    Trunks lowered his voice even further until he was whispering, a fearful expression contorting his features. “I don’t want Gohan getting mad. I never know what he’ll do.”]
    Hahaahahahahahah Though, I think the guy speeding away in his car was a bit overdone.

    2. The entire time Gohan and Trunks were hmm…getting closer, I was waiting for Goten to show up and catch them with their hands read. I mean, Goten knew when and where they were going to help Videl move ^_^ But I bet you’re saving this up for later.

    3. Hmm, you know, I realized now that I would be sad if Truanks and Goten would make up. I mean you invested that much in Gohan’s characters. In comparison to his, Goten’s character looks bland, just some insecure teen worried about his sexuality and who has no idea where to stick his dick in. Meanwhile Gohan’s character is fleshed out, he is a mature and responsible adulat albeit with flaws (which actually only add to his fleshed out character making him seem more real), hell I even like his jokes. Hmm…really, Goten has become only a background character. Haaahh, it just shows how much I love the Gohan you created.

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