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April 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*clutches side, tries to breathe. Fails and promptly dies. * Oh, Goodness. When poor Goku\'s dream got interrupted by a...a...\'girl!\' and then he wakes up and says \"Chi!\" And then she shows up at Capsule corp with all those bags.
And then Trunks prancing around the kitchen. And Vegeta throwing Kalika over his shoulder. (Still depressed that he hasn\'t jumped Goku yet, but I\'m patient. Really. Sort of. A little. Why hasn\'t he jumped Goku yet?!)
Poor Kalika. (Have no sympathy for the girl that is interrupting Goku\'s dream.)
*sighs * Now keep writing that next chapter, dear, and I won\'t have to cuss at you. Or nag you. Or any of those unpleasant things.
(Also, Aff.net thisthis chapter. I read 13 and reviewed it and when I tried to get to this chapter (which was THERE I swear it was) it was not there anymore. *pout * So I had to go write MLS (wherein, yes, there is Goten. And yes, he does have very cool powers.) And then wah-lah, when I came back, the chapter was here. Very good thing, too, because I really liked it.)
~Card!~
Oh!~ Almost forgot. Poor Gohan. *pets him *
And then Trunks prancing around the kitchen. And Vegeta throwing Kalika over his shoulder. (Still depressed that he hasn\'t jumped Goku yet, but I\'m patient. Really. Sort of. A little. Why hasn\'t he jumped Goku yet?!)
Poor Kalika. (Have no sympathy for the girl that is interrupting Goku\'s dream.)
*sighs * Now keep writing that next chapter, dear, and I won\'t have to cuss at you. Or nag you. Or any of those unpleasant things.
(Also, Aff.net thisthis chapter. I read 13 and reviewed it and when I tried to get to this chapter (which was THERE I swear it was) it was not there anymore. *pout * So I had to go write MLS (wherein, yes, there is Goten. And yes, he does have very cool powers.) And then wah-lah, when I came back, the chapter was here. Very good thing, too, because I really liked it.)
~Card!~
Oh!~ Almost forgot. Poor Gohan. *pets him *
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April 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Excelent story!
Goku will be in for a surprise when he gets home. And why did Chichi leave him?
Goten will be slightly uncomfortable with his arouaround, since he has a relationship with Trunks.
Keep up the good work!
Also please check out my story, Ancient History: The Forgotten Past of the Saiyans, here on AFF.NET when you get the chance.
Goku will be in for a surprise when he gets home. And why did Chichi leave him?
Goten will be slightly uncomfortable with his arouaround, since he has a relationship with Trunks.
Keep up the good work!
Also please check out my story, Ancient History: The Forgotten Past of the Saiyans, here on AFF.NET when you get the chance.
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April 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Well so far that was simply wonderful... Now that you have captured me completely, I hope you will update often!
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April 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
“Violence might not be the answer to everything,” The dark haired boy said while trying to catch his breath. “But sex sure the hell is.”
Yes, Goten, you tell them buddy! YOu let the whole world know! *Quietly steals Goku to t him him in the art of being horny and getting Vegeta trapped under him for many hours of hot-steamy lemonade-making. *
I love Goten. I love this Goten. He was just so cute and lecherous. And I love \'Geta. *sighs * I just love this fic.
Oh, and the joke was funny. (And sadly true.) *Pictures Vegeta floating near the ceiling and slowcrewcrewing lightbulb in while the crowd of Z-fighters each gets their 15 minutes of reflection of this. * Yep, four-episodes worth of action there.
Yes, Goten, you tell them buddy! YOu let the whole world know! *Quietly steals Goku to t him him in the art of being horny and getting Vegeta trapped under him for many hours of hot-steamy lemonade-making. *
I love Goten. I love this Goten. He was just so cute and lecherous. And I love \'Geta. *sighs * I just love this fic.
Oh, and the joke was funny. (And sadly true.) *Pictures Vegeta floating near the ceiling and slowcrewcrewing lightbulb in while the crowd of Z-fighters each gets their 15 minutes of reflection of this. * Yep, four-episodes worth of action there.
