Reviews for AtavismBy : ctsama |
Amazing chapter, as always!
Glad to hear that you are getting it all back and running. :)
Got to read this on my birthday! Sweet!
I am really anxious to see what else you have planned, but I hope you have been recovering safely from the hurricane!!!
I'm sorry to hear about what has been happening. Take care of yourself, and your family!
This is fucking amazing. Enough said...at least until I wake up more and have more to add.
But, um, did I do something wrong?
Yay! I'm so happy to see this story taking some strong direction! The relationship development between Vegeta and Whis is believable, well done, and enjoyable. I'm happy to see Gohan back in the mix, still can't wait to see what you do with him, there were some hints at future problems :) I'm also happy to see Vegeta much more in character now.
Thank you for updating!
TristaML
Amazing, amazing, AMAZING!!! And worth the wait!
It's always good to know that someone is looking forward to your chapters, isn't it? :)
Um, late again this time?...
It's about that time! I haven't forgotten! :)
Oh, one thing: Beware of making the Saiyans of U6 too weak, and beware even more portraying them as bloodthirsty savages. They were meant to be stronger in their base forms than their U7 counterparts because they evolved differently. They are warriors, but they weren't consumed by their bloodlust, hence their lack of tails. Most of them are warriors who defend the peace.
Kale and Caulifla don't conform to that standard as they are members of a "gang", but even then calling each other names like "blockhead" is a serious, serious, insulting issue. U6 Saiyans are generally very polite.
A snippet from TV Tropes: "The Universe 6 Saiyans are mirror counterparts to the Universe 7 Saiyans. Unlike their U7 counterparts who were remorseless Space Pirates who caused mass genocide, the U6 Saiyans are protectors of peace across the universe. They also identify themselves as a warrior race, just like the U7 Saiyans, except they see it as their duty to use their power to help people, not terrorize them.
Little is known about the U6 Saiyans except that they didn't destroy their home planet, unlike the Universe 7 Saiyans. They also evolved differently, namely they don't have tails and appear to be overall stronger than their U7 counterparts. They are more comparable to the hybrid Saiyans of U7 than the pure-blooded Saiyans."
Be mindful of this unless it is your intention to make these Saiyans different for the sake of your story! :)
//My list of reasons to kick your ass just keeps getting longer and longer, Kakarot!//
Bahahahaha!!! I love it!!!
Really, you had me riveted in this chapter from the very beginning. More, damn it, more!!!
I can't wait to see what you have beaten into the King's head. Gonna be worth it!
Still here; hoping to see more soon!
Nice, nice, very nice. I can't wait for more! I hope you liked what you saw about U6 Saiyans...so far.
Not a geography lesson, but an astronomy one: Blue stars happen only in supergiants; the kind that only live a few million years before going supernova...or hypernova. In reality, a star like this could not have a native planet that would live long enough for complex life to evolve.
Stars that big burn their nuclear fuel at an amazing pace; they then began to create and burn through heavier elements before finally making and trying to burn iron. Iron can't be used as nuclear fuel and the star chokes to death, then explodes in a supernova.
But this is why writers have this little thing called "artistic license". XD You can ignore those facts if you want to, for the sake of story.
Oh...is Vegeta abandoning his old plan to introduce a few additional strains of human DNA into his people's lineage to keep their tempers under control?
Sorry you've been sick! Was it the stomach flu? Yecch! Feel better!
Am still waiting....VERY VERY anxiously!....
Don't keep us waiting on this much longer...or at least, something for "Spaces"!!!
I am absolutely waiting for more "snapshots" here to tide over, as promised..... << >>
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