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Hilarious chapter...

Gina agreed with him. “Yeah, Mummy, I do find it a bit strange. be Gbe Goten’s drugging him or something.”--O_O LoL I hope not...

Trunks was, he grabbed his oldest son and pointed him in the pregnant one’s general direction with the imperative of ‘Go find out what your brother did to his mate.’--rofl, gosh Vegeta really wants to know what is wrong with Trunks...sheesh.

“He thinks I’m insane now,” Vegeta said--lol I would think he was insane too...hehe crazy ppl won wondering and staring at him. Then Vegeta sending hon ion in there to ask wis wis wrong with him...yeah strange. But from everyone elses pov I can understand why they think it is strange...a calm saiyajin pregnancy has never been the norm.

He was holding his beautiful daughter by her leg, dangling her upside down over the roaring ocean, --rofl, oh parent child bonding is such a wonderful thing...

And Chichi (somehow, although none of us can figure out why)--lol, yeah I am still trying to figure that one out myself...

“Lets get this train wreck on the way!” Goten said.
“That’s extremely comforting,” Presta said--hehe, ahh its good to know that her father can comfort her with such soothwordwords...-_-

(a girl named Pan, he thought, and a boy named Spoon or something. Maybe Pot or Kettle or something.) --ROFL..*grabs sides* oh geez...spoon?!?!?!

“Good for you,” Presta replied--lol you can tell this kid has the blood of Veget ain her...hehe

I wonder why they decided to visit Gohan out of the blue...well I guess that is their brother...don\'t really need a reason to visit your brother...


Oh, LMAO that means Laughing my ass off...hehe an I was indeed doing just that throughout this chapter...

And As for a Goten shirt I am going to go with--hm..its really hard to decide. I think I will go with the: I hate people shirt...yeah..

Although this shirt doesn\'t count, I just want to give it honorable mention... “Virgin?” --lol that is what Trunks shirt said..but that was freaking hilarious.

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-MB-

I have been catching up on your therapy fics so I’ve been putting off this review. I likur cur characters. I really like the twins. I just have one MAJOR issue. GOHAN. You make very few direct references to him. “(And he kept his opinions about his long-lost older half-brother to himself.),” Goku afraid of holding his grandson because he once dropped Gohan on his head, Goku sparing with Gohan back in the first one. You are writing this WONDERFUL fic about family and the bonds formed between parents and children, siblings, and mates. Yet you have somehow managed to ostracize and ignore Goku’s first born child. He is a member of the family who is probably 4-5 years older than the twins (basing this estimation on the twins being old enough to fight the androids and that trunks having not been conceived yet). You have previously mentioned that he doesn’t have a problem with Goku’s and Vegeta’s relationship, he was probably too young to develop a problem with it. So why are you ignoring him? Goku is such a family guy th do do not see him allowing Gohan NOT to be a part of the family; especially if he sees him on a regular basis. Gohan should have been there. He needed to be there for the birth of his siblings. He should have been supporting his family when he became an uncle. I say this because I come from a close knit family. This is how that family dynamic should be working.

Just from your other fics and comments I understand that you don’t like Gohan. I understand where you are cominom. om. In many cases he can be a pansy ass wuss boy. BUT…. That’s one of the beauties of writing an AU fic. Suddenly your characters have this whole world of new experiences that tdidndidn’t have in the Anime or Manga. You get to make them over into someone you do like. Why not, you did it with Trunks in this one. Thinkthrothrough. I’m sure you could come up with numbers of experiences that would have changed Gohan’s character. For example, in your world they killed the androids with that thing on the hand. Which in turn means that they didn’t get absorbed by cell, which means that cell got killed off in his first form, which means no cell games or Hercule stealing people’s thunder which means no reason for Gohan to hide his identity or skill which means NO SAIYAMAN (god I love your world). If he were to actually visit his dad every so often, maybe even stayed over on weekends, imagine the influence Vegeta could have had. Not to mention that he has the chibi twins from hell as his brothers. Your twins are hell oeryoeryone else yet they leave their Older Brother alone? If my sister had had a partner in crime my brother and I would have so suffered. All I’m saying is give him a break. It’s not supposed to go this way, let him into the family.

