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March 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
A wonderfully humorous chapter :-)
\"(if you count taking the man into another room as seduction.)\"
LOL! Loved this!
God I love the twins! Goten\'s revenge was pure poetry! I loved how Vegeta (long suffering though he is) fell nicely into his part as soon as Goten jumped on the \'stage\' I would seriously not like to annoy these two lads...they have the most wicked plans ever :-)
\"“What have they done now?” Vegeta asked.\"
LOL! Oh God, I love how he instantly knew :-)
\"He had been meditating, and that was interrupted by his mate storming into the training room, seething \"
This is something I really would love to see :-)
I totally loved the way that Kakarot and Vegeta dealt with the boys, and I cracked up at this:
\"...looked at one another and immediately pointed their fingers at each other.\"
“It was him.”
\"“Shut up,” Kakarot said.\"
“Yes sir.”
\"Ah, these moments of fatherly discipline were beautiful things. He crossed his arms over his chest and waited for the yelling to start once more. Took great satisfaction that he had rubbed off onto his mate.\"
I love the way you portray this family, the way that the twins are and Kakarot\'s extremely disturbed and angry response which Vegeta takes great pleasure in, whilst at the same time being secretly proud of his boys. Wonderful characterisation of Vege & Kaka and their different views of the world around them, whilst remaining in harmony in any given parental action.
I loved Kakarot\'s response when he found out that Kane was thirty-two.
Loved Vegeta\'s response to Kakarot and loved that Kakarot went from glaring at Vegeta to wrapping his arms around him as soon as Vegeta turned his back on him :-)
“You can keep meditating,” Kakarot whispered-amusedly-“Yon’ton’t even notice me.”
\"Right. Like he wouldn’t notice the baka ravishing him. Because his mate was always so covert.\"
ROTFL! Oh Gods! Love this! Also love how Kakarot is quite happy to ravish Vegeta whilst he is meditating...he\'s such a little hentai...please never let him change.:-)
Looking forward to more :-)
\"Gk: *picks Vegeta up, throws him over his shoulder and heads towards the nearest available surface.*\"
\"Goten: Gee, I wonder what they’re going to go do.\" LOL!
In response to your response to Mechanical Butterfly:
\"Sigh. I think the shows ratings would just get better if they let me write for them.\"
Oh, how I would love to see your \"Hormone Therapy\" universe on the T.V. (all of your stuff actually. But particularly this world) They could have done an AU world instead of wasting precious ink on that ridiculous GT...I think that the ratings from your HT universe would shoot through the roof! DBZHT Sounds so good. Yeah! :-)
\"(if you count taking the man into another room as seduction.)\"
LOL! Loved this!
God I love the twins! Goten\'s revenge was pure poetry! I loved how Vegeta (long suffering though he is) fell nicely into his part as soon as Goten jumped on the \'stage\' I would seriously not like to annoy these two lads...they have the most wicked plans ever :-)
\"“What have they done now?” Vegeta asked.\"
LOL! Oh God, I love how he instantly knew :-)
\"He had been meditating, and that was interrupted by his mate storming into the training room, seething \"
This is something I really would love to see :-)
I totally loved the way that Kakarot and Vegeta dealt with the boys, and I cracked up at this:
\"...looked at one another and immediately pointed their fingers at each other.\"
“It was him.”
\"“Shut up,” Kakarot said.\"
“Yes sir.”
\"Ah, these moments of fatherly discipline were beautiful things. He crossed his arms over his chest and waited for the yelling to start once more. Took great satisfaction that he had rubbed off onto his mate.\"
I love the way you portray this family, the way that the twins are and Kakarot\'s extremely disturbed and angry response which Vegeta takes great pleasure in, whilst at the same time being secretly proud of his boys. Wonderful characterisation of Vege & Kaka and their different views of the world around them, whilst remaining in harmony in any given parental action.
I loved Kakarot\'s response when he found out that Kane was thirty-two.
Loved Vegeta\'s response to Kakarot and loved that Kakarot went from glaring at Vegeta to wrapping his arms around him as soon as Vegeta turned his back on him :-)
“You can keep meditating,” Kakarot whispered-amusedly-“Yon’ton’t even notice me.”
