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By : Lunamaru
  • From ANON - syndey on July 16, 2015
    Come on are you crazy you can't leave it like this. Where's the next chapter im dying here
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  • From ANON - syndey on March 15, 2015
    Next chapter pleaz dont I dare leave this as a cliffhanger I would kill me I love fanfics like this
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  • From ANON - ZoomingSkittles on February 28, 2012
    Please pick this story back up! Be your best friend!
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  • From ANON - pp_hh on July 18, 2011
    Interesting story so far... Im curious how the things between Goku and Gohan will develop in the futur chapters.
    And what will ChiChi do? (hehe)
    Thank you for the hard work.
    Greetings
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  • From AwesomeIncarnate on March 27, 2011
    Wow, I completely forgot that I hadn't reviewed this yet. My bad.

    Awesomeness...for of course, Goku/Gohan rocks. I incredibly approve of this chapter. :)

    And now to wait for what happens next...
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  • From IMLYING2U on November 29, 2010
    I kind of hope you will come back and finish this story, I really want to read this to completion
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  • From illumi15 on April 13, 2010
    You just made my day by adding cellxgohan. Oh I love you! Curse Goku for cdoming in too early to the scene but good work! (psycho giggling.) Looking forward to your next chapter. Keep up the good work! :D
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  • From AwesomeIncarnate on April 10, 2010
    Ah, poor Gohan. Poor, pregnant, rapeable Gohan. Oh, well, these things happen.

    Anyway, I had to utterly laugh at Chi-Chi's blase reaction to finding Gohan sleeping naked in Goku's pants...I would think a mother would be a tad more concerned about something like that...

    I didn't think the rape scene sucked. I mean, it was what it was. Don't worry about it. Besides, we all have scenes like that at one time or the other.

    So, I wonder what's doing to happen in the Chamber now...hm...
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  • From kuramasgirl on February 24, 2010
    poor gohan! update soon i wanna know what happens next! i gotta see their reactions 2 little gohan being preg... & btw technically by the time cell attacks gohan is 14 cause of time spent in the hyperbolic time chamber.
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  • From AwesomeIncarnate on February 20, 2010
    Haha: "he was repulsed, wanted an abortion and was in the mood for ice cream." I don't know why, but this sentence was just too fucking hilarious. Actually, I laughed through the whole Babies 'R Us scene, just because there really are stores like that. I've been in them.

    But on to the rest of the review: You really seem to be getting the hang of it now (it occurs to me that that may come off as condescending, but that's not how I mean it). It flows way better than the first chapter did. There will be no need to go back and edit this one, I think.

    I have nothing to critique in this chapter...that I can remember. Unfortunately, I read it three hours ago and am only reviewing now on account of the Olympics...but no time to read again tonight. I'll probably think of something right after I submit, be like, "oh, shit," and sent you an email or something XD.

    Anyway, overall a good chapter, in my grandiose and self-inflated opinion.
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  • From AwesomeIncarnate on February 13, 2010
    Much, much better.

    It flows a lot easier; the setup makes more sense. It's altogether entirely more readable now, and the underlying talent of the writer shines through a lot better than it did.

    Kudos to you.

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  • From AwesomeIncarnate on February 06, 2010
    Oops, I reviewed and then removed my review. Here it is again:

    Okay, there's a lot of potential here.

    I see solid writing, I see a good set-up to what I can imagine will be a good story...I see good sex, XD.

    I will make one tiny observation, and I hope I don't come across as being mean or anything: The abruptness of the whole thing through me a bit. It was a little too fast, a little too...all of the sudden. It does make sense in a fashion, especially at the beginning where it's stuff from the movie that there's no point in rehashing for pages, but I couldn't help but think the whole thing could have been a tad slower.

    Whew, sorry, I didn't mean to focus on the negative for so long there. Like I said, overall rather good. I'd like to see where it's going XD.
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