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How did I like how that chapter ended???? Hm..... well I loved it despite the evil cliffy!!!!!
*appears in your room and shakes you* Um...I know you\'re really tired and all...but really how could you do that to me? How could you LEAVE SUCH A CLIFFHANGER!!!!! j/k I will live....I hope.... *waits for you to post next chapter*

I can’t believe I just wrote that on two hours of sleep.---me either that was fantastic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

He tasted every bit as good as he Vegeta did not want him to. --hehe, I bet he did.

Felt fingers on him. On his waist. Like he was a woman.--awww I like that line.

Wanted to be closer to him and farther away and the conflicting desires were going to drive him absolutely insane.---so nicely written, it\'s like reading poetry.

Didn’t want to fight. Wanted to be part of this man again. Didn’t want to have to shout and argue and protest.---I really loved this and the lines that came after it....he jhe just wanted to give in to something once...you just write this so well, really its more amazing everytime I read it.

Holding Vegeta captive and sucking on his collarbone had to be right up there with having a tea party with Cell, Freiza and kid Buu while he wore a dress and sang the soundtrack to Cats. ---ROFL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Now wouldn\'t that be a sight to see...hehe

Felt Vegeta taking his gloves off, and then (for one of the very first ti fel felt strong hands touch his skin. ---gods, I frng lng love that line...I swear that drove me over the edge....so, wonderful! Really freaking fantastic! You deserve and award you really do!

Well thank you for another beautiful chapter that I loved.
you are an excellent writer, with tons of creativeness...it really seems like writing just comes naturally for you...
I am kinda glad you are updating at noon because I am so tired I probably wont wake up until after 2 p.m.
I am soooooo going to bed now.
goodnight!
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You wrote that on two hours of sleep?! I am in awe. You rock! That was beautifu.! *whipes away tears of happiness* You just reaffirmed my love of Goku and Geta fics. I am extemely sleepy so now I will go an take a nap and probably come back a give you a proper view. Bye Bye.

ADDITIONAL: In response to your response to me :-)

\"Poor Vegeta trying to get seduce sil silly non-seductive people like Nappa and Radditz.\"

LOL! Hey...wait a minute...I love R/V...ah, who cares, this was damn funny :-)

\"I think Goku should just grab him from behind and have his way with him. Save everyone the trouble of listening to Radditz try to woo someone.\"

LOL! Scene: Vegeta slumped over railing of balcony bored shitless...Goku creeps up behind him. Radditz is arguing with a large mound behind a bush.

Radditz - \"...Got that Nappa? Arse in, head down and for Gods sake try to come up with something a bit more romantic than \"Hark, but what bulge through yonder Spandex makes.\"\"

Nappa - (muffled) \"Radditz, can\'t you just fly up to the balcony and boink him? I\'m getting a strange head rush and my nose is way too close to my feet...\"

Radditz growls his annoyance and turns back to face his Prince. Can\'t see him straight away, but hears a lot of strange moaning sounds.

Nappa - \"Hey, what are those strange moaning sounds Radditz?\"

Radditz spots his brother with his Prince, both are sweaty and naked, and the Prince is writhing in ecstacy.

Radditz - (Going red with rage - shakes fist in the air) \"Fuck you Kakarot!\"

Nappa - \"I don\'t think that\'s going to win the Prince\'s heart for you Radditz...Just as well you did bring me along after all\"

Ahhh...I love getting up in the morning and reading a good fic. I loved this chapter. I had no idea that Goku could be so complicated. You are reaffirming my theory,though. I believe that there is just some thing in Saiyan DNA that draws them to each other no matter what the gender. Vegeta was fightinforcforce of nature, there was no way he was going to win. Now, when\'s the banging going to start?

It\'s building!!!! The tension...

Bulma is very upset about all this, well actually so is everyone else for that matter. I really love how you build things up in this fic....very nice.

Scowled when he realized that he was disappointed the overgrown idiot had left without saying good-bye.--aww he scowled about it...lol thats so cute.