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April 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Alright, I know I already reviewed this. But I was reading it over again, and just *sigh* because it really is one of the best things I\'ve read. I just like it. All of it. Even though I thought I wasn\'t going to like it when I started it, I do. So, (Realizes that she must seem completely insane and hopes that this does not cause the reviews to cease to come.) Wow. Because I\'m just impressed. I really like this story. Goodness.
*sighs heavily* *dreamily dreaming of how nice it\'ll be when Goku & \'Geta finally get it on*
Oh, and let me know if you figure out how to pronounce Masuyo. Its one of the names that Getarian mentioned way back when and I liked it but I have no idea how to pronounce it. *wink*
Now that I\'ve doled out the praise for the day; I\'ll think I\'ll just go away and hope that you update soon.
*sighs heavily* *dreamily dreaming of how nice it\'ll be when Goku & \'Geta finally get it on*
Oh, and let me know if you figure out how to pronounce Masuyo. Its one of the names that Getarian mentioned way back when and I liked it but I have no idea how to pronounce it. *wink*
Now that I\'ve doled out the praise for the day; I\'ll think I\'ll just go away and hope that you update soon.
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April 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*gasp* I haven\'t revd!
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Gosh I am so sorry I have been out of town ever since Easter and I am still gone in North Carolina...
wellfinally go access to a comp! and its late. So I just read over the story quickly! I am so ashamed. I do love what I read so far I saw some hilarious stuff!
But I just wanted to let ya know that I wasn\'t dead, and I will read your fic fully tomorrow and give you the lengthy review you deserve!
Ok! Until tomorrow then!
^.*
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Gosh I am so sorry I have been out of town ever since Easter and I am still gone in North Carolina...
wellfinally go access to a comp! and its late. So I just read over the story quickly! I am so ashamed. I do love what I read so far I saw some hilarious stuff!
But I just wanted to let ya know that I wasn\'t dead, and I will read your fic fully tomorrow and give you the lengthy review you deserve!
Ok! Until tomorrow then!
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April 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*does a dance* Yay I read it!!!!
Lovely chappie....
I couldn’t do it…I just couldn’t do it. Vegeta could not mate Kalika…I have other plans for her. He-- Y-- YAY!!!! *hugs you* thank you!!!!!! I would feel so badly for Goku if they mated, knowing how much he loves the Prince.
She also knew that the Prince didn’t love her. He just loved the idea of her, the last female Saiyan in existence.--hehe, thats my Geta...*shakes head* The Prince wants, he gets...
because at night she dreams of Gohan.--that\'s right you just keep dreaming of Gohan. Poor Videl..hehe not really...I never really like her...well its more like she just comes across as annoying to me...and I love the idea of Gohan and Kailika...^.~
She’ll just continue to serve her Prince until he gets his shit together.---hehe I bet she will, just as long as she pictures Gohan...j/k
Goku, who had joined her and the Ouji’s evening readings, not long after the Gravity Room incident, was even curious.--LoL awe, what he doesn\'t trust them to be alone? That is so cute!
“You have reverted to ‘Getaisms!” --rofl! I love that, I think I am going to have to steal that from you...
Yep, Goten had always known that ol’ Ollie was a ho.--rofl! That is so mean Goten let his best friend date a ho?!?!?! Mean, but very funny!
Goku was stunned. His mouth was even hanging open.--I saw this as a great oppurtunity for Vegeta and he didn\'t even take it. it could have gone something like this Goku was stunned. His mouth was even hanging open. Vegeta noticing this closed the distance between them capturing the hot mouth below him, running his tongue along the other saiyajins. Makin the bigger man below him moan fore more...err...excuse that I got Veggie and Goku on the brain....Ooooo that made me think of something when Vegeta and Goku finally do get together who will be uke? Since Vegeta seems like he wouldn\'t be uke in this fic, but then again who knows what he would do for his Goku...
His grin had finally returned to his normal smirk, much to Kalika’s relief.--LoL I love how this was written and I can picture Vegeta...so cute.
Vegeta didn’t answer, he just shock his head with an amused grin. --hehe, what if Vegeta didn\'t know what the hell was going and he was just as clueless as everyone else...that would hilarious... ah but I know he knows what is up...^.~
“You might want me to take my pants off first, Trunks.” --GAH!!!!!ROFL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That was freaking hilarious!!!!!!!
