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May 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Spin with a Grin I like that!
And Cell what is up with him? He only remembers his name, why? And is very childlike. I am trying to figure this out. I guess I will just have to wait because I have no clue. And I was so happy to read more Radditz!!!!!! I love him. I really love how you have written this story. I think you have proven to me that a fic with original characters can be EXCELLENT!!!!
p.s. WHEN ARE GOKU AND VEGETA GONNA GET IT ON?????? ::hands you bags and bags of lemons::
And Cell what is up with him? He only remembers his name, why? And is very childlike. I am trying to figure this out. I guess I will just have to wait because I have no clue. And I was so happy to read more Radditz!!!!!! I love him. I really love how you have written this story. I think you have proven to me that a fic with original characters can be EXCELLENT!!!!
p.s. WHEN ARE GOKU AND VEGETA GONNA GET IT ON?????? ::hands you bags and bags of lemons::
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May 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Update already!!!! YEAH!!!
We were a happy family then…until those twins lights came. --*gasp* What are Goten and Vegeta doing in your!!!!!!!!! hehe...j/k
Our world was coming to an end and all my parents could do was stare at a television screen and watch it happen.--That would truly be a horrible thing.
The images of their killers forever imprinted on in my brain. --wow...do you think you can somehow unprint one of the killers fror brr brain so she doesnt remember? hehe...
It does not redeem him in my mind.--*gasp* oh no...so I guess that unprinting thing isnt going to work...I feel badly for her I do...I never read a fic that came from the perspective of when Vegeta and Nappa landed on Earth and killed all those people. I really am impressed. But as much as I feel for her...this is Vegeta...my precious Vegeta...really he can do no wrong. I believe the word I am searching for is...perfect...yes he is perfect.
The creatures that I would spend the rest of my life if necessary trying to destroy. --Oh gosh...this girl is determined...Sadly, someone needs to crush her spirit...hehe..j/k I just dont want Vegeta getting hurt...*sobs*
A creature that would’ve killed his own brother and nephew. Why would we need him to rule along side us?--ths exs exactly why...because he would have killed his own brother and nephew. cold, callous and cruel...ahh how I love Radditz.
The Saiyan had been dead for many years…his power now is feyoneyond my own. --@_@ *is scared* He better not hurt Vegeta!!!!! But that is an interesting take on the saiyajin power growth. Never thought that their power could be growing the whole time that they are dead.
“I know, it is impressive. And to think he is only at base level.” --*gulps and is evore ore scared* That doesn\'t sound too good.
He seemed to radiate childlike innocence. --I wonder why..maybe it is b/c of Goku or maybe it is something else...I will just be wondering until it is answered I guess.
This irked me of course…what the hell was I suppose to accomplish with an over grown monkey child? --Lmao!!!!
I smiled a real smile…for the first time in ages. I was going to enjoy this ride.--Well I am glad someone is smiling...*pouts* I dont want anything to annhilate Vegeta...that is such a hard word...there will be nothing left if one annhilated him...cant we just replace that word with the word punch? how about soft punch....^_^ just playing wit ya.
But this Cell is kinda disturbing his whole childlike innocence is creeping me out. Well this chap was superb and I was enthralled while reading it. I cant wait until you update again...and now I am going to bed it is exactly 6 a.m. @_@
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We were a happy family then…until those twins lights came. --*gasp* What are Goten and Vegeta doing in your!!!!!!!!! hehe...j/k
Our world was coming to an end and all my parents could do was stare at a television screen and watch it happen.--That would truly be a horrible thing.
The images of their killers forever imprinted on in my brain. --wow...do you think you can somehow unprint one of the killers fror brr brain so she doesnt remember? hehe...
It does not redeem him in my mind.--*gasp* oh no...so I guess that unprinting thing isnt going to work...I feel badly for her I do...I never read a fic that came from the perspective of when Vegeta and Nappa landed on Earth and killed all those people. I really am impressed. But as much as I feel for her...this is Vegeta...my precious Vegeta...really he can do no wrong. I believe the word I am searching for is...perfect...yes he is perfect.
