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From JubblesBubbles on January 25, 2012
I'm having a dejá vu right now... I already read this fic and I'm quite positive that I reviewed it, but, anyway! Intriguing plot and a evil cliffhanger in te endi!!!! I want more, of course!
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From JubblesBubbles on June 08, 2011
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updaaaaate!

I forgot about this fic and now I stumble upon it again! Such an amazing plot! ('Tough I would much prefer a Mirai Trunks plus Gohan pairing, Goten does the job incredibly considering his relations with the present Trunks).

Hey.

Can you email me when you update? jubblesbubbles@hotmail.com

kisses
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From ANON - Rakel on March 06, 2011
Wow I love this story, just managed to stumble upon it and it really caught my attention since I am a sucker for Future Trunk/Goten/Trunks lol....I love this bold Goten, but I also love how you've managed to keep his original personality in tact, give you thumbs up for being able to do that. Go Goten, but then I don't know how to feel since Trunks might love Goten ohhhhh noooooooo....the complications. Hope you update soon :)
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From ANON - Truhania on February 01, 2011
Hello,

I noticed your story "Under Duress" and I quite liked it. I wondered if you'd mind joining my website and posting it on it. My website is "Boxer and Rice" and is dedicated to Gohan/Trunks (all varieties) and we're also accepting stories where there's other pairings like Gohan/Trunks/Goten, or Gohan/Trunks and Piccolo/Goku. As long as there's some Gohan/Trunks in it (and obviously it's not Gohan/Trunks bashing) it can be posted on it.

Here's the url

http://gohanxtrunks.net

Let me know if you're interested. And also if you've problem when posting I'm pretty sure I can solve them.
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From JubblesBubbles on January 04, 2011
Oh my, what a cliffhanger you left here, ne? ^^

Adored the confusion and emotions of these guys! Albeit a bit rushed, the interactions between Mirai, Trunks, Goten and Gohan (MAINLY cute-Gohan)are really interesting.

I want to read more! Could you email me when you update? jubblesbubbles @ hotmail . com ?
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From ANON - Shay on August 24, 2010
Oh, this is hilarious! I find myself giggling with every other Goten-uttered statement, lol. Hmm, tension tension between the two Trunks... and then there is Goten being all horny, lol! In the beginning, you said there will be Trunks(Mirai)/Gohan so now I'm playing ideas in my head on how you will get to the that point, haha.
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From ANON - spring on July 05, 2010
i really like this story it seems like one of those stores that you cant really tell where its going and there for its more interesting. i am really looking forward to the next update.
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From wickedlady4180 on February 22, 2010
I can not believe Goten did that! Awesome! I can see it now: Vegeta smirks, Chi-chi screams, Goku faints, Gohan sweat drops, Bulma laughs, party OVER. LOL. Can't wait for more.
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From ANON - lolistar71 on February 15, 2010
Wow! Great story, really love how you've kept them all in character! I'm disappointed that the first meeting between trunks and gohan was so lackluster but I'm sure that the future holds some great stuff for them. Love your Goten, he's exactly how I imagined him to be (same with Trunks). You also brought up the interesting point of Trunks's (younger) arragontness might come from Vegeta. I've never really thought about it like that but it does make sense. I'm curious as to how you're going to deal with Videl. Overall I'm really liking this story and I look forward to the next chapter!
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From Tru6768 on February 14, 2010
I thought Trunks had some great one-liners this chapter. And I disagree with Goten. Asshole does become him! I laughed when Goten shushed Trunks b/c Mirai was approaching and how he agreed to wipe his mouth after drinking the divine essence. But other than that, Goten was annoying me this chapter. He needs to get his hormones in check! He's oblivious to Mirai's feelings for Gohan and Trunks's feelings for him. And doesn't he find it the least bit strange that he's fallen head over heels for TRUNKS when Trunks has been right in front of him his whole life? Nonetheless, I'm eagerly waiting to see where things go for these boys and looking forward to some hot "this is wrong but it feels so right" lemons.
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From ANON - trunkis on February 14, 2010
I really like your story, updates as soon as possible please
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From AwesomeIncarnate on February 13, 2010
I've mentioned, right, that I love how you portray Goten?

But the focus of this chapter: Poor Mirai! What is he to do now that he sees Gohan is married? Will he fight for him? Will he sedately give up and focus on his little brother instead? I must know the answers to these burning questions and more!

