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December 22, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I like the story but the way it's written is wired I really took me 3 times to read these story can u rewrite them. They are good but the way they are written are little hard to understand
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October 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Alright, now for my review. Seeing as the last thing you updated was back in 2005 I'm assuming you don't write or don't visit the site much nowadays. But I'm trying again anyways. One can always hope.
I like your stories. I like them a lot. And I've only read Hormone Therapy, Cross-Eyed and this one so far. The problem is (like I said in other reviews, and on your LJ where I stalked you shamelessly even though you ignored it and will say it again) Something is missing.
From what I read from other reviewers, there are whole sentences that I did not see at all, and of course, nearly every damn chapter has a weird word like 'lokkololk' in it. This probably is uploading/updating/site changing problems right? Soooo.... maybe.... someday if you ever come back heeeere... could you like... fix your fictions so I could read them fully like other people did? It would mean a lot to me, since I'm your fan an all *looks down humbly*
I like your stories. I like them a lot. And I've only read Hormone Therapy, Cross-Eyed and this one so far. The problem is (like I said in other reviews, and on your LJ where I stalked you shamelessly even though you ignored it and will say it again) Something is missing.
From what I read from other reviewers, there are whole sentences that I did not see at all, and of course, nearly every damn chapter has a weird word like 'lokkololk' in it. This probably is uploading/updating/site changing problems right? Soooo.... maybe.... someday if you ever come back heeeere... could you like... fix your fictions so I could read them fully like other people did? It would mean a lot to me, since I'm your fan an all *looks down humbly*
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November 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yet another great one!! I really like the Twins...they\'ve got that THING that...I dunno, but They\'ve got that thing that makes them likeable....TOO LIKEABLE!!! I dunno, but they\'re really great characters...and since technically Vegeta(the twin) is a original character..i gotta give you props! keep it up!
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April 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*sobs* The end...
but a wonderful chappy!
that made his Dad angry but apparently feeling up your brother in front of a crowd of sick-minded freaks was one of them.--hehe I am on eof those sick minded freaks....and proud of it!
“But ‘Geta, I promised!” And “You can’t take away the sex!”---ahh poor Goku, I hope Vegeta doesn\'t take any sex away from him
The fight between Vegeta and Gina was very funny. Although I don\'t think she should be talking to Vegeta like that. *shakes fist at Gina*
“If not for my stupidity,” he said, “You wouldn’t be standing here.”--^.^ That\'s right!
He had barely survived his son’s insanity during puberty, he could not even bego imo imagine what the hell he would be like if he was pregnant. ---rofl Pregnant Goten would be hilarious.. cut cute
“Hey,” Vegeta (his mate) said, and smacked his oldest son, “I am not a woman.”--LoL suuuurrreeee j/k
“Not much,” Trunks said.--aww he never says much, but he does think alot. I\'m glad he agreed w/ Goten at the end o fth efic. ^.^
But you want to be disappointed, Trunks thought, you would want to feel something--that is so sad! I hope Goten get\'s to feel something.
Thanks for the wonderful fic! You are awesome!
^.*
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but a wonderful chappy!
that made his Dad angry but apparently feeling up your brother in front of a crowd of sick-minded freaks was one of them.--hehe I am on eof those sick minded freaks....and proud of it!
“But ‘Geta, I promised!” And “You can’t take away the sex!”---ahh poor Goku, I hope Vegeta doesn\'t take any sex away from him
The fight between Vegeta and Gina was very funny. Although I don\'t think she should be talking to Vegeta like that. *shakes fist at Gina*
“If not for my stupidity,” he said, “You wouldn’t be standing here.”--^.^ That\'s right!
He had barely survived his son’s insanity during puberty, he could not even bego imo imagine what the hell he would be like if he was pregnant. ---rofl Pregnant Goten would be hilarious.. cut cute
“Hey,” Vegeta (his mate) said, and smacked his oldest son, “I am not a woman.”--LoL suuuurrreeee j/k
“Not much,” Trunks said.--aww he never says much, but he does think alot. I\'m glad he agreed w/ Goten at the end o fth efic. ^.^
But you want to be disappointed, Trunks thought, you would want to feel something--that is so sad! I hope Goten get\'s to feel something.
