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By : Pixelgoddess

From topbear1974 on November 16, 2009
yay! One day overdue but well worth the waiting. I like how you slowly build up to the third kiss. I can feel the tension and anxiety of Kaka. Yamcha is so lucky.
I felt a bit strange that Vegeta is boasting his wealth though. In chinese culture, a man using a woman's money should be shamed of. So even Bulma is dead now, I found it is slightly distaste that Vegeta tried to buy Kaka with his inheritance from Bulma. Also I think his life under frieza meant he is used to simple life style, so I quite not get a extravigant Vegeta. To me both kaka and Vegeta are minimalist. But it is just me. There are thousand images in thousand's people's heart. It is quite interesting to read Vegeta has a touch to our day to day life.

I love stomp. it is a great musical, cheerful and funny, just like Kaka. It would not be a surprise he likes it. I am glad Vegeta chose well.

At beginning I was hoping Yamcha is just a foreplay for Vegeta and Goku, before they have big and fat orgasm. Part of me thinks they belong to each other and part of me felt sorry for Yamcha. However, now the triangle gets messier I am eager to find out how you are going to plan this out. You are doing a great job by not just write a threesome but with good feeling involvement.
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From ANON - Rourinu on November 16, 2009
This just gets better and better! I love how you're taking your time with Vegeta and Goku. It makes it so much more realistic and believable. I also think you're doing a great job of keeping everyone IC considering that situation. I'm still eager to know what it was Vegeta said/did to effect Goku so greatly. I hope that is revealed at some point. The love triangle that's forming stronger and stronger here creates a unique situation, and I simply can't wait for the next chapter!

ps - Stomp was a great show to feature. Good choice.
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From Ulrike on November 15, 2009
Whoo! Stomp! Saw that years ago in Chicago.

Awesome chapter. I was actually nervous when Goku and Vegeta kissed at the end. Poor Goku. Doesn't know what he wants. And his fear and hesitation is hurting Vegeta! :( I'm looking forward to the next bit. I'm still curious as to what happened to the two saiyajin all those years ago that caused their previous silence.
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From Orchideater on November 10, 2009
Sounds like the date went smoothly: Vegeta was suave but not overbearing, and it seems Goku is still skittish but at least more willing. �Pretentious food bastards,� lol. I suspected it was something like that, though I don�t speak French. Loved the getting-dressed scenes.
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From ANON - meshala101 on November 07, 2009
all I can say is Vegeta has amazing restraint lol he finally gets Goku on a date, had to sit across from him in what sounds like a cozy resturant, with goku looking as Yamcha would say "fuckable" and the only move he makes is an intimate touch to the face, remarkable. I would love to know what he was really thinking and what he did after he left Goku. I imagine he managed to make it a few miles before he had to pull off to the side of the road and use the lube he has stashed in the glove department for just these kind of emergencies, lol OMG I cant stop smiling. okay back to the review. as you can see from the what I've written so far I would love to hear from vegeta are you planning on doing something from his point of view?

In my last review I made some comments about what happened between Goku and Yamcha seeming to feel a bit rushed I still feel that way but not so much now, I like how you went into further detail about gokus feelings for yamcha and about how what happened between them wasn't all due to the alcohol. but them sleeping together did create something of a conundrum if this ch was anything to go by.

In this ch goku was questioning vegeta about his relationship with Yamcha, he couldn't understand it, he couldn't understand it when yamcha tried to explain which is why you have to be careful here because Goku sleeping with Yamcha and admitting he has feelings for his friend that goes beyond friendship makes things complicated because while hes still trying to understand why Vegeta wants him but is sleeping with yamacha, and why yamcha is sleeping with vegeta when he knows he wants goku, and why is yamcha helping vegeta to get goku when yamcha wants vegeta for himself and might be in love with him. (okay lets take a break here my head is spinning.)the only question he didn't ask is why yamacha slept with him if he still plans on pushing him at vegeta.

but do you understand what i'm trying to say? Goku is unable to comprehend their strange friendship slash relationship when he himself is now on a date with vegeta who he had mixed feelings for after just having sex with yamcha whom he likes.

okay writing all this just made me realize that theirs something I have to know about yamcha and vegeta, yamacha is helping vegeta get goku but get him for what? to fuck, to have a relationship? and did the two of them ever discuss what would happen between them if vegeta and goku ever got together? and oh my I cant wait to see vegetas reaction when he finds out about goku and yamcha

so many questions and now i'm writing all this and you probably know all this after all you're the author and this is your story and you know where the stories going and how its going to get there. I have to remember sometimes that I'm not reading a finished piece of work but a fanfic that's still in process so maybe if I were a little more patient some of my questions would be answered in later chapters I don't know. I just read the ch give my honest opinion and hope not to offend. lol. I do believe you're doing a good job with a story line that is a lot more complicated then it sounds and i can't wait to see where the story goes from here.
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From Zofo on November 07, 2009
Poor Goku really thinks this could be some kind of game to break his heart again and laugh at him :( What did Vegeta do to cause all that mistrust?

