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April 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh I forgot to say of course a sequel!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I would love to see Goten and Trunks have a family....^.^
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April 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Kane is even a bigger fool than he first appeared. He should have dropped the lawsuit :-)
\"and she flipped her long dark hair (one of Vegeta’s favorite things about her)\"
Must work different for fellers...one of my friends once told me that she hated that thing about me and I wasn\'t even aware that I was doing it.
\"Besides, if he had let Goten and Trunks do the PA, they would be having sex for real and there would bly tly the demi’s screams because his brother didn’t make a fucking sound during sex.\"
LOL!
Not fully understanding what was up with Vegeta. Why did he start laying into Goten once they IT\'d it away from the store?
\"That was when the parents descended.\"
LOL! Love the way this is worded :-)
“It’s okay,” is what he said, “It’s just left over shit from being gone for so long.”
Okay...Is this the reason? If so, I still don\'t get why he laid into Goten...or is this the way they are? Making each other available so as to take their shit out on the other, thereby avoiding taking it out elsewhere?
\"These people were fucking bizarre, Trunks thought.\"
LOL! Love Trunks in this :-)
An enjoyable chapter. Looking forward to the next :-)
About the guy in high school...that\'s pretty healthy for a teenager and kind of funny...I love that you used this for young Vegeta and I loved Gina\'s inner thoughts :-) It\'s the ones that go beyond that, that need a huge arse kicking...I got grabbed in a stairwell once and it shook me more than I thought it would, mainly because afterwards it occurred to me that this person must have been following me for a while (as no one was near the stairwell area) and I was oblivious to this fact. I now pay much more attention to my surroundings.
\"And of course Gina & (big) ‘Geta’s fight will be funny.\"
Good :-) Bring it on :-)
\"and she flipped her long dark hair (one of Vegeta’s favorite things about her)\"
Must work different for fellers...one of my friends once told me that she hated that thing about me and I wasn\'t even aware that I was doing it.
\"Besides, if he had let Goten and Trunks do the PA, they would be having sex for real and there would bly tly the demi’s screams because his brother didn’t make a fucking sound during sex.\"
LOL!
Not fully understanding what was up with Vegeta. Why did he start laying into Goten once they IT\'d it away from the store?
\"That was when the parents descended.\"
LOL! Love the way this is worded :-)
“It’s okay,” is what he said, “It’s just left over shit from being gone for so long.”
Okay...Is this the reason? If so, I still don\'t get why he laid into Goten...or is this the way they are? Making each other available so as to take their shit out on the other, thereby avoiding taking it out elsewhere?
\"These people were fucking bizarre, Trunks thought.\"
LOL! Love Trunks in this :-)
An enjoyable chapter. Looking forward to the next :-)
About the guy in high school...that\'s pretty healthy for a teenager and kind of funny...I love that you used this for young Vegeta and I loved Gina\'s inner thoughts :-) It\'s the ones that go beyond that, that need a huge arse kicking...I got grabbed in a stairwell once and it shook me more than I thought it would, mainly because afterwards it occurred to me that this person must have been following me for a while (as no one was near the stairwell area) and I was oblivious to this fact. I now pay much more attention to my surroundings.
\"And of course Gina & (big) ‘Geta’s fight will be funny.\"
Good :-) Bring it on :-)
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April 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
That by far was probably the most interesting way to lose one\'s virginity that I have ever read in fan fiction. You should be proud. Of course Goten\'s first time w be be filled with pure unadulterated perversion. I love that guy. Trunks is damned lucky as is Goku cause he gets ang ang the Prince. *Sigh* Now if lil\' Vegeta doesn\'t spill it about the a game of Truth or Dare I will be sorely disappointed.
Oh and I got the idea for Kalika\'s shirt from this dude in my Journalism Ethics class. It\'s like his favorite shirt. He wears it all the time. I thought it was pretty cool myself. I would have never come up with it on my own either. I probably should have pretended I did though...be all creative and stuff...oh well.
