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March 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
so when are we gonna see the next chapter? i truely hope soon. loving it, though!
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May 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Reviewing chapter 17
Ah, I like how you connected this universe even further with the \"Hormone Therapy\" universe, by having that bond control thing going on between Vegeta and Kakarot. I ly lly liked the whole after affect of the claim. Kakarot was still in some sort of angry shock, and Vegeta seemed to be totally stunneThe The fact that Vegeta was sort of struggling with his new-found need for dominance, was kinda sweet, I don\'t know if it was meant to be, and I doubt that Kat sat saw it that way... but... it was sweet. :-)
So, Vegeta (on a conscious level) didn\'t mean to claim, and Kakarot is not able to \'even; the bond out, because Vegeta is royalty. What a pickle.
Love how Vegeta has no idea about all of this, and needs to explain the details of being bonded.
Feltrediredibly sad over that story about the girl who had to wait for her mate, and he never returned, and so she more than likely died. That\'s horrible. :-(
\"But then again, being mated to a King could not be that awful.\"
\"Could it?\"
Being mated to Vegeta would be wonderful... sigh. Being mated to a King... not so, not for someone who is used to being outdoors, fighting and doing what he pretty much pleases...
\"“Great look,” Red said...\"
\"“Oh leave me alone,” Kakarot said. Pouted.\"
LOL! Sort of feel for him here... but then again, he\'s the one that made the first move. :-D
\"“Laugh if you will,” he said, turned to look at Kakarot—smiled—and then said—knew ins instinct, bonding and tradition would not fail him—“Ascend.” Turned back to his father. “You are going to die here. Today.” Rose his own power level as he heard Kakarot scream felt the tear of power around him, and the flash of bright yellow light.\"
Really liked this. Love how r bor bond allowed him to know that Kakarot could ascend, and he just told him too, and naturally, he did it... that command stuff comes in handy sometimes. :-)
Really loved that he waited to be befors fas father before he did this... seems he\'s got a bit of the showman in him... plus, he really wanted his father to wet himself, I think... loved this. :-)
\"“Remember these, father?” he asked.\"
\"“You should have died with Freiza,” the king snapped.\"
“And you should have realized I always come back.”
I liked this. No, big long-winded speeches. Straight to the point, and then the death blow.
“Didn’t think we’d let you show off without seeing what you could do,” Vegeta (the twin) said, “Did you?”
Yay! The twins returned to watch the action. Love this! :-)
\"“Oh, kill them already,” Vegeta snapped.\"
\"Kakarot turned around and looked at him, pouted a little.\"
LOL! Poor Kakarot, he just wanted his fun. :-)
Really surprised that Vegeta didn\'t kill Cooler. He and Kakarot really have switched personalities in this one... :-)
“I’ll see you pay for what you’ve done!”
\"Vegeta snorted. “No you won’t. Shut up and sit down moron.” Was pleased when his mate stood at his side and did not, in fact, take that he was the moron. That would have been extremely embarrassing.\"
ROTFL!
Enjoyed this chapter. Going on to read the ogueogue.
Really loved the end dialogue. :-D
Ah, I like how you connected this universe even further with the \"Hormone Therapy\" universe, by having that bond control thing going on between Vegeta and Kakarot. I ly lly liked the whole after affect of the claim. Kakarot was still in some sort of angry shock, and Vegeta seemed to be totally stunneThe The fact that Vegeta was sort of struggling with his new-found need for dominance, was kinda sweet, I don\'t know if it was meant to be, and I doubt that Kat sat saw it that way... but... it was sweet. :-)
So, Vegeta (on a conscious level) didn\'t mean to claim, and Kakarot is not able to \'even; the bond out, because Vegeta is royalty. What a pickle.
Love how Vegeta has no idea about all of this, and needs to explain the details of being bonded.
Feltrediredibly sad over that story about the girl who had to wait for her mate, and he never returned, and so she more than likely died. That\'s horrible. :-(
\"But then again, being mated to a King could not be that awful.\"
\"Could it?\"
Being mated to Vegeta would be wonderful... sigh. Being mated to a King... not so, not for someone who is used to being outdoors, fighting and doing what he pretty much pleases...
\"“Great look,” Red said...\"
\"“Oh leave me alone,” Kakarot said. Pouted.\"
LOL! Sort of feel for him here... but then again, he\'s the one that made the first move. :-D
\"“Laugh if you will,” he said, turned to look at Kakarot—smiled—and then said—knew ins instinct, bonding and tradition would not fail him—“Ascend.” Turned back to his father. “You are going to die here. Today.” Rose his own power level as he heard Kakarot scream felt the tear of power around him, and the flash of bright yellow light.\"
Really liked this. Love how r bor bond allowed him to know that Kakarot could ascend, and he just told him too, and naturally, he did it... that command stuff comes in handy sometimes. :-)
Really loved that he waited to be befors fas father before he did this... seems he\'s got a bit of the showman in him... plus, he really wanted his father to wet himself, I think... loved this. :-)
\"“Remember these, father?” he asked.\"
\"“You should have died with Freiza,” the king snapped.\"
“And you should have realized I always come back.”
