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By : AwesomeIncarnate

From mjmusiclover on May 23, 2011
ahh brilliant, i just randomly found this on here, as it's usually on boxer and rice, it's really well written :D and i had immensely enjoyed it :D
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From Lunamaru on November 15, 2010
BWAGAGAGAHHHHAAAA.
Yeah. I liked Gohan's "box" moments, it will be interesting to see how he deals with them in the future.
I do not expect any fairytale endings, actually XD I'm more of hoping for more conflicts and angst. I just adore angst XD Lol.
OMG, poor Trunks, like all the time. Such a guilty, angsty, depressed man. Such great moments of guilt for him. So perfect. *gigglesnort*
I wonder what's going to happen when they get to the Hyperbolic Time Chamber and Cell. Gohan's going to have more "box" time? Or is someone gonna notice that Gohan is not okay? Whoowhoowhoo... CANT WAIT until you UPDATE. Ha, I made a rhyme. XD
~Loves,
LUNAMARU
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From Lunamaru on October 18, 2010
God, I've been away from this site a bit too long XD
Great story thus far. I don't know if I've ever reviewed this, so XD
But, a few months wait?! *irrational nail biting* But-but-Gohan is here! Trunks and Gohan have to exclaim their love to each other, Gohan has to figure out his box and his feelings of his father! *cries* Months are too long... DX TOO LONNNNNG.
Waiting impatiently,
Lunamaru
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From Tru6768 on September 07, 2010
Damned plot getting in the way of my smut. And angst. Lol. I'm kidding; I'm actually enjoying the plot quite a bit. It's similar enough to the anime that we can relate to it but different enough that I'm always wondering what will happen next. It's like getting to watch the outtakes or an alternate ending to the Android Saga and I really like it. Not to mention there IS the promise of hot mansex around the bend. This chapter I enjoyed the plot thickening *and* the way Eighteen flirted with Trunks ;) Most of those non-con 18/Trunks fics make me cringe, but this was quite innocent...just enough to remind the reader how damned hot and irresistible Mirai is ;) I don't know how Gohan can stay mad at him really. Fuck knows I couldn't. He must have put Trunks's gorgeous blue eyes in that box of his. Looking forward to the next installment. Sorry to hear it will be awhile!
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From Tru6768 on August 17, 2010
I'm with Isis, I want them to live happily ever after! Though it doesn't look like it's going to happen for awhile :( Look at you writing dbz yaoi with a plot. Like, a major plot. Going chapters and chapters without sex (damn you). Well, I am totally wrapped up in this story. I already told you how much I loved the interaction between Gohan and baby Trunks. It makes sense what you said about baby Trunks being a sort of outlet for Gohan - where he can say all the things to the baby that he wishes he could say to Mirai. Though...I wish he would just tell him and stop being so stubborn :/ And speaking of Mirai. The poor boy is clueless. And completely unshakable, lol. I love him. He doesn't care that no one wants him around, he just gets all up in your bidness anyway. That's my Trunks :) I eagerly await the next chapter, and by the way...what's wrong with Gohan?? It sounds like he has a strain of the heart virus himself!
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From Solo on July 08, 2010
How I've managed to not review this is beyond me. So anyway, this is really entertaining to read, like hilarious. Your writing style has that...um, cynical? deadpan? (I dunno) sort of humor/tone to it that I just love. Also, the bit with Baby Trunks and Gohan was too cute! I can't wait for the next chapter so Trunks can save Gohan and they live happily ever after! *obnoxious fangirl squeal*
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From on June 30, 2010
I am really loving this story. Can't wait for the next chapter!!!
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From Tru6768 on June 28, 2010
"Teacher, there are things that I dont want to learn. And the last one I had made me cry...."

Sorry, couldn't help myself. ;P I so think of this story every time I hear that song on some adult contemporary station. Good song, though....

Maybe he had already put fatherly affection in his box.

Haaa...yup, that's Goku for ya.

"Everything else what?" It was just that if it ran out of gas up there or something, the driver would fall a couple of miles to the ground and die. And why was it so high if it was going to the city? And if it wasn't going to the city, why a car and not an airplane?

I wonder if Gohan is really so distracted by what's going on around him or if he's just purposely trying to focus on anything but Trunks. I'm thinking the latter.

