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Reviews for The Untamable

By : Silvers
  • From Zofo on March 28, 2012
    So glad you are continuing this story :)

    Looks like Vegeta has it bad for Goku and is going to act on it, hope Goku is receptive, though I think he may just be confused.

    Oh no, has Bulma alerted Frieza by picking up the scouter, and is she really turned on by Nappa or is it just his, ahem, manhood!
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  • From Zofo on May 28, 2008
    Seems Vegeta is hogging Goku in the training. I can't blame him but Nappa and Raditz aren't going to get much stronger just fighting each other. Maybe they won't need their help against Frieza. Lets hope so.

    So Vegeta has finally accepted his lust for Kakarot. Go get him boy!

    Had to laugh at the image of a hen-pecked Nappa at the end :-)
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  • From Dragon7 on May 27, 2008
    I can't wait to see how things turn out in the next chapter.

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  • From princelouis on May 27, 2008
    you seriously need to go back and edit your first five chapters like you did the rest
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  • From Zofo on April 27, 2008
    Goku's got his work cut out to try and stop Vegeta being so angry as he fights and they don't have long before Frieza!

    Well Gohan shocked them didn't he, shame in a real fight he's a bit of a one hit wonder at this stage, but at least it made Raditz warm to Goku.
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  • From Dragon7 on April 27, 2008
    Great chapter!!!!!!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter so keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.

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  • From Zofo on April 11, 2008
    So Vegeta's having naughty dreams about Goku, wonderful. Sadly though Goku seems to be happy with Chichi. Does he feel anything for Vegeta yet?

    I can't wait to see what happens to bring Goku and Vegeta together.
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  • From Dragon7 on April 11, 2008
    Great chapter!!!!!!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter so keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.
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  • From Zofo on April 08, 2008
    The paragraphs are more readable now, thanks.

    Very realistic portrayal of Chichi, and I laughed as Ginyu got to be a frog again, will Frieza understand him though?

    Raditz seems a little bit more accepting of Goku now, but Vegeta wants to kill him. I guess some things never change :-)
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  • From Zofo on April 07, 2008
    I loved how you portrayed Bunni, made me laugh, especially them making a window for her.

    Hope Raditz and Goku get closer as Raditz seems disgusted with him at the moment. Vegeta cleverly sees his potential and an opportunity to get stronger and beat Frieza. Will the training bring them all together and will Goku accept who he is?

    Please update soon.
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  • From Zofo on April 06, 2008
    It's a little difficult to read as the paragraphs are huge, can you space them out a bit?

    Vegeta's poor tail and his humiliation in front of others, I really felt for Vegeta, glad he got his revenge though.

    Guinu is going to Earth, that's an interesting twist. I wonder how this will pan out.

    Can't wait for Vegeta to meet Goku.
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  • From MeggieBeggie on April 06, 2008
    I'm so excited for this story! If you're looking for a beta I'd like to volunteer. Either way you won't be getting rid of me any time soon lol Update soon! ^_^
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 06, 2008
    Pretty good story line. I'm very interested to see what happens next. I am a HUGE fan of angst and I love the way you've tormented our poor prince. The story definitely has a lot of potential. I just think you may need some help with editing and tenses, but I'm sure there are a lot of people who could help you with that. Good work. I look forward to reading more. :)
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  • From Pixelgoddess on April 04, 2008
    This has potential - Vegeta is staying stubbornly in character - but you desperately need a beta. There are spelling and punctuation errors that make this difficult to read. Continue with this story, but please get someone to help you with this. (I admit it, I'm looking forward to Goku and Vegeta, as usual. :D )
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  • From Dragon7 on April 03, 2008
    Wow. This sounds very promising! I look forward to your next update!!

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