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Reviews for Lost Sight

By : Takeru
  • From ANON - Serenity-san on September 23, 2005
    Um, ok. ~stares blankly at the screen~ The "No No Area"? WTF is that? The ideas that you presented in the first two chapters were fantastic but now you put this chapter out and I honestly wonder if the same person wrote this one as did the last two. It was terrible! There was no attempts at grammer, no spell check, and no conscistancy what so ever! I am dissapointed.

    What were you thinking? You can't jumble six or seven chapters worth of info in to one chapter and expect it to make sense. Try reading this chapter aloud and see if you can find th mistakes that your readers did.

    P.S. From the feel of your writing I can guess that you aren't of age, if the mods find out that you are under 18 you will be banned and all of your work deleted.

    Any comments you want to make regarding my review please feel free to e-mail me at goddess_serenity001@yahoo.com
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 23, 2005
    AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!! cancer NO!!!!!!! please write the nex chapter soon
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  • From ANON - anon on September 23, 2005
    WTF was that?

    Invest in a return key, so you can put in paragraph breaks. Use spell check. Remember that Goku is apparently blind, and that he can't see things like Vegeta waving a hand in front of his face. Explain why Gohan, who forgave his father for being voluntarily *dead*, can't get over him being blind.

    Or go pick on someone else's fandom.
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 17, 2005
    r u going to finish this story i want gohans butt kick the creep
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  • From bluesun on August 25, 2005
    hoolly monkey you are twisted very intresting
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  • From ANON - Serenity-san on August 21, 2005
    O_O; EEEWWWW!!!! Incest! ~blasts Gohan for being an unfeeling rapist, punctuates blasts with cries of outrage~ That little motherfucker....well fatherfucker....lol. ~clears throat~ Um, update? I really want to know what Vegeta does. A few misspelled words, grammer inconsistancies and what not but good all the same.
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  • From ANON - 50C on August 16, 2005
    I always knew Gohan was a little bitch ass prick. Please let Goku get his sight back and kick the helll out of Gohan. What about the dragonballs on namek
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 16, 2005
    more soon please gohan ass must be kicked
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  • From ANON - Nix on August 13, 2005
    Goku can sense ki...... so he would have a rough idea of where gohan or vegeta were, what they were doing, their moods, e.t.c
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  • From vegetapr69 on August 10, 2005
    This story is one that i don't want to miss...seeing Goku in this situation...you are mak,ing the character like any normal person will react at this. I can't wait to see Vegeta's point of view on this...after all he caused this in some manner....
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  • From ANON - malimillions on August 08, 2005
    I'm glad Goku punched Vegeta and told him what the prince wouldn't hear straight up... let's hear it for Goku's backbone! Hell yeah!
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