I liked this. No, big long-winded speeches. Straight to the point, and then the death blow.
“Didn’t think we’d let you show off without seeing what you could do,” Vegeta (the twin) said, “Did you?”
Yay! The twins returned to watch the action. Love this! :-)
\"“Oh, kill them already,” Vegeta snapped.\"
\"Kakarot turned around and looked at him, pouted a little.\"
LOL! Poor Kakarot, he just wanted his fun. :-)
Really surprised that Vegeta didn\'t kill Cooler. He and Kakarot really have switched personalities in this one... :-)
“I’ll see you pay for what you’ve done!”
\"Vegeta snorted. “No you won’t. Shut up and sit down moron.” Was pleased when his mate stood at his side and did not, in fact, take that he was the moron. That would have been extremely embarrassing.\"
ROTFL!
Enjoyed this chapter. Going on to read the ogueogue.
Really loved the end dialogue. :-D
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May 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Reviewing epilogue: \"Echoes\"
\"~2 Months Post King Vegeta’s Coronation~\"
Pleased to see that Vegeta didn\'t forget who had helped him, and his giving Red and Bardock dominion of two planets was a nice touch.
Loved this:
\"...When he did manage to scribble out a message to them it didn’t generally say much other than ‘THIS IS BORING’\"
LOL! Oh, poor Kakarot... politics bores the shit out of me too. So, nobody is allowed to spar with Kakarot? Or is it that nobody wants to, because he is the King\'s mate? Either way, that\'s gotta be hard.
Glad that Saima sticks up for Kakarot... I don\'t think that Vegeta would approve of everyone seeing his mate this way.
\"...because there was no way in hell she was going to have waited all of her life to have a kid and then have it FUCKING DIE on her like that...\"
Can understand Saima\'s fear, this is not a good time for her to be alone and it was good to see Goten arrived in time for the birth, this would have calmed her a fair bit. So, he sensed this all the way from his own universe? That\'s a pretty strong bond he\'s got there with his child. :-)
Saima\'s panic over giving birth to a Super Saiyan child was very realistic, but I sincerely hope that she\'s just panicking over how the King would react. I really couldn\'t see Vegeta getting rid of her, or taking her off of her, and I would hate to think that he would.
\"~~5 months~~\"
\"Somehow, tossing a fucking plastic ball at the ceiling just wasn’t as entertaining as living in 3rd class camp.\"
LOL! Ya think?
Ah, I can\'t believe that all Kakarot does is wait for a fuck, surely there has to be more to his life than this? I couldn\'t bear that, and I\'m not a warrior...
\"Had beat the crap out of the first person that had complemented him on his ‘robes of office.’\"
LOL! Yep, this is more Kakarot. :-)
\"That incident had gotten him a smirk from the King ofyansyans, and Vegeta told him not to disfigure or paralyze any of them. Hadn’t even told him not to beat them up. (And Kakarot was starting to think that Vegeta didn’t give a damn if he went around beating up the scum-sucking suck ups.)\"
Vegeta seems to be okay with Kakarot having his fun. :-) I\'m not sure if Kakarot is just wallowing in a bit of self-pity or not at this point, and so is thinking mainly of reasons for why his life sucks. I sort of hope so, because I would hate to think that he\'s not happy with the King... I want my happy ending. :-)
\"So he was mated. To a King. To an ascended King. There were worse things he could have been mated to.\"
\"Frogs. Rats. Humans. That sort of thing.\"
LOL! Rotten bastard :-D
“Have you spent your whole day in here?”
“No,” he replied petulantly, “I ate lunch in the kitchen.”
Yep! Methinks that Kakarot is still feeling a bit put out about being claimed, and is determined not to enjoy his life in the palace. Good, I didn\'t think that Vegeta would expect him to do nothing but sit around and wait for him to get \'home\'. :-)
\"...After five months, Vegeta had finally learned to be careful with what he said—because, quite frankly—he accidentally told Kakarot to do some very interesting things.\"
LOL! Would love to know what these were, but I guess that Kakarot\'s not telling. ;-)
“Why? I thought they were perfect.”
“I’m perfect,” Vegeta said—smirked—“They’re mediocre.”
*Chuckle* Yes, he is. :-)
I\'m glad that Kakarot has been put in charge of training the elites... it will give him a nice outlet for his aggression. :-)
\"...yeah, Vegeta got his dominant moods every now and again, but mostly he was perfectly happy to let Kakarot take charge. Pampered ass King.\"
LOL!. Love this. :-)
\"Kissed him and felt his tail seeking outeta’eta’s, felt them wrap up together.\"
Ah, totally loved this... so, in spite of Kakarot\'s \'inner whining\' (*chuckle*), he truly loves Vegeta, and vice versa... I loved this. :-)
Really enjoyed this story Card... and I hope that one day you will do an extra epilogue, I would love to read that... I am always ready to read more of this world. :-)
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\"~2 Months Post King Vegeta’s Coronation~\"
Pleased to see that Vegeta didn\'t forget who had helped him, and his giving Red and Bardock dominion of two planets was a nice touch.
