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April 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Review #96...
AW!! Warm fuzzies! *huggles author happily with a Goku-ish grin on her face* That chapter made me happy.
Going back some, I\'m glad that things got worked out somewhat... Vegeta\'s \"frieza-voice\" of doubt is nasty, but I\'m glad he\'s conquered it, or at least appears to. Once again I skimmed over the lesbian sex scene, though I\'m sure it was well written. ;) I congradulate you for being one of the only writers who actually paints Chi-Chi in a positive light, and yay! for the marriage!
Also I liked how at the end Vegeta was actually being nice, but he still spoke with a \"Vegeta voice\", which meant it didn\'t seem OOC to me. Vegeta is hard to write nice, so good job on that.
I look forwards to more as always. :)
AW!! Warm fuzzies! *huggles author happily with a Goku-ish grin on her face* That chapter made me happy.
Going back some, I\'m glad that things got worked out somewhat... Vegeta\'s \"frieza-voice\" of doubt is nasty, but I\'m glad he\'s conquered it, or at least appears to. Once again I skimmed over the lesbian sex scene, though I\'m sure it was well written. ;) I congradulate you for being one of the only writers who actually paints Chi-Chi in a positive light, and yay! for the marriage!
Also I liked how at the end Vegeta was actually being nice, but he still spoke with a \"Vegeta voice\", which meant it didn\'t seem OOC to me. Vegeta is hard to write nice, so good job on that.
I look forwards to more as always. :)
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April 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Really cool chapter, I can\'t wait till Vegeta get\'s to Bulma and Yamcha. Hope he makes him piss himself:) Hope to see some Vegeta Piccolo friendship too soon. I think they\'re very funny. Now as my last hope: Don\'t make me wait very long. I really can\'t wait for the Vegeta Bulma Yamcha interaction:)
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April 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Very pleased to see anothhapthapter up so soon. You update beautifully :-)
I actually read this story yesterday, before I was due to go over to my brother\'s place, so I never got the chance to review then. Firstly, I would like to say a big thank-you for your lovely response to my reviews (haduge uge smile on my face)
I was deeply interested in the fact that the voice was supposed to be getting louder, and harder to ignore, and I can understand your frustration over not being able to show this fact, and I was surprised, but happy, to note that when I opened up the story again, you had somehow found a way to increase the print. It definitely makes a difference. :-)
I always imagined that the \ce\'ce\' was simply there, quietly mocking him, torturing him with his oemoremories and fears, but now, it takes on a whole new light...
If the voice started off as I imagined, and has slowly but surely intensifie Veg Vegeta\'s mind, then I\'m amazed that Vegeta is keeping it together so well. Whilst a disembodied, yet tauntingly calm voice, constantly inside his head, is surely more than enough to drive him to distraction, the idea of said voice, growing and demanding his attention, is extremely horrifying.
I did originally think that Freiza had somehow found a way to tap into Vegeta\'s mind, and therefore, be able to taunt him from hell, and now, with the knowlege that the voice is getting louder, it did have me thinking that maybe Freiza is slowly taking control of the Prince\'s thoughts, and therefore, is becoming more promt int in his mind...but having read through this chapter, I\'m now of the opinion that the voice inside Vegeta\'s head, is truly coming from his own tortured mind...
...Of course, I could so easily be way off track (and it wouldn\'t be the first time) :-)
At times, I figured, yeah, it\'s Freiza alright...but then, the extremely emotional scene with Vegeta having an argument with the voice, had me changing my mind...yet again :-)
\"...He didn\'t want to lose Kakarott - he needed him.\"
\"~~Yes, you need so yso you will have someone else to use.~~\" (I see what you mean about not being able to do bold - very frustrating, when you want to illustrate a point)
\"--I don\'t use Kakarott.-\"
This and the following argument between Vegeta and his voice was veell ell done. I could picture it so well, hear the harsh taunting of the voice, the uncertain, almost scared, denial in Vegeta\'s more subdued responses, and could feel him slowly conceding defeat.
Until this:
\"...since you were a child you have belonged to the Ice-jin.~~\"
Somehow, I get the feeling that this is the root of all of Vegeta\'s problems, the voice, the dreams, the fact that he couldn\'t acknowledge, even to himself, that he had been raped. All of it tied up to the fact that he probably felt that he had lost himself, the moment he was first taken by Freiza.
- God, how my heart breaks at this thought -
I know I could be sprouting a whole load of doggy doo here, but so far this is what I see and I believe that although Vegeta still has a long road ahead of him, he has finally crossed that first, and most important, hurdle.
