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Reviews for Pull the Trigger and the Nightmare Stops…

By : Yuukichan

From Diane on February 17, 2008
Awww man, why do I always come back at the points where I really don't want to have to wait for an update? Happens every time. Nice plan on Mr. Winner's part. Well, not so nice considering he underestimated Heero, but still a good plan. I think it was really cute how Duo refused to get up for a while and even tried to bribe Heero into giving back the blankets. Also, the internal discription from Azrael about the boys was a great way to reillustrate what they really are, what they were trained to be. Little grammar thing for the last paragraph, things go into effect. Awww we don't get to see Heero serving dessert to Duo in bed? Drats, I'm sure that was fun and hot. Oh well.
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From Diane on February 17, 2008
And now part 14. I can't believe we already got to see Trowa propose and so formally too! Things just aren't done like they should be anymore. I'm not sure I like what Trowa said to Quatre though. He used the word consent twice in the actual proposal. I'd probably switch the second consent to agree, but that's just me and my opinion. Ooo I'm dying to see what Mr. Winner's up to. Oh! I forgot I was going to say that I'd make myself a target if Heero and Duo would come after me dressed like that. So yummy. Someone with artistic tallent needs to make you some fanart. That would be so hot. Finally, there's a typo in that last paragraph. No sense not since. Awww... I only have one more chapter before I'm caught up.
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From Diane on February 17, 2008
A review for part 13 now. I love seeing Duo tease Heero like that. Heero deserves a little sass from time to time. The boy already has enough of a ego. "I can get any boy I want" or something like that. I have two problems with this part though and I'll put them in order of importance. 1) When they're in the bathroom and Heero unties Duo's hair, it would be long enough to tangle on or at least brush the toilet and that's gotta be gross. 2) This is less important because I might just be a little stupid, but the scene before the bathroom with the "Show me the way," "I thought you knew," I think is confusing. At least I'm not sure what's they're talking about. I have my guesses, so like I said, I could just be acting stupid and not getting it. I really hope I'm not annoying you with the chapter by chapter reviews. If so, guess I'm sorry.
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From Diane on February 16, 2008
I'm sorry I haven't been around. I got caught up in other things. To make up for it (I hope because you'll either like this or be very, very annoyed with me) I'm going to review each chapter rather than do them all at once. Chapter 12 was awesome. Heero and Duo acting like that is so cute and I really like the line about Duo wanting to make sure that Heero never broke a promise to him, even if it was a violent promise. I think that really puts the violence the night before into perspective. The scene where Heero's sucking on Duo's fingers though is a little confusing, mostly because of your use of pronouns. I figured out who was doing what only after Duo starting fingering himself. Could have just been me though. Also, I like the different perspective of things between Trowa and Quatre at the end. That contrast was a neat way to end the chapter.
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From fujinakaheero on February 09, 2008
O_O intense.
Poor Duo, getting hit just to be used as an example.
I guess old habits die hard for our one and only.
Anyways, I am glad to see the new chapter! And it was quite long, with an advance in the plot, I liked it a lot.
The twist now is going to be interesting to watch develop and I'm already waiting to see what happens next, lol.
Any who, I'm glad I can be one of your loyal readers, I truly do love this story a lot, I like where the plot is going now, I can only imagine what is going to happen next. (poor Duo.. and poor Hee-chan for having to endure all the anxiety.)
So, leaving my regular review behind :D
Just letting you know I'm still alive and still reading too :D
(haha, you make me smile whenever I read your author reply to my comments, again I feel like i must be saying something right lol. Thankies for the reply again, glad to know I am one of the ones who makes you keep writing. I'd be sad if you stopped now, and some people have done that which sucks. You must not let this story die! It has a good plot and is written well too, so no letting it die! lol.)
So until next time,
ja ne!
Fujin
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From fujinakaheero on January 25, 2008
:D ooh do i smell more plot development?
And possibly more drama filled angst? I likie :D
Lol anyways, i really liked this new chapter, though it was simple it really is setting off the plot development again.
I can't wait to see what happens next, I like the progress the story has been making.
Any who, i am leaving my comment for the new chapter, as promise :D
The sickness has gone away for now. I am now just worrying about working through exams and then trying to get some money for a concert I am going to February 10th :D It's exciting.
Hope you are doing well, and again awesome chapter!
Keep up the wonderful work, I'm still in love.
Until next time,
Ja ne!!
Fujinakaheero
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From fujinakaheero on January 16, 2008
hehe, short and sweet. Again, another reply to my comments :D I must be saying something right in all of these comments i leave behind lol.
I liked the bathroom scene.. twas really hot... and i will not go where my mind was just going.
*looks around*
Anyways, for a moment when i was checking stories, i thought i was seeing things when i saw the new chapter, I figured I had already read it, so i checked and double checked and then my pretty blond head clued in that it was a new chapter. Well you made me smile while i lay in bed sick, I have missed over a week of school now because I have been sick.. I have to wonder what I did to deserve such treatment.. good thing all the classes i have this year I have taken before, last year. (oh I swear I am 18, I am born in 1989 lol... just so no one gets the wrong idea)
And now I am babbling, sorry.
Leaving my regular comment behind though, as I said I would once I got into this story.
Again, I feel so happy that you keep replying to my comments, I think I am a creep or something lol.
And also, I will have to check out the other stories you referred, see if I like them :D Thanks for referring them though, I needed something else to read while I wait for you to update your story. :D
Well until next time,
ja ne!
Fujinakaheero (your almost creepy-ass stalker)
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From fujinakaheero on January 12, 2008
hi, back again, i don't mean to bug, i promise!
I just realized just how my last comment only made sense some times.. sorry about that.
I think i was just typing quickly to get my thoughts out before I forgot what I was thinking.
Anyways, after reading this story I've seen myself looking through Gundam Wing stories again.
I think you have renewed my faith in GW stories, as i started losing interest because I hadn't come across any good stories in a while.
So, just want to say thank you for that. :D
I hope to see an update soon too :D
Until next time,
ja ne!
Fujinakaheero :D
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From Ayamekoi on January 09, 2008
And again you renewed my faith ib Gubdan Fabfiction It's been a while. And I founded this story again! I loved this story Duo at time annoyed me but then some how his some one innocents somehow made it ok This a nice fics.
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From fujinakaheero on January 09, 2008
hehe, i feel so honored that you responded to my comment.
I meant everything I said, and I have been checking back each day just to see if a new chapter was uploaded.. and then today was the day I got a good present. :D
The new chapter intrigued me a lot, i especially liked the part when heero whipped out the ring for duo.. the whole scene was actually cute and funny, in that odd kinda of way.
I have to say I am becoming quite fond of this story. lol So if i don't get see an update sooner i'll probably end up leaving another comment expressing my sadness at not seeing a new chapter :P
Did i ever mention this is story with quite a twist?
Well if not I am mentioning it now, before I am done writing this comment.
Anyways, can't wait for the next update..
And I'm also glad I started reading this story more. :D
Ja ne!
Fujinakaheero
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From Diane on January 04, 2008
Good, then I'll keep reviewing even if it's because of my own selfish desire to get you to update sooner. :P As long as you keep writing, I'll keep telling you that I like it. Well unless you write something that sucks, but I doubt that's going to happen. I might be a little slow, but now I think I can really understand how things work between Heero and Duo.

