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Reviews for Windows to the Soul

By : FujoshiRayen
  • From MasterofPie on August 25, 2010
    oooohhhh~~ that was so sweet and dark ... but still sweet :D
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  • From In2lalaland on August 13, 2010
    Now that was just evil. You built up the anticipation, up, up and up. Then the chapter ended. O.O
    Nooo!

    I can totally understand why Duo left and the whole snapping under pressure just fitted into the flow of the events. Heero was very believable. He does what he has to do. It's a war after all. He might not like it but he knows that he has to do it.

    I can't wait to see what Wufei has to do to fix this. Wufei's sorrow and panic was fantastic, I just love how you're writing this story ^^


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  • From CeeCee on July 19, 2010
    I wasn't sure what to think of this initially, wondering if "Shinigami" was just kind of a figurative description of Duo's lust, but it seems more like this is alter ego?

    I enjoyed the descriptions, at least of Duo, you didn't give us much of Wufei by contrast, but that's okay, if the readers are already familiar with how they usually look on the show anyway. This is a fun read, easy to understand, nice clear language that I don't have to struggle through, which is a plus. I definitely want to stick around for the inevitable lemon scenes as your muse allows.

    Do you need a beta? My email is originalceenote@yahoo.com
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  • From In2lalaland on July 19, 2010
    Oh, very well done. I'm impressed.

    I really think you should explore this further. What exactly is Shinigami and when does he surface? Is he really a demon or is he just a way for Duo to cope with the war and the fear?

    I would like to see Duo's inner demon come full out, maybe not necessarily to rape Wufei but to bring pain and destruction or what ever it is he does. Let it all go, hell, have Wufei distract him with sex to bring Duo back. I think this plot has a lot of potential and I really don't think you should hold back. Especially since Wufei didn't appear to be totally against being screwed into the floor.

    My suggestion is for something traumatic to happen (one of the pilots dying/Duo accidentally killing a bunch of children or something like that) that will make Shinigami come out. It seems to me that Duo is hiding behind the god of death, so what happens when Duo doesn't want to come out?

    So, I really like the story, want to read more and really hope that you will continue. Go wild with it, don't hold back and don't be afraid of making it dark. As long as the ending is happy you can get away with just about anything :D

    Oh, and see if you can fix the formation of the page. Right now it's just one big block that's kind of hard to read.

    //In2lalaland
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