\"Right. Like he wouldn’t notice the baka ravishing him. Because his mate was always so covert.\"
ROTFL! Oh Gods! Love this! Also love how Kakarot is quite happy to ravish Vegeta whilst he is meditating...he\'s such a little hentai...please never let him change.:-)
Looking forward to more :-)
\"Gk: *picks Vegeta up, throws him over his shoulder and heads towards the nearest available surface.*\"
\"Goten: Gee, I wonder what they’re going to go do.\" LOL!
In response to your response to Mechanical Butterfly:
\"Sigh. I think the shows ratings would just get better if they let me write for them.\"
Oh, how I would love to see your \"Hormone Therapy\" universe on the T.V. (all of your stuff actually. But particularly this world) They could have done an AU world instead of wasting precious ink on that ridiculous GT...I think that the ratings from your HT universe would shoot through the roof! DBZHT Sounds so good. Yeah! :-)
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March 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I loved this chapter! It was hilarious!
Poor Mr. Kane (not really, that pervert deserves everything het gets!)
Stepped inside, let his little brother jump onto the table that a couple dozen boring looking humans were sitting at.--I hate boring humans...LoL I loved that line.
He had been meditating, and that was interrupted by his mate storming into the training room, seething (yes, Kakarot could get very annoyed.) --he is so cute when annoyed, but then again he is cute all the time. I love that is says yes, Kakarott could get very annoyed...LoL
Goten slid away from his brother, ran down the table, jumped off it and landed on his father. Shouted: “Daddy!” and then started to cry (actually he was laughing but it sort of sounded like sobbing.) ---GAH! rofl...that is so funny! I love the sight of this 16 yr. old boy jumping into his fathers arms...hehe funny. and it was so funny that he keeps secretly laughing...I did that once in high school, we had to make these movies and I had to write a sad love letter and cry, but I kept laughing, it was very horrible...I will never become an actor.
“It was him.”
“Shut up,” Kakarot said.
“Yes sir.”---I love Goku like this, and the twins are so cute! Me and my twin brother always used to do that too! We still do sometimes, but we are very immature.
“What the hell did you just do?” he demanded, “Bulma said it was on the NEWS!”
“Wow, that was fast,” Goten said, “I didn’t think it would be on until 5.”---rofl, gee that is fast! Poor Bulma...I don\'t know if I would want Goten to work for me...
“Thirty-huh?” Kakarot turned to look at Vegeta (his mate) and gave him a look. Then sighed. “Fine. Go clean the lookout.” Pointed in the general direction. “All of it.”---rofl!!! They have to clean the Lookout! Oh no what wil Mr. PoPo do?
The child that was born saying “Fuck y--Lo--LoL hehe I bet he was too.
No wonder their son turned out the way he did.-- I know Goku is the horniest baka alive...well next to his son of course.
“You can keep meditating,” Kakarot whispered—amusedly—“You won’t even notice me.”---sureeeee LoL
I think the shows ratings would just get better if they let me write for them.---I wish! That would be so awesome! Hehe imagine all the ppl who hate yaoi @_@ awww....what would they do?
Thanks for another great and very hilarious chapter! I love those twins!
and yay a lemon is coming!
^.*
-MB-
Poor Mr. Kane (not really, that pervert deserves everything het gets!)
Stepped inside, let his little brother jump onto the table that a couple dozen boring looking humans were sitting at.--I hate boring humans...LoL I loved that line.
He had been meditating, and that was interrupted by his mate storming into the training room, seething (yes, Kakarot could get very annoyed.) --he is so cute when annoyed, but then again he is cute all the time. I love that is says yes, Kakarott could get very annoyed...LoL
Goten slid away from his brother, ran down the table, jumped off it and landed on his father. Shouted: “Daddy!” and then started to cry (actually he was laughing but it sort of sounded like sobbing.) ---GAH! rofl...that is so funny! I love the sight of this 16 yr. old boy jumping into his fathers arms...hehe funny. and it was so funny that he keeps secretly laughing...I did that once in high school, we had to make these movies and I had to write a sad love letter and cry, but I kept laughing, it was very horrible...I will never become an actor.