Oh and I got the idea for Kalika\'s shirt from this dude in my Journalism Ethics class. It\'s like his favorite shirt. He wears it all the time. I thought it was pretty cool myself. I would have never come up with it on my own either. I probably should have pretended I did though...be all creative and stuff...oh well.
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April 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
VERY GOOD!! I wonder what would happen if Trunks tail grew back. Also it seems Goten\'s tail is being neglected during \"play time.\"
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April 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Deeply loved the opening to this chapter. Mental picture of Vegeta and Goku sitting on the couch watching T.V. Baby Bardock sat on Goku\'s lap as Goku rubbed his little back...so amazingly cosy :-)
Loved Vegeta\'s thoughts as he watched the news, and loved Goku\'s \'mumbling about 30yr old assholes\' :-)
\"Felt as if a part of them had been taken away from him and did not likeat aat all.\"
Oh, I love it when Vegeta gets all maternal. Really loved it when he reached out to feel where his sons where...so touching.
“Solving the problem,” Vegeta replied. “Demi, get over here.”
Love that Vegeta still calls Trunks, \'Demi\' (chuckle)
\"Trunks gave Vegeta a sour look,\"
...and love that Trunks is still not a fan of Vegeta. LOL!
“Well, that chore’s done.”
LOL! Chore? Little bass grs griping and there\'s no actual sweat involved in their \'punishment\' LOL! Wonder if Vegeta and Goku realise this? :-)
“I didn’t have ‘escapades’ Goten. I just had sex.”
LOL!
“Its funny because you had no fucking clue what you were doing. You left out that part of the story.”
(chuckle) Not surprising, can\'t see Goten willingly admitting to being a \'true novice\' in the field of sexual activities :-) At least Trunks now has ammunition everytime that Goten calls him a virgin :-)
\"Vegeta could have heard his own child crying if he was in a maze of screaming babies,\"
Oh man, I love this! :-)
\"Kissed him until he was sure that Vegeta was still his, still the same, wondered where this feeling of distorted reality came from.\"
Ah, Goku is also missing his boys...I guess it\'s even harder for them because moments before they had two rowdy teenagers living at home, driving them crazy, and in the blink of an eye they\'re faced with two rowdy adults who are ready to leave the nest, yet still managing to drive them crazy :-)
...I\'m glad they have Baby Bardock and each other.
\"Tasted himself because he and Vegeta were just like the same person.\"
Loved this! Beautiful description of the couple :-)
\"Soft and hard, tinged with a sort of sadness when they realized that their twins were not babies anymore. Had flown the coop and left them without them even realizing it.\"
Damn...Iso cso close to tears here :-(
\"Let that take him away, rip away the melancholy thoughts and remind him of what he had right here, of this sweat-slicked beauty that was all muscle and shadows, with dark eyes and dark hair and heat.\"
Really loveis mis moment in a somewhat wistful coupling between our two favourite Saiyas ths they offered comfort to one another
\"Goku: I think I should have more exciting sex.\"
\"Vegeta: Oi.\"
LOL! Hey, you\'re with VegeGokuGoku...that\'s exciting enough by itself :-)
\"Goten just realized his brother was pissed and immediately took action to divert that anger at himself rather than Trunks.\"
Oh, that\'s so completely loving and protective...I love this! Thanks for explaining :-)
\"Yeah, we (me and my friends) used to tease the guy about his boob-watching thing. He was pretty nice.\"
LOL! Poor guy :-)
Loved Vegeta\'s thoughts as he watched the news, and loved Goku\'s \'mumbling about 30yr old assholes\' :-)
\"Felt as if a part of them had been taken away from him and did not likeat aat all.\"
Oh, I love it when Vegeta gets all maternal. Really loved it when he reached out to feel where his sons where...so touching.
“Solving the problem,” Vegeta replied. “Demi, get over here.”
