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From Zofo on February 12, 2010
Aww, Goku's kicking himself for running away. It was interesting to read that he kinda missed the bad boy Vegeta, that he'd fallen for him so long ago, and that he was going to divorce Chichi. Then had to wait because of Bulma and not wanting to hurt her. Typical Goku putting others before his own happiness. It must have been tortue when Yamcha got him instead :(

The conversation in the desert was wonderful, when Goku finally told him, and the awkwardness he felt. Not to mention the undressing and sex afterwards :) Goku must be on cloud nine!
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From Solo on February 12, 2010
Oooh, spicy! This was a particularly well-done chapter. I loved your descriptions and the explanation of Goku's thoughts, especially at the beginning. And sweet, innocent Goku blushing at just about everything. I have to say, I like the way you're handling Vegeta's character. It's like, even though he's become a nice guy, he still hasn't lost the edge that makes him Vegeta. It's as if you've managed to balance his personality effectively, without losing sight of his actual character. Very nice. Eeeeek, I can't wait to see more!! :D
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From Orchideater on February 11, 2010
Hoo, that was a long wait! I was about to send you a �how�s the fic going?� note at the Salon. But I�m glad you waited until it was done to your satisfaction, that�s what�s important. Vegeta is running Capsule Corp now? I like it; I love the idea of him as a cunning businessman.^^ Great chapter. Consummation at last! So Goku�s broken heart was not the result of something specific on Vegeta�s part, but a breaking point he reached entirely in his own mind. Very interesting. It�s amazing how the mind can work like that sometimes, and we can build up expectations and suffer defeats all because of our own thoughts, and then other people have no idea why we act the way we do. Beautifully handled, as were Vegeta�s reactions. It�s a relief that they can finally move forward and enjoy each other, physically and otherwise. But now the big question� what about Yamcha??
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From 66Hiei08 on February 09, 2010
This is getting good.. very good. :o)
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From Xenosangel on December 28, 2009
And now I'm obsessed. I haven't read any DBZ yaoi in a while but I had the urge to check it out again. I wasn't disappointed. Look forward to more updates!
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From NAnderson on December 22, 2009
OHHHHHH the TEASING!!!!! what happens next? what happens next? what happens neexxtttttt???? I must know D: !!!!!!!! I must also say that you do a wonderful job of making drama when you want it lol. Keep up the good work ;)
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From Solo on December 16, 2009
Dangit, I NEED the next chapter! ^o^ Honestly, I'm not even a G/V fan at all, really, but the concept of this was too hard to ignore. This last chapter ended on a super cliffhanger, and...and...I'm sad now. Hahaha, I'd really like to read more of this. I definitely feel bad for Yamucha, even more so than Goku, actually. I'm itching for a threesome, though. Ohohohoho!!! Also, I really enjoy your chapter titles, especially the last two: The Kiss and The Miss. Fantastic.
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From Ulrike on December 13, 2009
I foresee...a threesome! I hope. Later. :)

When Goku said he had a message for Vegeta...I was worried that he was going to say something terrible! Though, the way he spoke on the phone makes Goku appear to be the one in charge. Ooo...are we going to see a headstrong controlling Goku in future chapters? Seme Goku!! Possible angst.... :) Looking forward to the upcoming drama!
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From Zofo on December 13, 2009
I feel so sorry for Vegeta thinking he's missed his chance and also for Yamcha. Even though I think Goku and Vegeta belong together, I can't help feel sad for Yamcha as he obviously wants them both :(

I hope Goku has been doing some soul searching and is not just going through this third and last date to get it out of the way *bites nails nervously*
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From ANON - topbear on December 13, 2009
ahhh, I have sent previous comments without cheching. I deleted a sentence accidentally.

"However part of me re�Did he really say my name?� Vegeta asked. The way he asked the question almost sounded insecure � like he didn�t believe it."

should read

"However part of me regret it is going to be over in three chapters.

I did not quite understand below sentenses.

>�Did he really say my name?� Vegeta asked. The way he asked the question almost sounded insecure � like he didn�t believe it."
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From ANON - topbear on December 13, 2009
Finally the update.Yay! I have read it three times. I like how the tension is built before Goku calles. My heart was almost jump out of my throat when I heard gouk calls. Vegeta did not know what he did to lose Goku's trust so much? He really need to do something drastic to compensate. Otherwise I am a bit worried the third date is just to keep promise. By the sounds of it Goku wanted to do it fast and get it done and over with. Will Vegeta be able to turn the table? I really look forward to see how that is going to happen. Please don't keep ups waiting for too long time time. It's Christmas soon.