“Okay, so you were careful.” He growled. “Now come on!” --hehe impatient are we?
“Tru-nks!” Goten whined rather loudly.
“Whaa-t!” Trunks whined in reply. --rofl!!!!!!!!!!!! oh gosh I love this lemon! That is soooo cute!
Although, I hate song fics with a passion…--oh no...*sobs* you hate song fics...??? But I wrote one...Delusions of a Prince...and you reviewed it. Does that mean you secretly hated it? *laughs* Actually I am quite glad you reviewed it , that makes me feel special!!!!!! Go me! So hopefully that means I wrote it well enough to keep your attention...*.* I actually loathe sonfics myself...
How many Dragonball Z characters does it take to screw in a light bulb?
…
One, but it takes four episodes. Ha! (I Know)---LoL lovely joke, I have never heard that before. I will have to tell someone...hehe
Axcelxcellent lemons!!!!! They were very enticing, but there was one problem...there was no Goku x Vegeta action...@_@
Awe it\'s ok I know there can\'t be any just yet, and you know that\'s what makes it even better! Wow your story has come so far. It\'s amazing to think of how wonderfully this is all coming along...
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Lovely chappie....
I couldn’t do it…I just couldn’t do it. Vegeta could not mate Kalika…I have other plans for her. He-- Y-- YAY!!!! *hugs you* thank you!!!!!! I would feel so badly for Goku if they mated, knowing how much he loves the Prince.
She also knew that the Prince didn’t love her. He just loved the idea of her, the last female Saiyan in existence.--hehe, thats my Geta...*shakes head* The Prince wants, he gets...
because at night she dreams of Gohan.--that\'s right you just keep dreaming of Gohan. Poor Videl..hehe not really...I never really like her...well its more like she just comes across as annoying to me...and I love the idea of Gohan and Kailika...^.~
She’ll just continue to serve her Prince until he gets his shit together.---hehe I bet she will, just as long as she pictures Gohan...j/k
Goku, who had joined her and the Ouji’s evening readings, not long after the Gravity Room incident, was even curious.--LoL awe, what he doesn\'t trust them to be alone? That is so cute!
“You have reverted to ‘Getaisms!” --rofl! I love that, I think I am going to have to steal that from you...
Yep, Goten had always known that ol’ Ollie was a ho.--rofl! That is so mean Goten let his best friend date a ho?!?!?! Mean, but very funny!
Goku was stunned. His mouth was even hanging open.--I saw this as a great oppurtunity for Vegeta and he didn\'t even take it. it could have gone something like this Goku was stunned. His mouth was even hanging open. Vegeta noticing this closed the distance between them capturing the hot mouth below him, running his tongue along the other saiyajins. Makin the bigger man below him moan fore more...err...excuse that I got Veggie and Goku on the brain....Ooooo that made me think of something when Vegeta and Goku finally do get together who will be uke? Since Vegeta seems like he wouldn\'t be uke in this fic, but then again who knows what he would do for his Goku...
His grin had finally returned to his normal smirk, much to Kalika’s relief.--LoL I love how this was written and I can picture Vegeta...so cute.
Vegeta didn’t answer, he just shock his head with an amused grin. --hehe, what if Vegeta didn\'t know what the hell was going and he was just as clueless as everyone else...that would hilarious... ah but I know he knows what is up...^.~
“You might want me to take my pants off first, Trunks.” --GAH!!!!!ROFL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That was freaking hilarious!!!!!!!
“Okay, so you were careful.” He growled. “Now come on!” --hehe impatient are we?
“Tru-nks!” Goten whined rather loudly.
“Whaa-t!” Trunks whined in reply. --rofl!!!!!!!!!!!! oh gosh I love this lemon! That is soooo cute!
Although, I hate song fics with a passion…--oh no...*sobs* you hate song fics...??? But I wrote one...Delusions of a Prince...and you reviewed it. Does that mean you secretly hated it? *laughs* Actually I am quite glad you reviewed it , that makes me feel special!!!!!! Go me! So hopefully that means I wrote it well enough to keep your attention...*.* I actually loathe sonfics myself...