Ok I wrote most of this before I got to Chapter 18 but it still holds true.

Ahhhh! That was soo good. I love it when wierd slightly disfunctional families get together. They should soo all move in a house together! It would be hilarious. Poor Pan, Presta is going to kick her spoiled little ass.

You know I really hadn\'t noticed how calm Trunks was during his pregnancy. Okay, so I\'m a little slow on the uptake.

...would probably write more, but I am late for class...I decided I should go this time. Last day and all...:)

Opps...forgot to vote...I adored the \"I’m handing out Ass-whuppin’s Want one?\" shirt...in fact I liked it so much that Kalika has a modified version of it in the next chapter of my fic.

Oops. Completely forgot, in my haste to post the catch-up reviews, [probably also because I\'m in a different world...wanted to get back into it all, starting with the happier stuff ] :-) But yeah, I got your e-mail, thanks for that by the way, only wish I could respond straight away, but I will find my way to the internet cafe as soon as I honestly can, it\'s not easy for me to get to, (time and travelling wise, my car recently died on me, and public transport is a complete pain). But yeah, I\leasleased that you\'re happy for me to stay. :-)

Thought I\'d read and review this, before I start on the others, seeing as how you updated again. So much to catch up on, that I don\'t want to fall behind on this story again in the process. :-)

Reviewing now...

Loved that opening scene with Gina discovering the joys of being Saiyan. Love that she is discovering the merits of having a tail, although I have a strong suspicion that she may already have discovered some of the really pleasant aspects of having one. :-)

Very glad that\'s she seems to have accepted the change in her boob size, without too much sense of loss.

Really love the way that Prestacks cks up for Bardock... sometimes, I forget that he is so young, although I did think he was older than seven months...was that a typo, or was Goten recounting some moments from the past?

Goten can be a real bastard at times to poor ol\' Bardock...is this why he has such control over him?
Would make sense...don\'t know whether to laugh at Goten\'s antics, or give in to my Aww, \'Bardock needs a cuddle\' mood...think I\'ll go with both :-D

\"...eating marshmallow crème and honey dew melons. He gave her a sticky smile and went right back to scoop the stuff into his mouth.\"

\"Dis-gust-ing.\"

LOL! Okay call me strange, but that sounds kinda yummy. :-)

\"Otherwise, he mostly rolled over, crawled on top of Vegeta and proceeded to wake his mate up to get his morning nookie.\"

I love the way this whole opening scene between Vegeta and Goku read, it felt real, I could definitely picture this, feel the warmth in the room, and the image of a sleepy eyed Goku rolling over onto his mate, with the desire for morning nookie, is heady stuff.

\"Vegeta was already perfectly naked.\"

Mmmm, perfectly naked Vegeta. Can never get enough of this image. :-)

Totally love Goku\'s \'waking up Vegeta\' technique, absolutely erotic. Loved this:

\"...Pressed his thumb into it, and looked up at Vegeta. Saw those dark eyes looking at him and grinned.\"

Totally sexy! Those beautiful, aroused, and deeply interested eyes, watching his mate worship his body...hot. :-)

\"He was a fan of all sex, but mostly he kept this one set aside for when he screwed up or when he felt that he loved Vegeta very much and wanted to express it.\"

Oh wow, I really love that Goku sets this type of lovemaking aside for these two special occassions, and Vegeta would prpbably always know which reason it is...the idea of the second reason, sometimes being the case, is so, loving and sweet. was was very touching.

Totally hot lemon! Loved this:

\"He tipped his head back and howled out his mate’s name. (Loved the way that made his sons all jittery and twitchy.) \"

LOL! Goku can be such an evil bastard sometimes...love that. :-)

\"Trunks woke up (that night after Goku had informed them all that his mate was god when it came to sex,...\"

Whoo hoo! Vegeta is a sex God...\'course, I already knew that, but it\'s always good to hear it anyway ;-)

Ahh, interesting fact about why twins\' life expectancy is noticably reduced in relation to other Saiyans. Damn, those Saiyans can be cruel bastards...glad that this should hopefully not apply to ours. s. Wondering if this is why they need to sleep so close to each other, sort of a built in instinct to never be separated from each other, even in sleep.