Everyone seemed to contemplate this radical�and, to Gohan, obviously spur of the moment�strategy. Was he the only person in the group with a brain? Did nobody else see that Trunks just wanted to follow him? Creep.

LOL. I wish Trunks would've been more of a creep and followed him around more in the anime. Gawd, every time one did something with out the other it pissed me off to no end. Everyone KNOWS Trunks would have followed Gohan around like a puppy. It's practically a Pavlovian response!

Hope warmed him from the inside as one of the two spoke. "Goku, I think that's enough for today. Gohan's too tired to take any more." If Piccolo was saying that, then he must look even worse than he felt.

Awww, Piccolo. So much better a father than Goku...

Gohan hadn't thought he'd be able to work his head around that, seeing Piccolo and his dad as the enemy.
But he was getting used to the idea now. Or at least to half of it.

Love it love it love it.

"Drowning, that's what I'm doing! Stop staring and help me!" His dad's friend shouted wetly, trying to keep water out of his mouth and failing.

Ah! It always makes me smile when Yajirobe shows up XD No different here. Excellent job with his character. I laughed every time he spoke lol.

The wound started to heal instantly, which was actually pretty gross and not something Gohan ever wanted to see again.

LOL...indeed.

He had never been interested in women�which was good, since the feeling seemed to be mutual�he was good as long as he had Tien. Chaiotzu wondered idly if he would want to watch that show if Tien was in it. The idea brought in involuntary giggle forth, as well as an involuntary thought. Probably. Oops. Hopefully his friend hadn't gotten wind of that sentiment either.

Ohh yeah. I always knew those two were head over heels for each other. I like how you managed a scene from Chaiotzu's POV though. You don't see that very often.

Unfortunately, the other half-Saiyan was too focused on his destination to notice; he just kept staring straight ahead the whole time.

Oh, poor Trunks is SO clueless. He's ignoring you on purpose, sweetheart. But I'm glad you don't realize that yet because I don't want you to get your feelings hurt, you sweet, edible little piece of ass--I mean, Mirai. This is one of my favorite qualities about Future Trunks. He's so focused but to an extent he sees what he wants to see. I think you and I have discussed this before; that he's overly optimistic, somehow... I hope Gohan comes to his senses soon or Mirai's going to have a painful wakeup call when he realizes just what his teacher thinks of him.

Eventually, of course, it just became easier to leave the box closed all the time, rather than go through the whole process at the end of every day of acknowledging all of his emotions again, when he was just going to pack them away the next morning.

Ah, this is one of those moments when I could really connect with the character. I love those and authors who can create them. Quite honestly this is how I feel about work myself.

Somebody would have to be sure to take them home after. Trunks could do it. Even he shouldn't have been able to screw that up.

Heheheh...poor, poor Mirai.

Thank you for this chapter, hon! As always, it's got your unique brand of humor woven into every sentence and I enjoyed it very much. Can't wait for the next one. C'mon Trunks...don't let Gohan down.

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From Tru6768 on March 11, 2010
Aw, man...you totally got me with that ending there :/ Poor Trunks, wow. I hope Gohan comes to his senses sooner rather than later.

I also thought the lead-up to the androids' arrival was very effectively done from Gohan's POV. I had this horrible knot in my stomach the whole time. His (understandable) dread of that fateful day really came through. I feel so bad that, on top of all that, Gohan and Trunks have to deal with the whole "he loves me/he loves me not" thing, too. As if either one isn't stressful enough by itself!

Oh, and you made me tear up (at work no less!) when Gohan was holding baby Trunks. Who's the sadist now, huh?

By the way, never gonna write at work again? Lol, I think I've heard that before :P
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From IuvenesL on March 09, 2010
Astereognostic. Means Trunks was unable to tell what the stuff on his bedside table was by touching it. Bardock/Vegeta.

Nice story so far. ;)
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From Sagenwarrior on March 08, 2010
Ack don't leave it there~
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From Tru6768 on January 16, 2010
OK so since it took me so long to review, I'm going to overcompensate with a super long one lol.