At least the first date went well, but Vegeta still has a long way to go before Goku trusts him.
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From topbear1974 on November 07, 2009
it seems the date went well. i wonder how goku is going to deal with the feeling between yamcha and vegeta. i felt his feeling for vegeta is stronger. but i felt sorry for yamcha too. vegeta's feeling towards goku must run deeper than just feeling towards a good looking saiyan. he was obssessed with him in the anime. i wonder how he felt when he knew yamcha had sex before him--and took goku's viginity, oops. ;-).

look forward to see more.
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From ANON - Yuurei on November 07, 2009
Yay first date. I'm glad it went well for them. Love the restaurant name Vegeta originally wanted to bring him to. Update again soon.
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From Orchideater on November 02, 2009
I was hoping Yamcha would get some sweet Goku-action. Goku didn�t need much convincing, did he? XD Of course, he�s always been open-minded and always known and trusted Yamcha, so he felt comfortable with him. I look forward to seeing if Vegeta�s reaction will be rage or lust, or even something else entirely.
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From ANON - meshala101 on October 30, 2009
okay let me start off saying that i love your fic its one of the fics i'm constantly checking for updates, that said, I knew from the preview that this wasn't going to be a simply goku and vegeta fic or even a vegeta and yamcha that you were going to mix it up the lemon scene was good but what led up to it didn't feel genuine. They've been friends for years and i'm assuming roommates for awhile now as well but no sexual tension, yamcha is just now realizing how hot goku is come on wheres his glasses lol anyway he would glady be serious with vegeta if that was what vegeta wanted but hes hung up on goku unwilling to commit to anyone else because that would mean giving up on him and hes kinda figured out that goku might be in love with vegeta. I got that but then things seem to get confusing only because it all happened in a blink of an eye, where talking about a what? 48 hour period.

first there was the plan to help vegeta win goku over and he kissess goku to remind him of how vegetas tastes, so all goku is thinking about is vegeta but yamcha seems to say hummm not bad i've clearly been missing out and then the next day after vegeta makes his first move and he convinces goku to give him a chance it goes from that to a few beers and to a few more and before you know it their kissing and goku is undressing him and their having sex. this is why it seemed fake it all happened so fast, their was no build up no sexual tension like their was when vegeta was simply standing in front of goku. even the scenes with vegeta and yamcha were convincing its just with these two it seemed rushed.

You did such a good job on the back story for goku and vegeta,even in the prelog you say that the one vegeta really wants is goku, he has yamcha play dress up and pretends its him, we read how goku once tasted vegeta and the struggle he went through to bury it, how easliy he lost control when yamcha tricked him and reawakened old feelings and desires, thats a story, thats a build up that will hopefully lead to a satsifying climax just getting drunk and having sex and then waking up the next the morning and its like, oh by the way I like you
it seemed fake as if goku was also using yamcha but more like a shield against what he feels for vegeta. yamacha realizing that he wants vegeta and goku was way more believable.

please dont take this review the wrong way, just being honest and I'am looking forward to the next chapter
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From Zofo on October 29, 2009
That was very hot and certainly Goku enjoyed his first time :) I really liked reading his little observations through out it.

Oh dear, Yamcha's really done it now. What will Vegeta do when he finds out? Does Goku prefer Yamcha to Vegeta now?
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From ANON - Rourinu on October 28, 2009
Woo! What a tangled web we weave! What a hot little chapter this was! This fic has completely captured my attention and sucked me in, and at the moment, it's the only reason I'm visiting this website. It's been a long, long time since a good yaoi DBZ fic came along, and I couldn't be happier. Hopefully this will inspire more! Keep up the great work!
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From NAnderson on October 28, 2009
OH HO!!! Do I see a yummy 3some coming on ^.^ yummy! Well what ever is coming I cant wait 4 the next update!!!
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From topbear1974 on October 28, 2009
Does that mean we are going to see some threesome soon?
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From topbear1974 on October 28, 2009
ahhh. I felt sorry for Yamcha. I wonder how this would turn out. I am jealous of Bulma an Yamcha, they both kissed Goku.

Now what would Vegeta do? I like how the tangled relationship evolve. you become the master of the triangle relationship. look farward to read more.
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