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The opening scenes were wonderful. After everything that Trunks had been through, his sense of apprehension as he returned to his time and the immediate tackle as he exited his craft, were climaxed beautifully with a soft kiss and a laugh. Pure relief was felt by this reader :-)

I love how Trunks\' memories of his, now fast becoming, alternate life, are fading and soon to be completely forgotten:

\"Felt memories mel awa away. Didn’t miss them as they left.\"

Beautifully expressed!

A very loving moment between Trunks and Goten, but ya gotta love Takashi:

“WHEN YOU ARE FINISHED BEING NAKED. MOM AND DAD WANT YOU BACK HOME!”

LOL! A perfect injection of humour :-)
“DAD“DAD SAID THAT IF HE HAS TO DRAG YOUR NAKED ASSES BACK HOME HE WILL!” Takashi yelled.\"

LOL! Definitely can hear Vegeta saying this :-)

Okay, now I\'m deeply worried...What\'s up with Gogeta?

\"Because Trunks was supposed to have saved Goku. Because Vegeta knew that Trunks had come back in time to save him. And Vegeta knew that he had failed.\"

Oh well done! I actually had no idea as to why Vegeta had turned on Trunks, I figured that maybe, Trunks tried to stop him and that was why, and then I thought maybe it was something as simple as the fact that Trunks wasn\'t Goku\'s boy and Vegeta was a total nutter at this stage...The actual reason just never occurred to me - I could kick myself. :-)

Still a little worried about Vegeta, still looks like everything is not completely 100% with him.

“Anyway. I think we should go back and make sure the android was really dead. I mean, we probably crushed him… But…”

\"Vegeta wasn’t really listening. He wanted to see his children.\"

Yeah, all does not seem well. I know Vegeta loves his kids, but to overlook a chance to go back to the android and make sure that it is dead, and all this due to a strong need ee hee his kids, tells me that Vegeta senses that something is not right. Intriguing and worrying. However; the following conversation seems to null this impression:

“He’ll be fine,” Kakarot repeated,
“I know,” Vegeta replied.

I like how you write, you constantly have me thinking about scenes and wondering, and interpreting and re-interpreting and sometimes getting it all completely wrong :-)

And the terror begins...enter the terrible two. Well written teaser to the next chapter, the imagery was disturbinglyd.
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Looking forward to the next chapter :-)

Blood. Guts. Destruction. Me. Like. Hmm.

I\'m glad you wearing your crown. I was afraid that it was a little too flash to pull off of everyday.

Poor Gogeta. I am so sad. Is there anyway to save him?

O.O; Poor Bardock.......*sniffs*I really likedockdock....Continue!

Oi, you best not have Gogeta die of grief. The brood needs to stay intact. So saiyan Bardock and Bulla never going to leave the fight. I hope Vegeta pulls the android apart joint by joint.

I absolutely love this story. I can\'t wait to geton the computer everyday to read the updates. I\'ve always liked the Vegeta and Goku pairing but you write it much better than the other stories I\'ve read from other people. Okay, that\'s enough praising you, don\'t want you to get too big of a head now do we. :)
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Ravenx

oh great more androids:) the point you had before (about the super saiyans only every so often) was very intresting, i didnt know that..very cool. anyway please please please dont let gogeta die! or any of the little ones die..their too cute. but anyway i\'m rambling so i hope you get more chapters up soon or i\'m gonna have to ramble some more! :)

GOGETA????WHAT HAPPENS TO GOGETA?????/O.O;Sorry sorry.....Nice chapter last time.Not bad this time either./continue

Great chapter as usually. I on the otherhand still have writer\'s block. It sucks so much ass.

Anyway, I am a tad worried about little Gogeta. I guess that was the point though wasn\'t it. I am glad that Trunks is back to an acceptable future (that putting it mildly).

Oh and You are now crowned Ruler of Spinoffs. I can\'t wait to read your new one. :)

Tfic fic is shaping out to be as good as the first.
Be funny if they did get another 4 kids, though.
Wonderful chapter! Your place in heaven will always be assured!

Late with the reviews...I\'ve been sick and nowhere near my computer for over a day.
Now clutching it tight and snarling at family. MINE! :-)

The opening paragraphs documented Goku\'s thoughts extremely well, I knew it was coming, I prepared for it, but still it was emotional. Vegeta\'s reaction to his mate\'s death was as I would expect it to be, and not only because of the glimpses of mirai Trunks\' future, but because it was so Vegeta.

\"Vegeta moved closer, put one foot on his chest, over his heart, leaned down, grinned at the man. Felt his soul slipping away. Kakarot hadn hin his soul.\"

The grin was very chilling, although, the olicolic nature of his retribution was pure poetry.

\"Not caring at all, because asn’asn’t breaking. It wasn’t bleeding. It wasn’t gasping for its last breath like his mate had.
It wasn’t enough. More needed to die. Much more.\"

Well, now we get a glimpse of why Vegeta is the heartless monster of mirai Trunks\' time. His sense of reality seems to have been distorted by his grief, although I imagine it is more than just this, for him to turn on the demi-Saiyans as well as Bulma, tells me that there is worse to come.

Oh Gods! What happened to Bardock? He is a complete monster. And I\'m not sure that I even want to know what mirai Vegeta had done to mirai Bulwas was she too traumatised to speak or was she no longer able too?

This is a very compelling story. I\'m looking forward to further installments.

*Blushes deeply* Thank-you for your wonderful feedback to my review. It put a big grin on my face as well :-)