Just some things I also wanted to highlight:
\"...finishing up with the crudest words that Radditz had taught him.\"
Love this :-) The idea that Radditz taught his Prince some \'healthy\' Saiyan expressions, really makes me chuckle. I can just picture it so well :-)
\"And he suddenly realized - he wanted Kakarott to be happy. He wanted to see him smiling again.\"
Really loved this! The fact that Goku is also being drained by all of this, yet remains supportive and strong for Vegeta, the fact that it nonetheless shows in his face, and Vegeta has noted this, and wanted to bring that smile back to Goku\'s face, inspite of the fact that, Vegetasuffsuffering through enough crap to make a person scream...it\'s all very touching. :-)
\"He wasn\'t wearing his normal spandex - instead he had chosen blue jeans and a black t-shirt. Goku grinned - the prince looked much more relaxed - his tail was even swaying behind him.\"
Just loved the picture this presented :-)
Really loved the entire kitchen scene between Vegeta anku :ku :-)
\"No Kakar I w I will leave you to deal with the perverted old man and the rest of your friends.\"
LOL!
Oooo, cliffhanger:
\"\"I am going to deliver this one myself,\" he said, holding up one addressed to Bulma and Yamcha.\"
I hope that he holds his head up high when he faces them. He\'s way too good for Bulma in this, and this time around, Ild lld love to see him leave them knowing; that the right person can bring out that wonderfully loving, and happy side, which he possesses, and...that she can\'t hurt him anymore.
Truly dramatic and wonderful chapter. Loved it! Can\'t wait for more :-)
I actually read this story yesterday, before I was due to go over to my brother\'s place, so I never got the chance to review then. Firstly, I would like to say a big thank-you for your lovely response to my reviews (haduge uge smile on my face)
I was deeply interested in the fact that the voice was supposed to be getting louder, and harder to ignore, and I can understand your frustration over not being able to show this fact, and I was surprised, but happy, to note that when I opened up the story again, you had somehow found a way to increase the print. It definitely makes a difference. :-)
I always imagined that the \ce\'ce\' was simply there, quietly mocking him, torturing him with his oemoremories and fears, but now, it takes on a whole new light...
If the voice started off as I imagined, and has slowly but surely intensifie Veg Vegeta\'s mind, then I\'m amazed that Vegeta is keeping it together so well. Whilst a disembodied, yet tauntingly calm voice, constantly inside his head, is surely more than enough to drive him to distraction, the idea of said voice, growing and demanding his attention, is extremely horrifying.
I did originally think that Freiza had somehow found a way to tap into Vegeta\'s mind, and therefore, be able to taunt him from hell, and now, with the knowlege that the voice is getting louder, it did have me thinking that maybe Freiza is slowly taking control of the Prince\'s thoughts, and therefore, is becoming more promt int in his mind...but having read through this chapter, I\'m now of the opinion that the voice inside Vegeta\'s head, is truly coming from his own tortured mind...
...Of course, I could so easily be way off track (and it wouldn\'t be the first time) :-)
At times, I figured, yeah, it\'s Freiza alright...but then, the extremely emotional scene with Vegeta having an argument with the voice, had me changing my mind...yet again :-)
\"...He didn\'t want to lose Kakarott - he needed him.\"
\"~~Yes, you need so yso you will have someone else to use.~~\" (I see what you mean about not being able to do bold - very frustrating, when you want to illustrate a point)
\"--I don\'t use Kakarott.-\"
This and the following argument between Vegeta and his voice was veell ell done. I could picture it so well, hear the harsh taunting of the voice, the uncertain, almost scared, denial in Vegeta\'s more subdued responses, and could feel him slowly conceding defeat.
Until this:
\"...since you were a child you have belonged to the Ice-jin.~~\"
Somehow, I get the feeling that this is the root of all of Vegeta\'s problems, the voice, the dreams, the fact that he couldn\'t acknowledge, even to himself, that he had been raped. All of it tied up to the fact that he probably felt that he had lost himself, the moment he was first taken by Freiza.
- God, how my heart breaks at this thought -
I know I could be sprouting a whole load of doggy doo here, but so far this is what I see and I believe that although Vegeta still has a long road ahead of him, he has finally crossed that first, and most important, hurdle.
Just some things I also wanted to highlight:
\"...finishing up with the crudest words that Radditz had taught him.\"
Love this :-) The idea that Radditz taught his Prince some \'healthy\' Saiyan expressions, really makes me chuckle. I can just picture it so well :-)
\"And he suddenly realized - he wanted Kakarott to be happy. He wanted to see him smiling again.\"
Really loved this! The fact that Goku is also being drained by all of this, yet remains supportive and strong for Vegeta, the fact that it nonetheless shows in his face, and Vegeta has noted this, and wanted to bring that smile back to Goku\'s face, inspite of the fact that, Vegetasuffsuffering through enough crap to make a person scream...it\'s all very touching. :-)
\"He wasn\'t wearing his normal spandex - instead he had chosen blue jeans and a black t-shirt. Goku grinned - the prince looked much more relaxed - his tail was even swaying behind him.\"
Just loved the picture this presented :-)
Really loved the entire kitchen scene between Vegeta anku :ku :-)
\"No Kakar I w I will leave you to deal with the perverted old man and the rest of your friends.\"
LOL!