“It was him.”
“Shut up,” Kakarot said.
“Yes sir.”---I love Goku like this, and the twins are so cute! Me and my twin brother always used to do that too! We still do sometimes, but we are very immature.
“What the hell did you just do?” he demanded, “Bulma said it was on the NEWS!”
“Wow, that was fast,” Goten said, “I didn’t think it would be on until 5.”---rofl, gee that is fast! Poor Bulma...I don\'t know if I would want Goten to work for me...
“Thirty-huh?” Kakarot turned to look at Vegeta (his mate) and gave him a look. Then sighed. “Fine. Go clean the lookout.” Pointed in the general direction. “All of it.”---rofl!!! They have to clean the Lookout! Oh no what wil Mr. PoPo do?
The child that was born saying “Fuck y--Lo--LoL hehe I bet he was too.
No wonder their son turned out the way he did.-- I know Goku is the horniest baka alive...well next to his son of course.
“You can keep meditating,” Kakarot whispered—amusedly—“You won’t even notice me.”---sureeeee LoL
I think the shows ratings would just get better if they let me write for them.---I wish! That would be so awesome! Hehe imagine all the ppl who hate yaoi @_@ awww....what would they do?
Thanks for another great and very hilarious chapter! I love those twins!
and yay a lemon is coming!
^.*
-MB-
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March 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Goten, Goten, Goten. *Shakes head in bewilderment* He never ceases toze mze me. Now Kane was an OC so of course he absolutely deserved what he got. He. He. But I don\'t think that is what Bulma had in mind. The twins are so creative. I need friends like them. Oh how I would laugh.
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March 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Yay! Young Vegeta finally got to have sex...sort of skimmed it but read enough to know that he was finally getting some...way to go Vegeta :-)
\"Crossed arms over his bare chest, stared at his mate as Goku gleefully pulled all of Bulma’s clothes out of her closet, threw them on the bed.\"
I can actually picture Goku giggling as he does this. LOL!
\"turned to look at Vegeta. Grinned. Picked him uulleulled his pants off with one hand, and laid him out on the clothes.\"
Love this...mischievously erotic. :-)
\"knew that Vegeta was trying to scowl. Also knew that he wasn’t doing a good job at it.\"
LOL!lovelove the imagery I get when I read your lemons :-)
Another lemon thoroughly enjoyed! That was extremely good!
Loved the Bulma and Goten stuff :-) Love how she knew straight away who to blame. LOL!
I do enjoy this universe so much :-)
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Don\'t apologise about the het&OC - Gina is very likeable and poor ol\' young Vegeta needs his squeeze of lemon as
well...and we got a very juicy G/V with a promise of more to come...I\'m happy :-)
I \'t \'t actually skip the Lil \'Geta lemon, I read but more in a skimming over style - I read the bit about the T-shirt :-) But thanks for the heads up anyway :-)
I just noticed that the Lil \'Geta lemon could be classified as V/G - think of the fun you could have promising us tons of V/G action and it turns out to be \'Ge\'Geta an Gina...LOL!
\"Crossed arms over his bare chest, stared at his mate as Goku gleefully pulled all of Bulma’s clothes out of her closet, threw them on the bed.\"
I can actually picture Goku giggling as he does this. LOL!
\"turned to look at Vegeta. Grinned. Picked him uulleulled his pants off with one hand, and laid him out on the clothes.\"
Love this...mischievously erotic. :-)
\"knew that Vegeta was trying to scowl. Also knew that he wasn’t doing a good job at it.\"
LOL!lovelove the imagery I get when I read your lemons :-)
Another lemon thoroughly enjoyed! That was extremely good!
Loved the Bulma and Goten stuff :-) Love how she knew straight away who to blame. LOL!
