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After five hours in a computer lab working on a school project - this was pure heaven to come home to! Yummmm-mmy!

WOO!!!

Lemons galore *dances*

‘lets everyone grin and laugh at the father because he was just informed that his mate decided to take care of a baby and you couldn’t fuck your mate while he was holding a newborn.’ --rofl...poor Goku. Heds sds sex!

“I wanted to fight YESTERDAY!” --LoL, I love that little girl.

“Because dominant mates go Super Saiyan when they feel any sort of threat.” --oh really...that sounds interesting at least for Vegeta, Goku, Gina and Vegeta...they should have some fun ^.^

“So, anyway, lets get this fight started. I want to kick your butt so you’ll sleep.” --she doesn\'t sleep? LoL oh gosh that is so funny...It seems as though he is really getting a dose of what he was like when he was that young...


“With the earrings. There is no powering down for her. This is her base power level.” --O_O she IS very powerful. Is there a reason she is so powerful or is it just because she is full blooded saiyajin and these things just happen sometimes? I think that is such a cool idea...and that is just her base power level...sheesh that girl is dangerous!

The teeth came out of his shoulder again, and Kakarot pulled back, moved one hand up to his shoulder to pull his whole body back against him harder. “Mine!” he said, “Mine!” ---Seems powering up for the \'threat\' has made him extremely possesive!

And thank you for such delicous lemons...they were very yummy.

And I think I might have actually worked up the nerve to do it, if you still wanted to read.)--@_@ AH!!!! *does a dance and flips* ARE YOU KIDDING?!?!?!? DO you EVEN have to ASK!?!?!?!!? of COURSE I WANT TO READ IT!!!!! I have been dying to read about the twins kiss!!! *drools* You are so very awesome....you have no idea... *hugs you* YAY!!!!
*eyes sparkle with pure delight*

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Sometimes a nice little informative chapter is cool...but there will be banging, right? Soon?

Vegeta and Gina are such a sweet couple. I really loved when he said he wouldn\'t have done anything anyway and he really meant it...awww.

I am so very glad that Presta is ok and equally as glad the th twins decided to mettle with the time machine in the first place.

Wanted to bang his head into the ground and find some brilliant way to get around this hurdle.---LoL, No there is no way out! I am glad he explained to Trunks, and I am glad they made up and hopefully Trunks is now pregnant.

Wondered just what the hell he was going to do with a brood of daughters. (Probably spend a great deal of time keeping them locked up in a basement where they could not even think of boys much less date them.)--ROFL...spoken like a true father...I think that it is so great that Goten will have all girls.

“Apparently you are a different sort of person entirely in the other world.” There was a smirk there, because there had been some very crude jokes about ‘Kaki’ who was Kakarot (as he would have been if he had never left the Saiyan culture, apparently.)--Glad that Vegeta can still for the most part understand his native tongue. It\'s fun to see them react to hearing about their alternate selves..so strange. Especially for Goku...seeing that Kakarott from the other dimension is totally different from Goku!

“Because in her world, I am the King.”
And this made the pout turn back into a lechs grs grin. “Mmmmm. King.” --LoL, aww that is so cute...he deserves sex. How can Vegeta say no to him?

Lil’Geta: That was five minutes ago.--LoL

(You know, one day Goku’s going to figure out how to do this and poor Vegeta will have to regret his words.)--rofl *gasp* I hope he never figures that out.

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Goku\'s thoughts as he was flying around looking for the dragonballs was hilarious. I wonder if he grumbled the whole time? :-D Loved this bit best of all:

\"His mate had just better be expecting to not leave their room for many, many, many, many, many hours. Days.\"
\"Hell, maybe weeks.\"
\"Maybe MONTHS.\"

LOL! Goku\'s so funny when he\'s horny. He cracks me up :-)

Really enjoyed the scene with Goten and Presta. Love how he\'s trying to work and she keeps bothering him with questions about training, and he\'s fully aware that all of this is probably amusing the hell out of his mother.

Loved this:
“What about Grandma?”

Grandma. LOL! Not quite how I picture the delectable Vegeta...but hilarious nonetheless :-D

Ah, Bardock is simply the cutest. Loved how he got all scared up on that top shelf and then Vegeta came in and got him down and patted his head to reassure him. Loved how Bardock curled up all happy and safe in his mother\'s arms. Just too sweet for words :-)

\"Presta huffed. “You guys are boring.”\"

ROTFL! Yeah, I guess after the third class troops she grew up around, this lot would look a bit tame. Who\'da thought :-D

Loved \'Geta\'s thoughts as he pondered his current life and lack of sexual activity therein. Really loved this:

\"Gina did, but she would just give him a sad little pat and say that she was really happy he was being so patient. Yeah. Right. Whatever.\"

LOL! to to see that he\'s being so patient and good natured about it. :-D

“Mom said she’d watch him.”

She? LOL!

So, soon Gina will be a Saiyan. Interested in seeing how she adapts. Really enjoyed this chapter.

