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Emotional chapter...

Kissed him again and held onto him like he didn’t want to go, but Kakarot’s dislike of the house overcame his desire to be close to Vegeta. --I love that, it is wonderful. It\'s sad that the house has such and effect on Goku, but at the same time it is understandable.

There was no way a house would fucking outdo him in anything--rofl! That\'s right Geta!!!

Wasn’ing ing to apologize about Kakarot. Wouldn’t demean the man that way like he was something filthy that Vegeta had to hide. Because he wasn’t. ---I am happy to know Vegeta isn\'t ashamed of him. I love how he ts/ths/thinks of Goku. This fic is so emotional. REally you do such a great job at capturing everything. The way Vegeta feels about Bulma, feels as if she deserves more than he had given her, it makes me sad that the Ouji feels like that.

Dropped a capsule on the table.---so much was said just by her doing that. I can see how hard this really is for her. She really did care for him. *wipes tears from eyes* So sad!

Looked at everything in his life wrapped up in a tiny cae.--e.--wow, thats a great line. Everything in his life in that capsule...like I said reading this is like reading poetry...beautiful..descriptive...

Closed his fist around it. And for the very first time in his whole life said: “I’m sorry.”--I am sad that Bulma\'s response to this was whatever...I mean doesn\'t he get credit for this...saying a word he has never said befoI woI would have been fucking amazed if he apologized to me. I understand she is hurt, but this is Vegeta... I really, love how you wrote all this

“I know how you feel,” he said, “Now listen to me while I tell you how I feel.”--Alright Goku!!! I loved what he said and how he said Gohan has to deal with it because he is going to be with Vegeta! Gohan is so stupid I swear! What gives him the right to even say :I felt your power levels how could you?!?!? God!!!! If I was Goku I would have slapped him...that made m mad mad, like the world revolves around Gohan and what he wants...no...the world revolves around Goku and Vegeta...at least my world does...

Said this like it was the absolute truth and Vegeta went about murdering every single day.--LoL although I laughed at this, it made me sad and mad to think that this is how Gohan really thinks of Vegeta...*shakes head* Ugh! I want him to be destroyed!

Felt hunger settling in the pit of his stomach that had absolutely nothing to do with food.---hehe, I bet. I love that, Goku is always hungry for something, but I am glad this time that it is the Pr.
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Vegeta: I think its almost finished.---WHAT!?!?! NO!?!?!? *looks around frantically* What will I do!?!?! *throws a plot twist in your fic* There...that ought to buy me a few more chapters...

Thanks for another wonderful chapter!!!!

*Adds locks to the closet door and pockets the . * . * You are not going to abuse Vegeta! He’s busy making lemonade!---*laughs* You think locks will keep me out of there??? *snaps fingers and out of no where appears doppelganger Goku* I think he can get Vegeta out of that closet...*lightbulb appears* wait did you say lemonade...??? *pushes DG out of the way* You heard the lady he is making lemonade, leave him be!!!...For now...

Keep up the excellence...
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I am so glad Goku finally told Gohan off. But I do feel bad about how things ended with Vegeta and Bulma. I can\'t say that I blame the girl. If I had just lost Vegeta to my best friend I don\'t think that there would be any consoling me either. I am pleased that Vegeta has a soft spot for Goten though, it will make things so much easier. All and all a great chapter.

Yay reviewing on time and on the same day!!! I am now back from the \'movies\' ^_~ It was good, I laughed, I jumped out of my seat, but mostly I laughed O_o

I really liked that chap, I still feel a little sorry for Bulma though, but someone was bound to get hurt. And Gohan, he is really annoying me, *shake my fist at him then run away* (I\'ll leave Goku or Vegeta to deal with him.) Really enjoying this! It\'s good now that they\'ve got a house, hopefully things will get better for them. ^_^

*wipes away tears of joy* That was a awesome lemon...
It will be forever imprinted on my mind, mainly because I will go and read it again...^.^

wanted to grab the hair and drag Kakarot’s mouth to where it would be most useful. --hehe I loved that.

Wrapped his hands in thankeankets. Moaned. Felt that the first noise freed him to express the others.--gosh Vegeta is so sexy! Just yum!

Stared at him like he was something precious.---oh he is...he is very precious. That was a beautiful line

Vegeta looked at him. That was the only reflection that made it past the fuzz that his brain had become.--rofl awww

There was a snort and Vegeta said, rather dryly: “Very few people ever get to have sex that good, Kakarot. --well isn\'t that very nice of the Ouji to say...aww a lovely compliment! I love the relationship between these two. I love how you write it. I love how everything was described and I do mean everything! That lemon was hot, it was on fire!