Love that Vegeta still calls Trunks, \'Demi\' (chuckle)
\"Trunks gave Vegeta a sour look,\"
...and love that Trunks is still not a fan of Vegeta. LOL!
“Well, that chore’s done.”
LOL! Chore? Little bass grs griping and there\'s no actual sweat involved in their \'punishment\' LOL! Wonder if Vegeta and Goku realise this? :-)
“I didn’t have ‘escapades’ Goten. I just had sex.”
LOL!
“Its funny because you had no fucking clue what you were doing. You left out that part of the story.”
(chuckle) Not surprising, can\'t see Goten willingly admitting to being a \'true novice\' in the field of sexual activities :-) At least Trunks now has ammunition everytime that Goten calls him a virgin :-)
\"Vegeta could have heard his own child crying if he was in a maze of screaming babies,\"
Oh man, I love this! :-)
\"Kissed him until he was sure that Vegeta was still his, still the same, wondered where this feeling of distorted reality came from.\"
Ah, Goku is also missing his boys...I guess it\'s even harder for them because moments before they had two rowdy teenagers living at home, driving them crazy, and in the blink of an eye they\'re faced with two rowdy adults who are ready to leave the nest, yet still managing to drive them crazy :-)
...I\'m glad they have Baby Bardock and each other.
\"Tasted himself because he and Vegeta were just like the same person.\"
Loved this! Beautiful description of the couple :-)
\"Soft and hard, tinged with a sort of sadness when they realized that their twins were not babies anymore. Had flown the coop and left them without them even realizing it.\"
Damn...Iso cso close to tears here :-(
\"Let that take him away, rip away the melancholy thoughts and remind him of what he had right here, of this sweat-slicked beauty that was all muscle and shadows, with dark eyes and dark hair and heat.\"
Really loveis mis moment in a somewhat wistful coupling between our two favourite Saiyas ths they offered comfort to one another
\"Goku: I think I should have more exciting sex.\"
\"Vegeta: Oi.\"
LOL! Hey, you\'re with VegeGokuGoku...that\'s exciting enough by itself :-)
\"Goten just realized his brother was pissed and immediately took action to divert that anger at himself rather than Trunks.\"
Oh, that\'s so completely loving and protective...I love this! Thanks for explaining :-)
\"Yeah, we (me and my friends) used to tease the guy about his boob-watching thing. He was pretty nice.\"
LOL! Poor guy :-)
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March 31, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Lovely chapter!!!!
AHHH!!! -_- my internet keeps disconnecting it is really begining to piss me off....I have tried toreview this story 5 times now!!!! I have no idea what is wrong with it! My comp hates me...
Anyway...
I loved how Gina just went with the flow and took off her shirt too! hehe how fun would that be to hang out with those 3 guys...lucky girl!
“Virgin?” Trunks asked as he looked at the shirt he had been handed, shook his head but didn’t dispute it.--haha *falls on floor laughing* I soooo lovhat!hat! Trunks is soooo adorable in this fic and I love how he is always blushing, and out of the 4 of them I think the virgin shirt suits him best.
All that stood between them and Goten’s plan was the pimply nerd that was guarding the precious mike with his perverted little life. --LoL gross, but funny
Revealed the nerd within--rofl sounds like a book or movie, I totally loved that line!
“Bastard,” Vegeta snapped. Slammed the door. Grabbed Gina and kissed her.--aww possessive and cute. I love Vegeta...but then again I love all the charecters in this ficcie...well except for Mr. Kane I hate him and he dese eve everything he gets!!!!
Goten turned to look at him. And then started skipping, singing at the top of his lungs about sugar pops and lollipops.---OMG!!! *can\'t breathe* GAH!!! That is soooo freaking hilarious, when I read that I had to yell for my brother and b/f to come over here and they both laughed w/ me ahhh...that was a great laugh!
(which he had had sex with her and she had never said a single one of those things.)--aww well he should have a little talk with her about that.