And...actually I was going to make a disparaging comment about the cliffhanger at the end (how dare you!) but then I thought of what I'm doing for my next fic and decided that preemptive turnabout is still fair play. However, I still insist upon knowing what happens!

And I went back and re-read that part in the first chapter: Much better. It's a lot less abrupt now and gives a bit more depth to the situation, especially into the possible future dynamic between Trunks and his decades-dead father. Good work.

Anyway, keep at it, and don't worry about how fast you're going. We'd all rather have it done slowly and properly than fast and flawed (well, I would, anyway. I'm just being presumptuous and speaking for everyone else as well).

Until next time, I shall wait.
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From marccram on February 07, 2010
This has potential. I was a bit disappointed with the Vegeta portion in the first Chapter. That part felt to me, as AI put it, rushed. I can't wait to see how Gohan's introduced and what his and Mirai's respective reactions are, especially with the foreshadowing you've left us. Minor pet peeve that I nail *everyone* on: the possessive form of "Trunks" is "Trunks's". Where a proper noun ends in "s" you always add the apostrophe and "s", pronounced like an added "es". Some people are trying to change that BUT THEY'RE WRONG. RAWR!

Also this needs to end with Goten/Trunks and Gohan/Mirai. Just sayin'. :P
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From Tru6768 on February 07, 2010
YAYYYYY!!!

All my favorite demi-Saiyans in one place and *already* involved in some kind of fucked up love triangle...quandrangle? Either way, YAY :D

I love stories like this. There's no scary bad guy or looming death of one of my favorite characters. And the angst is all due to suppressed feelings and jealously and yummy, yummy unrequited manlove....oh, yes, this is good stuff. (If there does end up being a bad guy, I'll still like it, of course. I'm just saying :))

Verrry interested to see what's going to happen here. So Mirai comes back to the past, deep down hoping to start something up with Gohan, but meets Goten first and gets...shall we say...distracted. I wonder if his attraction to Goten isn't just the result of seeing Gohan in his physical features. Or even just being horny because who knows how long it's been since Mirai got some? Lol, although looking like that...couldn't be TOO long.... But I wonder what will happen when he sees Gohan. Will he immediately forget about Goten? Or are things with Goten actually going to go somewhere? I hope that Trunks will eat his pride (or whatever it is that's stopping him from admitting his feelings to Goten) and man up before that happens. Because even though I love, LOVE Trunks and Mirai clashing (because that is exactly what I think they would do if they met as adults and -- lets face it -- if there's anything better than one strong-willed Trunks, it's two!), but I don't want to see them really hate each other. And while I know you are very partial to the future wonderboy (oh yeah, I knew you were Rayne :)) I am partial to his present self and I'd hate to see him get hurt too badly. I've only ever seen one other story to pair Goten and Future Trunks, and that one...well, it didn't turn out very well for my present-timeline prince. But, there are 2 Trunkses and 2 Sons...so, I'm sure they can work something out! Worst case scenario...an orgy.... LOL. Oh, I laughed when Mirai thought 'thank god goku only had 2 sons' or whatever LOL.

All that to say, way to do a realistic job with a very rare pairing :) Also I'm glad to see Goten and Trunks have both accepted that they're gay. That way we can get right to the good stuff :D

Now...Trunks ^_^ You've done both of them so well! I like Mirai's thought processes. Esp. how he realizes when he's having inappropriate thoughts and chastises himself for them, but doesn't really bother to stop himself from indulging in them. This is very much how I imagine he would be. I still see in him the mischief and other qualities I see in Trunks only somewhat more tempered by experience. Meanwhile Trunks is such a perfect brat! Yet still likable, of course. Love how he orders Goten around and I like how you described Goten's reaction to his orders as almost instinctual, hehe. And Goten is adorable. I absolutely loved when he was sputtering with all the "and then's" when Trunks asked, "what did you just say?" I could totally hear that entire exchange in my head ^_^

Well, I really like this so far. It's fun and funny and I can't wait to see where it goes for all of them. And I'm excited to meet Gohan, since everyone else seems so well-done thus far. I wonder if Videl is in the picture? I guess we'll find out at the party Bulma's throwing....

Can't wait for the next chapter! Hope you'll post soon!
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From wickedlady4180 on January 17, 2010
Thanks for updating, and thanx for the shout-out. Present Trunks is a jerk, lol! A great follow up chapter, I like the idea of two Trunks' sharing Goten. You set the fic up for a great scene with everyone getting together. Can't wait :)
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