The creatures that I would spend the rest of my life if necessary trying to destroy. --Oh gosh...this girl is determined...Sadly, someone needs to crush her spirit...hehe..j/k I just dont want Vegeta getting hurt...*sobs*
A creature that would’ve killed his own brother and nephew. Why would we need him to rule along side us?--ths exs exactly why...because he would have killed his own brother and nephew. cold, callous and cruel...ahh how I love Radditz.
The Saiyan had been dead for many years…his power now is feyoneyond my own. --@_@ *is scared* He better not hurt Vegeta!!!!! But that is an interesting take on the saiyajin power growth. Never thought that their power could be growing the whole time that they are dead.
“I know, it is impressive. And to think he is only at base level.” --*gulps and is evore ore scared* That doesn\'t sound too good.
He seemed to radiate childlike innocence. --I wonder why..maybe it is b/c of Goku or maybe it is something else...I will just be wondering until it is answered I guess.
This irked me of course…what the hell was I suppose to accomplish with an over grown monkey child? --Lmao!!!!
I smiled a real smile…for the first time in ages. I was going to enjoy this ride.--Well I am glad someone is smiling...*pouts* I dont want anything to annhilate Vegeta...that is such a hard word...there will be nothing left if one annhilated him...cant we just replace that word with the word punch? how about soft punch....^_^ just playing wit ya.
But this Cell is kinda disturbing his whole childlike innocence is creeping me out. Well this chap was superb and I was enthralled while reading it. I cant wait until you update again...and now I am going to bed it is exactly 6 a.m. @_@
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May 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I really like your original characters, which is odd for me I might add. It\'s exciting to read about them (almost like reading a book.)
And Cell... how is it you can make me like and hate characters so easily ... well actually I liked Cell before, but still you made me hate Videl when I didn\'t have \'much\' of a problem with her before. WhatWhat is wrong with my coloring?” Cell asked innocently.\' - you make me want to hug him. ^-^
I also find myself understand her hatred towards Vegeta and all Saiyans in general... I guess shes not that bad.
Anyways, I liked this chap alot, one of my favourites. Definately looking forward to the next chap! ^_^
And Cell... how is it you can make me like and hate characters so easily ... well actually I liked Cell before, but still you made me hate Videl when I didn\'t have \'much\' of a problem with her before. WhatWhat is wrong with my coloring?” Cell asked innocently.\' - you make me want to hug him. ^-^
I also find myself understand her hatred towards Vegeta and all Saiyans in general... I guess shes not that bad.
Anyways, I liked this chap alot, one of my favourites. Definately looking forward to the next chap! ^_^
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May 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh*shivers*, Cell is creeping me out. I think you have created a real threat. After the Buu saga, and even GT (GT isn\'t my favorit, but it did have lots of Vegeta there for a while) I didn\'t think there were any other bad guys that could pose a threat, but you have created one. That is quite an acomplishment.
So now we know what the dragon balls were used for.
Cell could remember his name, even if he didn\'t have his memories, hmmmmm. Did the Dragon say he wouldn\'t have memories, or did Cell tell them this with his actions. (acting like everything was new to him)
You updated very fast. Nice. I liked this chapter, even if it didn\'t have any of my favorit characters in it.
So now we know what the dragon balls were used for.
Cell could remember his name, even if he didn\'t have his memories, hmmmmm. Did the Dragon say he wouldn\'t have memories, or did Cell tell them this with his actions. (acting like everything was new to him)
You updated very fast. Nice. I liked this chapter, even if it didn\'t have any of my favorit characters in it.
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May 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Since I am useless when it comes to critiques and practical feedback I\'ll stick with what I\'m good at; simply telling you that this is an entertaining ficcy and I\'m looking forward to more - SOON!
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May 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Since I am useless when it comes to critiques and practical feedback I\'ll stick with what I\'m good at; simply telling you that this is an entertaining ficcy and I\'m looking forward to more - SOON!