“You want to fight?!” he yelled. Raised his hand, gathered up power.--Mother Vegeta don\'t hurt him too much...The Ouji is so sexy!!!!
I love this ficcie and I love Goten, Trunks, Gina, and Vegeta, it is such a delight to read about them. And yeah Gina kinda reminds me of one of the saiyajins also! It\'s aery ery RAD!
I have many friends who think homosexuality is bad, and I\'m just like blah to them. I don\'t even want to discuss it, the conversation will turn too ugly. I was once watching Will & Grace and my friend (Nicole) came over and she was like how can you watch this?!?!? I was like *shrugs* I dunno, open my eyes, stare at the t.v., listen to the words that are coming out of their mouths....yeah that\'s how. She was just mad...hehe oh well.
As I write this my interenet is disconnecting and connecting over and over very fastly....although I can still continue to type it is highly annoying and I will have to restart my computer...*shakes fist at internet* Why I told you I have no idea....I just had to vent my anger.
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AHHH!!! -_- my internet keeps disconnecting it is really begining to piss me off....I have tried toreview this story 5 times now!!!! I have no idea what is wrong with it! My comp hates me...
Anyway...
I loved how Gina just went with the flow and took off her shirt too! hehe how fun would that be to hang out with those 3 guys...lucky girl!
“Virgin?” Trunks asked as he looked at the shirt he had been handed, shook his head but didn’t dispute it.--haha *falls on floor laughing* I soooo lovhat!hat! Trunks is soooo adorable in this fic and I love how he is always blushing, and out of the 4 of them I think the virgin shirt suits him best.
All that stood between them and Goten’s plan was the pimply nerd that was guarding the precious mike with his perverted little life. --LoL gross, but funny
Revealed the nerd within--rofl sounds like a book or movie, I totally loved that line!
“Bastard,” Vegeta snapped. Slammed the door. Grabbed Gina and kissed her.--aww possessive and cute. I love Vegeta...but then again I love all the charecters in this ficcie...well except for Mr. Kane I hate him and he dese eve everything he gets!!!!
Goten turned to look at him. And then started skipping, singing at the top of his lungs about sugar pops and lollipops.---OMG!!! *can\'t breathe* GAH!!! That is soooo freaking hilarious, when I read that I had to yell for my brother and b/f to come over here and they both laughed w/ me ahhh...that was a great laugh!
(which he had had sex with her and she had never said a single one of those things.)--aww well he should have a little talk with her about that.
“You want to fight?!” he yelled. Raised his hand, gathered up power.--Mother Vegeta don\'t hurt him too much...The Ouji is so sexy!!!!
I love this ficcie and I love Goten, Trunks, Gina, and Vegeta, it is such a delight to read about them. And yeah Gina kinda reminds me of one of the saiyajins also! It\'s aery ery RAD!
I have many friends who think homosexuality is bad, and I\'m just like blah to them. I don\'t even want to discuss it, the conversation will turn too ugly. I was once watching Will & Grace and my friend (Nicole) came over and she was like how can you watch this?!?!? I was like *shrugs* I dunno, open my eyes, stare at the t.v., listen to the words that are coming out of their mouths....yeah that\'s how. She was just mad...hehe oh well.
As I write this my interenet is disconnecting and connecting over and over very fastly....although I can still continue to type it is highly annoying and I will have to restart my computer...*shakes fist at internet* Why I told you I have no idea....I just had to vent my anger.
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March 31, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Reviewing - Funny Interlude:
Loved this!
“Hello,” she snapped, “Eyes up here.”
\"“I know that,” was what he said, didn’t move his eyes back up to where they belonged.\"
LOL! Only cute guys within a similar age group could get away with this...no wonder she fell for him...had to love the unabashed response :-)
\"“Look,” he said. Pointed around the room at the various folks that were turning colors.\"
LOL! Okay what did they put in the drinks? Love those twins :-)
“Oh,” he added, “And my Mother is a man.”