Oh. Kami. Here it came. He crossed his arms over his chest and stayed in the doorway.--yeah just stand there and be very quiet and maybe she will just dissappear.

And while he could fight with her just as well with words as he could fight with fists--love that line...and I bet he could.

I didn’t know you two were going to get all… Touchy-feely.--@_@ hehe that was definately a shocker, for Vegeta!!!!

She probably could not have stunned him more if she had somehow managed to toss a surf-boarding elephant on his head.--OMG wha??? rofl, that is hilarious...

Touchy-feely? With Kakarot?---aww Vegeta you know you want to...there\'s nothing better than getting all touchy feely with the only other full blooded saiyajin around.

Of course Kakarot got more attention, he was iyaniyan.--I knew he loved that big baka!

Maybe Vegeta was possessed again.
Maybe everyone was possessed.
Yep. Must be a possessing ghost or something. --rofl poor Kakarott, he thinks everyone is possessed! Although...Majin Vegeta is very delicious...

Oh no...Kakarott don\'t apologize for unknowingly flirting with Vegeta....I want you to flirt with Vegeta!!!!!

I love the little end notes...poor bagged Vegeta...but as long as Goku\'s saving him that\'s fine with me.

Another amazing chapter in which I was enthralled!
I love it!!!! and I know I say that everyday, but I do!

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Another good chapter!

\"but wasn’t about to comfort her before he knew what she was upset about.\"

I loved this...it strikes me as very Vegeta...ever cautious...he would reason that he may just be the reason that she is upset and therefore, he would need to be on the defensive with her, which would be difficult if he\'s patting her back saying \"there, there\" :-)

\"I didn’t know you two were going to get all… Touchy-feely.”\"

LOL! Gotta feel a little sorry BulmBulma here, but I love her bravery for telling Vegeta that she thought he and Goku were getting \"Touch feely\"

“We’re sparring,”

Love how Vegeta went from a calm, \"I have no reason to defend myself\" to rapidly defending his and Goku\'s actions. LOL!

\"...that Kakarot had wormed his way under Vegeta’s skin and was building himself a nest inside of the Prince somewhere.\"

This explains why Vegeta went off the deep end and started ploughing into Goku. He would not like knowing that Kakarot had gotten to him :-)

I liked the interplay between Bulma and Goku and I loved how Goku finally came to the realisation of what Bulma was inferring...but I have a feeling that he\'s only going to make things worse if he apologizes to Vegeta...

Things are beginning to heat up now and I look forward to more :-)


\"Oh, just the thought of Nappa trying to hide behind a bush is hilarious. Poor Vegeta would be so fed up with them before Radditz could even start the wooing.\"

LOL! This is even better than what I imagined :-) I loved the imagery of Nappa desperately trying to keep fully hidden behind a bush, failing miserably and having Radditz sharply telling him to move his big arse from view and keep his head down...and Vegeta rolling his eyes, sighing and drumming his fingernails on the railing, yelling at Radditz to get a move on. LOL!

\"And HOPEFULLY (feel free to tell me if I’m failing here) I’m keeping them in character and having them respond to their new circumstances the right way. I think I fall off the in-character wagon sometimes.\"

For starters, I think you\'re doing a wonderful job of keeping all of them in character...I know it\'s difficult once authors start treading on new ground, such as emotions that were never covered in the show, and especially AU stuff like yaoi, because once authors hit AU territory, they basically have to extrapolate on how they believe that any given character will respond in a new situation, and that\'s bound to usher in a small amoof wof what can be perceived as OOC attitudes, even if that\'s not necessarily so.