How many Dragonball Z characters does it take to screw in a light bulb?
…
One, but it takes four episodes. Ha! (I Know)---LoL lovely joke, I have never heard that before. I will have to tell someone...hehe
Axcelxcellent lemons!!!!! They were very enticing, but there was one problem...there was no Goku x Vegeta action...@_@
Awe it\'s ok I know there can\'t be any just yet, and you know that\'s what makes it even better! Wow your story has come so far. It\'s amazing to think of how wonderfully this is all coming along...
^.*
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April 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Excelent Fic! Poor clueless Goku. Subconsciously he wants Vegta, yet consciously isn\'t aware of it. LOL.
It was interesting to see the lemon in the journal lined up with the lemon with Goten an Trunks.
The title of the chapter was very apt.
Keep up the good work!!
It was interesting to see the lemon in the journal lined up with the lemon with Goten an Trunks.
The title of the chapter was very apt.
Keep up the good work!!
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April 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
That was great - I\'m glad Kalika is not really in \'love\' love with Vegeta - \'cos then I\'d have to hurt her. Go ahead and give her to someone else, but hands off Vegeta!
“Oh, Good Kami, its worse that I thought!” Goten said placing his head in his hands briefly before breaking into a grin. “You have reverted to ‘Getaisms!”
I loved that line! - \'Getaims\' - *snicker*
Goku\'s squeaky shock was funny - and Vegeta\'s lecherous smirk. So where did the girl come from - can males have kids?
“You might want me to take my pants off first, Trunks.” The younger boy said, huge smile still in tact. “It’s a lot easier that way.”
Goten and Trunks were lots of fun here - a fun, friendly sex scene, and I really liked it. It was cute how Goten had to tell a confused Trunks what to do.
“Tru-nks!” Goten whined rather loudly.
“Whaa-t!” Trunks whined in reply.
Great dialog - made me chuckle.
I\'m glad this chapter started pointing things in a more yaoi-ly direction. And I just know Goku had to go take care of a \'little problem\' when he left Vegeta.
“Oh, Good Kami, its worse that I thought!” Goten said placing his head in his hands briefly before breaking into a grin. “You have reverted to ‘Getaisms!”
I loved that line! - \'Getaims\' - *snicker*
Goku\'s squeaky shock was funny - and Vegeta\'s lecherous smirk. So where did the girl come from - can males have kids?
“You might want me to take my pants off first, Trunks.” The younger boy said, huge smile still in tact. “It’s a lot easier that way.”
Goten and Trunks were lots of fun here - a fun, friendly sex scene, and I really liked it. It was cute how Goten had to tell a confused Trunks what to do.
“Tru-nks!” Goten whined rather loudly.
“Whaa-t!” Trunks whined in reply.
Great dialog - made me chuckle.
I\'m glad this chapter started pointing things in a more yaoi-ly direction. And I just know Goku had to go take care of a \'little problem\' when he left Vegeta.
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April 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
GAH! Finally it let me review! I kept trying to review well... today i did and it wouldn\'t let me for some odd reason -_- and now. Here\'s my review:
I love it! It\'s very original and *grins* you did write the yaoi lemon scenes very well! Congrats!
You\'re writing is excellent!
I love the word usage and i love the characters names (the ones you made up)
It\'s a very good fic and i\'m sure no one minds it being long. (at least i don\'t)
Very rad fic and i hope you update soon... took me awhile to get around to reading this... sorry bout that- But here i am reading.. so... i think- and most likely my buddy Mechanical Butterfly- that you should update as soon as possible... ^ ^ great fic! Update soon!
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I love it! It\'s very original and *grins* you did write the yaoi lemon scenes very well! Congrats!
You\'re writing is excellent!
I love the word usage and i love the characters names (the ones you made up)
It\'s a very good fic and i\'m sure no one minds it being long. (at least i don\'t)
Very rad fic and i hope you update soon... took me awhile to get around to reading this... sorry bout that- But here i am reading.. so... i think- and most likely my buddy Mechanical Butterfly- that you should update as soon as possible... ^ ^ great fic! Update soon!
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