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By : ctsama

From Cara9001 on March 08, 2016
Fuck I love this fic so much!
It's so sad that Vegeta felt that he was completely on his own with fighting off Gohan but he was right, Gohan had already set things up in his favor. And it was bad enough that he raped Vegeta but to add on the violation of his mind kills me. As soon as my heart felt like it was ripped out it was shoved back in and gushing over how the babies protected Vegeta from Gohans assault, especially when he called them his 'lovely ladies' ugh just destroy me with all of this! His baby girls playing mental games with Vegeta was so sweet to, they're his saving grace and it's just too perfect for words
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From Cara9001 on March 08, 2016
Oh my poor Vegeta T~T and Gohan has set everything up perfectly in his favor with Goku. I really love the angst of this and the twist with Gohan is great, I have no idea how their going to deal with this problem and that's really exciting to me~
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From TristaML on March 07, 2016
The scene with the stillborn got my heart racing. I've been reading this and wanted to review, but this recent chapter by far kills it and so I couldn't help it. I'm not a huge m-preg fan but I like your writing style. I don't really like how mushy things tend to be, but you can do serious, and you explain yourself well, so it hasn't been so much of a bother, besides, those are just personal dislikes. I enjoy reading this story, I'm looking forward to the next update. Thanks for writing!

TristaML
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From Ulrike on March 06, 2016
Poor Vegeta! Goku, comfort him! COMFORT HIM!!! But at least Piccolo and Goku are aware of the situation and can protect our poor, injured prince from the monster that is now Gohan. Where have you been my whole life? Where?? Hurt/comfort, super angst fanfics are my absolute favorite and you leave me crying (in a good way!) with every chapter! Now I'm anxious to see what happens from here. Can't wait!
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From ANON - wistfulmuse on March 06, 2016
Welp, you just broke my heart, plus I want to vomit. I can't read anymore. Jesus Christ, I wish I could unread it.
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From Cara9001 on March 03, 2016
Awww Vegeta with the babies is just soooooo cute!! They were floating around and he was so proud of them X3
I'm really surprised by Gohan but Vegeta's putting off a lot of hormones. I'm excited to see where this will go, if Gohan actually goes through with it Goku will probably be livid. And yay! I'm very excited for everything you have planned!
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From Ulrike on March 01, 2016
Oh man! This is suspenseful. I'm nearly shaking! Gohan...EVIL??? I didn't review the previous chapter, but I greatly enjoyed it. I like that you don't fill up most of the story with Vegeta being pregnant--more so you describe the emotions and instincts Vegeta is feeling throughout this entire experience. I'm finding myself falling in love with your Goku and Vegeta pairing. I feel bad for Goku, though. He has no idea that he has children...with Vegeta! I wonder if he will feel used when he finds out. I also love the floating babies. That imagery is so cute/funny. But anyway...oh no Vegeta! My angst-radar is beeping. What is going to happen?!?! Can't wait.
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From ANON - wistfulmuse on March 01, 2016
Nooooooooooooo..I don't want Gohan to be his baby-daddy. It just ain't right.
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From Cara9001 on February 21, 2016
Oh my god I feel like I'll die from all of the cute and heart wrenching feelings I'm having right now. First off let me say thank you so much for putting the part with the shopkeeper in, I do love sassy Vegeta! What I love even more than sassy Vegeta is sweet, loving pregnant Vegeta caring for his unborn babies. X3 And when he gave birth to them I could tell that he immediately just loved them with all of his heart. Even when he was in pain/exhausted during and after the birth their well being was his only concern. It was very brave of him to go it alone, it sounded like the pregnancy was difficult but I can't wait to read more about pregnant Vegeta! When he had to give up the babies I was so close to crying myself, that just ripped my heart out. I understand that he won't be able to repopulate their race if he has a ton of children he has to take care of, but least he gets to visit them often. And he'll still get to bond with them, sing them saiyan lullabies, and teach them about their race and culture as they grow up, he just won't be able to be there 24/7
Eventually Goku is going to keep Vegeta in one spot long enough to talk to him, he must have been losing his mind trying to find him. For all he knew he could've left the planet since he couldn't feel his ki! Ugh I'm just so addicted to this story! It has everything I love: heart wrenching angst, adorable mommy Vegeta, sassy Vegeta, concerned and supportive Goku, AND Piccolo is the godfather which makes this even better. I wonder if Piccolo will come by to check on Vegeta ever or if Goku will make him spill the beans? I'll find out eventually but anyway to sum things up I absolutely loved this chapter!
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From Cara9001 on February 16, 2016
Aww that was sweet that Vegeta left Goku all of that stuff! And Goku is such a sweetheart and Vegeta knows it, he's just too emotionally messed up to believe they could have a relationship. I'm very excited to see where things go now that Vegeta's run away and Goku knows he wants to be with Vegeta. Plus it sounds like things could get very interesting with Vegeta trying to go it alone with his pregnancy!
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From ANON - cara9001 on February 11, 2016
This is so good! I loved how sassy Vegeta was in chapter 2 when everyone kept coming into his room, it was a nice lighthearted lead up for the next chapter. The entire storyline has me completely hooked and I especially liked how you wrote Vegeta telling Goku about his traumatic experiences, some authors will cut to a flashback but this just seemed more in the moment to me. I was able to get a vivid image of what happened but still got to see Vegeta's turmoil as he talked about it and Goku's reactions to it. That part just ripped my heart out but I loved getting to read it, I'm glad you went in depth with it. Poor Vegeta, he wants to try and have more full blooded saiyans but this is going to be a difficult time both emotionally and physically. I'm really excited to see how him and Goku work through all of these issues and start to build a relationship.
And that was absolutely evil to end the chapter where you did haha I'm dying to know what happens next but I know new chapters take lots of time to write. I don't think Vegeta is ready to mate yet, he's probably very emotionally drained after talking with Goku and his body just went through some major changes that still need time to settle in. Hopefully Goku will be able to control himself XD
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From Ulrike on February 10, 2016
Dark, disturbing, and amazingly written. I felt like crying during the third chapter. Poor Vegeta! :( Again, your writing style is excellent and you totally capture the characters' emotions. I like the way you have depicted Vegeta and Bulma's relationship--more a close, understanding friendship. Too many yaoi fics tend to demonize Bulma and I'm glad you didn't do that. But yeah, Zarbon and Ginyu are pretty horrifying here. True evil.

