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omg omg omg!!!!! I just finished Slave (up to 41 of course) after three days of trying to sneak in reading time and IM SO EXCITED about what\'s going to happen next! GREAT GREAT JOB!!!

I\'ve never seen a fanfic so long but that\'s what makes it stand out. It\'s sexy, dramatic, interesting, and almost funny at times. Well to me anyway.

One thing though - I know things HAVE to be moved around sometimes for a fic to work, but the ages arent quite right for the chars.

Bulma was 16 when she met ten year old goku - yet around the time of Goku\'s birth vegeta was like eight or something so....I dunno im confused. Makes sense in the story though. But what happened to Bulma\'s parents? I know that died protecting her - but how??? Oh the madness!!!

And I loved Bardock! I always have. Since the Bardock special came out he was just so hunky and cute!

Anyway enough of my ranting - thanks so much for sending this fic out into the internet world! Muah haa.

NICE!!!!!

THIS STORY IS GREAT!! TOTALLY I\'VE COULDN\'T GET OFF MY COMPUTER UNTIL IT WAS DONE.

This fic is quite well written, but there are a few things I don\'t like about it. Characters seem to develop in a light switch manner, suddenly gaining completely new facets to their personality, or changing their mind entirely. Some characters become focus points who have been previously undeveloped or not even there - I don\'t care about them. Then there\'s this numbing stagnance feeling I get where it seems like nothing will ever change, kind of like when you watch season 4 of Ranma. On the plus side it is very well written, the descriptions are excellent and the dialogue quite reasonable. The unpredictability of the fic does foster some interest at the end of every chapter since almost anything can happen in the next one. If you wanted my advice, I\'d say to stop trying to trick the reader so much, show that characters are completely motivated to do things before they do them. If every time a character does something it\'s unexpected, then the characters start to seem like random people - they loose their cohesion.

well great story great story but the chaps you been puttin up lately make me want to stop reading

I love this story!!! I can\'t wait to read the next chapter! Your a wonderfull and gifted writer!
Adios Black Waltz

I haven\'t finished the story yet, and it\'ll probably be a long while before I do (thats a lot of chapters!), and I just found it again after months and months of searching. And when I go out of my way to find a particular story, I hope that person KNOWS how good it is. Well, onto the real part of the review. I\'ve noticed a few gramatical and spelling errors here and there, but nothing overly serious. I\'ve enjoyed the story and its plot a great deal. Its very origanal, hardly any other stories like it, at least when considering Bulma and Vegeta. I like the idea of a slave falling in love with her master, and still hating him at the same time. It brings out a bit more realism. Most relationships are love/hate. I\'ve also enjoyed the lemons, which in themselves are some-what origanal. But on top of that, they are very well written. Over-all, from what I\'ve read, great, GREAT story. Keep up the good work ;)

Wow...that was one of the best fanfictions i have read in a while...good job and i cant wait for the next chapter^.^

I LOVE this story, it\'s soo well written, perfect spelling and grammar from what I can see. And this plot is just delicious. You have truly bought out my side for blood, bondage, and dangerous sex. *Licks lips* This story is truly a banquet for me to feast upon. I just wished more people would review for you, you have a truly awesome story.

Please, keep up the great work and update soon!

Dewa Mata
PrincessSweetSugar

P.S. I think your idea for splitting up this story into three parts is a perfect one.

this story is kinda sad but really good so far i\'m gonig to keep reading
i like how u spaced the sentences out cause when ther are all together it hurts my eyes so thank you