Reviews for Love for allBy : aoshi4misao |
I think there are only four or five fanfics with this foursome on all of the internet, so as a faithful AsuKiraCagaLacus OT4-er I feel like it is my personal duty to make sure you get feedback.
I think it works really well that you jump right into the action. You mention in your author notes at the top that you skipped over the first chapter or so. I wouldn’t worry about it. Everything work rather well. Something slightly critical I would mention is the formatting error ‘�’ that appears every so often. It makes certain lines a bit hard to read, but your writing still shines through.
One of my favorite lines from this fic is: “He looked at Kira with smoldering emerald eyes, “Fuck her.” Kira started at the order from his best friend.” So much was going on there. I feel like the deep trust the two boys had for each other really shows in their ability to swap partners, but new layers of sexual tension were rising as well. Like how Athrun might end up having a hidden dominant side to him which Kira could discover later. Also, the fact that Kira came into Cagalli while kissing Athrun was just so unbelievably hot. Overall, thank you for adding to this desperately underrepresented ship. I wish there was more out there, but apparently, we are the weird ones. I truly enjoyed your fic. Well done!
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