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Reviews for Saiyan Enlightenment

By : CardDragonBall

From ANON - macha on May 12, 2004
Ah, how Kawaii, Goku built himself a nest. Why didn't Vegeta want to go in it? (j/k)

Baby is on the way, yeah!

I can't say as I blame the nurses. I think that there would have been a similar reaction if it had been Vegeta half nake also. That had to have been a funny site to see. Vegeta in Goku's big orange shirt.

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From ANON - K-Gt on May 11, 2004
Does Goku even know about Vegeta and Radditz? Cuz wouldn't he be hurt if he found out? I know I would, oh yeah Great story!
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From ANON - macha on May 11, 2004
*edges away from the innocently smiling Card* "Riiiight."

Oh my, you're right, that was t ant angsty, but it was good all the same. I would have those same doubts if I were Goku. *Sighs* I guess that makes me human.

*Whispers to self* "Dangit Goku, I can't use my pom poms if you stop giving head."
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From ANON - Sarkywoman on May 11, 2004
One more thing. "fight lold old women" - I just got this mental image oku aku and Vegeta hitting each other with handbags.
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From ANON - Sarkywoman on May 11, 2004
Dunno if you noticed, or even if Vegeta noticed, but Vegeta referred to Goku as his 'lover' earlier. Dunno if that has any significance. But hey, nice angsty blow job going on there! And just forget about Bulma. Subplots can easily be squished into nothingness ::Sarkywoman runs over Bulma with steamroller:: See?
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From on May 11, 2004
VERY angsty, i felt real sorry for Goku.But i think that they can get through this, they are destined to be together and can get through anything.^_^ Oh and glad to know you havent forgotten about Bra,lol. Can't wait till the next chap, Ja ne!
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From ANON - Mechanical Butterfly on May 10, 2004
�You�re child is evil.�--LoL I loved this and the conversation that accompanied it.

Could you really trust Saiyan instincts not to hurt? --O_O I am willing to bet that you can't....but then again you never know.

Because thinking about that somehow made Vegeta more attractive--love this! I think that is great that he can look back on it like that and find Vegeta attractive.

Downright arousal-inducing. --wow, that is very nice combination of word lov love when you wrote as if summoned by these thoughts...very nice. ^_^

That was. Wrong? Was it wrong? Vegeta didn�t seem to have minded very much.--the saiyajin and human inside of Goku seem to be at war...with what he should believe.

Warnings and end notes were completely hilarious!!!!!

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Ch. 2
We destroy you. You cower at our feet. We have mass orgies and drink.) --lmao!!! Yeah I would hope he thinks of something better than that. although the last bit doesnt sound too bad.

and Kakarot was staring at it with all the interest and hunger of a starving man staring at a steak.--rofl, I love that.

�So, why�d you drag me over here, Vegeta?�--LoL, short attention span indeed...I love Goku's thought process in this ficcie.

Not everyone in the wornew new what went on in Vegeta�s head.--lol, I don't know anyone who knows what is going on in that head...Goku is probably the one who could guess best.
I love how they are fighting instead of sparring and how much Goku seems to be getting into it.

end notes were funny as always!
Great ficcie! I loves it!

^.*
-MB-

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From ANON - macha on May 10, 2004
I'll try this again. (review didn't take the first time.)

It seems as though Vegeta did very well at withholding sex this chapter. I think that he would be able to again if he was pissed off enough.

So, are these fights going to have ki blasts in them, or are they going to be physical brawls? Not that I mind either way, but it would seem to be the sort of fight that a fighter would want close contact with the other apponent(i.e. mate) and not a distance attack sort of fighting.

*points at Card* "Did anyone else hear that? She was laughing evilly at me." (heard whispered in crowd) "Don't make eye contact."
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From on May 10, 2004
Ofcorse i read this i wouldent miss it, even if i had to wait till midnight id still read it. ^_^ Ok so now we start in Goku's Saiyany side, hehe i bet he looks all cute andgry and saiyanlike. ^^ Still wondering when ur going to have the baby's be born. Can't wait till the next chap, Ja ne!
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From ANON - Chitty Chitty Bang Bang on May 10, 2004
I'm baaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaack! And it seems the boys had so much fun at prom that they're not getting it on in the story... LIKE THEY'RE SUPPOSED TO BE DOING!!! Bad Card, bad! >< And I thougfterfter-prom was supposed to be a safely supervised event.... Bleh, not for SSJ's obviously.