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May 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
YAY!!! UPDATE!!!!! *does flips*
The Prince would be standing there just radiating enough heat to be his own sun.--^.^ Oh wow, I like that..alot.
“Hey!” The taller Saiyan pouted. “What about me!”--aww poor Goku...and damn that dream!!! -_- damn it to seven hells and back!!!!! Goku needs the real thing!!!!
That man could be a fucking annoying little shit sometimes.--O_O what! How dare she!?!?! He is never annoying! EVER! ^__^
She’d even worn one of her favorites in celebration of the rare occasion: ‘PARENTAL ADVISORY: EXPLICT CONTENT’. --lmao, ok she is forgiven for wearing this shirt, I likes it very much!
“Uh…” She sounded so retarded purring and talking at the same time. “Thanks.” --rofl, oh gods that does sound highly strange.
The spiky head of the Saiyan Prince peeped out into the hall and he sniffed the air experimentally. --aww thats so cute...I can just picture his gorgeous head popping...er...I\'m not going to finish that sentence...it was begining to sound rather strange. I\'ll just end it bying ing Vegeta is very hot!
Well…maybe it wasn’t all that romantic but she didn’t look like she was planning a fundraiser to him.--LoL, ok I have to admit. I really like your Gohan. I like how you write him and ...*gulps* I actually feel sorry for the dude. That is a first.
His hair was flickering from black to gold and eye eyes had already changed to a more menacing teal color. --o_O oh *gasp* all the ppl around there must think he is crazy!?!? hehe..a guy with flickering haiI woI would run away, unless it was Vegeta of course...I would gladly die if it meant Vegeta would touch me.
“This is why! This is exactly why I turned to someone else. You’re nothing but an animal Gohan! You’re disgusting! All you ever want to do is fight. You never think to solve anything with something other than your fists. And you’ve turned my daughter into a monster just like you!” --*is blown away beyond reason* I really hater her now.*shakes fist atel* el* what a bitch!!! How could she even say things like that?! How stupid of her..so is he animal for wanting to save the world..is he disgusting for killing Cell! AH! She made me so mad!!!!
But…He had given up everything for her and this is how she repaid him. --I am now even more disgusted with Videl..he gave up everything. Wh. Wh. What more did she want? Was she actually not expec him him to get angry..he is saiyajin..and even if he wasn\'t he would still have every right to be angry!
Well, he was fixing a rather large sandwich, but he did that all the time, definitely no reason for him to be prancing around her kitchen humming. --ROFL...@_@ oh gosh..my sides hurt.
I’ve finally done it…I finally left Goku!” --*turns on party music, pops popcorn, and throws streamers* ABOUT DAMN TIME...but why did she decide to leave him? *throws some confetti as I wait for the answer and hands a piece of cake to Goten and Trunks*
“So…” The raven-haired girl continued. “Why do we keep doing this when it is ridiculously obvious that you…care…for Kakarot?” --damn it...he again..managed to get out of not answering a question like this!!! He always finds a way to squirm out of it! *shakes fist really hard and very seriously at Vegeta* He better own up to the fact the he is in utter and complete love with Kakarott!
Anywho..ahh another wonderful chapter. And you know what it was worth the wait. All of your chaps are. And as always exceptionally written. I say that b/c I find that I enjoy every single one of your characters...they all make me feel different emotions and you write all of their personalities well. And I really like Gohan a lot in this fic! It\'s almost frightening... I really really can\'t wait for the update!
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The Prince would be standing there just radiating enough heat to be his own sun.--^.^ Oh wow, I like that..alot.
“Hey!” The taller Saiyan pouted. “What about me!”--aww poor Goku...and damn that dream!!! -_- damn it to seven hells and back!!!!! Goku needs the real thing!!!!
That man could be a fucking annoying little shit sometimes.--O_O what! How dare she!?!?! He is never annoying! EVER! ^__^
She’d even worn one of her favorites in celebration of the rare occasion: ‘PARENTAL ADVISORY: EXPLICT CONTENT’. --lmao, ok she is forgiven for wearing this shirt, I likes it very much!
