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By : shadowgohan

From Multifandomwriter on November 16, 2017
Wow, what an interesting AU you've got here... quite the timeline, imagine how differently DBZ would have gone if Gohan and Android Eighteen somehow fell in love. Well, as they say in Rick and Morty, infinite realities. Imagine, Krillin would still be alone, his daughter wouldn't exist, what if everyone found out? Would there be a simpler solution to all this, wow, this would be a clusterfuck, imagine, they try to destroy Android eigthteen(not that they could.) and Gohan attacks them. I'm sure Gohan would obliterate Cell way before he caused any real trouble, my mind reels with possibilities. But it would mostly be a clusterfuck.

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From ANON - ron on August 21, 2013
Ilike the part with her getting pregnant and 18 turning Videl in to her sex pet and maybe Gohan and for his last girl it should be Bulla that would be awesome beyond awesome
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From ANON - ron on August 21, 2013
That was awesome I loved it all I think she shoud be and end up with him and not Krillin
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From ANON - Rusty Shield on February 01, 2013
Wonderful story, and I have a couple of fair suggestions regarding where to go, should you decide to continue the story. Firstly, it would require a rework in the story of Dragonball Z to the point where it would become AU and you make 18 the love interest of Gohan, which would create some amusing friction and drama when Videl enters the picture, not to mention Chi-Chi, plus Gohan would have far less qualms about going all out once Cell devours 18. Secondly, I would try to work Krillin's attempt at a relationship with 18 to clash with Gohan's new-found attraction to her, seeing the two come to a head over her would create a nice bit of drama, and sexual tension to boot. My final idea goes fairly dark, Gohan fails to rescue 18 during his fight with Cell, the devestation and resulting actions of the confused youth would be... phenomenal.
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From ANON - Chimera Prime on December 09, 2012
That was so COOOOL!
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From shadowgohan on July 21, 2012
Well I've given much thoughts to doinng more chapters and despite much pressing, I've ddecidedd a long winded story would become tacky. The only idea I've had was something taking place at the end of the cell games where Gohan has comfort sex with 18 to console himself after his father's death. Tright maybe, but an idea i'm willing to work with...
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From ANON - Metalgearhunter on December 19, 2011
I think it would be � good idea to continue where you are at. You coupe start the next chapter with all 4 of them in THE van riding to THE shore so they could get to KAMI House. Eighteen grows feelings for Gohan, and Seventeen won't really care. Sixteen is after Goku zo Gohan isnt minded by him. You could probably improvise from here...
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From ANON - Oxilion on December 13, 2011
So when this nice story will get next chapter??? is the Story already in process of making ?
I like the idea to add Bulma at least consider adding her in the story to.
I like Gohan/Bulma mix. :P

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From ANON - Bordellius on December 10, 2011
The idea gives the feeling and looks that can be even give room for funny situations with some embarrassing situations, nice base for actual long story so one more point there.
It would be nice to get some story with adult context that has more deeper story telling. the only other one i seen like that was Reprogrammed and is a very good story i would not mind to get one more like that.
the author know how to write a lot of details so it would be interesting to see how would he do with given option.

The chapter 1 look interesting even if it's just about Gohan and 18 first encounter and it was all about XXX you could use it for making alink between then at least at first purely sexually and use the given base to make more deeper story and bond between them it would make pretty good story in my opinion.(i will assume that you will continue to make more of the current story with the base story offered to validation)

The given base story i give it 9/10 - it is clear that it was a rushed and made fast for base plot but given that in consideration i set for mark 9.
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From ANON - Krimos on December 09, 2011
I see someone put up some of the ideas here looks promising...