Thanks for the wonderful fic! You are awesome!
^.*
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April 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Not one for tattling myself, but I have to admit that I loved Vegeta\'s revenge on Kane :-D
Loved Goten\'s stunned reaction as well :-)
Errr, actually thought that Gina was a bit rude to Vegeta and Goku. I understand her need to stand up for herself, all for it :-) But I really didn\'t likr atr attitude, it lackespecspect, and so far as I can see, neither Vegeta nor Goku have earned that. I also felt that she had no right interfering in the parents disapproval over Goten drinking the hormone therapy...if my son wanted to try out some weird arse stuff that was going to be life altering for him, and possibly have some serious backlash, then I\'d sure as hell do my damnedest to put a stop to it as well. This was actually none of her business. I found her to be a bit too pushy at this point, and her attitude to Vegeta and her pushing at Goku was way out of line. I\'m kinda disappointed in them for putting up with it. She was as good as telling them that they had no rights where their own son was concerned...pftt.
\"Trunks had some lingering, vain hope that someday they would be able to sleep in a different room.\"
Poor Trunks...I hope that he and Goten get a room to themselves as well, especially now that he\'s agreed to take the hormone therapy.
*Sigh* The end...oh well, I\'m thankful that there will be a sequel. I\'m actually looking forward to a pregnant Trunks :-)
\"That would be cool. Gathering up the Dragon balls and wishing Gina into a Saiyan.\"
Yeah, I think so. Otherwise poor Vegeta is going to watch her age and die well before him, and that would be tragic. I think that she would be more than happy to be Saiyan as well. :-)
\"So why was it good that she wanted kids soothatthat was she wanted explained.)\"
Ah, thanks for explaining, I missed that interpretation entirely for some reason :-)
\"Alright, I’ve got this theory about my Goten:...\"
Thanks for this! I actually see him a bit clearer now, and it all makes perfect sense, and it also explains why I have often seen elements of both Goku and Vegeta in the boy :-)
\"Lol. Goku would be like ‘what are you going to use the IT technique for?’ and Vegeta would say: ‘to get away from your horny ass’\"
ROTFL! Loved this!
\"...and then Goku would go all caveman and spend days reminding Vegeta why he shouldn’t want to get away…\"
Oh yum!
\"I love me Saiyans. Gk & Geta fan 100%.\"
Yeah, I\'m a Saiyan lover as well :-) But I originally started out as a het fan only, didn\'t really like the idea of Vegeta with another guy and I loved his canon coupling. Anyway, it was a yaoi fic called \"Chains of Affection\" by \'Syldana\' which changed my whole outlook on yaoi. Ironically it was a V/G and I absolutely loved it and went in search of other V/G couple stories, and in the process discovered G/V and found (after an initial reaction of: \'Vegeta uke? Not sure about this.\') that I actually loved it better this way :-)
Hope your first day at work went well :-)
Loved Goten\'s stunned reaction as well :-)
Errr, actually thought that Gina was a bit rude to Vegeta and Goku. I understand her need to stand up for herself, all for it :-) But I really didn\'t likr atr attitude, it lackespecspect, and so far as I can see, neither Vegeta nor Goku have earned that. I also felt that she had no right interfering in the parents disapproval over Goten drinking the hormone therapy...if my son wanted to try out some weird arse stuff that was going to be life altering for him, and possibly have some serious backlash, then I\'d sure as hell do my damnedest to put a stop to it as well. This was actually none of her business. I found her to be a bit too pushy at this point, and her attitude to Vegeta and her pushing at Goku was way out of line. I\'m kinda disappointed in them for putting up with it. She was as good as telling them that they had no rights where their own son was concerned...pftt.
\"Trunks had some lingering, vain hope that someday they would be able to sleep in a different room.\"
Poor Trunks...I hope that he and Goten get a room to themselves as well, especially now that he\'s agreed to take the hormone therapy.