“Uh…” She sounded so retarded purring and talking at the same time. “Thanks.” --rofl, oh gods that does sound highly strange.
The spiky head of the Saiyan Prince peeped out into the hall and he sniffed the air experimentally. --aww thats so cute...I can just picture his gorgeous head popping...er...I\'m not going to finish that sentence...it was begining to sound rather strange. I\'ll just end it bying ing Vegeta is very hot!
Well…maybe it wasn’t all that romantic but she didn’t look like she was planning a fundraiser to him.--LoL, ok I have to admit. I really like your Gohan. I like how you write him and ...*gulps* I actually feel sorry for the dude. That is a first.
His hair was flickering from black to gold and eye eyes had already changed to a more menacing teal color. --o_O oh *gasp* all the ppl around there must think he is crazy!?!? hehe..a guy with flickering haiI woI would run away, unless it was Vegeta of course...I would gladly die if it meant Vegeta would touch me.
“This is why! This is exactly why I turned to someone else. You’re nothing but an animal Gohan! You’re disgusting! All you ever want to do is fight. You never think to solve anything with something other than your fists. And you’ve turned my daughter into a monster just like you!” --*is blown away beyond reason* I really hater her now.*shakes fist atel* el* what a bitch!!! How could she even say things like that?! How stupid of her..so is he animal for wanting to save the world..is he disgusting for killing Cell! AH! She made me so mad!!!!
But…He had given up everything for her and this is how she repaid him. --I am now even more disgusted with Videl..he gave up everything. Wh. Wh. What more did she want? Was she actually not expec him him to get angry..he is saiyajin..and even if he wasn\'t he would still have every right to be angry!
Well, he was fixing a rather large sandwich, but he did that all the time, definitely no reason for him to be prancing around her kitchen humming. --ROFL...@_@ oh gosh..my sides hurt.
I’ve finally done it…I finally left Goku!” --*turns on party music, pops popcorn, and throws streamers* ABOUT DAMN TIME...but why did she decide to leave him? *throws some confetti as I wait for the answer and hands a piece of cake to Goten and Trunks*
“So…” The raven-haired girl continued. “Why do we keep doing this when it is ridiculously obvious that you…care…for Kakarot?” --damn it...he again..managed to get out of not answering a question like this!!! He always finds a way to squirm out of it! *shakes fist really hard and very seriously at Vegeta* He better own up to the fact the he is in utter and complete love with Kakarott!
Anywho..ahh another wonderful chapter. And you know what it was worth the wait. All of your chaps are. And as always exceptionally written. I say that b/c I find that I enjoy every single one of your characters...they all make me feel different emotions and you write all of their personalities well. And I really like Gohan a lot in this fic! It\'s almost frightening... I really really can\'t wait for the update!
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May 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Yah, you\'d better update sooner. How could you make us wait soooooooooooo long?
Okay, seriously, these chapters are just as good regaurdless of the time frame invovled. I still love this story. When I saw that you had updated, I was like, YEAH!
Are Kakarott and Vegeta going to get together soon? I have a feeling that Chi Chi packing her bags is heading the story in that general direction.
I am glad both Kalika and Vegeta know that it is \'just fucking\'.
I feel sorry for Gohan, but there is always a reason for these kinds of things to happen, isn\'t there? Well, okay, as far as fan fictions ths there is, I do believe it\'s called \'plot\'.
I don\'t know which I want to see more first, more of the plot with the androids and Radditz, or a Goku x Vegeta lemon. Either way, this is a great story.
Okay, seriously, these chapters are just as good regaurdless of the time frame invovled. I still love this story. When I saw that you had updated, I was like, YEAH!
Are Kakarott and Vegeta going to get together soon? I have a feeling that Chi Chi packing her bags is heading the story in that general direction.
I am glad both Kalika and Vegeta know that it is \'just fucking\'.
I feel sorry for Gohan, but there is always a reason for these kinds of things to happen, isn\'t there? Well, okay, as far as fan fictions ths there is, I do believe it\'s called \'plot\'.