I do enjoy this universe so much :-)
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Don\'t apologise about the het&OC - Gina is very likeable and poor ol\' young Vegeta needs his squeeze of lemon as
well...and we got a very juicy G/V with a promise of more to come...I\'m happy :-)
I \'t \'t actually skip the Lil \'Geta lemon, I read but more in a skimming over style - I read the bit about the T-shirt :-) But thanks for the heads up anyway :-)
I just noticed that the Lil \'Geta lemon could be classified as V/G - think of the fun you could have promising us tons of V/G action and it turns out to be \'Ge\'Geta an Gina...LOL!
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March 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Incredible! *Fans herself* F***ing Incredible! Bulma was not the only one having mental pictures ;-)
Absolutely loved the entire opening paragraph. Vegeta removing his shirt and displaying his incredible chest is hot enough, but when Bulma stared open-mouthed at Goku\'s claim and Vegeta blushed...damn, it\'s knee weakening stuff!
“Did he tattoo your ass too?”
LOL! Rotten Bitch :-)
“Should we wait for your owner?”
Now that\'s just mean. No one owns the Prince! He should have smothered her with his scent at that comment and just pointed Goku in her direction. LOL!
I both loved and was a little uncomfortable with the way the twins were with Vegeta...loved it because they were truly being caring and looking out for their mum, plus it was damned funny!
But was uncomfortable with the way that Vegeta was b gui guided through everything like a naughty child. However; when all is said and done, I enjoyed it more than I was uncomfortable with it - because I know the twins were just looking out for their parents and possibly poor ol\' Bulma too. LOL!
I particularly loved Goten\'s interplay with Bulma and Bulma rolling her eyes and thinking \"Saiyans\" when Vegeta wouldn\'t let her put the gel on him. LOL!
Always love crazy paranoid possessive Goku :-) The shower scene was hilarious, I could picture him startling the shit out of Vegeta just popping up in front of him, leaning forward and flaring his nostrils as he sniffed, grabbing the Prince for a quick snog and taste and then lighting out again, leaving behind a bewildered Vegeta still clutching his soap. LOL!
\"“No. I blew that when I fucked the Kane guy.” A sigh, his son was pouting as he made the biggest damn sandwich Vegeta (the pregnant one) had ever seen. “But, we could be porn stars.” He handed his mother the sandwich.\"
LOL! God I loved this! Vegeta sitting at the table as his son, Goten, spoke about fucking, whilst he is domestically making sandwiches and then just as he finishes off with the suggestion that he and his brother becomes porn stars, he hands his mother the sandwich...ROTFL...I love this family! Plus it\'s so damn sweet that Goten was making a sandwich for his mum...God I get soppy at times...
\"Wondered just how pregnant the dog was. If they were going to have to keep the puppies and how the hell the twins were responsible. (Decided he didn’t want to know that last bit.)\"
LOL! Something tells me that the twins have put their parents through way more trauma with their pranks than Goku and Vegeta\'s open display lovemaking could ever do to the twins. :-)
\"(Briefly he had considered giving her a lecture about every aspect of his mate that belonged to him,\"
Now that\'s a lecture I would willingly sit through :-)
\"Or he could get Goten to make a Bulma-repellant and spray it on Vegeta every morning before he allowed his mate to leave his sight.\"
LOL! \"Bulma-repellant\" The man\'s crazy and I never want him to bne ane again :-)
Whilst Goten\'s idea is definitely entertaining, wouldn\'t Vegeta\'s scent be even stronger on her if she\'s wearing sex scented clothes? Still, I can understand Goku taking up the idea...once the sentence has *Vegeta* and *sex* in it...he\'s lost to all other thought. LOL!
Curious to know what young Vegeta\'s idea would have been - It\'s the quiet ones that you really have to watch isn\'t it? :-)
This really was a wonderful chapter...I laughed alot...an am definitely looking forward to the next chapter. The people who are not reading this, have no idea what they are missing!
Thanks for the heads-up on the Goten lemon :-)
Absolutely loved the entire opening paragraph. Vegeta removing his shirt and displaying his incredible chest is hot enough, but when Bulma stared open-mouthed at Goku\'s claim and Vegeta blushed...damn, it\'s knee weakening stuff!
“Did he tattoo your ass too?”
LOL! Rotten Bitch :-)
“Should we wait for your owner?”
