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Reviews for Love was not enough

By : leelou86
  • From Sunburst on January 07, 2010
    Hope you continue this!
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  • From AkitoSouma on May 01, 2007
    Hey, this is a really good idea. I hope that you continue writing it. May I make a few suggestions?
    I can understand that Chichi would feel happy when she thinks about being free after being bound to Goku for so long, but even though they are not very close I think there is still some love there. It might be more accurate to show that she has mixed feelings about the divorce instead of being outright overjoyed. Goku will most certainly be hurt by this even if he also feels that their relationship is lacking; if nothing else, it would be an insult to his pride.
    He and Chichi were also friends as children and getting a divorce would also put that friendship to the test, as well as destroying their relationship as husband and wife. There are a lot of dynamics to consider.
    Last but not least, most people are willing to try and make a marriage work instead of going through with the divorce right away, if it reaches the point where they are considering seperating. Either Goku or Chichi or both of them will probably want to make some kind of last-ditch effort to save what they once had together--whether or not that fails is up to you.
    I hope that's somewhat helpful. I apologize for interfering if that's how you took it, and I certainly don't mean to insult your intelligence by suggesting that you hadn't already thought of those things; I do know that it sometimes helps to see concepts written out though, and I was hoping to fill in any plot holes that you might have been struggling with. Let me know if you're having any trouble, I would be glad to help. Good job so far. ^_^
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  • From ANON - Kurok on September 02, 2005
    Rather short chapter, but good writing. Keep writing!
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  • From ANON - malimillions on August 28, 2005
    Excellent premise. (sp?)
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