Goten should have warned Trunks about what he was going to be reading... sometimes, he definitely needs an arse kicking for messing with peoples heads. :-D

Looking forward to the next chapter. :-)


LOL! Yes, I can see that the twins were just completely heartbroken. :-D Although, for Goten to take even a few moments to look sad, when he could be doing better things, such as boinking Trunks, I should feel honoured. ;-) Very funny Card. I enjoyed that :-)

Poor little Bardock...subject to such cruelty..hehe
.” G.” Goten replied, “Besides, I didn’t sneak up on him, he stumbled over me. I was the one that was lying there, all nice and cozy.”
“Covered in blood…”OFL!OFL! well doesn\'t that sound cozy...and creepy.

So, Goten was just lying around somewhere, covered in blood when a seven-month-old Bardock stumbled across his brother’s body…probably in the dark. And as if that wasn’t enough trauma for the kid, Goten had then somehow scared him. --O_O oh, that is so mean. Poor little Bardock haveing to walk in on that and in the dark! That is way scary! ANd only 7 months old! awwww poor guy...

Reached across the bed, to the table on his side of it, and got the small container of fragrant oil. Dribbled it onto his mate’s chest—thats a very nice way to wake up.


Stared right into his eyes—just to give him the full extent of the ‘seduction’ here—“Fuck me?”--*still dead from all the wonderful lemons yesterday* hehe...that is very sweet of him. I was actually waiting for him to ahat.hat...^.^

Part of Goku assumed that Vegeta took some sort of sadistic pleasure out of it,--^.^ ...I love sadistic pleasure...well just Vegeta\'s sadistic pleasure...it always yum.

Grit his teeth and shook a bit—because Goku did not often like to have this sort of sex.--ROFL!!! oh but that is so sweet of him to have \'this kind\' of sex. But yeah I agree with Goku I am a fan of a delicous Goku on top. But this is very good too...very...

He tipped his head back aowleowled out his mate’s name. (Loved the way that made his sons all jittery and twitchy.) ---LMAO..that is just cruel.

Hn. That wasn’t exactly great news. But it was better than bad news.--O_O That is disturbing news!!!! Although I really did love the explantion to why saiyajins twins dont live as long. It was very good. And I do hope they never get seperated. but then again...I guess they still don\'t know what would happen either way. It is a very scary thought. Does everyone in the household know about this life expectancy thing?


You know, I think I should run a poll on which of Goten’s shirts is everyone’s favorite. --YEAH!!! you should! I love polls!

Here’s a nice oxygen mask for when you read.--THANKS!!!! *puts on oxygen mask happily* Even though I look very uncool at least I will be able to read through lemons with dying and stuff...unless I start to squeeze the oxygen tubes and the air is cut off....hehe

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-MB-

Had gotten sick of telling her the same things over and over because she wasn’t listening, because her mate was standing around with their son.--LoL that\'s kinda funny...Gina being all distracted...while trying to learn to fly. Poor Vegeta very annoyed that she isn\'t paying attention...but who would ever be able to pay attention around all of these gorgeous saiyajins?

Vegeta was annoyed. Rather annoyed actually. And horny. Never the best mix in the universe, --rofl..sounds like a rather dangerous mix if you ask me...

“Oh! Gross! Put me down!” --Rofl!!!!! Poor lil Bardock... he knew what would was going to happen...hehe he is so cute!

Loving the whole meaningful stare and what Vegeta\'s tail was doing...definately beyond drool worthy. And now I really feel bad for Bardock for having to witness that...ok I am lying I don\'t feel bad at all. I luvs it all!!!!

the one that bore the rather old scar from Vegeta—as if to ask why it was that his mate was not biting him.--love their language of sex and yes that does pose an interesting question. Well, question was just answered so nevermind...hehe

“Kakarot…”
“Mine.”
Yes. Life was fucking perfect.--yes just like this story...I will never get tired of hearing Goku say that. It always drives my mind wild!!!! as if it isncrazcrazy enough already.

