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July 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Sorry for the dubble post,
And your doing wicked girl, and ignore people who tell you what you should write next, I know LOTs of us are already agreeing that your stories are far better then most fanfics out there.
And your doing wicked girl, and ignore people who tell you what you should write next, I know LOTs of us are already agreeing that your stories are far better then most fanfics out there.
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July 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, chapter 42 was quite........ interesting. At least you\'re good at writing. And they aren\'t completely ugly. It\'s much easier to imagine beautiful people commiting incest than ugly, fat, 60 year old people.
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July 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, I have read thus far not reviewing once before this review for one good reason. I wanted to know where this was truly going. I\'m pretty sure I know where it is now, so I decided to review to you about your fanfic in general. Firstly, I would like to say that I\'ve seen good fanfics, bad fanfics and ones that about made me go into convulsions on how horribly disgusting they were. Yours is truly impressive. The words you use, the detail in the scene that presents itself is truly amazing. The overall story was well thought out, (whether you just thought it off the top of your head or if you actually took the time to sit down and slowly come up with an idea.) The information on the characters and the events that happened was accurate.
I would have to say that your main problem is your spelling. If you need someone to proofread your chapters, I would be happy to give it a shot. I am an excellent typist and I have very good grammer skills.
Once again, i would have to say that this story is both written well, and told well. (In fact, it\'s kind of hard to tell whether you wrote it, or Akira Toriyama wrote it. But we all know that can\'t be true.)
I would have to say that your main problem is your spelling. If you need someone to proofread your chapters, I would be happy to give it a shot. I am an excellent typist and I have very good grammer skills.
Once again, i would have to say that this story is both written well, and told well. (In fact, it\'s kind of hard to tell whether you wrote it, or Akira Toriyama wrote it. But we all know that can\'t be true.)
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July 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! I really, REALLY, want to hate your story but I can\'t! It\'s wrong for so many reasons but I love it! I\'m dying to see Bulma and Vegeta together again but the story is getting better and better. Please update soon!
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July 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very nicely done! Woot! If I were Bulma, I\'d so suck up whatever I felt and just go back to Vegeta... come on, how can you not love that pain and pleasure when its coming from him!!!! MEEEEEOOOOWWW! >D
On to the next chappy! Voot!
DA
On to the next chappy! Voot!
DA
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July 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ooooohhhh. I\'d so do him... >D LOL!!!!
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July 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
We all get a little crazy sometimes Bulma.... Thats wut Vegeta is for... Lol. Im jk. OOOH! You should have Vegeta like jack off while thinking of Bulma... wait... Your probably already done with this story.. heh.. nevermind that... MUST GO ON! VOOT!
DA
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July 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ooohhh. That would suck more than ever if it was one of the slave traders... eewwwwwww!!!!!! I hate Bulma to death, but because of this story, the way she is portrayed, I think I like her now. ONLY in this story though. *Smirks* Hehehe. Thanks.. I think.... 0.o;
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July 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oooh, that kinda makes you like her more. Woot, more sex with other characters... not like theres anything wrong with sex... its a very beautiful thing... *spaces out*
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July 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
EWWWW!!! Poor Bulma being forced to have Frieza\'s baby! Yuck. At least she doesnt have to sleep with him... I guess.... *cringes*