However part of me re�Did he really say my name?� Vegeta asked. The way he asked the question almost sounded insecure � like he didn�t believe it.

Yamcha smiled a little. �I told you he did.�

�You also said you saw him.�

He shrugged. He�d gotten a little carried away while they were having sex and embellished. It was just that the image of Goku jerking off was so clear in his mind and he couldn�t help but share it with Vegeta. �So I told a white lie. When it comes to improving sex, lies are allowed.� gret it is going to be over in three chapters. You are a genius you definely should write more.

I am also slightly confuesed this in this part:

What is the white lie? Goku did not call vegeta's name? I thought he did. I did not quite get it.

I can feel vegeta's mood is getting worse and worse. Yamcha is trying hard to make up. I also felt a bit helpless of the situation. I look forward to see how you are going to evolve this.

Have a nice day!
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From Orchideater on December 13, 2009
Ha-ha! Okay, so it�s good to know Yamcha�s not being used to �prime the pump.� XD Lots of wonderful interactions between Yammie and Vegeta in this chapter, and the moments when Vegeta opened up to him, revealing his own insecurity, were touching. I especially liked the comment: �How is it you can get away with fucking him and I can�t even kiss him right?� It�s both funny and poignant. I look forward to seeing how this is all going to end.
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From Orchideater on November 18, 2009
Kissing booth! Er, kissing contest, but I kept envisioning them in some sort of boothlike setting in front of the camera. That was such a cute idea, something I�d never seen that done before (in DBZ fics). Goku�s gotta be hooked now after such a hot royal kiss. He�s still so stubborn though; why�s he so afraid? I wonder. Yamcha is being very generous to do all he can to get Vegeta and Goku together. From Vegeta�s reactions, it almost seems as if he is allowing Yamcha to prime the pump, so to speak, getting Goku used to a male/male relationship before turning him over to Veg, although maybe Vegeta would have no problem forming a 2 saiyan + 1 human family unit, a mixed race saiyan �pack.�
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From Zofo on November 17, 2009
I'm proud of Vegeta taking it slowly and waiting for Goku to come around. He's come far. Their longing for each other is so painful. Goku is so much in love with him but dreading it at the same time.

Kinda feel sorry for Yamcha, he's being so understanding, when he knows if they get together he won't be able to be with either of them. I'd like to read why Goku keeps going with Yamcha, even though he really wants the prince.

I had not heard of Stomp, but really enjoyed the Youtube clip, thanks :)
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From topbear1974 on November 16, 2009
Now I would like to say something about my all time love Goku. Goku is relatively difficult to capture comparing to Vegeta. He doesn't have the conflict and angst Vegeta has and his personality is not strongly shown as Vegeta. He is relatively mild and his character is consistent over the show.

However, this doesn't mean he has no bountiful personality. He is a tainted hero. He wanted to be selfish saiyan but has become a kind human in the end. He wanted a life of his own but he could not escape the fate to be the ultimate savior. He has responsibility, hence he made hard decisions. He took the result on the chin. He has his own conflicts. Those conflict can not only affect his own personal life but many others. He can be weak at a point, but he is still a hero. He learns fast and regain control soon. He reflects the ultimate moral ideology of oriental cultural: The way of the god, sharp but not harmful; the way of human, work but not argue. (��֮��֮��Ϊ��----��ӡ��¾��) this is by a famous chinese philosopher.

Anyway, what I was trying to say is goku can appear innocent and childish in a moment but he is nowhere a simpleton. He will find a way to fit himself when he is aware of the situation and take control. However, he is also a very sincere person, who once fell in love, would love without hold back. I guess that is reflected in your story that he is in love with vegeta, so much that to the extent that could break his heart. However, when he realize that he could get nothing out of it, he is fully capable to switch to something else like Yamcha, although not painlessly. However, since he is such a sincere person, I think he might want one to one relationship, rather than multiple relationship. However, I could also see him and Yamcha made good couple without all the anxiety and pain.

I love how you describe his thoughts and please carry on to explore him. I love to see every single thoughts of his.

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