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Reviews for Brothers

By : Tru6768
  • From animekid on November 15, 2011
    This story was SO EPIC.

    I laughed so hard at this! Oh man it was really juice and oh............I loved everything about it.
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  • From JubblesBubbles on January 03, 2011
    "It's the tail scar, you idiot!"

    xDD

    I laughed REALLY hard with that one
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  • From AwesomeIncarnate on January 01, 2010
    Told you I was going to read it.

    Okay, I do try to avoid being trite, but this was, like, really hot. I don't even like BDSM and the whole time I was like, "fuck yeah!" And then of course, the ending, which I had to postpone this review by five minutes because of while I stopped laughing.

    I have to admit that at the very start I was a little worried, because I usually really hate first-person narrative, but, it really works here; I don't think it would have been as effective any other way. And the present tense, which I also tend to be iffy over, made it much more...tangible, I suppose, if I had to give it a word.

    Plus, there's the whole 'good writer' thing. The fact that you really know what you're doing shines throughout this whole thing. The characterization is awesome, as usual. Goten in particular cracked me up throughout, like always. I just love him.

    Oh, and I must tell you my favourite line: "I mean, I wear the pants except when Goten wants me to wear something else.

    Shit."

    First of all, that's just fucking hilarious. Also, that kind of embodies what I've always thought about the two of them: Goten letting Trunks be in charge, right up until he wants something; then he bats his eyelashes and tells Trunks how high to jump.

    Now that I've successfully taken myself off track, I'm going to finish by saying this: On a scale of one to ten, I'd have to give this a 'fucking excellent.' I'm definitely kicking myself for not having read it yet. Thank God you mentioned it to me, or I would have gone my whole life not knowing what I was missing.

    Oh, and the Trunks/Trunks scenes? Hot as Hell.
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  • From IuvenesL on July 10, 2009
    So yeah, I generally hate first person present tense, but we have had that discussion before, and really, you do it well. Most people don’t, and it comes off like a role play rather than a proper story. I think what generally makes that particular pov-tense-combo so bad is a simple overuse of “and I do this….and then I do that…and then I do this and that at the same time!” and that tends to come out sharply during the sex. Too much action and not enough reflection. But you don’t seem to have that problem, so it works.

    The Mirai prank at the beginning is nice…name-dropping! But cocky Mirai is really wonderfully OOC, and believable at the same time. Just as Mirai is different from Trunks because he was raised in the world he was raised in, without Vegeta or anyone else but Gohan (and Bulma) and a somber cast to everything…Mirai could also easily be influenced by a certain amount of exposure to his AU self. And using that influence to give Trunks a dose of his own medicine? Perfect! :D

    And of course Goten is just as bad as Trunks. I’m shocked anyone would think otherwise…

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    In general the satire is excellent. lmao bits:

    “Gohan puts his hand on Mirai's shoulder. ‘Is it Halloween already?’ he asks. Here's where you have to know Gohan. He doesn't mean it as an insult. I doubt if he even knows how to be sarcastic. He's probably been working so much that he really doesn't know what month it is.” (yay for oddball Gohan…or at least Trunks seeing him that way :)

    “Mirai probably had this whole place rigged so that they would never have to stop fucking to do anything.”
    hahahaha, putting those skills to good use! I love it!

    “God, he is damn sexy. Am I that sexy? I glance at Goten to see if he's staring at me the way Gohan stares at Mirai, but he’s just looking at his nails distractedly.”
    LMAO that is good stuff. :D And what follows, too, of course…

    “’Mirai has to pay for making me look like a moron on the phone today. And for generally ruining my reputation in this town by running around looking just like me, but acting like a Gohan-obsessed puppy.’ Mirai is growling behind that gag. Such a lovely sound. ‘And Gohan, you made Goten sit on a rock.’”
    HAHAHAHA it was funny when Goten brought it up in the first place, but that was hilarious. :D

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    The perviness (I just added that word to my Firefox dictionary) is shameless (yay!) – I’m generally not into BDSM, not because it isn’t hot (and Saiyan sex is, I think, generally better when it involves pain), but because the general run of BDSM dialogue annoys me. It usually strikes me as the sort of thing that only really insecure people would get off on, whichever role they happen to prefer (no offense to people who get off on it). It doesn’t matter. Anyway, there’s none of that in your fic – the dialogue not standard, and the games are funny (and hot!) rather than a pathetic means for the characters to self-validate. Not that there isn’t a great deal of self-validation effort on Trunks’s part in the fic. But ‘pathetic’ never comes to mind. :D

    I would like to think that any of those Saiyans could have broken out of those restraints without ki. I like to think that’s what Goku had to do when Vegeta had him cuffed to the rock (use just plain old muscle power to break free). I would also like to think that their ass muscles could more than handle some silly duct tape. But hey, it’s smut! Yay!

    Also….wtf?? Steak sauce? Ew! I mean…yeah, if you’re going to compare a Saiyan to a food item, a nice, meaty, juicy steak is a good comparison. But I don’t eat steaks with steak sauce either…if they’re bloody enough then they don’t need it…and you don’t do Saiyan animalistic blood-sucking sex, alas…

    Oh, and the hat was definitely gay. Good call!

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  • From ANON - Rayne on April 30, 2009
    Absolutely delightful! I can't tell you which part I liked most, the steamy teasing or the sweet revenge Mirai Trunks got at the end! Super great!
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  • From ANON - Lady-Incognito on April 21, 2009
    Very original and juicy story :). I am a recently converted Truhan shipper, so this fic really satisfied my cravings. I am glad to see more Truhan stories popping up, as they tend to be some of the most well-written DBZ fanfictions IMO. I'm off to read more of your stories :).
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  • From cueball2 on March 21, 2009
    Very creative. Trunks did not think things all the way through. But I suppose it could have been worse. LOL
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  • From Polymer on March 13, 2009
    Excellent job. I loved the use of the toys and accessories. Very naughty and a touch sadistic enough to spice it up. I liked how you told it from Trunks POV. It was very effective!
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  • From nivell on March 08, 2009
    Lord, how I loved this! Trucks is such a wily bitch but he gets owned in the ass! Like how he gets whipped around Goten. Heehe.
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  • From Pixelgoddess on March 06, 2009
    Truhan is probably my least favorite pairing, but this is definitely a score. I really enjoyed Trunks and his attitude, as well as Goten the cheerfully innocent perv. They should have known though, they could never hope to be more twisted than their older brothers, and consider themselves fortunate that Truhan didn't go all out in their revenge.
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