LOL! Loved the way he just tacked this on as an afterthought, which I guess for him, it would be...but still, funny...\'by the way, mum\'s a guy\' :-)
\"She shrugged. “Who cares if your mom’s a dude? If he found a way to pop out a kid, then that’s his choice. And I like the tail.”\"
LOL! Real laid-back, no wonder she fits in so nicely with the Saiyans. :-)
Really enjoyed the look back at Vegeta and Gina\'s first meeting. Gina reacted to everything a whole lot different to how I imagined her first responses would be, but I must admit, her reactions fit her personality very well :-)
Loved this!
“Hello,” she snapped, “Eyes up here.”
\"“I know that,” was what he said, didn’t move his eyes back up to where they belonged.\"
LOL! Only cute guys within a similar age group could get away with this...no wonder she fell for him...had to love the unabashed response :-)
\"“Look,” he said. Pointed around the room at the various folks that were turning colors.\"
LOL! Okay what did they put in the drinks? Love those twins :-)
“Oh,” he added, “And my Mother is a man.”
LOL! Loved the way he just tacked this on as an afterthought, which I guess for him, it would be...but still, funny...\'by the way, mum\'s a guy\' :-)
\"She shrugged. “Who cares if your mom’s a dude? If he found a way to pop out a kid, then that’s his choice. And I like the tail.”\"
LOL! Real laid-back, no wonder she fits in so nicely with the Saiyans. :-)
Really enjoyed the look back at Vegeta and Gina\'s first meeting. Gina reacted to everything a whole lot different to how I imagined her first responses would be, but I must admit, her reactions fit her personality very well :-)
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March 31, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Loved the whole kitchen scene. Vegeta\'s reaction to Gina\'s trip down memory lane was great as seen from Trunks\' POV
\"“Fourteen?” Vegeta (the adult one that looked like he was about to rip out his oldest’s spleen and drown said son in the fluid) said.\" LOL!
Loved how Trunks was feeling uncomfortable about the whole thing. Being new to this family, and even newer to the laid-back atti of of the twins (and Gina) :-), this reaction was very understandable :-)
\"Gina was grinning, and Vegeta (the mother) had gone from glaring twin 1 to twin 2 while Goku had stopped eating and was looking bacd fod forth between his twin sons.\"
LOL! No wonder ta ota only wanted the one kid this time :-)
\"“The thirty-something guy,” Goku added (was much less than pleased about this turn of events.)\"
I see that Goku is still pissed off over that...and rightly so. :-)
\"Thus, he handed his youngest, cutest, nicest, ‘I don’t show off that I’m getting all the sex I want and you aren’t getting any’ son off to the obstinate jerk ones...\"
LOL! Ooooh, Goku gets a little touchy when he\'s not getting any...LOL! Love this guy! :-)
“Something wrong, Kakarot?”
\"As if after seventeen damn years, Vegeta did not know. He didn’t even dignify the question with an answer.\"
LOL! Loved this!
Really enjoyed the beginnings of the bedroom scene, Kakarot\'s eagerness is contagious :-)
“Vegeta,” he said, “You can move on, really.”
LOL! Not really one for foreplay, when he\'s missed a couple of weeks is he-)
-)
Wonderful lemon :-)
Love the interaction between the twins and their mates. Love how well Gina and Trunks are getting on :-)
Curious as to what the hell Goten\'s first time was like that he doesn\'t want to talk about it.
Enjoyed this very much and am looking forward to the next chapter :-)
\"Just wait until Gina and (big) Vegeta get in their first argument. ;)\"
I hope it\'s funny. I so want these two to get along. If it\'s funny, I can\'t wait :-)
\"“Fourteen?” Vegeta (the adult one that looked like he was about to rip out his oldest’s spleen and drown said son in the fluid) said.\" LOL!