Now that\'s just mean. No one owns the Prince! He should have smothered her with his scent at that comment and just pointed Goku in her direction. LOL!
I both loved and was a little uncomfortable with the way the twins were with Vegeta...loved it because they were truly being caring and looking out for their mum, plus it was damned funny!
But was uncomfortable with the way that Vegeta was b gui guided through everything like a naughty child. However; when all is said and done, I enjoyed it more than I was uncomfortable with it - because I know the twins were just looking out for their parents and possibly poor ol\' Bulma too. LOL!
I particularly loved Goten\'s interplay with Bulma and Bulma rolling her eyes and thinking \"Saiyans\" when Vegeta wouldn\'t let her put the gel on him. LOL!
Always love crazy paranoid possessive Goku :-) The shower scene was hilarious, I could picture him startling the shit out of Vegeta just popping up in front of him, leaning forward and flaring his nostrils as he sniffed, grabbing the Prince for a quick snog and taste and then lighting out again, leaving behind a bewildered Vegeta still clutching his soap. LOL!
\"“No. I blew that when I fucked the Kane guy.” A sigh, his son was pouting as he made the biggest damn sandwich Vegeta (the pregnant one) had ever seen. “But, we could be porn stars.” He handed his mother the sandwich.\"
LOL! God I loved this! Vegeta sitting at the table as his son, Goten, spoke about fucking, whilst he is domestically making sandwiches and then just as he finishes off with the suggestion that he and his brother becomes porn stars, he hands his mother the sandwich...ROTFL...I love this family! Plus it\'s so damn sweet that Goten was making a sandwich for his mum...God I get soppy at times...
\"Wondered just how pregnant the dog was. If they were going to have to keep the puppies and how the hell the twins were responsible. (Decided he didn’t want to know that last bit.)\"
LOL! Something tells me that the twins have put their parents through way more trauma with their pranks than Goku and Vegeta\'s open display lovemaking could ever do to the twins. :-)
\"(Briefly he had considered giving her a lecture about every aspect of his mate that belonged to him,\"
Now that\'s a lecture I would willingly sit through :-)
\"Or he could get Goten to make a Bulma-repellant and spray it on Vegeta every morning before he allowed his mate to leave his sight.\"
LOL! \"Bulma-repellant\" The man\'s crazy and I never want him to bne ane again :-)
Whilst Goten\'s idea is definitely entertaining, wouldn\'t Vegeta\'s scent be even stronger on her if she\'s wearing sex scented clothes? Still, I can understand Goku taking up the idea...once the sentence has *Vegeta* and *sex* in it...he\'s lost to all other thought. LOL!
Curious to know what young Vegeta\'s idea would have been - It\'s the quiet ones that you really have to watch isn\'t it? :-)
This really was a wonderful chapter...I laughed alot...an am definitely looking forward to the next chapter. The people who are not reading this, have no idea what they are missing!
Thanks for the heads-up on the Goten lemon :-)
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March 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Mechanical Butterfly:
\"and many thanks to Getarian for persuading you to write one!\"
Your welcome :-) Actually it was just as much a wonderful surprise to me as it was to you...But I\'m glad that I did something right, because it truly was a wonderful little extra treat. :-)
\"and many thanks to Getarian for persuading you to write one!\"
Your welcome :-) Actually it was just as much a wonderful surprise to me as it was to you...But I\'m glad that I did something right, because it truly was a wonderful little extra treat. :-)
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March 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Yes, two lemons in one chapter...and a het one even. It wasn\'t so bad though. It got me all pumped up to do mine...*sigh* Nope, I\'m nervous again.
Anyway. I can not believe that Goku and Vegeta actually had sex on all of Bulma\'s clothes. I mean you said they would but I didn\'t think that it would have actually happened. I should have know better, huh?
Anyway. I can not believe that Goku and Vegeta actually had sex on all of Bulma\'s clothes. I mean you said they would but I didn\'t think that it would have actually happened. I should have know better, huh?
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March 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Great chappie!
Pulled his shoes off, dropped them in the growing pile of dirt at the end of her bed--ewww growing pile of dirt...hehe gross! But as long as it\'s VegeVegeta, I guess I don\'t mind.