By the way, when's Bra gonna be born? I've already forgotten how much time has gone by in the space of 40-something chapters...

Eh, oh well... ^^ PERHAPS when u get around to it... U know what you're doin'

Toodles!

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From ANON - Getarian on May 09, 2004
I loved this opening chapter. I liked the peek into Vegeta's thoughts about Goku's Earth sense and his hidden Saiyan nature. Particularly liked this:

"So he had to think of some sort of healthy balance between the very few things the earthlings had done �right� to teach him and the many things about Saiyans that Vegeta had to unleash in him."

Bringing out Goku's Saiyan nature, without disrupting too much of the finer Earth instincts is going to be a tricky business. I like the fact that Vegeta doesn't even want to bring out every aspect of the Saiyan nature in Goku, proof that he himself, has adapted to some of the Earth ways. :-)

Loved the little scene with Goten and Trunks. Poor Trunks... Vegeta's right... Goten is evil...LOL!

Goku's thoughts the following morning, as he looked at Vegeta'sisedised throat and wrists, were very well done. I can well imagine that the slow re-emergence of Kakarot would be more of a two steps forward, one step back, sort of thing, and I could sympathise wiokuoku's fears that he may unthinkingly hurt someone should he allow his Saiyan nature out to play.

Goku's whole thought processes about how he didn't want to be like Vegeta, Nappa and Radditz were when they first showed up, his acknowledgement re: the back-stabbing nature of the humans, and his admittance of feeling aroused as he thought of how powerful Vegeta was when he first came to Earth, and how if not for the others, he would have beaten him, shows the conflict in his Earth/Saiyan natures and must have his head spinning as he tries to figure out who it is he wants to be.

This is interesting:
"...That had to be the human side, because he wasn�t so sure tSaiySaiyans even slept in the same area with one another. Not that he wanted to sleep separately from Vegeta, because he loved his mate and wanted to be around him, but as a Saiyan he would think that such shows of affections were�not given."

Working on the assumption that Goku's Saiyan instincts are leading him true in this appraisal of how Saiyans are with one another, brings up the somewhat fascinating point of, just how much of Vegeta's, baser Saiyan nature has been affected by his time on Earth... Could prove interesting.

Felt for Goku as he pondered about the 'dominant' side of his nature, and his fears of where this may lead him. Very interested in Vegeta's response to this:

�Hey�Vegeta�what if I don�t want to be more Saiyan?�

I don't think that either of them actually have a choice in this, Kakarot seems to be emerging all on his own, but I feel that this is a very important question, and much could depend on the way that Vegeta reacts to this.

A very interesting chapter, I enjoyed it very much, and am looking forward to the next one. :-)

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From ANON - jaygoose on May 08, 2004
Ahh...do I detect a bit of angst...me likey angst. Great start. I still think that Goten and Trunks are cute together.
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From ANON - macha on May 08, 2004
I thought that I would inform you that even with all of the 'the's, you were still 10 words under the count. *smirks in evilness* I like the way you are able to manipulate the characters any way you want with the key board though. Impressive.

I like the word 'Arousal-inducing'. (Can I use it? Huh, Huh?)

The thought of Goku going around 'dominating everything' LOL. Can you just picture him with inatimate objects and all? *snickers quietly, it slowly gets louder as the possiblities keep popping into mind.* Yes, and Vegeta telling him...I have to leave this alone for my own sanity's sake.

"Hey Goku! Stop with the thinking already. I'm certain that Vegeta will just withhold sex if you do something wrong."

So, even Vegeta wants to find a balance somewhere in between Raging sayian and frail human for Goku can fit into. I guess that's alright, because even Goku wasn't certain that he wanted to be a raging sayian. *starts giggling again*

(*inches way back around tree* Okif yif your sure it's safe.)
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From ANON - macha on May 08, 2004
I haven't even gotten to the chapter yet. ROFL! *Sings a long for a moment, then suddenly stops* "Hey... are you making fun of me? Well, your sick, sick I tell ya. Using your gifts to mess with peoples minds."

Now the songs stuck in my head, but that's okay, I have a secret weapon for such things!

Alright, really, on the the rest of the chapter!

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From on May 08, 2004
Oohh, Goku has so many conflicts in his brain. I kinda feel sorry for him, and i wonder what Vegeta will say to his question. The Trunks and Goten bit was funny, hehe, poor Trunks. Well see ya monday, Ja ne!
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