Reviews for AtavismBy : ctsama |
Um, I don't know if you've seen episode 77 yet, so I'll just say that Whis says something to Vegeta that made me nearly cry with laughter, because I thought of this story. You'll know what I mean when you hear it. Lol!
There is nothing wrong with your OC's so far...that being the children.
Lol on "spank bank"! XD XD XD (I still hate Goku's possessiveness, though...)
I could never tell if Cabba was still a kid or not in Super. Short and skinny obviously don't mean much when you are Saiyan.
Interesting that the child-bearers on Salad/Sadla (honestly, I thought that was just a subbing misspelling) have more of an upper hand, but I am more surprised they exist at all, considering that in U7 they evolved as a counterpoint to the very violent Saiyans that emerged due to Beerus's meddling.
It would do a hell of a lot of good if, and when, Goku and Vegeta ever visit U6, they teach the people there what Whis taught them about controlling themselves (dialing it down0 and preventing children if they choose. It's like telling a woman who doesn't wear a veil that it is her fault then if she gets raped-stupid. Men have the ability to control themselves.
I think I've stressed that point too often; sorry about that! That's how I feel on things. I love your story, and cannot wait for more. I just hope that when we DO see Cabba's world, it doesn't go too far against what you establish.
By the way, it occurs to me that Vegeta, in this series, should he ever learn of the Super Dragon Balls, might consider wishing his people back that way....although an idea like that might not be the best one outright. At least with Vegeta's method, he starts them out on the right foot. I was going to comment on it earlier but forgot. We don't know if a person moving residence from one universe to another is allowed, but if it is, a few Saiyans from Universe Six falling in love with any of Vegeta's children as mates would broaden the genetic pool a bit, with mixing in a few human genes and they've really got it made. (My ruminations, not yours, mind you....I'm weird like that.)
You'd think that U6 Sayians don't have the "uncontrollable rage" thing going because it wasn't bred into them, but the "female Broly" character we've seen hinted at suggests otherwise. The fact that nobody on Planet Salad knew about the transformation to Super Saiyan suggests something else. At least in Seven, it stayed in Legend. It had to have been possible in the distant past if they are capable of it now.
Just a nudge....eagerly awaiting more! And I've had no more mishaps or illness (so far) in the last couple of weeks...yay!
These last chapters to me have seemed to be filler building up to something and I'm not sure what it could be! The best of them by far was the most recent one because I feel like it rounded out a lot of emotions that were only underlying before, and I'm eager to see what you've got coming next for Goku and Vegeta. I expected there to be some duplicity between what Vegeta was feeling while he was talking to Gohan and where Goku thought it was stemming from, but I wasn't expecting his reaction!
Sorry I haven't reviewed in a while! It took me a second to catch up lol, but I'm happy I did. Still so curious about where you're taking this story.
TristaML
Oh yes, I'm still hanging in there. I have to work super early this morning so I was thrilled to check in and see that you had updated. Aside from a little painful, minor stiffness my hand has healed and I am well over the strep throat.
I will never like what Goku pulled in the last chapter (I have seirous trust issues and nobody would ever earn my trust that way, no matter their intents), but I am pleased that he was able to hold himself off and let Vegeta go do what he had to do. Gohan's gone through a lot, and I am proud of his progress. I disagree that he should not give Videl any more kids. GT isn't canon. He's armed with knowledge and control he didn't have before, and it will well benefit him on handling Pan later on. Pan does not have to be the brat she was in GT.
The most recent episode of Super bothered me on one count: All of Videl's talk about not showing what they really felt to Pan. It's pure freakin' ridiculousness, because it smacks of always acting like someone you're not. That isn't what I consider just a "Saiyan thing".
As always, great work, and waiting for more!
One reader who's still alive. Just saying. ;)
Serious hand injury recently; that is why getting back took a while. Typing hurts, keeping this short.
I see Goku's point, but his extreme actions don't sit well with me in the slightest. That's just me.
Enjoying the story very much. Keep it coming!
Hey, thanks! I wasn't sure if it was my being so sick that I couldn't make sense of that passage or not. Still not sure, as I'm only now starting the road to recovery (I think...and hope...bronchitis is a bitch).
I was re-reading this. Still sick, still foggy, so would you mind clarifying who this is?:
“It’s my special attack,” Vegeta shot back. “Now come on. I’ll bet you an hour of babysitting I can bait that fool beta male into attacking me so I can flick him through a wall.”
Despite his concerns, it wasn’t a bet Piccolo could pass on so he gave up for the moment. “I’ll take that bet. You know, even if it’s not serious between them I’ll never understand what Bulma sees in him.”
“I can answer that one. His main personality trait and his physical attributes both have something in common.”
Piccolo looked at him in confusion for a moment before he remembered some helpful slang. “Ah,” he said laughing. “Big dick. Funny.”
I was trying to figure out they were referring to. Is she sleeping with Yamcha again?
Haaachoo! *Koff koff*
I'll get into more detail when I'm better, because I've got the flu and it is trying to invade my lungs for another nifty round of bronchitis, but for now I'll say excellent chapter. I can't say I enjoy Goku's attempts at being dominant ; but Vegeta has some things he's still got to learn. Jog my memory but has Goku actually seen his kids in person yet?
As for overthinking things....I've never had too much of a problem doing that sort of thing for my own personal use, there is also nothing wrong with drawing a line in the sand and saying "It deviates from the manga here on these issues; deal with it". It is not your fault you started this story before those things were revealed. For all we know Whis is still part of a race that Zeno roped some members into service. (Until, again, they say otherwise.) These Universes are a pretty big place.
I don't, however, get why the Gods let someone like Arale run loose. XD Is there a God of Warped Humor? Lol (I liked the Arale episode.)
If anything I'd think you'd gain readers. At least the ones who like good story line. I was so excited seeing this updated on my way to work this morning. Vegeta is going to have to learn, stubborn guy, but he's been through a lot. Goku will need to be careful. Great job as always!
Oh no Vegeta! I can't wait to see where this next chapter goes. I've been addicted to your sorry for a while now lol keep up the great work!
Now that I've had some more sleep (super sleep deprived this past weekend; very busy at work!)...just want to say keep it up; I can't wait for more. Not used to seeing Vegeta faint all over the place in the manner he is doing now.
That double Galick Gun by Trunks and Vegeta was one of my favorite scenes, ever.
As for Whis, I really like that "bromance" as you referred to it.. It may be one of the "duties" of an angel to be neutral, but that is just that...a "duty". It can't change how they feel about things. It could just be that they were that race of beings that Zeno roped into being guardians for the gods.
The immediate defeat of Beerus by Vegeta and Goku meant that there wasn't exactly a reason for Whis to have to go dormant, because the replacement was already there and done.
It may be why when Elder Kai died and gave his life for Goku back in Z, that Beerus did not die. There was a second active Supreme Kai already there. It may be that when the main Supreme Kai is indisposed, but not dead, another Kai can take his place.
I think I'm overthinking things a bit....but oh well.
Excellent chapter! Vegeta needs to let go of his wariness. He isn't alone this time.
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