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By : secretwishes527
  • From Tru6768 on February 08, 2010
    I wish Trunks would show up right now and see this. I think he would fuck Gohan's shit up. He may not be as strong as Gohan but I think he'd probably be angry enough to kill him.

    I know you said everyone's out of character in this but I feel like it's really only Gohan. Oh and Goku. But I like how you do Trunks and Goten.

    Anyway, I'm interested to see how things go for Trunks and Goten, but perhaps even more interested to see what Trunks does when he finds out about Gohan. That should be a good fight. He's got to almost know, right? I mean, there are only 3 ppl in the world besides Trunks who could beat Goten like that....

    And I'm also wondering why Gohan got so fucked up. What happened when Goten started high school?

    Anyway, my only complaint is the POV switching. Can't say you didn't warn us at the very beginning, but it's such a writing a faux pas! And you're not a bad writer. So I can't help but wonder why you didn't just use a third person omniscient narrator. But it's your story and your option and either way, I look forward to the next chapter.
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  • From Solo on January 18, 2010
    Oh no, Goten!! T_T He's one of my favorite characters, and I just love him to death. I hope you update soon; I'm already hooked, you know. When Goku questioned him at the table, I was hoping he would come to the rescue... *sigh* Oh, my poor pumpkin. Haha, I think I'm emotional invested in this story already. I eagerly await the next chapter!
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  • From Evilniiko on January 08, 2010
    I wonder what prompted the beatings from Gohan, and why Chibi is covering for him instead of telling. you have me hooked I eagerly await for more.
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  • From butterflies1974 on January 08, 2010
    Wow! I think this story is really going to be intense and I like it. I am not a Dragon Ball fan normally but this story has defineatly caught my attention and I plan to make sure I keep up with it.
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