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By : Aestas

From ANON - Djargo on February 16, 2011
I really enjoyed this update. Leave it to Heero to go overboard with the flowers. Third time was not the charm^^. I thought the 'thinking of you' texts were sweet. What a wonderful way for you to let someone know they are on your mind.

I loved the back and forth between Duo and Trowa. With the way they each enjoy messing with the other's mind you just know they're gonna be good friends. With Duo trying to play matchmaker Trowa won't stand a chance. It sucks that AFF took down your profile but a forum will do just as nice. No worries^^.
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From CeeCee on February 14, 2011
The admins wiped your profile? Sheesh. I knew they didn't want review responses in the text of the story, but I thought profile comments were okay. What a pain.

But in the meantime, I love this new chapter. Trowa and Duo bickering at lunch was very cute, and I love Heero sending flowers to get Duo's attention. The last line, "Thinking of you smiling" made me grin in my seat over here. I'm enjoying these updates! What's funny about it is that Duo's internal monologue still has its usual snarky humor from the earliest chapters, but you can almost see him maturing a little as the story goes on.
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From ANON - Eri on December 12, 2010
Wonderful! Please continue if possible. I love your portrayal of the characters, especially Zechs. (haha)
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From ANON - originalceenote on December 03, 2010
This chapter was wonderful, because Heero really had to work and be honest with Duo. I love how his indecision hurt him as much as it did Duo, once he laid it all on the table and really examined what he did, and how he treated him. That moment of "it was so good" made me smile, too. Nothing better than hearing an ex, or someone who did you wrong, admit that out loud. Yum.

I love Heero's conflict, how he could be attracted so strongly to two completely different men. I can tell you worked hard on this chapter. A lot of thought went into the character's motivations and insights that they had to share with each other. Thank you for the update.
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From ANON - Djargo on December 01, 2010
Okay, I know I asked for it but that was kind of painful to read Heero emotionally prostrating to Duo. Necessary but painful. All his anxiousness and desperation came across loud and clear. You definitely got the feeling of how torn up he was about the situation. Though chickenshit is an apt description of his handling of the whole shebang.
And I so empathize with Duo's tug of war feelings. One part wants to forgive and be with this person you feel drawn to but the other part doesn't know if the person can be trusted not to hurt them again. I think you hit all the right emotional notes in this chapter.

As for what Heero could do. *scratches head* That's hard because he seems almost desperate enough to do anything to get back into Duo's good graces though that could be an exaggeration,on my part, of the situation. Maybe he could send Duo nice,considerate little gifts or call him everyday and really get to know him. I don't know. *head desk* I really suck at ideas,so I'll leave it in your capable hands.
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From ANON - Djargo on November 14, 2010
And heeeere's Trowa! *Cue Johnny Carsonesque music*^^ Awesome intro of the banged one. You highlighted all that makes him such a great character. Cool under pressure,loyal to those he calls friend, and deadly to those he considers enemies. Trowa was cooler than the other side of the pillow. He had Duo by turns flat footed and agog during their meeting;that is until Duo dangled a tech geek carrot of a job offer in his face. Even then he acted like it didn't tempt him in the slightest. I can't wait for him to meet Quatre. The blond one won't know what hit him but I suspect neither will Trowa^_^.

As for how Duo is going to handle Heero's call,that's a little tough. I know you won't just let him fall back into Heero's arms cause that would be unrealistic,but at the same time you can't turn Duo into a super ball-busting jerk. Make him grovel some but without having to crawl across broken glass*ouch* because he definitely has to earn back Duo's trust. I trust in your skill as a writer to come up with the best scenario. looking forward to the next chapter.
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From CeeCee on November 14, 2010
How should Duo repond? Hmmmm... *taps fingers on chin*

If I were him, I'd be there with my arms folded, coming at him with somethng like "Do you always send your watchdog after the gus who don't return your calls?" Meh. You get the idea. I think Duo should be a little pissed with him and bust his balls some more, but itshould stroke Heero's ego that Duo can't stay away from him.

