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for Dark Fire

by serenestorm

person Anon
schedule May 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Ummm ok...
person Anon
schedule October 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
where\'s the rest of the fic???
person Van
schedule July 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Man nver thought I\'d find on of these but HEY I LOVE IT MAKE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
person Pixelgoddess
schedule April 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Not my favorite pair, but nicely done. I liked Vegeta - agressive, demanding, aware.
person Chiisai Saru
schedule March 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
An amazing little one shot fic. I never really figured Gohan and Vegeta, but then again I don\'t care. Yaoi never gets old and somehow is never overdone. I like the way you portrayed Vegeta in his point of view. I like you\'re writing, you\'re good. Very good. Keep it up.
person Laura
schedule March 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
IT\'S GOOD!
Best one yet!You hit Vegeta dead on!
Some of the things he thought were funny as hell too!
I liked it!
Yay for yaoi!
person margot
schedule March 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Yay! I love Gohan Vegeta pairings, especialy when there are actual feelings involved. It was great. Please write more!
person Getarian
schedule March 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I feel compelled to say at this point that I normally approach Vegeta & Gohan fics with an extreme amount of caution, as I get deeply disturbed by some V/Gh fics which portray Gohan as a young teenager (shudder) therefore; the beginning has to really capture me well enough to pull me further into a fic on this coupling...suffice it to say, that I found the beginning of your story to be very compelling and it just got better from there...and I was well pleased to note that Goh Gohan was at least 18, thus I was happy to continue onwards, and as a result enjoyed a very good read. :-)


This was a well written fic. The opening scenes which have Vegeta and Gohan interacting, yet showing Vegeta\'s mind is more on his own thoughts regarding the young man in front of him, rather than on the man himself is very well portrayed. ked ked the fact that Vegeta was so absorbed in his personal desires that he was only catching snippets of what Gohan was saying. Also, the entire time he was thinking, and trying to keep abreast of what Gohan was saying, you managed to keep them beautifully in character.

You captured the atmosphere of the seduction beautifully. As seen through Vegeta\'s eyes, I could feel every aspect of Gohan\'s surprise, uncertainty, lust and ultimately admission of what is so plainly the unspoken truth between the two...desire and need.

I liked the fact that Gohan was the first to bite Vegeta, finding, without conscious thought, his hidden Saiyan instincts.

The \'pillow talk\' was very well done. Something I can well imagine taking place :-)

I was also extremely amused by the ending, with Gohan teasing Vegeta as to the news of Goku\'s return, and Vegeta\'s reaction was perfect!

All in all, you created an honest, wonderfully compelling atmosphere, which ignited my desire to see these two come together and stay as such...which is something, as normally I have others whom I prefer to see Vegeta coupled with. Well done! :-)

person Blue Siren
schedule March 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I read this before...I cannot remember where... have you posted this somewhere else...a while ago? Anyways I liked it now as much as I did then, but I think you must defenatelly continue this, not just to leave it as a PWP but a full fledge fic.
Blue Siren

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