Loved how Trunks was feeling uncomfortable about the whole thing. Being new to this family, and even newer to the laid-back atti of of the twins (and Gina) :-), this reaction was very understandable :-)
\"Gina was grinning, and Vegeta (the mother) had gone from glaring twin 1 to twin 2 while Goku had stopped eating and was looking bacd fod forth between his twin sons.\"
LOL! No wonder ta ota only wanted the one kid this time :-)
\"“The thirty-something guy,” Goku added (was much less than pleased about this turn of events.)\"
I see that Goku is still pissed off over that...and rightly so. :-)
\"Thus, he handed his youngest, cutest, nicest, ‘I don’t show off that I’m getting all the sex I want and you aren’t getting any’ son off to the obstinate jerk ones...\"
LOL! Ooooh, Goku gets a little touchy when he\'s not getting any...LOL! Love this guy! :-)
“Something wrong, Kakarot?”
\"As if after seventeen damn years, Vegeta did not know. He didn’t even dignify the question with an answer.\"
LOL! Loved this!
Really enjoyed the beginnings of the bedroom scene, Kakarot\'s eagerness is contagious :-)
“Vegeta,” he said, “You can move on, really.”
LOL! Not really one for foreplay, when he\'s missed a couple of weeks is he-)
-)
Wonderful lemon :-)
Love the interaction between the twins and their mates. Love how well Gina and Trunks are getting on :-)
Curious as to what the hell Goten\'s first time was like that he doesn\'t want to talk about it.
Enjoyed this very much and am looking forward to the next chapter :-)
\"Just wait until Gina and (big) Vegeta get in their first argument. ;)\"
I hope it\'s funny. I so want these two to get along. If it\'s funny, I can\'t wait :-)
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March 31, 2004 at 12:00 AM
The revenge was hilarious. And I loved the T-shirts. I\'ll have to be more creative with Kalika\'s next time. And thanks for reviewing. It was much apprieciated.
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March 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Funny Interlude...
Very funny!
(was wearing a white t-shirt himself, but didn’t seem like he was too concerned his endless muscles were showing.)---rofl, yeah I bet. I wouldn\'t mind looking though...
“Look,” is what he said, “My brother just said that I wouldn’t be able to come over here and kiss you.” ---LoL what?! right out of left field. That is so insane I loved that line.
“Anyway,” he said after a prolonged moment of staring, “I’m going to kiss you to shut my idiot brother up.” --well he is very forward isnt he.
then dropped his eyes down to her breasts—like that was the best way to identify someone—and recognition dawned on him.
(She swore to God that if one more guy did that to her, she was going to start staring at their crotch like that was the best way to identify them.) ---rofl...that is hilarious!
“Right.” He crouched down, met her eyes and gave her another little grin. “My eyes are up here,” he said.--LoL nice comeback Geta
Damn freak aliens.--LoL
They are the cutest couple. I loved how much he was concerned for her at that party, and how serious he was in wanting her to leave and never go back to one of those parties.
Great chappie!
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Very funny!
(was wearing a white t-shirt himself, but didn’t seem like he was too concerned his endless muscles were showing.)---rofl, yeah I bet. I wouldn\'t mind looking though...
“Look,” is what he said, “My brother just said that I wouldn’t be able to come over here and kiss you.” ---LoL what?! right out of left field. That is so insane I loved that line.
“Anyway,” he said after a prolonged moment of staring, “I’m going to kiss you to shut my idiot brother up.” --well he is very forward isnt he.
then dropped his eyes down to her breasts—like that was the best way to identify someone—and recognition dawned on him.
(She swore to God that if one more guy did that to her, she was going to start staring at their crotch like that was the best way to identify them.) ---rofl...that is hilarious!
“Right.” He crouched down, met her eyes and gave her another little grin. “My eyes are up here,” he said.--LoL nice comeback Geta
Damn freak aliens.--LoL
They are the cutest couple. I loved how much he was concerned for her at that party, and how serious he was in wanting her to leave and never go back to one of those parties.
Great chappie!
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