I also agree with Goku in hoping this wasn\'t a one day insanity thing. *crosses fingers and hopes*
I love this fic....

There is no such thing as watching too much Moulin Rouge, dear.--Yeah that\'s true, how I love that movie.
(Gohan’s not my favorite anyway.)--he isn\'t mine either.
Hope you liked the lemon.---I think you know I loved it with every fiber in my being. ^.^

Oh and as for what you wrote in one of your res fos for my ficcie...(thanks for the reviews by the way)
I still have him locked in my closet, so 't t't try to kill him again.--*laughs evilly* Now why would I want to kill my Prince...again...? hehe do you think I would really try and kill him in Malicious? I suppose anything is possible...anything except that...*shifty eyes*or is it?*brainstorms for a way to get Vegeta out of your closet*

Ok so let me tell you what happened...

I am sitting here reading this fic and I am all into it you know drooling and pulling my hair out because I love it so much..and then I get to the end... and I\'m like @_@!!!!! Gohan!!! What is he doing there!?!?! That was soooo good!!!

I was sooo not expecting that. I was like yeah sex is about to happen...then here comes Gohan pulling open the curtain. Even though I was dissapointed about no sex, that definately made up for it!

The emotional awkwardness and just plain emotion of this fic is awesome. I love how Vegeta didn\'t want to take Goku back to CC b/c of how he felt for Bulma and his son and just thought that would be disrespectful. And how Goku felt slightly guilty for bringing the Prince back to his house. I love this fic!!!!! It is soooo beyond supercalafragalisticexpealadocious!!!!!! (ok, I am more tired than I thought I was)

I love how you seem to pour yourself into the characters...making their emotions very real, very beleievable, and I just can\'t wait until tomorrow! I am sad and happy because they are together sort of...but so many things keep happening and Vegeta is still fighting with how he feels or how he will feel the next day about everything.

Beautfiul just beautiful....
*takes story to bed and goes to sleep with it*
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Gohan is such an ass. Oww...but now Goku gets to have Vegeta\'s ass. And all will soon be right with the world. He. He.

Oh wow! I am really liking the way this is going...

...Although, the pace of the lemon is killing me. Very realistic though...love that! :-)

Loved Vegeta\'s thoughts as he listened to Gohan berate his father. Particularly liked this sarcastic thought:

\"How could Kakarot do what? Act like a Saiyan? Take a shower? Have sex with the Prince?\"

LOL! Really liked the \"Take a shower\" line :-)

Really liked Vegeta\'s annoyance over the fact that Kakarot would just stand there and absorb his son\'s anger and not defend himself at all...that is a definite Goku trait, and I could feel Vegeta\'s own anger on behalf of Goku.

Really loved Vegeta\'s thoughts as far as the Z senshi were concerned...I have always been partial to his \"screw you\" attitude :-)

“Don’t apologize,” Vegeta said, “You have no reason to apologize to me.”

I loved this line! Felt so bad for Goku at that point. All he wants is to be himself. Couldn\'t really be that with ChChi, but once she passed on, he was able to start being himself, found that he had an attachment to his Prince, found that it was reciprocated, and went with it, only to be made to feel like it was something to be utterly ashamed of. I hate how Gohan brought ChiChi up, making it seem like Goku couldn\'t wait to move on from her...so unfair. That\'s why I loved that line. Vegeta\'s right, Goku has nothing to apologize for, and neither does Vegeta, although Vegeta does have to at least sort things with Bulma...that could be tricky, but it\'s not like they were commited or anything, but still, I feel a little bad for Bulma.

Loved the easy atmosphere of the fireside meal between the two Saiyans :-)

Loved this:

\"Eventually he was going to get older and die. (For real.)\" LOL!

\"But they trusted Goku. Just as long as he didn’t act too much like a Saiyan and make them all nervous.\"

Yeah, now there\'s the rub. So long as he acts like a human, he\'s the hero...but let anything Saiyan show and watch out.

I\'m glad that Goku is not letting his son\'s words keep him from being with Vegeta. :-)

Loved the whole sitting and then kissing on the log scene. The atmosphere, created by Goku\'s thoughts, the way Vegeta ate and then looked at Goku, Goku\'s uncertainty about what happens tomorrow, and Goku\'s mind wandering back to the steamy shower scene, followed by Goku moving closer to Vegeta, which ultimately, lead up to the kissing, was palpable.

\"And then realized just what he was supposed to be doing with those fingers when he watched the Prince part his legs.\"

Hot! Very Hot!