Oooo, cliffhanger:
\"\"I am going to deliver this one myself,\" he said, holding up one addressed to Bulma and Yamcha.\"
I hope that he holds his head up high when he faces them. He\'s way too good for Bulma in this, and this time around, Ild lld love to see him leave them knowing; that the right person can bring out that wonderfully loving, and happy side, which he possesses, and...that she can\'t hurt him anymore.
Truly dramatic and wonderful chapter. Loved it! Can\'t wait for more :-)
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April 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
NOOOO!!! no nono nonononon!!!! How could you end it there?! NEED-MORE!!!!! AHH!!!! *cires* going crazy with the suspense!!! NO!!!! *huffs* why did I ever get mehself hooked on the cliffies?! **sits down and meditates** meh... waiting..... ^_______^
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April 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*sighs happily* At least it \'seems\' as though Vegeta is on the right track to healing his past. I say \'seems\' because this chapter didn\'t make it feel as though Vegeta went through all that he needs to go through to deal with his past.
At least he didn\'t sucome (spelling?) to the voice telling him to leave Kakarott. And if the voice continues on that path, I hope that he continues to ignore it.
I am also impressed with how you showed Vegeta\'s obvious dislike for the \"R\" word.
As usual, can\'t wait for your next up date.
At least he didn\'t sucome (spelling?) to the voice telling him to leave Kakarott. And if the voice continues on that path, I hope that he continues to ignore it.
I am also impressed with how you showed Vegeta\'s obvious dislike for the \"R\" word.
As usual, can\'t wait for your next up date.
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April 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I am glad to see that Vegeta is getting better, or so it seems. Wedding invitations? Are ChiChi and Renu getting hitched? I really hope so.
But back to my prince...those dreams of his are extremely distrubing...I think that fact that he has survived so long dealing with them just proves how strong he really is and I am please that he decided not leave Goku. They are so cute together. I love this fic. Glad you reviewed mine and I can\'t wait for the next chappie.
But back to my prince...those dreams of his are extremely distrubing...I think that fact that he has survived so long dealing with them just proves how strong he really is and I am please that he decided not leave Goku. They are so cute together. I love this fic. Glad you reviewed mine and I can\'t wait for the next chappie.
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April 9, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*sigh* I havent reviewed in awhile... My comp has been screwed up and it still is. I have to do everything with my keyboard cuz my mouse wont show up on screen. Dumb... Well anyways, story\'s goin good. Keep it up, k?
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April 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This fic is excellent and I really enjoyed this chap
I love how concerned Goku is for Vegeta, how much he is willing to make the Ouji believe in himself. I just love how he soothes him.
I especially love the relationship between Vegeta and Piccolo that is great! They are hilarious, yet they can get very serious.
You write very well, and I love everyone\'s personalities. You have defined them well!
I thought it was sad and wonderful when Vegeta said don\'t say that *fuck* buddies, because Kakarott doesn\'t like it.
Aww, it was just great to see how he got about that term, all b/c Goku doesn\'t like it.
Great fic I love it!
^.*
-MB-
I love how concerned Goku is for Vegeta, how much he is willing to make the Ouji believe in himself. I just love how he soothes him.
I especially love the relationship between Vegeta and Piccolo that is great! They are hilarious, yet they can get very serious.
You write very well, and I love everyone\'s personalities. You have defined them well!
I thought it was sad and wonderful when Vegeta said don\'t say that *fuck* buddies, because Kakarott doesn\'t like it.
Aww, it was just great to see how he got about that term, all b/c Goku doesn\'t like it.
Great fic I love it!
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-MB-
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April 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hip Hip Hurray. Another update. I like the depth of this chapter. And I also liked the way that Goku discovered Furiza\'s *voice* and how he reacted to it.
So you scared people away with the yuri huh? Well, I like the whole story. Keep writing, I think that I am waiting for the day that Vegeta is healthy again! (Bonding is cool, but which way would it be wiser? To bond after Vegeta has gotten rid of Furiza\'s taunting, or is it going to take a bond with Kakarott to get the Prince over that hill?) *Hums happily thinking about both senarios*
So you scared people away with the yuri huh? Well, I like the whole story. Keep writing, I think that I am waiting for the day that Vegeta is healthy again! (Bonding is cool, but which way would it be wiser? To bond after Vegeta has gotten rid of Furiza\'s taunting, or is it going to take a bond with Kakarott to get the Prince over that hill?) *Hums happily thinking about both senarios*
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April 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Gotta love all the yaoi-ness :) :) Keep it up