I don't usually read Mpreg fics, but I like the setup with the mutation. I hope that Goku (and Gohan!) can control their urges toward Vegeta now. It would be awful if he was betrayed and hurt again!
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From ANON - wistfulmuse on February 08, 2016
Really, really digging this! All major characters are SO on par! Great job, and I cannot WAIT (hardly) for your next update!
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From ANON - b-chan on February 05, 2016
Oh, I'm finding this really entertaining.
The conversations that Goku and Vegeta have are just so light and friendly, it really feels like they know each other well (which after living together training with Whis makes sense). That bit about Vegeta keeping his energy inside was right from Dragon Ball super. Are you going to try and puzzle out SSGSS for us? Really they didn't explain that at all, some theories would be nice.
I like that you didn't just have Vegeta take Goku out to exploit him, which I original thought was the direction this was going. You can really feel how much they value each other's friendship.
I'm also enjoying your portrayal of Bulma and Vegeta's relationship, very mature and respectful without being disinterested in each other. I dislike when people bash Bulma, hell I dislike any bashing of character's really.
Wondering how things are going to go with Chichi, intriguing with the notion of Chichi stepping over cultural boundaries. She wasn't aware of this of course, but Vegeta does make a valid point, if a guy doesn't know what marriage is you probably shouldn't expect him to marry you (date the dumb dumb a little first).
I'm pondering that bit with Gohan, wondering if it will have meaning later.
So far I'm very interested in what Vegeta will say in the next chapter and his future plans.
Thanks for the read, I hope your muse is good to you.
ja ne
b-chan

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