\"Felt all the blood in his body bottom out in his toes somewhere, because he was suddenly as unsure about this as a child.\"

Loved this! This, expressed well, a very natural reaction for first timers in any sexual situation. :-)

\"This was absolutely going to kill him, Goku decided, because he wasn’t even inside of Vegeta yet and he felt like he would explode.\"

He\'s not the only one...except for the exploding part...damn, you write erotic lemons and partial lemons...this is hot!

Definitely can\'t wait for the next chapter :-)

\"Vegeta: Now I’m stuck like that for a whole day.
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LOL! Poor Vegeta...you\'re a cruel woman, Card. :-)

When I read this a joy explodes inside of me and I want to run to a mountain top and sing \"The hills are alive....\" (Maybe I have been watching a little bit too much Moulin Rouge) Well you get the general idea.

(Wanted to slap that boy until he was blind and deaf and dumb and had no chance to interrupt him again.)--rofl! Yeah I personally agree, and think Vegeta should have done that. We rWe realize you can’t talk, Vegeta thought vindictively.--rofl! That is great...

All those idiots, the bald one (yeah, technically he had hair, but he would always be referred to the as the ‘bald one’) and the green one and those other ones that showed up sometimes; --rofl, I love how Vegeta describles these people. I also loved how Vegeta felt about Gohan and how much it disturbed him to see/hear Gohan treat his father the way he did. I felt sad when he said no one has respect for Kakarott... The essence of the ppl in this fic is captured so well. I hated Gohan so much and what he said, I wished someone would have ripped his head off or at least his lips. Like when he said at least you waited until mom died...I wanted to hurt him badly...

Kakarot either needed to overcome his house phobia or he needed to find a new home to live in that was not a hole in the ground filled with grass and leaves. ---oh gawd...rofl Yeah, I think he should overcome the house phobia. Living in a hole is never fun, at least not to me.

Stopped dead in his tracks when he realized that he was planning his life around what the baka wanted.---aww *hugs Vegeta* That is so cute! I love that Vegeta wants to make him happy, its so sweet.

Watched Vegeta give him a look, watched him set his gloves to one side. Look back. Lick his own lips and have his own thoughts. ---ok Vegeta is too cute for his own good! I think if I was Goku I probably would have melted then died.

Watched the Prince drag a pillow from the pile of them at the head of the bed to put it under his hips.---AH! *dies* oh...Vegeta is just yum!!!! Sexy!!!!! Now you see here is a time that joyous feeling explodes through me and I wanna sing...I LOVE THIS FIC!!!!!

And felt a spasm as Vegeta bit down on his own knuckle and arched his back, pushed against his finger and moaned something that might have been a scream if not for the hand he pressed to his mouth.
This was absolutely going to kill him, Goku decided, because he wasn’t even inside of Vegeta yet and he felt like he would explode.---poor Goku...yeah right, that lucky duck...This is so freaking yum!!!!!...only that was the last sentence...*dies* you torture me...on purpose!!!!! T

Vegeta: Now I’m stuck like that for a whole day.--rofl...awww poor Ouji...but thats a nice way to be stuck.

You\'re probably right...I wouldn\'t get much sleep with this fic in my bed...
Thanks for another amazing chapter!!!!!
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Really liked the peek inside Vegeta\'s head. I think that constantly living up to his heritage, the expectations of him and his pride has taken it\'s toll on him, and this is probably why he so easily is able to lay back, and give in wholly to how Goku makes him feel. It\'s a shame that he already feels that part of him that may regret the way he is behaving, but I am glad that he is at least able to let go for now.

I liked that Vegeta had too much respect for Bulma to go back to CC with Kakarot...but it must have been a bit hard for Goku, heading back to his place instead...where\'s a handy capsule house when you need one?

Really loved the atmosphere that you created once they entered Goku\'s house, both men wanting this to continue, yet Goku is being held back slightly by ghosts...the feel in the bathroom was well done. Vegeta was all business, but in a gentle way, whereas Goku seemed to be battling with varying le of of need, uncertainty and guilt...which rapidly changed into desire once they entered the shower. I really liked this scene :-)

Damn! What the hell is Gohan doing there? Little bastard is always popping up when you don\'t want him! Gods, way to ruin a moment kid!

Looks like the two full bloods have some explaining to do, as well as trying to overcome being caught in an extremely embarrassing situation.

Looking forward to seeing how this situation gets resolved. A Gallick Gun in Gohan\'s direction might help. LOL!

Loved the end dialogue. :-)

Kami Damned Gohan. He always seemed to me to be a total kill joy. Now it has been proven. *Sighs* Aww, well I just know that the boys won\'t let this intrusion stop the banging from occurring. I hope.