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Reviews for The Beast Inside

By : industrialmidnight

From ANON - Jay FicLover on October 01, 2005
Oh... I was so happy thinking you had updated...

I first saw this fic in mdiaminer and loved it. I LOVE it when people pair Goku with someone who isn't Chichi, cause I don't really like her.

Besides, this idea of the perfect human is awesome and new.
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From ANON - crammob6 on September 17, 2005
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From ANON - Kaki on June 15, 2005
Is there going to be more soon? I reread all that is written and it's killing me. When Jaia going to be totally coherent? Where's Kakarotto? Heh, where's "Goku"? What happens when *he* finds out about Jaia genetic perfection? When will Bra realized exactly what her difference is? How will *she* react? Ooh! How will Bulma react? I need to know these things!!
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From ANON - kaki on May 31, 2005
The scene with Vegeta and Trunks ROCKED. I was rather hoping for a greater incident when someone else noticed Gohan's mark, but Vegeta took care of that. --"All laws bow to me."-- Love that! Will Gohan miss seeing his mark...even a little?

I also like the irony of Vegeta passing on Jaia. But, now that he knows, how will he manipulate things to work out for him? Is she as good as Saiyan property now (besides being mated to Kakarot now)?

What will happen when Jaia is to fully comprehend things that are happening around her? Will she find out about her perfect DNA? How will she react to any of the Saiyans, particularly Kakarot? How will Bulma react when she figures out everything that has gone on around her, and how long will it take before she does (lol)

I anxiously await the next chapter!
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From ANON - deep serenity on May 24, 2005
chap 6, well more with bra and vegeta, I want to know how you explain to your daughter"hey I need to fuck you" and how in the hell, has Bulma not noticed all the sex going on???

Still I like and the prefect human????? Interesting

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From ANON - deep serenity on May 24, 2005
chap 4, umm, she broke a rib how can that feel good?(it was a good scene though)

now confused, are you going to write Vegeta taking Bra(please, I want to see how she reacts) and do I have this right but trunks wanted his own sister too?

and Goten is 15, you telling me he's doing it with everyone to or just trunks? What was that crack Gohan made about Goten getting mad becuase he'd bit Trunks

and when did they start marking each other? (haven't read tons of DBZ fics so is this just an excepted pratice??)

I must say, I actually like this story, it has a plot and you do yaoi very well,
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From ANON - deep serenity on May 23, 2005
different but I enjoyed it!, 1st chap- it was good to see goku all mean!!!!!! and wow, on gohan and the rest of them just having sex with each other!
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From ANON - Kaki on May 18, 2005
~The wet stickiness of seed and dried blood is what finally awoke him.~

I love the way you tell this story. Kakarotto's taking over...what will things be like if/when he does? Please update this soon.
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From ANON - UL1U on May 12, 2005
Wow, that's awesome. I really hope you write more.
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From JebusOfNazareth on April 26, 2005
Yeah, Im finally realizing im not reviewing stories i like. Yeah, this is good stuff.
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From ANON - Kaki on April 21, 2005
Fabulouso!!

I read chapter 4 on the day it had been posted, and now (almost 10 days later) it's just clicked. Trunks as 'catcher'...wow. What in the world is going to happened when everyone (Goten) sees Gohan's mark on Trunks? And poor Jaia...is she okay? How will Kakkarot react after? Will he have a significant reaction? Oh, and I forgot about Vegeta and Bra! What happened there? Do the human women *ever* find out, even if accidentally? Bulma's going to eventually see the mark on Trunks right?

I need more!!! Please? lol
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From ANON - Kaki on April 07, 2005
Oh, my f-ing Goddess! This is one of the few fanfics in which I dig interaction with an original character. I'm also usually yaoi focused...so the fact that I *like* Kakarrotto's Saiyan-baby-making-urges toward a female is *amazing*. When will Trunks or Goten make an appearence? Or will they at all? What's going to happen with Jaia? Is Vegeta going to see/meet/stalk/frighten "this Jaia"?

I can't wait for another installment! Add more soon!
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From Brathian on April 07, 2005
O_O OMG.... YOU HAVE TO WRITE MORE

I am th ebiggest fan of Goku Vegeta..... Well okay Im the biggest fan of Saiyan's in general and that was just wonderfully writen I have to know what happens.... Keep up the onwderfull work and I'll read everything you do ^_^
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From ANON - Anon on April 05, 2005
This is so good.....please finish...who will be next...goten/goku? Pan/Trunks?....the possibiltes are endess.....
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