*Sigh* The end...oh well, I\'m thankful that there will be a sequel. I\'m actually looking forward to a pregnant Trunks :-)
\"That would be cool. Gathering up the Dragon balls and wishing Gina into a Saiyan.\"
Yeah, I think so. Otherwise poor Vegeta is going to watch her age and die well before him, and that would be tragic. I think that she would be more than happy to be Saiyan as well. :-)
\"So why was it good that she wanted kids soothatthat was she wanted explained.)\"
Ah, thanks for explaining, I missed that interpretation entirely for some reason :-)
\"Alright, I’ve got this theory about my Goten:...\"
Thanks for this! I actually see him a bit clearer now, and it all makes perfect sense, and it also explains why I have often seen elements of both Goku and Vegeta in the boy :-)
\"Lol. Goku would be like ‘what are you going to use the IT technique for?’ and Vegeta would say: ‘to get away from your horny ass’\"
ROTFL! Loved this!
\"...and then Goku would go all caveman and spend days reminding Vegeta why he shouldn’t want to get away…\"
Oh yum!
\"I love me Saiyans. Gk & Geta fan 100%.\"
Yeah, I\'m a Saiyan lover as well :-) But I originally started out as a het fan only, didn\'t really like the idea of Vegeta with another guy and I loved his canon coupling. Anyway, it was a yaoi fic called \"Chains of Affection\" by \'Syldana\' which changed my whole outlook on yaoi. Ironically it was a V/G and I absolutely loved it and went in search of other V/G couple stories, and in the process discovered G/V and found (after an initial reaction of: \'Vegeta uke? Not sure about this.\') that I actually loved it better this way :-)
Hope your first day at work went well :-)
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April 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
W00T!!! It\'s raining lemons!!!!!!!!!!!!!!*thumbs up*
*dances*
His maeemeeemed prettyn han happy with his fucky-go-lucky lifestyle.--rofl, never heard a lifestyle desscribed in such a way, but it\'s very funny!
Wanted to scream and pant and beg. Didn’t, but he wanted to.--awww LoL that\'s cute.
“Hurry up,” Vegeta said--hehe that is so mean!
Gk: That was not a good lemon. Vegeta got all the good parts and I have to ‘hurry up’ what kind of bullshit is that?!---aww poor Goku, I feel sorry for him! He should talk all the time he wants. ^.^
Anway that was a great chpa filled with some wonderful lemons that I enjoyed. ^.~
And Bardock is such a cutie the way he blew bubbles and whatnot at Trunks and only 3 months old! Why can\'t we all have saiyajin babies????
Man if everyone has babies in this fic there will be a lot of lil babies running around.
What does Goku know about lil Geta!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WHAT!?!?!? I needs ta know! Darn that Goku from keeping secrets from his sexy Ouji.
*dances*
His maeemeeemed prettyn han happy with his fucky-go-lucky lifestyle.--rofl, never heard a lifestyle desscribed in such a way, but it\'s very funny!
Wanted to scream and pant and beg. Didn’t, but he wanted to.--awww LoL that\'s cute.
“Hurry up,” Vegeta said--hehe that is so mean!
Gk: That was not a good lemon. Vegeta got all the good parts and I have to ‘hurry up’ what kind of bullshit is that?!---aww poor Goku, I feel sorry for him! He should talk all the time he wants. ^.^
Anway that was a great chpa filled with some wonderful lemons that I enjoyed. ^.~
And Bardock is such a cutie the way he blew bubbles and whatnot at Trunks and only 3 months old! Why can\'t we all have saiyajin babies????
Man if everyone has babies in this fic there will be a lot of lil babies running around.
What does Goku know about lil Geta!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WHAT!?!?!? I needs ta know! Darn that Goku from keeping secrets from his sexy Ouji.
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April 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
That\'s the end huh...good...now on with the pregnant Trunks...and seeing Gina pregnant should be funno. o.
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April 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You absolutly HAVE to do a sequel now!!!! Or i\'ll cry :(
Think of the possibilities - Bardock growing up (think of the trouble) Vegeta and Gina as parents, Goten and Trunks as parents. And then theres Goku and Vegeta - well we all know what we like them getting up to don\'t we!Everybody cheer for a SEQUEL, SEQUEL!!!
Think of the possibilities - Bardock growing up (think of the trouble) Vegeta and Gina as parents, Goten and Trunks as parents. And then theres Goku and Vegeta - well we all know what we like them getting up to don\'t we!Everybody cheer for a SEQUEL, SEQUEL!!!
