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  • From steisi on July 02, 2008
    Congratulations are in order, I believe. You did an amazing job on this chapter, love. The tension is steadily building; there's s sense of urgency that Roy seems to be feeling and that is, through his thought processes, transferred to the reader too. And I really loved what you decided Ed should do for Hughes' grave. It was both original, and showed a greater debth to Ed's own character for having thunk of it. The interaction between Roy and our favorite blond alchemist is as fascinating as ever, though starting to get a teeny bit frustrating what with Ed walking away with 'I have to go' every time (I'm afraid I share Roy's sentiment when it comes to that). Keep it up; I'll be waiting anxiously for the next update. Kisses!

  • From animegeik on July 02, 2008
    I totally understand about the editing thing - I'm editing a bunch of old stories just because I have to and I HATE it. It' like pulling teeth with no novacaine, or, something like that. Anyhow - on to this story. You really come up with some imaginitive ways of putting things, like I loved this line: "Ed was a soul made of heat and beauty and wicked flames, and Roy never could resist the pull of fire." Perfect. The way Ed reacted to the cookies was cute and coyly sexy - it totally had sexual undertones, or maybe it was just my filthy mind:) I did get a bit lost in the cemetary scene. I had to read it twice to see that Ed left a nice little offering at the tombstone? In fact, I'm still a little confused. Tension in a story is a difficult thing - you have to build it and then maintain what you've built somehow and keep on building to the peak of the plot. I felt like this chapter lost some of the tension you so nicely built up in the last chapters. Just something to keep in mind for your new stuff. I still love the story and my interest is still held captive by it. So, where are those other chapters you've already written? :)

  • From SarahTaylor on July 01, 2008
    Damn it, he was so close to telling him.
    I kept having to stop myself from looking down a few lines to see if Roy was making any progress. I really like this story, there are a few spelling mistakes and missed words but we all get that. For some reason you can never seem to find them all, I've read books that had managed to miss words in umpteen numbers of re-prints. Ah well that's the life of a writer I suppose.
    Looking forward to the next chapter, I can't wait until they finally realise that they want each other. XD

  • From steisi on July 01, 2008
    Howdy, sugar! I can honestly say I was ecstatic to see you'd added two whole chapters to this. I really enjoyed reading those, by the way. Things are progressing nicely so far, and with every following chapter, I get more and more involved with this story. I really love the interaction between Roy and Ed. I always find it fascinating when they take time to actually talk to each other instead of scream and yell and taunt. I will be looking forward to your next update. The plot is picking up delicious intensity, in my humble opinion! Kisses!

  • From animegeik on June 30, 2008
    First off, I don't review often, but when I do I like to give an actual critique - not because I want to flame someone, but becuase I like to help people become better writers. With that said, I must say this story is really, really good. I love the tension you've created between Roy and Ed. It's tangible. I feel it. You're very good at getting into Roy's head and the character's reactions to the events are believable. There are some things you can do to make it even better (no matter how good something is, it can always be better:) ) Scene setting - I'm getting a little lost on where the characters actually are sometimes until I've read a few lines. Like, is Roy sitting at his desk or is he standing at Riza's desk? What does he see around him? As writers, we need to move our characters around and describe their actions as well as their dialogue and thoughts (which you do well). You do describe some actions, but the characters don't seem to move around much. Scene setting isn't fun - I hate it, but it's necessary. Like, what type of day is it or what does a room look like? One thing on grammar popped out at me - some of your dialogue tag lines are not right. It's petty, but it can throw people off. The comma after dialog is only used when describing how someone says something, like: xxx," Roy said. or: xxx," Ed shouted as he ran down the street. Not: xxx," Ed blushed. I hope that makes sense. Anyhow, just some long-winded thoughts. I'm waiting maybe too impatiently for the next chapter:)

  • From SarahTaylor on June 29, 2008
    Roy is so clueless, it's almost sweet. XD
    It's so obvious that Ed likes him and he's completely oblivious.
    Ah well, he's cute, I supose brains aren't really needed XD

  • From AlphazSlut on June 28, 2008
    oooh! I love it! Please update soon!

  • From SarahTaylor on June 27, 2008
    Really need more of this, I have a really bad feeling that I know what Ed is up to and I need you to post more chapters to prove me wrong.
    I love a good bit of angst.

  • From steisi on June 26, 2008
    You've definite;y piqued my interest, love. The plot has the potential to go in so many different directions, it's making me dizzy just thinking bout it! I'll be looking forward to the next chapter, you can count on it! Kisses for now!

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