The first thing I liked about this story was how Trunks, knowing full well that it was wrong, was sitting outside Gohan's window berating himself loudly enough for Gohan to hear and he doesn't even bother trying to convince himself that he's not doing it on purpose. I love protagonists with real-life personality flaws. Especially Trunks ^_^

Second, the way that Gohan - who is, what, like, 8? - totally bosses Trunks around here just as Future Gohan apparently did. (Of course I mean "bosses around" in the most endearing possible teacher/student, master/pupil way). But the duality between them was great. The way Trunks was all over-analytical (I thought Mirai was very in character) and went through a whole mini-existential, after which Gohan's just like, 'are you done being dumb now?' Of course Gohan saw no problem with what was happening, having that inborn obliviousness to all things socially appropriate that seems to run in Goku's family.

But now for the serious stuff. I loved the whole premise of this story because no one could really blame Trunks for what happened (despite the fact that he referred to himself as a child molester :-P I LOLed when he took the underwear.... Anyway, he shouldn't be too hard on himself because if he's a child molester, that means Mirai Gohan was too!). Point being, the most absolutely horrible thing about death is the finality of it. The undeniable fact that you will just simply never see this person again, or hear their voice, or smell them. Ever. I mean, to get another chance against all odds...one last chance to show that person how much you love them....anyone with a beating heart would take it!

So...tear-jerking moments:

"The man from the future was perhaps the happiest he'd been in years. Gohan tasted exactly like he remembered, sweet, but not too much so; his favourite flavour. That it was smaller than he was used to was irrelevant; for the moment, Trunks could believe he was the kid again, sucking contentedly on Gohan like nothing else mattered."

"Again, not what he was used to, but the feeling of having Gohan inside of him again was just the best thing that Trunks had ever experienced. It had been such a long time, and he had been certain it would never happen again, this feeling of fullness, togetherness with the man�boy�who he loved so much. Trunks could have died happy right then."

And then when they said their I Love Yous after sex....

Speaking of the sex, I was so happy that it was Gohan/Trunks. I don't know why. Just because most of the time the older person tops but the only shota scene I've contemplated writing with these two, I thought Trunks would let Gohan... I don't really know what I'm trying to say, but I really liked it. For some reason it just...gave me the warm fuzzies...among other warm feelings lol.

Something about Gohan and Mirai Trunks is just so..."full circle"...it gets me every time. Because Trunks becomes to Gohan everything that Mirai Gohan was to Trunks: teacher, lover, savior. You very much did that cycle justice here. And I think it would help Mirai Trunks understand why his Gohan "went gentle into that good night" for him all those years ago. Because he would gladly die for this Gohan. And maybe he can take some retrospective comfort in that. It might be that my emotions are all out of whack because this has been one of the worst weeks of my life thus far, but you really had me on the verge of tears at points.

There were also the LOL bits:

"�and to not be ignored in favour of his own semen, thank you very much�" Hahahah.

"Uh." Though two seconds ago he had been wishing to be the one to impart knowledge, now that the opportunity had arisen, he was feeling rather blank. "Well, it doesn't come out just because you had sex, Gohan. It's actually because of...uh...well, I guess it's basically when you rub your co...dick, like we were, that's what makes it happen. It's called an orgasm." Hahaha, this is why Trunks is not the teacher.

And there were other parts, too. Excellent comic relief.

I thought the hottest parts were the ones where Trunks was drawing parallels between the two Gohan's in his mind:

"An evil grin formed on his face, so intently focused on him that Trunks gulped. He knew from experience that whatever the boy had come up with, he wasn't going to like it.

Or he was going to like it way too much."

"The older man lost the function to sit, falling flat on his back and allowing Gohan to lay on top of him and do whatever he wanted. Not that there was anything new about that."

And I liked it when Gohan got mad that Trunks bit his tongue :) I'm imagining his future counterpart would have had an entirely different reaction to that. Ah, the innocence of youth. Gohan was adorable throughout. I loved his reaction to the taste of semen and when he asked Trunks how long he has to "do this" for LOL.

As far as the end...what do you mean about it being weird?? I loved it. Just loved it. The whole moment with Goku. The jacket...*lip trembles*. And if you are referring the the last 3 lines or so...I think it's just Gohan growing up. Like, knowing that it does no good to be sad, it's not going to bring Trunks back, he makes a conscious decision to be happy. Don't you love when your own characters surprise you with thoughts like that? It makes me feel like Trunks in this story and I have to wonder just who the hell is in charge here! Anyway, I feel like that night with Trunks left him part boy but part man, too. I wonder how he will react in 3 years when he sees Trunks again. Or little Trunks for that matter. Ah, the joys of parallel universes!

As always, nice work :)

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