(wearing an orange shirt that read: Why YES You can Blow Me) ---ROFL!!!!

“Hey, Trunks, do you want to have sex with a woman?”--O_O hehe oh to be Goten\'s mate...what a rollercoaster ride...

She made a face at them—a rather scary face—LoL aww poor Gina. I love this family so much, but I do wonder what Goten was up to...but then again I always wonder what he is up to.

Gk: Kami, I hope not. There was this one time, (at band camp) in this other fic where I had to sleep with Chichi and I’m still paying psychiatrist bills! *waves bills around wildly*--*dies laughing* gods...that was to much can\'t breathe...

Goten: Nothing. *angel halo appears, propped up by devil horns and the sky goes red and fire and brimstone appear *--heeellllpppp!!!! to much laughing going to explode...your end notes totally killed me...

Another hilarious chapter in which I almost lost all ability to breathe....

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-MB-

I loved the last two chapters. I now have the stories current on my disk, now all i have to do is remember to get it before leaving the library. lol i forgot it on monday! I\'m such a spaz. I can\'t wait for more! Give the twins my love!

Poor Trunksee Poo was worried about his mate. It was so sweet. I love the way you always manage to exhibit the \'normalacy\' of Saiyan home life. In actuality it isn\'t that different from my life. But I have lived in a house that was over flowing with cousins, siblings, aunts, and parents. It was reallly fun when I was about ten but now I would probably go crazy. *Sigh* Now I feel all nastalgic.

Review for: Chapter 14

Ahh, it\'s good to get back to this. Didn\'t realise just how much I missed these guys. :-)

I\'ll be catching up one story at a time. A lot of chapters to review.

Totally loved the opening scene. Could picture it beautifully. Loved the fact that Vegeta was holding Masuyo, had Bardock on his shoulder and he was smirking at his mate. Loved that everyone else was enjoying the joke, and I could definitely picture Goku\'s stunned expression, and if Trunks hadn\'t intervened I could see it turning to rage pretty quickly. I mean the poor Guy has been flying all around the world, dreaming of the moment when he could get home to his mate, and he\'s smacked in the jaw with the news that they\'re babysitting Masuyo... a real passion killer. Could sympathise with his disbelief, but damn, it was an hilarious leg-pull. Go Vegeta! :-D

\"Bardock jumped off Goten and ran over to hide behind Trunks.\"

LOL! Are we ever going to know Goten\'s secret? Or, is this to remain, one of the mysteries of life? ;-)

“Oh shit,” Goten said. Looke his his own hand-found that he too had gone Super Saiyan. “I hope Mom and Gina are okay.”

Hmm, that\'s interesting. I always assumed that the dominant went Super Saiyan if there was a chance that their mate could be in trouble. I didn\'t realise that this applied to all dominants when a submissive was, what? Vegeta and Gina are certainly not in danger from their mates, so, trying hard to figure this out... pause... okay, I\'m going to have to say, \'extra roughed up\', makes the only sense to me, considering I\'ve read this whole chapter and Goku\'s being pretty dominant with Vegeta... by the way... Mmmm, nice :-) But yeah, sort of makes the privacy level for these moments drop a bit... not that, that\'s ever been an issue with Goku. :-D

“With the earrings. There is no powering down for her. This is her base power level.”

Constant Super Saiyan, ouchies, sort of the Saiyan equivalent for a hyperactive child... just with a lot more potential for damage. I figure that sooner or later, she\'ll be glad for those earrings.

Yay for \'Geta, he finally got to have sex. Saiyan style to boot. I think, sort of skimmed. Just assumed with Gina being Saiyan an\' all. :-)

Oh Gods, how I missed your lemons. Wonderful stuff! Can never get enough of G/V action, or the possessive Goku, and this was as amazing as ever. :-)