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April 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I\'m glad that Gina is feeling at home amongst the Saiyans...Vegeta should gather up the dragonballs and give her the lifespan of a Saiyan :-)
\"...because she babysat Bardock a lot-which made Goku really really happy and the grown up Vegeta was starting to give her a glare as if to say ‘are you trying to kill me?’\"
LOL! love this! More sex for Goku with his gorgeous panting and writhing Prince...Yum
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\"She would have ndednded he explain that comment,...\"
Okay, a little lost here...I figured that maybe I missed something in the skimming, so I went back and read it very carefully and I\'m still none the wiser as to what she meant by this...is it meantbe mbe mysterious or has something completely shot over my head? :-)
“Dad took Mom to their ‘special’ place so they could have sex without scarring poor ‘Geta anymore.”
(chuckle) I love that they have a special place...regardless of the reason why :-)
“Dad likes to scream Mom’s name. Makes ‘Geta get all twitchy.”
Oh yeah! These two are so hot together. Although, I\'m sure that \'Geta would rather that they weren\'t...LOL!
\"His mate seemed pretty damn happy with his fucky-go-lucky lifestyle.\"
LOL! Wonderful description of Goten\'s attitude :-D (Lookies... I just discovered the \'D\' button)
\"...But Goten saw everything, understood everything and didn’t feel it.\"
Agree with Trunks\' assessment of Vegeta, but not 100% sure that I fully understood what Trunks was thinking in regards to Goten...was it about his ability to care as a parent? Goten feels a lot more than he lets on...He\'s totally protective of Trunks...I actually can Got Goten being a somewhat overprotective father...especially if he has a daughter :-)
Oh God! Another hot lemon! It\'s totally impossible to pick the best of the best...everything was smouldering. But yes, Vegeta is definitely one lucky Saiyan...Goku really knows how to please the man :-)
And oh god...your descrition of Vegeta\'s responses...Goku is equally lucky to have such an incredibly responsive and sultry mate...these two are hot! :-)
\"Was slightly suspicious that something was about to be revealed he didn’t necessarily want to hear, because Kakarot was being pretty damn nice.\"
LOL! I love the idea that Goku was being extra attee toe to help soften Vegeta up for whatever it is he thinks Vegeta needs softening up for...I love manipulative Goku and suspicious Vegeta :-D
Oh...deeply loved the methods that Vegeta used when he questioned Goku, equally loved it when Goku decided that enough was enough and pushed Vegeta down on him...can never get enough of these two :-)
\"He really needed to learn that damn IT thing.)\"
I don\'t think there\'s a hope in hell of Goku teaching him it, if he\'s likely to use it in this way :-D
\"“Hurry up,” Vegeta said.\"
Way to kill the mood Vegeta...LOL!
Looking forward to the next chapter :-)
Loved the end dialogue...especially loved this:
\"Gk: That was not a good lemon. Vegeta got all the good parts and I have to ‘hurry up’ what kind of bullshi tha that?!\"
ROTFL! I\'m with you Goku...more sex...more moany writhy Vegeta! Equal rights for seme\'s! :-)
\"...because she babysat Bardock a lot-which made Goku really really happy and the grown up Vegeta was starting to give her a glare as if to say ‘are you trying to kill me?’\"
LOL! love this! More sex for Goku with his gorgeous panting and writhing Prince...Yum
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\"She would have ndednded he explain that comment,...\"
Okay, a little lost here...I figured that maybe I missed something in the skimming, so I went back and read it very carefully and I\'m still none the wiser as to what she meant by this...is it meantbe mbe mysterious or has something completely shot over my head? :-)
“Dad took Mom to their ‘special’ place so they could have sex without scarring poor ‘Geta anymore.”
(chuckle) I love that they have a special place...regardless of the reason why :-)
“Dad likes to scream Mom’s name. Makes ‘Geta get all twitchy.”
Oh yeah! These two are so hot together. Although, I\'m sure that \'Geta would rather that they weren\'t...LOL!