I love how you are presenting them...as far as I am concerned, your Vegeta, Goku and Bulma are all acting nicely in character :-)

I am so getting into this story :-)

\"Vegeta snorted. “Saiyans are warriors, not poets.\"

LOL! Yeah, kind of hard to imagine Nappa hidden behind the bushes a yranyrano de Bergerac, prompting Radditz with all the right words to woo a balcony dwelling Prince Vegeta. :-)

Love how Goku is starting to call Vegeta, \'Geta, and Vegeta doesn\'t seem to have picked up on it yet...or maybe he has ;-)

\"But was proud, so all his people would be proud. And Goku felt vbad;bad; because that had been taken from Vegeta.\"
\"Wanted to find a way to bring Freiza back, just so Vegeta could kill him-to avenge all those that died.\"

Wanted to highlight these two things, because, not only do I think that Goku is the absolute sweetest for feeling these things :-) but also, I like how you expressed the meaning of pride for Vegeta...that is so very much how I\'ve always seen it. Pride is very important, it\'s all part of self-esteem and confidence and strength of mind...to continue on when otherwise you would probably just give up.

Love how Goku is really getting into finding out about his heritage, and wondering why there is an absence of him and any who look like him in his dream realm...is it possibly because he still doesn\'t feel like he belongs there?

Okay, what\'s up with Vegeta? Why did he just fly off the handle at poor ol\' Goku? I wondered what the problem with Bulma was, earlier on when she was scowling at Goku...I\'m curious as to what she has said that got Vegeta all riled
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Looking forward to the next chapter :-)

This is really good. You really have them in character. Vegeta is perfection. The poor prideful bastard. The emotion is so thick in this one you could cut it with a knife. I know...so cliche...but so true. I love poor clueless Goku...but not too clueless so that is good. And Bulma...I don\'t understand why she would want to hold on to Vegeta if she didn\'t love him...so...I am doubting that that is entirely true. I can\'t wait for the next part.

*sighs* I love this story *reads it again* L-O-V-E

That’s what the idiot said. Explained everything about him in two sentences.-- wow what a short explantion, but so true. Vegeta!!! How dare you not explain that stuff to Goku!

Hated that fucker, Bardock, that had sent his son out into the universe and not even given him a way to know who he was. (Didn’t care that Kakarot should have remembered and would have remembered if he hadn’t have bumped his head.) Hated Radditz for attack him own brother and getting his dumb ass killed in the process. --That was very deep, nice explanation of how Vegeta feels.

“I don’t know. Whatever you want to tee. e. I mean, I don’t know anything. Other than you’re the Prince. I’m a third class idiot. That’s it.”--rofl aww thats sad.

(Still trying to understand why it was that everything Vegeta did was dripping with pride as if he thought of everything he did before he did it and made sure it gave off the right impression.) -- He probably does do that.

And thedly dly enough—he imagined Vegeta ruling over it all. Understood why he was so much like he was.--Oh, how I loved this, and everything before it and after it!! I love it all, but when Goku imagained it all in his head...it was so..wonderful...

I have not read a Vegeta/Goku fic like this in a long time and by \"this\" I mean breathtaking...
I love it so much! *hugs story*
I would really, really, put this story on my recomended reading list, but I don\'t have anymore room, (they only let you put a certain amount, isnt that dumb!) I could take someone\'s story away, but that would just be rude...*laughs* Oh well Just so you know this is really and excellent fic, and definately in my top 10 list of must read fics! and I am so glad you are writing it.

I also loved the little end notes too and the whole end part with Vegeta hitting Goku...I really can\'t wait for the next chapter!!!!!
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Yes, I did it. I shedshed them all. Heww!

I adore this fic. It is so different from the other ones. I wish that the plots came so easy to me. I take forever to come up with let alone write a story. *Sigh* Enough about me and more about this fabulous story.

I always thought that Vegeta was an undercover softy and Goku is way smarter than he lets on. I like how you are handling these traits in this fic. I can wait for the lemons, as long as they are good. Poor ChiChi, I actually feel bad that she died.

Oww, you play Bodukai too. Yes! I love that game. I am perfecting my Gallick Gun. I think I got it down to a science. I shall be unbeatable! *runs off and maniacal laughter is heard in the distance*