WHEN WILL THERE BE IMPLEMENTED!!!!! IT HAS AWESOME STORY DRIVEN PLOT!!!!!
UPDATE! UPDATE!! UPDATE!!!
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From ANON - Crazary on December 09, 2011
Nice story. Will there will be more of it?
I like the way of thinking in that sugestion it has good possible connection with fist chapter.
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From ANON - AndroidZ on December 07, 2011
Hmm idea that you post here is a bit poor in details but if you look at it as base on what author can build his story i will have to say that.... It looks good. You add some intersting things in base it self and i like the part with Videl, why should Gohan not get best of both worlds right. I would add Erasa to that little harem to just to make full roud with personalitys.
The base plot looks realistic as for the timeline is consider so no problem there and i can totaly seee posible with some of the plots you pull sinece Juu would not want to be known that she is stil alive. Great job here, dont know will author consider this one because it is not taking time right after what happend in original first chapter but he should at least think about it.
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From ZeroUnit on November 08, 2011
Well I don't know is it good idea but seance no one did suggest anything I thought I might at least try so here it goes.

you can add more to it so that the story looks more connected.
During Cell games you can make it so that realising of 18 from Cell was not known by other because they where consensus after Cell junior. After Defeat of cell 18 can hide her self somewhere and their relationship would be only on long distance

Few year later after their relationship could start to have more meaning and becomemore deep in a way.(we know that 18 is not that easy trusted to others)
after that you can make so that Trunks and Goten find out about existence of 18 somehow and try to blackmail 18 in to submission saying something that Gohan got tired of her so he "sell her off" or something similar and it their plan start to work but in that time you can make it so that they don't know that 18 is pregnant with Gohan child. (if you want to short option story)
Thinking and feeling betrayed by Gohan 18 runs off to fend for her self at that time Gohan finds out what happened and beat the sh*t out of Trunk and Goten making them not to reveal to anyone that She is still alive but she is gone for now for a few moths or so just to Gohan start to go to school.

You can add Gohan school life in the picture and add in the story Videl making 18 jealous because they becoming close (you can use this after 18 runs off but still fallows Gohan around) so 18 show her self again and start to get close to gohan while she starts blackmail Videl in to submission with her father secret to punish Videl for try to steal him away and basically training her to be her pet in a way, she had a brief experience with Trunks and Goten on that subject made small impact on her mind, ( I cant say what you could do with videl at this point I don't know make 18 give her to Gohan as a present...?)

After that you can add some new treat to earth.I would suggestion the two brothers that come after the Vegeta's brother form the movie they are strong but not stronger then 18. if you add them she can win. you can make so that when they some to earth they accidentally destroy 18 favourite shopping place or something and in fit of rage she defeat them and then the Z gang could feel their destruction but they don't know know shy or who couls do it and in this point you can make that Goten by mistake comment something about about 18 and secret is revealed. In furry Vegeta ( maybe others to ) try to find her and "stop" her form destroying the world. when they find her and try to finish her off Gohan would not let them saying that he will not allow it ( maybe say that he loves her don't know about that one)

You can make that the z gang is now trying to brake the then apart because they think that 18 is taking advantage of him to save her skin so they try everything desperately possible to do it ( at this point you could use some other char to make their relations ship maybe rockier or something, maybe Erasa or even Bulma and make more conflicts and problems.

if you didn't go for short version you could at then end make it so that 18 is pregnant with Gohan child and then slowly start to make things go better for them. (don't know if you can put Videl in that part to with them but I just added that to make it little more interesting.

Well its not the best idea that I thought but dont forget that just put that as I was writing this and i know its on amater level of thinking.... don't know is it even usable but after I read you last comment I just had to respond to it.

I'm not in to Credits and stuff I just wanted to see this story becomes more because it surety had potential to be long and more the just oneshot story and the beginning is really good. You have talent to make interesting and mature story I just hope you will try to. ^^

best wishes from ZeoUnit

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From SSJ04Mewtwo on October 23, 2011
Ok, here's a suggestion.

While Gohan is training with Goku in the time chamber, his Saiyan mind can't stop thinking about 18. She is a strong female that can bare children and would take better care of hm than Chichi.

When he comes back to the real world and finds out that Cell has absorbed her, Gohan is motivated to beat Cell.

Hope that helps and if you want to discuss more of this idea with me, e-mail me at SSJ04Mewtwo@gmail.com
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From ANON - mellogirl on October 10, 2011
I really enjoyed this oneshot ^^. i would have liked gohan to talk a bit more though.
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