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Reviews for Breaking the Prince (Part 2)

By : Doog

From ANON - vegetalover on June 11, 2015
I would like to tell you that I've been reading this story, this time more carefully (my native language is not English so i go slowly) and I would say that is sadly beautiful. I love to get into this story and, at the tortures scenes, i can imagine at vegeta being extremely gorgeous as never .... but at the same time ... it makes me sad, I feel depressed ...you really touched me! I would like to know how you can get to write with that much detail the particular aspects of the vegeta's darks experiences and freezer's twisted maneuvers. It would be a great personal pleasure for me if i could ever read something written by your hand based on the freezer resurrection and his meeting with Vegeta, it would be a truly exquisite pleasure reading specifically from you. not even if i were a writer could do it so amazing. In this regard, I'll tell you the same way that vegeta tell to freezer in that dream "Do not leave me. I can not do it on my own".......(the chapter of this line was one of the most impressive to me...) congratulations...i really admire your amazing talent. don't stop!!!
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From ANON - vegetalover on May 18, 2015
I love that story so much...i would like have the honor to keep it on my kindle, would you like to published both stories in a web site called "archive of our own"? i would love donwload it from there. congratulations, you�re amazing. Read your fanfic caused me the same satisfaction that give me read authors like stephen King, you are really great
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From ANON - vegetasfan1 on April 04, 2015
Are you Akira Toriyama.... covert???jajajaja!!! I can�t imagine nothing more close to Vegeta. Its impressive to me how you can develope the character of Vegeta, how intimate you can describe him, also how coherent can be this hidden part of his life with of what is describe in the serie...i love Vegeta now more than ever....amazing, really AMAZING....but also the way you describe the physical pain, the internal emotional trauma and the physiologic reactions of Vegeta�s (wonderful) body, i admire you so much...write something again please...continue this or make something new (about Vegeta preferably). Congratulations!! I will follow you
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From ANON - Natasha on February 17, 2015
Great story!!! Poor Vegeta. Any chance there will be a part 3? Please.
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From ANON - Seras on November 24, 2014
So I know this story's been out for quite a while, but I've read both parts and just wanted to say that this is the best portrayal of Freeza I've ever seen in a fanfic. It's obvious from the original version of the show that he very much enjoyed torture. Whether there could have been a sexual aspect to Freeza's sadism was unclear based on how little was revealed about Freeza's species--though there were possibly some hints (methinks he liked drinking human/saiyan blood a little too much). You explored this tastefully without giving too much away; it's all easily interpreted as a fundamental desire to humiliate Vegeta and control him down to his every basic need. Even better is how the entire drama flows so seamlessly into the show's plot and adds background to a relationship which I feel deserved more attention in the series.
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From Ulrike on March 10, 2014
I feel bad for not having reviewed the very ending of this fic. I've been trying to gather my thoughts. In a previous chapter, Zarbon says "You monkey scum," as Vegeta, Nappa, and Raditz walk away. It took a bit for me to really digest that scene and here's the reason why. In many fanfics, Vegeta is constantly verbally abused by Frieza and his men. It just seems to roll off Vegeta's back. But in your story, Vegeta had been one of Frieza's favored. He had been spoiled. He had honestly believed himself to be equal to Frieza. As someone who truly believed in his own strength, pride, and respect...that line was beyond terrible. So simple and short, yet "you monkey scum" was so degrading and shocking, I can see why Vegeta realized he had never had Frieza's respect or adoration...ever.

Now, the ending. At first, I was like...okay, we've seen all this in the show. HOWEVER, when you revealed that he still had the K.R.I. device inside him, I was like, okay, that's somewhat convenient for the plot. BUT THEN, I thought about it (hence the delayed review) and I was like, "WOAH. Vegeta never could have won against Frieza." He could win against androids, Cell, or Buu....but not Frieza: his main tormentor and controller of the K.R.I. device. You made Frieza so sick, so twisted, so obsessed with Vegeta, that he allowed Vegeta to kill almost his entire army JUST to crush his pride and arrogance in the final battle that ended his life. How absolutely horrible. How brilliant on your part! What absolute, true, sick abuse.

Your writing is astounding and you do your research well. I would love to see what you bring us in the future. Your Vegeta is spot-on and your character analyses is so good, I sometimes want to stop writing, because I know I'lll never be that good. But really, your work is excellent. Great stuff!
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From animeslave18 on March 09, 2014
Nawww the end. :( Honestly, if you re-wrote the entire series, I'd so read it. It's so horrible knowing that everything that Vegeta went through...was for nothing. Even when he comes back to life and Frieza dies, his torment isn't over. He still lives in the shadow of someone stronger than him then pretty much lives out the remainder of his life trying to become stronger. Funny...even though GT and AF don't really go with the series or are real for that matter, it sounds to me that, even though Vegeta was slower in gaining his power, he's still in more control of it than Goku. I mean, even when they both had tails and turned Oozaru, Vegeta was more in control than Goku, but then again, he had training. Then in GT, Goku mentioned that he didn't have much control in his SS4 form and Vegeta didn't seem to have any troubles with it, but he didn't voice it either. Eh, I don't know. I could analyze the series in so many different ways that anything sounds possible, but I digress...anyway, this story was amazing and so was the first part. Your imagination took mine to places that it never thought of to go that my mind is now reeling in the true torture that you developed on Vegeta. As I soak it all in, I'm truly curious in what else your creative mind will come up with. :) I do hope to see from you again and will expect more from you in the future. Thank you for this wonderful read and good luck to your future writing. ;)
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From Ulrike on March 06, 2014
Awesome work! Keep it up!
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From Ulrike on March 03, 2014
Brilliant. Really, an amazing set-up, an amazing way to show what was happening on Vegeta and Nappa's side during Raditz's battle. Your Vegeta is the most authentic Vegeta I have ever read. He is exactly how he was written when he first arrived in the show. I can tell that you have read the manga, watched the show, and have noticed EVERY detail leading up to the epic battle on Earth. Your writing is so good, I feel like I cannot fully convey how accurate your portrayal of Vegeta and the entire Frieza army is. Looking forward to what happens from here...seeing it from Vegeta's perspective.
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From Ulrike on February 28, 2014
Fantastic chapter. I love how you re-told it from that episode in the actual show. When I read your fic, I can't help but feel so depressed for Vegeta...because we all know that he doesn't win against Frieza in the end. And it's so infuriating that a character like Goku, a character who ultimately dislikes the saiyajin race and never suffered under Frieza, wins against Vegeta's cruel master.