Looking forward to the next. :-)

Loved the end dialogue. Especially this:

\"Lil’Geta: HATE. Card HATES me. I never get laid.\"
\"Gk: Me either.\"
\"Lil’Geta: OH WHATEVER!\"

ROTFL! Goku is a complete crack-up :-D

I\'m reviewing this because I figured that I should review at least one of your stories since you\'re my fave dbz goku/veggie writer. the twins have just stolen my heart and veggie and trunks already had it so i think you\'re safe there. Bardock is so cute. i can\'t wait to see the reaction to a Saiyan Gina. but alas i will have to wait until monday to see the new updates. . Le.

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Great chappie!

“Because I’m a little Red.”--hehe that is cute...

Apparently Pinkie’s just like her.”
“It’s just Pink,” she hissed. ---spicy little thing isn\'t she? Hehe, our dogs name is Pink and we call her Pinkie all the time oh and Pinko...not that you care but that just reminded me...

No sex ever again. --Poor Trunks...I really do feel badly for him, but I was laughing at the same time. Because of when he said Goten probably has another mate stored away somewhere...but still sad. I don\'t want him to feel that way.

I’m glad my ass provided so many hours of happy reflection for him,” Trunks snapped.--LoL...awww I hope he isn\'t upset for long. Although he has a right to be...

“Him?” she demanded, “You cannot be serious.”--hehe omg! *slaps forehead* This kid has no idea what she is talking about...it\'s cute. And I love how she was giggling and calling him Kaki and he was getting annoyed....
“Did you think you were the only Super Saiyan here?” ---rofl!!!! She thought she was 1 of only 3 super saiyajins? I luv her!

Weren’t those damn kids gone yet?--rofl!!!! Impatient...

And sorry if my responses seemed rushed, haven’t written the cha to to The Meaning of Pride yet (bad me) and I need to do that. *runs off *--you need not worry about that...look at how many fics your handling. I just hope you are getting enough sleep and stuff...
But thank you for a wonderful chap...

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Pleased to see that Gina and Vegeta seem to have their own room. I really liked the atmosphere you created as they stood looking out the window at the activities below, whilst they quietly spoke together of the recent events. It had (for want of a better expression) an \'after the storm\' feel to it.

Glad that Goten gave Trunks the chance to work through his anger, and that everything is right between them again. Knew that Trunks wouldn\'t hold out for long...just like his dad :-D

Ooo, yeah! I do believe that we have a pregnant Trunks. :-)

Always love the G/V moments. Love Goku\'s reaction when he found out that Vegeta was King in Presta\'s universe...

\"And this made the pout turn back into a lecherous grin. “Mmmmm. King.”\"

LOL! I see that Goku is remembering his previous fantasy :-D

\"Instead of getting up the old fashion way and crossing the whole FOUR FOOT, the idiot IT’ed right next to him, wrapped his arms around him and smiled like the lecherous demon he was. “But, Veeegeeetaaaa,” he whined.\"

LOL! Well it\'s a whole four foot and his energy is needed eherehere. ;-)

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Enjoyed the end dialogue :-)

\"...Goten should have said ‘Dad’s mom’ but I messed it up and put GOKU there! *continues to sob * I’m so sorry!
*composure is instantly regained. * Anywho, I’m glad you’re kind of liking Presta.\"

LOL! Yeah, Presta seems pretty nice and a good companion for Bardock. :-)

Very interested in how you can weave an entire chapter or story around a single sentence or scene. I find that pretty amazing. I need to have an idea of what I\'m looking for and then I go go from there, but the amount of times, I find myself having to go back and fix up a scene or something is one of the many reasons I don\'t plan on posting until I finish. So yeah, I am deeply impressed that you can just keep going and never need to go back, because you can just keep it flowing...and sometimes, just from a single sentence. Deeply, deeply impressed. :-)

Okay, Poor Trunks. Not a good way to find out that your mate has a child. Don\'t blame Goten for the way he acted before he went to get Presta. He couldn\'t tell Trunks about her, because he didn\'t remember (am wondering if \'Geta forgot as well), and when he remembered, the sense of urgency was too great for him to sit his mate down and give him the details, but for someone (who we now know) can show deep concern and respect for loved ones, he sure wasn\'t doing too well by Trunks after he returned.

\"A little red? She didn’t look red.\"

LOL! Loved Trunks\' annoyed confusion.

“Red is Grandma’s name—uh, Goku’s mom. Apparently Pinkie’s just like her.”

Okay, a little confused by this. Why is he calling his dad \'Goku\' I know that they can\'t call him by his name (and am assuming that they think of him as Kakarot, as that is what their mum calls him) I\'m just surprised at the use of his Earth name is all, and so, is very curious.

“I still don’t understand how you’re going to get a man pregnant. But I guess it’s none of my business.”