\"His mate seemed pretty damn happy with his fucky-go-lucky lifestyle.\"
LOL! Wonderful description of Goten\'s attitude :-D (Lookies... I just discovered the \'D\' button)
\"...But Goten saw everything, understood everything and didn’t feel it.\"
Agree with Trunks\' assessment of Vegeta, but not 100% sure that I fully understood what Trunks was thinking in regards to Goten...was it about his ability to care as a parent? Goten feels a lot more than he lets on...He\'s totally protective of Trunks...I actually can Got Goten being a somewhat overprotective father...especially if he has a daughter :-)
Oh God! Another hot lemon! It\'s totally impossible to pick the best of the best...everything was smouldering. But yes, Vegeta is definitely one lucky Saiyan...Goku really knows how to please the man :-)
And oh god...your descrition of Vegeta\'s responses...Goku is equally lucky to have such an incredibly responsive and sultry mate...these two are hot! :-)
\"Was slightly suspicious that something was about to be revealed he didn’t necessarily want to hear, because Kakarot was being pretty damn nice.\"
LOL! I love the idea that Goku was being extra attee toe to help soften Vegeta up for whatever it is he thinks Vegeta needs softening up for...I love manipulative Goku and suspicious Vegeta :-D
Oh...deeply loved the methods that Vegeta used when he questioned Goku, equally loved it when Goku decided that enough was enough and pushed Vegeta down on him...can never get enough of these two :-)
\"He really needed to learn that damn IT thing.)\"
I don\'t think there\'s a hope in hell of Goku teaching him it, if he\'s likely to use it in this way :-D
\"“Hurry up,” Vegeta said.\"
Way to kill the mood Vegeta...LOL!
Looking forward to the next chapter :-)
Loved the end dialogue...especially loved this:
\"Gk: That was not a good lemon. Vegeta got all the good parts and I have to ‘hurry up’ what kind of bullshi tha that?!\"
ROTFL! I\'m with you Goku...more sex...more moany writhy Vegeta! Equal rights for seme\'s! :-)
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April 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wasn\'t sure how long my review was going to turn out, so I thought I\'d respond to your responses, separately.
\"(of course those folks that don’t want one probably won’t review and say ‘hell no’ or anything.)\"
ROTFL! I loved this part of your response to Emma.
In your response to me:
\"...(for me anywho, other folks might be blinking and wondering why you shared~...\"
LOL! Loved the way you put this :-D
\"...Otherwise it’s like watching an infomercial or something. You’re like ‘okay, could you hurry up and finish already?’\"
LOL! Totally agree...definitely need that connection...definitely have to believe in the partnering as well...it\'s why I can\'t buy into Vegeta pairings with a non-Saiyan (with the exception of Bulma)... err, watch me contradict myself now...there is one exception to mye ofe of Saiyan/Saiyan pairings...but it\'s got to be approached well for me to accept it - and that\'s Vegeta and Yamcha...I read a story once and it was very and and I adjusted my view on that particular pairing...but yeah, still picky on it though...don\'t think I could actually write one.
\"...So have no worries that a sequel wouldn’t involve everyone.\"
Excellent! Glad that the whole family will be there...and okay let\'s be honest...deeply glad that Vegeta and Goku will be there :-)
Just noticed the bit at the bottom mentioning your new job. Congratulations, hope it goes well. :-)
\"(of course those folks that don’t want one probably won’t review and say ‘hell no’ or anything.)\"
ROTFL! I loved this part of your response to Emma.
In your response to me:
\"...(for me anywho, other folks might be blinking and wondering why you shared~...\"
LOL! Loved the way you put this :-D
\"...Otherwise it’s like watching an infomercial or something. You’re like ‘okay, could you hurry up and finish already?’\"
LOL! Totally agree...definitely need that connection...definitely have to believe in the partnering as well...it\'s why I can\'t buy into Vegeta pairings with a non-Saiyan (with the exception of Bulma)... err, watch me contradict myself now...there is one exception to mye ofe of Saiyan/Saiyan pairings...but it\'s got to be approached well for me to accept it - and that\'s Vegeta and Yamcha...I read a story once and it was very and and I adjusted my view on that particular pairing...but yeah, still picky on it though...don\'t think I could actually write one.
\"...So have no worries that a sequel wouldn’t involve everyone.\"
Excellent! Glad that the whole family will be there...and okay let\'s be honest...deeply glad that Vegeta and Goku will be there :-)
Just noticed the bit at the bottom mentioning your new job. Congratulations, hope it goes well. :-)