I don\'t know which I want to see more first, more of the plot with the androids and Radditz, or a Goku x Vegeta lemon. Either way, this is a great story.
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May 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh my gosh,
I didn\'tiew iew the chapter b4 this one. I am so sorry. I must have been busy. I have been gone for a while.
I am very glad that you did update though. This is really getting very good, not that it wasn\'t before. But it looks as if my dream for Gohan and Kalika to be a couple just might come true. Videl made me so angry, but I guess that was the point. I think Kalika can treat him better anyway. And poor Goku he is being tortured by his dreams although he seems to like the torture a lot. I see torture is a running theme for this fic, because I have been wondering, well me and MB have been wondering when the torture of Goku and Vegeta not having sex will be over. When that happens I know we will all breathe (since we are holding are breaths now) and fa Tha That is going to be so good. I can\'t wait to see more of Radditz. ve hve him. And even Gohan, it\'s true this Gohan is very likeable and loveable.And Chichi lGokuGoku. I wonder what he said to her or did. I can\'t wait to find that out.
The spiky head of the Saiyan Prince peeped out into the hall and he sniffed the air experimentally. --aww thats so cute...I can just picture his gorgeous head popping...er...I\'m not going to finish that sentence...it was begining to sorathrather strange. I\'ll just end it by saying Vegeta is very hot!==I laughed very hard when I read that review, she is such a hentai.
This ficcie is so good and you write such long chapters, thank you for doing that!
You better update soon or else I will send you 1000 e-mails! And let me tell you your inbox will not like that one bit!
I didn\'tiew iew the chapter b4 this one. I am so sorry. I must have been busy. I have been gone for a while.
I am very glad that you did update though. This is really getting very good, not that it wasn\'t before. But it looks as if my dream for Gohan and Kalika to be a couple just might come true. Videl made me so angry, but I guess that was the point. I think Kalika can treat him better anyway. And poor Goku he is being tortured by his dreams although he seems to like the torture a lot. I see torture is a running theme for this fic, because I have been wondering, well me and MB have been wondering when the torture of Goku and Vegeta not having sex will be over. When that happens I know we will all breathe (since we are holding are breaths now) and fa Tha That is going to be so good. I can\'t wait to see more of Radditz. ve hve him. And even Gohan, it\'s true this Gohan is very likeable and loveable.And Chichi lGokuGoku. I wonder what he said to her or did. I can\'t wait to find that out.
The spiky head of the Saiyan Prince peeped out into the hall and he sniffed the air experimentally. --aww thats so cute...I can just picture his gorgeous head popping...er...I\'m not going to finish that sentence...it was begining to sorathrather strange. I\'ll just end it by saying Vegeta is very hot!==I laughed very hard when I read that review, she is such a hentai.
This ficcie is so good and you write such long chapters, thank you for doing that!
You better update soon or else I will send you 1000 e-mails! And let me tell you your inbox will not like that one bit!
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April 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
AND THE CROWD GOES WILD! WHooooo-hooooo!!! Oh, so many things that I loved about this chapter. So many. *sighs * The fighting. Goku. Vegeta. \'Kaki\'
Ah. Good stuff. Goooooooooooood stuff.
Gohan found himself wondering what exactly Kalika’s training entailed.~~It\'s best not to wonder, Gohan. It\'s jusst nst not to wonder. *pats Gohan on the head. *
However... If Vegeta took up training Goku in the same manner, I would be more than happy to read about it. *wink *
Anywho. Love it. (Chapter the first one that you put out today, is the one I\'m reviewing. Heading off to the next one now!)
Card!~
Ah. Good stuff. Goooooooooooood stuff.
Gohan found himself wondering what exactly Kalika’s training entailed.~~It\'s best not to wonder, Gohan. It\'s jusst nst not to wonder. *pats Gohan on the head. *
However... If Vegeta took up training Goku in the same manner, I would be more than happy to read about it. *wink *
Anywho. Love it. (Chapter the first one that you put out today, is the one I\'m reviewing. Heading off to the next one now!)
Card!~