rate_review Reviews

I\'m sorry. I love the pairing, but not the subject. I read chapter one and I can\'t go any further, but for readers who enjoy this, continue on.

0_0.... ewww. No ofense or anything, but basing a story on pissing isn\'t perverted or pleasurable, it\'s disgusting. In yaoi, penis\' are used to spasm semen, not pee, at least not CONSTANTLY. Your writing ability\'s pretty good, but please change the subject. That was just.... ughh, they couldn\'t have whacked off and came insteand?

er..interesting. It\'s a good story if you\'re into that kind of stuff, but a bit weird if you\'re not. You\'re a good writer though. I think you should write another Gohan/Piccolo story, just leave out the....um...golden showers. ^.^

~Midori Nite