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By : chroniclyflaming
  • From ANON - Ash on December 29, 2016

    I love this story and I recommend it to everyone, even if for the sheer novelty of it! It's such an interesting dynamic between the two and even though it's dubcon, I'm okay with it??? I really want to see more of this thread! Do they fuck again on Earth? Do they tell anyone? Is Vegeta fucking Goku and he lets it slip one day Krillin fucked him? Will Krillin ever get that royal dick? There's so many questions! Ahhh thank you for sharing this with us!


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  • From ANON - sm on January 22, 2012
    you have potential as a writer. i like the idea but like many of your other fics the execution seems poor and even half assed. im not saying this to be mean, im saying it because its frustrating to see writers with a lot of potential make such huge oversights and gramatical errors. im not perfect, and i am usally willing to forgive mistakes that dont hurt the overall story, but many of ur mistakes make it seem like you wrote and didnt bother rereading. you write a lot which is great and i feel like you have improved, but you may be focusing too much on quantity and not quality. work harder on making sure your ideas are getting through, the writer cannot guess at the scenes that are in your head but you didnt put down in writing. i get frustrated when you seem to be going somewhere and then there seems to be a unaccounted for time lapse, or when the character starts talking about something that you didnt write about. it makes the reader stop and reread to make sure they didnt miss anything, only to find out that it was the authors shortcomings that threw them off.

    the idea for this fic is first class, you can even be funny and insightful so i keep comming back to read things you have written. if it were anyone else, i would have read through the first part of your fic, gave up on it at the 3rd horrible grammer mistake or unforgivable oversight, remembered your name and never clicked on another fic by you again. i look forward to seeing what else you write, and may even continue to turn a blind eye to these things just to see how it ends. but i thought that if i gave at least some constructive criticism then maybe i wouldnt dread it. good luck.
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