LOL! Kinda liking Presta. :-)

\"Ha. As if Goten was going to get within five fucking feet of him, much less get close enough to get him pregnant. Asshole. Just let him suffer. No sex ever again.\"

LOL! I really love this...He and Vegeta could hold a little competition, play Goten and Goku\'s game, see who can hold out on their threats the longest? :-D

\"Bardock scrambled over from his mother to Trunks, climbed up onto his shoulder and whispered in his ear: “I don’t like her either.” Nodded solemnly.\"

LOL! Ah, Bardock baby, so sweet, so young, so jealous...gotta love the little guy. Loved the imagery. :-D

Totally loved the way \'Geta was with Trunks. Loved that he took him away from everything and tried to comfort him with telling him how much he really means to Goten. Loved this:

“...Once he found you he didn’t even think about anything else.”

\"“That’s a huge fucking comfort. I’m glad my ass provided so many hours of happy reflection for him,” Trunks snapped.\"*chu*chuckle* That\'s the spirit Trunks. I like the fact that Trunks is not so angsty in this fic, like that he is even a little awed still, by this lot, even Gina I think...(I can sense his amazement still, over their somewhat carefree attitudes) but I am deeply pleased that he\'s settling down enough, allowing the blistered emotions of his past to heal enough, that he is now starting to stand up for his rights. Goten does need an arse-kick for this.

\"“I hope he really enjoys thinking about it.” There was the understood ‘because he’s never touching it again’ and he had to pause and wonder just how many times his mother had told his father the same thing. That never worked out.\"

LOL! I know, but it\'s so sweet that they actually believe it at the time they say it. :-D

Thought that \'Geta was right in telling Trunks what was to be Presta\'s fate, if he and Goten hadn\'terfterfered. Really liked the way he was with Trunks...and it doesn\'t surprise me that \'Geta secretly admires Trunks...I sort of get a Piccolo/Vegeta friendship type of thing, between these two.

\"Would give her a few days to get over the ‘must giggle at Goku’ thing before he got annoyed.\"

LOL! Totally love Goku\'s thoughts. I\'m hoping for some fun here. :-)

“Oh, well the they say, you ain’t seen nothing yet.”

Yup! That should stop the giggling.)
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Totally loved Bardock growling and sneering at Presta from up on his mother\'s shoulders and Loved Vegeta\'s amusement at it all. Had a wonderful picture of it in my minds eye. :-)

\"Presta—he didn’t think he would call her Pink despite what she said—\"

Yup! Very Vegeta. Like this. :-)

Loved the scene with Bardock, Presta and the stones. amazed that he seemed to be looking for permission from his mother - that definitely seems like a first - but it was cute, I liked it. :-)

\"But then again, in her universe, Vegeta was the King and you didn’t go around dissing the king.\"

Ooo, King. Yeah! Love how you show the Saiyan respect for their monarchy, (although the previous King didn\'t bloody deserve it). Hopefully this means that our Vegeta is doing good. ;-)

\"He looked at Vegeta and thought that Vegeta would be a great King....\"

Love Goku\'s thoughts about Vegeta and his heritage...loved his description of his mate. :-)

Enjoyed this part at the end of his thoughts...

\"...To strip away all the robes of office and see that underneath it all he was still the same Vegeta that moaned his name and felt so… Weren’t those damn kids gone yet?\"

LOL! Can\'t keep his mind from wandering back to his favourite activity...gotta love that. :-D

\"(Goten and Trunks were actually in the middle of a fistfight just a mile or so away.)\"

Yeah, time to show that you\'re still a warrior ks. ks. :-)

\"Yeah, yeah, whatever, Goku thought, you can object all you want. We both know you don’t mean a word of it.\"

LOL! Don\'t often see this side of Goku. He\'s usually too horny to think straight, I kinda liked this.

\"Another groan rumbled out of the chest under him, and he felt Vegeta’s hips lift up against him, felt legs go around him, and was pulled in deeper and grinned at that.\"

Damnit! That Vegeta is one sexy, highly responsive Saiyan. :-) ovedoved the lemon. Short but sweet. Very nice. :-)

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Loved the end dialogue. :-)

\"Hopefully Trunks’ reaction was humorous.\"

Yes, I thought so anyway. Really liked how he took it actually. Most of his anger was born out of confusion, and a small sense of betrayal, so it was totally understandable that he was pissed, but I loved his thoughts and sarcastic responses to \'Geta...Now there\'s that bit of his father, that I loo muo much :-)

\"And sorry if my responses seemed rushed, haven’t written the chapter to The Meaning of Pride yet (bad me) and I need to do that. *runs off *\"

Even more impressed with just how quickly you can write out a chapter, and it never fails to please...can understand the speed, if it sucked, but yours never do...very impressed. :-)

It seems Presta and Bardock are getting along quite well.

Since Trunks is currently a demi (have they used the dragonballs on Gina yet?), and Goten\'s going the get him
pregnant, I bet Goten would be surprised to have a boy, sinceis gis going to have all girls, VegeVegeta Jr. is
goinghavehave all boys. (Or is he?) Hehe.