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Reviews for Unwanted Mating

By : NLDCat
  • From NightXIV on February 17, 2012
    horrah~ An update
    Wow, this chapter was just...wow. I'm speechless. I can only hope things get better for Bardock and Raditz. I'm kinda hoping that Tora saves Bardock and then Bardock goes off to save his son. That would be nice ^^
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  • From ANON - Sherren on February 17, 2012
    I adore this tale but a tad bit more description would be lovely, savvy?
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  • From ANON - Donnita on February 17, 2012
    Please tell me good times are coming soon for raditz? Because I don't think my heart can take anymore suffering!
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  • From Kalendral9 on January 25, 2012
    It's been a while since I've read this... Glad you are continuing it. Hope that Bardock can get out of this.. K
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  • From Robyn on November 23, 2011
    I usually don't do this - and that is, offer advice.

    I clicked on the story because the pairing was interesting. I managed to get through the first chapter, but noticed something.

    You have a lot of dialog - that isn't a bad thing. We all need to know what is being said.

    However, you could flesh the story out by giving us details. For example - when King Vegeta (and I am assuming it is King Vegeta, because there isn't any indicator) says “Raditz is unmated...” - what do you imagine his facial express is? Does he make hand gestures? Is he feeling any emotions?

    A suggestion -

    King Vegeta didn't like it, but he stated what was obvious to everyone except Bardock. “Raditz is unmated...” He could feel himself frown even as the words left his mouth.


    Creative pairings are awesome! I hope you continue to write them.






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  • From ANON - What'sThat on October 01, 2011
    About f'ing time the king grew some balls! He's a king he could have almost anyone as a bed-warmer!
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  • From ANON - BrighteEyes on August 08, 2011
    More! Must have more!
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  • From mjmusiclover on August 03, 2011
    wow this is truly awesome stuff, it's really well written & you are doing a brill job on this, can't wa`it for more :D
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  • From mjmusiclover on July 10, 2011
    ahh awesome stuff, it's really well written, i;m just curious if broly is going to hurt raditz
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  • From mjmusiclover on July 09, 2011
    ahh awesome stuff, i really love this fic :D, i can't wait for more to happen
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  • From bibbiesparks on July 09, 2011
    Eep! that was a shock finding out about Broly's other Parent.The story seems like an interesting one.
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