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Reviews for Urban Concubine

By : Orchideater
  • From glasseyeviolet on May 14, 2009
    Wonderful ending to the story, I really enjoyed the moral to Yaumcha's
    predicment of not being the most powerful. Its really sweet.
    Great story! And your welcome ^^
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  • From Tru6768 on May 14, 2009
    (I lean against the house and watch him. There is nothing more beautiful on this earth than the sight of Goku in his element. He is a master, the consummate warrior, and to be able to watch him when he’s serious is a true treasure.)(All three of my saiyans are prime examples of masculine excellence and hung like bull moose, but Goku is simply a specimen ne plus ultra. Seeing him in his full dominating glory is enough to take my breath away.)

    I'm really loving Yamcha's descriptions. They're quite beautiful :) Also love how he knows exactly what each man needs and how to give it to him...like making Gohan angry by mentioning Videl and telling Vegeta he couldn't handle Kakarott. Ooh and Goku's need to "reclaim" him from the others. He's really got a lot of insight into their minds and uses it to sexually satisfy them. Which makes for a whole lot of hotness ;-)

    Oh I also loove how Goku and Vegeta act out their rivalry through Yamcha. I wonder why they don't just get together? Or maybe...3some? Wow, lucky Yamcha... Or maybe poor Yamcha...they'd probably tear him apart! Anyway, I'm rambling, but there were just so many things I liked about this story, right down to likening Goku to a 'Stranger in a Strange Land' which I thought was very apt.

    Everyone was so in character, it was insightful, and there was a hell of a lot of good sex. Thank you!

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  • From Tru6768 on May 14, 2009
    (“You’re such a fucking asshole!”

    Exactly what he needs.)

    Hahaha! I like your first person Yamcha. He's funny and also really insightful. Like here:

    (He gave up the Great Saiyaman years ago, but he still wears a costume. This costume of the mild-mannered teacher, the boring dad, to hide the saiyan within. It’s a different sort of secret identity, but one all the same. And I am privy to one of the greatest secrets there is.)

    I'm really enjoying seeing all of our favorite Saiyans through his eyes.

    And I wonder what kind of "weird" things Vegeta would want to do to him?? And how does Gohan know? Lol.

    Guess I'll have to read the next chapter ;)
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  • From cueball2 on May 13, 2009
    Wow!
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  • From Deathdeamon88 on May 12, 2009
    wow that was a great story.
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  • From ANON - Camui on May 12, 2009
    Urgh, damn me for not being logged in alskdjflskerjelkrjadsf.
    Wooo it's done! :D
    Gohan's part was my favorite f'sho f'sho.
    I liked Goku's, too. Though Yamcha coulda stayed the night, I bet Chichi's not a cuddler! D:(

    Good story all in all, something that definitely puts a good perspective on Yamcha as being the most powerful man in the universe. Albeit not physically.. xP Well in a sense physically. Mentally? Seducingly. Er. That's not a word... you get the point.

    Loved it! You get thumbs up and a hug.

    ♥ Cam
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  • From glasseyeviolet on May 10, 2009
    Oh wow, Vegeta would use those devices. Interesting story behind Yamcha's love
    fests. Curious to see how he and Goku act together.

    Loving it! Update soon ^^
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  • From glasseyeviolet on May 03, 2009
    I love the depiction of Yamcha, he does seem like he would be the player of sorts. ^-^
    I cannot wait to read the next chapter with Vegeta, it would seem like that
    one will be very intense. ^^
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  • From Camui on April 29, 2009
    More.
    Soon-ish.
    (by ish I mean you better have it sooner than later because Camui has secret SUPAH SAIYAJIN POWAAAAAAAAHS and whatnot)
    :D
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