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February 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
its okay if ur grammer is bad, my grammer is bad too. don\'t worry about it too much. though i would love to c u continue \'feather light\'. i haven\'t read anything like this story before. if u want, i could proof-read it for u before u post ur stories. i\'m pretty good at grammers.....i think.....:D i\'ll do the best i can. so yeah. good luck w/ everything.
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July 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Really great story so far! I hope you continue to work on it and update soon. =D
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May 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
By all that is holy! That is an excellent start to your story! Poor Duo...he really is Shi no tenshi now. Oh, and for anybody who critisizes your grammar: you\'re doing a great job, especially considering English isn\'t your first language. So, please keep up the good work, I can\'t wait for more of this!
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April 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Cool.
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April 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hey that was sooooooo great! you must continue! you must! i love it! im really hooked on your story, and i must know more! well i must go so chow! also...if you could..could you e-mail me when you update...it would be really awsome if you could...
JA!
JA!
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April 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
wow WOW WOW OH DID I SAY WOW! THAT WAS A GREAT CHIPPY BUT IF U COULD MAKE THEM LONGER THANKS OYEA I CAN\'T WAIT UNTIL THE NEXT CHIPPY
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April 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
WOW!!! I can\'t wait for more. Wings, huh? That will be a bitch to dress!!!!
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April 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
great story! your doing fine!!!!
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April 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Aside from the fact that you seem to be \'rushing\' the story, its good.
More development in the hospital and the raid on the labs would have been nice.
But the mental image of G running away was nice.
Minor misspelli but but its not your first language and English is weird at times with tense and spelling.
Looking forward to the next installment to see what it was the professor was doing to Duo.
More development in the hospital and the raid on the labs would have been nice.
But the mental image of G running away was nice.
Minor misspelli but but its not your first language and English is weird at times with tense and spelling.
Looking forward to the next installment to see what it was the professor was doing to Duo.
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April 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm...Interesting plot. *smiles* I can\'t wait to see what happens next.
On a purely grammatical critique...Please, please, please keep track of your verb tenses! Having things like \"It had been a long time and Heero hasn\'t seen Duo\" *is only paraphrasing* is really, really really bloody irritating! I can read it, but you\'re driving me up the wall! *whimpers*
On a purely grammatical critique...Please, please, please keep track of your verb tenses! Having things like \"It had been a long time and Heero hasn\'t seen Duo\" *is only paraphrasing* is really, really really bloody irritating! I can read it, but you\'re driving me up the wall! *whimpers*