I love this chapter. Trowa was HOT!!! I pictured his expression and just drooled all over my keyboard. YUM. You know I'm addicted to this story, right????
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From ANON - cewo on October 19, 2010
Oh, how I'm loving this! Zechs is truly slimy and Heero, *shakes her head* Heero better have a really good explanation because I'm with Duo on this one! Looking forward to more soon!
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From ANON - snowdragonct on October 19, 2010
Oh...we can affect your update speed? Would a please, please, please update help?
I love this story. Chock full of emotion and angst...and now I want to know all about Duo and Zechs' history, who hacked the program, and ALL that stuff. This is a delightful story. Great pacing and lots of sexual tension. Who could ask for more?
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From ANON - Djargo on October 19, 2010
Oh, that was good. So FREAKING good!

Is it wrong that I enjoyed Duo shooting Heero down on the phone? He so deserved to get his face cracked for trying to pull that slick act after treating Duo like a one night stand and than not calling for a month. I thought for a second Duo was going to go easy on him then he had his 'Wait.What?!' moment. I liked how you showed Heero floundering some after Duo didn't respond as he expected.

Also, I liked how you wrote the scene at the office. As Duo told Heero where he can go and where to get off,I could almost see the lightbulb go on in Heero's mind clueing him in on how much he violated Duo's trust. I'm really glad he knows who he wants now but realizes that it'll take more than persistent phone calls and work ambushes to regain Duo's trust and get that third chance.

I liked Zech's introduction. To me, you wrote him just right for this fic. You could see how he could be perceived as charming by others but through Duo's perception he comes across as smarmy and sleazy. I hope he gets his comeuppenance. Looking forward to the next chapter.
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From CeeCee on October 19, 2010
Is it wrong that as soon as Zechs propositioned them both, I started drooling?

Seriously. That scene was hot and had me on the edge of my seat. I love Heero holding Duo back, and I love his mental monologue again. Can you tell this story is one of my favorites?????

I like watching Heero's confidence slip once he realized that he messed up, even though he kept bending Duo's words back at him, and he was good with innuendo. What was even better was when Zechs came in and started doing the exact same thing, only more arrogantly and with no compunction at all. He was a bastard, but a sexy bastard, and he knew it! That's fun reading!
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From lildeamon666 on October 12, 2010
oki so i totaly LOVE this story so far besides heero the ass! but lovem anyway. just wonderin when your next update will be since im new to aff and dont know if thres update notifications here.
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From lildeamon666 on October 06, 2010
I am absolutely loving this story. Even your lemons are tasteful. XD You are an excellent writer and I can't wait for an update. Now Im going to start reading some of your other stories.Happy days and Happy writing!
~Lil D~
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From ANON - Djargo on October 04, 2010
Poor Duo:(. That freaking bites! He didn't even get a face-to-face morning after brush-off;Heeroo just left and avoided him the rest of the vacation.
I totally empathize with Duo. It is damn awful being around people in relationships when you feeling that rejected. He did well to deal with being around Hilde and Noin without becoming bitter towards them.

I'm so glad Duo has strength of self. He absolutely refuses to let being burned by Heero make him lose himself. Sometimes you have to get back on the horse that threw you^^.
I enjoyed Quatre's intro into the story. I think you wrote him just right by showing his confidence in business and his shyness/hesitance when dealing with his more personal life. Glad Duo has a new friend in his corner.

Now I'm going to be indignant on Duo's behalf. I think Heero has conjones the size of watermelons to call Duo after that bull**** he pulled and then not calling for a month. I hope Duo's response to Heero's hello is screw you. If not that I at least hope he rips him a new one. I am so looking forward to your next chapter to see how this plays out.
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From Nadine21 on October 04, 2010
Don't know if I wnt to kill you or kiss you, kiss you 'cause you updated (yay, dancing and jumping around) killing because you left us this cliffhanger. I think that Duo should just hang up we will see how the idiot Heero will take that, right now I could kill him how dare he call like nothing happend? Please update really soon please with chocolate cake on top,
I am looking forward to the sequel too, have fun writing and don't worry you are doing a teriffic job ;))
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