Crossed arms over his bare chest, stared at his mate as Goku gleefully pulled all of Bulma’s clothes out of her closet, threw them on the bed. ---rofl I like that he gleefully pulled the clothes out!
Kissed Vegeta even when he scowled, kissed him until he stopped scowling.--aww thats so cute!
Vegeta: Go screw a cow.
Goten: Mom! Don’t call yourself a cow!--rofl!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I looooovvvveee your lemons....
LoL poor Bulma (not really)
I thought that was incredibly cute that Vegeta couldn\'t move
Y
You know,all these lemons...I think are affecting my brain...
I was watching DBZ on the comp...and I kept getting sooo frustrated that Vegeta and Goku weren\'t kissing. I was even yelling at the screen...it was so sad. I was like: \"Just a little bit closer to Goku\'s face Vegeta..yeah there you go..now lick him! Kiss him!\"
Then Damion (my b/f) was like \"uh this isn\'t fanfic\"
I was like Oh yeah...then I said not all fanfic is yaoi... but anyway....
Your lemons have become a way of life for me now....I have been lemonfied! @_@
but it\'s a good thing.
^.*
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Pulled his shoes off, dropped them in the growing pile of dirt at the end of her bed--ewww growing pile of dirt...hehe gross! But as long as it\'s VegeVegeta, I guess I don\'t mind.
Crossed arms over his bare chest, stared at his mate as Goku gleefully pulled all of Bulma’s clothes out of her closet, threw them on the bed. ---rofl I like that he gleefully pulled the clothes out!
Kissed Vegeta even when he scowled, kissed him until he stopped scowling.--aww thats so cute!
Vegeta: Go screw a cow.
Goten: Mom! Don’t call yourself a cow!--rofl!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I looooovvvveee your lemons....
LoL poor Bulma (not really)
I thought that was incredibly cute that Vegeta couldn\'t move
Y
You know,all these lemons...I think are affecting my brain...
I was watching DBZ on the comp...and I kept getting sooo frustrated that Vegeta and Goku weren\'t kissing. I was even yelling at the screen...it was so sad. I was like: \"Just a little bit closer to Goku\'s face Vegeta..yeah there you go..now lick him! Kiss him!\"
Then Damion (my b/f) was like \"uh this isn\'t fanfic\"
I was like Oh yeah...then I said not all fanfic is yaoi... but anyway....
Your lemons have become a way of life for me now....I have been lemonfied! @_@
but it\'s a good thing.
^.*
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March 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
That was hilarious...The \"Goku\'s\" hickey was genius. Poor Bulma...she has not been having the best time in your fics. Which is extremely funny of course. Someone has to be the comic relief.
I love how the twins find it appropriate to talk about becoming porn stars in front of their mother. And Goten\'s shirt\'s never cease to amaze me. Kalika has a similar taste in shirts with wierd phrases. Not all sex related though. Crude sex related humor is the best humor.
Sex on all of Bulma\'s clothes, huh? Sounds promising. And hilarious.
I love how the twins find it appropriate to talk about becoming porn stars in front of their mother. And Goten\'s shirt\'s never cease to amaze me. Kalika has a similar taste in shirts with wierd phrases. Not all sex related though. Crude sex related humor is the best humor.
Sex on all of Bulma\'s clothes, huh? Sounds promising. And hilarious.
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March 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Lemony interlude:ThanThank-you for the lemon! It was delicious :-)
I especially loved Goku\'s second claim and his chant of \"mine\" and Vegeta finally getting frustrated with waiting for movement, nodding his agreement and saying \"Yes, Kakarot. Now, fuck me\"
LOLondeonderful scene!
Always love your lemons...Hot, plenty of bite and heaps of sugar :-)
I especially loved Goku\'s second claim and his chant of \"mine\" and Vegeta finally getting frustrated with waiting for movement, nodding his agreement and saying \"Yes, Kakarot. Now, fuck me\"
LOLondeonderful scene!
Always love your lemons...Hot, plenty of bite and heaps of sugar :-)