This line got me--"However, Vegeta realized that Nappa must have been concealing this supposed knowledge from him, because� why? Did he think Vegeta wasn�t strong or intelligent enough to handle it?"

Frieza not only tormented Vegeta's body, but he warped his mind, as well. I can see why Vegeta held no remorse for his fellow saiyajins. He couldn't trust anyone, not even himself. Ah, amazing stuff! I love the incredibly fast updates, too.
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From ANON - animeslave18 on February 28, 2014
Holy crap! That was so fucked up! :o ...and strange and confusing and...just completely...just...I don't know! It was madness ok? It was crazy! At first, I thought Vegeta was in heat, but then all that stuff about being in Freiza's place kinda made me think that it was a dream, but it also seemed so real to me. How did you do that? O.o You're so good at explaining situations in great detail that it makes me wonder what I'm reading! I'm just so baffled! You know, for posting a story for the first time, it makes me wonder if you're actually studying writing...or maybe you're a doctor. O.o Kinda scary, hehe. However, you have a great talent for this and I can't wait to see what else you'll pull out of your sleeve. I'm really looking forward to more, but at the same time, I'm hesitant to read more lol. It's been so long since I've read a horror story and this is one of the rare cases where it's actually very well written. I have mixed feelings about this story, but don't worry, I'll keep reading til the end. :)
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From Ulrike on February 27, 2014
Your plot is astounding. I have read (and even written, tee hee) so many fanfics that just kind of follow Vegeta around as he relives his past. He gets beaten by Frieza here or there, he gets harassed by Zarbon, and then he goes on missions. And it's mostly for the angst (which, of course, I love). But your story could exist in the actual DBZ story-line. The way Frieza has been secretly setting up Vegeta to fail and even having him replaced by Cui, was brilliantly depicted. It's real, sick mind games that are so subtle, you can feel Vegeta's anger and betrayal. No wonder he runs from Frieza's army. Really awesome work!
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From digiella42 on February 26, 2014
Oh my god. Oh my godjflskdjf, sdlfjsdlkfj, fsdkjfls

THIS STORY. JESUS. DO YOU POST THIS ON FF.NET OR TUMBLR OR SOMETHING BECAUSE I NEED TO KNOW ASAP WHEN IT UPDATES BECAUSE I AM FREAKING OUT. OH MY GOD.

GOT A REC TO THIS FIC THIS MORNING ON TUMBLR AND IT'S BEEN THE BEST VEGETA TORTURE FIC I'VE READ IN A LONG TIME. OH MY GOD. I AM FREAKING OUT.

I want you to know that inside I am still locked in caps, but I figure reading this will be easier if I let up on that. Jesus. Your Frieza is exactly how I picture Frieza. I don't know how you do it. Oh my god. The gaslighting that Frieza is doing in BtP Part 1 with all the drugs and the gaslighting *here*. Oh my god. I am seriously freaking out. This is an absolutely brutal fic and I am at least 7% releaved that it's taking place in cannon timeline since that means there's a chance this wont end up being one of those dark fics that ends horribly for Vegeta and absolutely *wrecks* me. I love seeing my bbies in pain but oh man if there's no redemption or escape -- it kills me.

Anyways. BT-DUBS YOU ARE GREAT. YOUR STORY IS GREAT. YOUR WRITING IS GREAT. One of the most effective realistic (as those things go in our world filled with crazy ki fighting maniacs) depictions of emotional abuse and just is absolutely AMAZING. I CANNOT WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER!
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From Ulrike on February 25, 2014
I've read plenty of Vegeta-torture fanfics. I love them. But yours is really horrifying. I think it's just the raw, blunt way you write the reality of Vegeta's abuse. I feel I can relate to his pain and you portray his betrayal so well. Absolutely no one is aware of what happened to him...and his pride would never allow him to speak of Frieza's evil, disgusting ways. It's a no win situation for Vegeta and it really shows why he became a truly disturbed, selfish character. Love it. Looking forward to more.
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From Ulrike on February 24, 2014
Even without Frieza's presence poor Vegeta is torturing himself in his absence! That is some sad trauma right there. Is this going to be an AU or is it following the canon story-line. I want someone to save our poor prince! As usual, spectacular writing. I can't wait for the next chapter!
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