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Reviews for Survival of the Fittest

By : fyrbyrd074
  • From kitkit on October 28, 2009
    love it
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  • From Zofo on October 12, 2009
    That was some hot arena sex between Nappa and Raditz and I loved how you described the claiming, very nice.

    Glad Kakarot has found some friends, even if they are weak like him. Grenpapa seems to have his wits about him which they are going to need to avoid Aspato 'spoiling' Kakarot.

    What accident did Kakarot have and will he really be able to find his strength again? I hope so.
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  • From ANON - Ireyon on August 23, 2009
    Thats a rather intersting story you have here, I hope you continue writing it. Your style is good, there aren't any significant problems with grammar or spelling so it's easy to read, allover a good job.
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  • From Premerseahshiko on July 21, 2009
    I love this story! I wonder what dangers await Kakarrot in the city or being unclaimed?
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  • From ANON - AFicR on July 21, 2009
    AWESOME!!!!!

    Pleeeeeeeease more!
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  • From ANON - kit-kit on July 21, 2009
    love it
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  • From ShibuNoNeko on May 08, 2009
    So far I really like this story^_^ Please update as soon as possible.
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  • From ANON - AFicR on May 02, 2009
    Excellent plot so far, I do so yearn for a good: sweet Kakarott amidst his brethren!
    Whenever I spot one it's... FINNALLY!!!

    Of course, I have my standards, and it definitely doesn’t make for a good read a sloppy writing find! Which... isn't the case!! You're writing came a LOOOO-OOOONG way since I started following ‘Damn Traditions’ -since its 1st chapter, I might add. After reading THIS 1st chapter I went perusing Naruto's stories, and... WOW!! I'm reeeealy looking forward for more of 'The Turning Away'.

    Back to THIS fic, the start was wonderful, the writing VERY compelling. Leaving Kakarott's plight as an unknown was a MAJOR suspense- low-shot. *pouts* I myself am checking daily for that soooo awaited update! *whines piteously*

    This chapter had everything to capture an audience (myself included) and if your plots at certain times are afflicted with hyperspace syndrome, SO WHAT, I say. The great thing about fanfiction archives!? One has the power to go back and ADD to one's heart content!! *smirks*
    Of course, watch out! A too lengthy plot drives the reader to skip redundant input to the juicy parts; there's a fine line between pleasant reading and a miasma of boresome pages that were long to be made but are altogether dismissed with only a cursory look. In-between is gooood! XD

    Even so, the one thinks a Beta’s needed to enrich the story? There's plenty around, all right, you just have to try and pick which works better for you.
    Searching for a Beta? Contact me; I'll do my best to add to your plots/skill. :P

    Oh, please consider the advice: DON'T PROSCRATINATE TOO LONG! I know! With each day it becomes EVER more difficult to get back on the horse; if you love to write so much... DON'T make THAT mistake. And, contemplating on improving one's skill is all well and good but... beware not to loose sight of your own style.

    Take all the time you need but... DON'T dawdle, keep on jotting down your ideas for a scene, a thought, a dialogue, an event, a description, and then put it all together in the right slots, it's better than be all whooolly concerned about skill you have in spades -compared to many out there.

    Sorry for the spiel.

    ...

    In the meantime: still eagerly waits for an UPDATE.
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  • From dino1 on April 22, 2009
    I like where this fic is going. I hope you update soon.
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  • From ANON - kougaluv on April 22, 2009
    ONE OF THE BEST STORIES I HAVE READ TODATE!! A MILLION STARS I GIVE YOU!! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!
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  • From ANON - kit-kit on April 19, 2009
    wonderful story
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  • From solitare1 on April 18, 2009
    You are the 3rd of my favorite writers that wanted to give up something they love doing because some long winded writer didn't like that you don't write like them....I guess I just have a turtle shell, because if I could write, I wouldn't give a cats meow what people think. I would do it for the people that liked what I do and myself. I'm not much of a cheering section alone, but I'm sure I am not alone in my thinking. Please don't give up something you love and the fans that love your work for one persons opinion.
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  • From PurpleMoonlight on April 18, 2009
    Where did you get the idea that you are a bad writer? Because you are not! I've read a lot of your stories and I always find myself enjoying them and wanting more. I realize I have probably neglected to review your stories and I apologize for my laziness. I really hope you decide to keep writing.

    Purple-Moonlight

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  • From Achillona77 on April 18, 2009
    i really enjoy your stories. and you can't leave me hanging with 'turning away!'

    so if you really need a beta, i will beta for you.

    because i love all of your stories... -dbz and naruto- and i will gladly help out with those.

    ~anz
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  • From DarkSerapha on April 17, 2009
    Hmn.. are you talking about my review? I sure hope that you did not take my comment the wrong way. See, if I'd thought you were a bad writer I would not have bothered to comment at all. I think you have a lot of promise as a writer. You have interesting ideas and you're developing your own writing-style. But how are you gonna do that unless you keep writing? If you want to, you can contact me via Instant Messenger (Alessariel@hotmail.de on MSN or Alessariel on YIM and AIM) and we can talk a bit about how you could improve your writing. Don't let yourself be discouraged though! Everyone starts somewhere and you are off to a better start than many others. Ganbatte ne!
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