Re-Acting as If: Well I think you did a wonderful job. I really felt like they would have done anything and everything for Duo. Though I still think you're mean for not telling us where Heero was doing whatever it was he was doing. I'm not very good at waiting, but I can tell you I'll read it if you write another story dedicated to Heero explaining that to Duo and whatever else.
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From fujinakaheero on January 04, 2008
sooo *looks around*
I've seen this story up for a while and i ended up reading the 1st chapter a while back too.
Didn't have a clue as to what was going on and thought this would not be a good story, so i left it.
The other night my girlfriend and i started talking about stories we have read on here lately before falling asleep.
She started telling me about this story, giving me the general plot line to this and what not.
I'm all like, oh yeah? So it actually explains what happened in the first chapter?
Ok, so i came back today and decided to start reading the 2nd chapter... then i went onto the 3rd and so on and so forth.
And now I am completely hooked.. you've got me going "wtf?" during a lot of it but then here i am still reading it just to find out what happens next.
I have to say, you are writing a good story, one of those "omg, i don't get this at all but I feel the need to just keep reading." kind of stories. I actually really, really like this story, the plot, the way the characters are, it's unique enough to keep the reader hooked.
So anyways, just letting you know,you have a new and loyal reader who will probably review on every update you do :D
So until next time,
ja ne!
Fujinakaheero
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From Diane on December 30, 2007
Are you tired of hearing from me yet? Just kidding. It wouldn't matter if you were, I'd still review. You're making me think you're the master of bittersweet. Heero beats Duo, but at the same time you're left with a sweet awwwww aftertaste. *snicker* Quatre screaming at Trowa was scary and funny. Angry little thing isn't he? And now it's poor Trowa. I can understand not wanting to play those stupid games, though, and the consequences that usually follow. Alright, I bothered you enough. *huggles* Thanks for writing this.
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From ANON - cfweber1b on December 28, 2007
I love the twists and turns you are putting into this story. Its fun to watch the characters change
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From Diane on December 27, 2007
What the hell? You can't stop there! *angry noises* Arg! *pants* Sorry, but you know how much I like this story. Sorry I didn't review after 8, but finals got to me. So, let's see... I like how you gave us more insight into what happened between them when they were younger. It was very, very bittersweet, but the understanding makese the story better. I was a little surprised with how Wufei presented his previous... engagements with Heero. Also, WHAT THE HELL IS QUATRE DOING!?!?!?! *panting* Now that that's out, get to writing. This is a very exciting part.
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