Loved this:
\"...When he did manage to scribble out a message to them it didn’t generally say much other than ‘THIS IS BORING’\"
LOL! Oh, poor Kakarot... politics bores the shit out of me too. So, nobody is allowed to spar with Kakarot? Or is it that nobody wants to, because he is the King\'s mate? Either way, that\'s gotta be hard.
Glad that Saima sticks up for Kakarot... I don\'t think that Vegeta would approve of everyone seeing his mate this way.
\"...because there was no way in hell she was going to have waited all of her life to have a kid and then have it FUCKING DIE on her like that...\"
Can understand Saima\'s fear, this is not a good time for her to be alone and it was good to see Goten arrived in time for the birth, this would have calmed her a fair bit. So, he sensed this all the way from his own universe? That\'s a pretty strong bond he\'s got there with his child. :-)
Saima\'s panic over giving birth to a Super Saiyan child was very realistic, but I sincerely hope that she\'s just panicking over how the King would react. I really couldn\'t see Vegeta getting rid of her, or taking her off of her, and I would hate to think that he would.
\"~~5 months~~\"
\"Somehow, tossing a fucking plastic ball at the ceiling just wasn’t as entertaining as living in 3rd class camp.\"
LOL! Ya think?
Ah, I can\'t believe that all Kakarot does is wait for a fuck, surely there has to be more to his life than this? I couldn\'t bear that, and I\'m not a warrior...
\"Had beat the crap out of the first person that had complemented him on his ‘robes of office.’\"
LOL! Yep, this is more Kakarot. :-)
\"That incident had gotten him a smirk from the King ofyansyans, and Vegeta told him not to disfigure or paralyze any of them. Hadn’t even told him not to beat them up. (And Kakarot was starting to think that Vegeta didn’t give a damn if he went around beating up the scum-sucking suck ups.)\"
Vegeta seems to be okay with Kakarot having his fun. :-) I\'m not sure if Kakarot is just wallowing in a bit of self-pity or not at this point, and so is thinking mainly of reasons for why his life sucks. I sort of hope so, because I would hate to think that he\'s not happy with the King... I want my happy ending. :-)
\"So he was mated. To a King. To an ascended King. There were worse things he could have been mated to.\"
\"Frogs. Rats. Humans. That sort of thing.\"
LOL! Rotten bastard :-D
“Have you spent your whole day in here?”
“No,” he replied petulantly, “I ate lunch in the kitchen.”
Yep! Methinks that Kakarot is still feeling a bit put out about being claimed, and is determined not to enjoy his life in the palace. Good, I didn\'t think that Vegeta would expect him to do nothing but sit around and wait for him to get \'home\'. :-)
\"...After five months, Vegeta had finally learned to be careful with what he said—because, quite frankly—he accidentally told Kakarot to do some very interesting things.\"
LOL! Would love to know what these were, but I guess that Kakarot\'s not telling. ;-)
“Why? I thought they were perfect.”
“I’m perfect,” Vegeta said—smirked—“They’re mediocre.”
*Chuckle* Yes, he is. :-)
I\'m glad that Kakarot has been put in charge of training the elites... it will give him a nice outlet for his aggression. :-)
\"...yeah, Vegeta got his dominant moods every now and again, but mostly he was perfectly happy to let Kakarot take charge. Pampered ass King.\"
LOL!. Love this. :-)
\"Kissed him and felt his tail seeking outeta’eta’s, felt them wrap up together.\"
Ah, totally loved this... so, in spite of Kakarot\'s \'inner whining\' (*chuckle*), he truly loves Vegeta, and vice versa... I loved this. :-)
Really enjoyed this story Card... and I hope that one day you will do an extra epilogue, I would love to read that... I am always ready to read more of this world. :-)
Don\'t sweat on not being able to respond to the reviews. It\'s great that you respond at all, it\'s not something that you have to do. So it\'s okay when you can\'t. :-)
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May 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Awww!!!
Very epilepilogue!
Vegeta smacked his brother on the back of the head. “Show-off.”--LMAO awil pil presta is born
Had beat the crap out of the first person that had complemented him on his ‘robes of office.’ --rofl!!! He is so mean.
Not the sort of news that made him all happy for very long. Yeah. Babies. Could he fight now?--hehe is this all he thinks about...well that and sex.
Frogs. Rats. Humans. That sort of thing.--@_@ *is offended* I\'m human!!!!! How dare he put me in the same sentence as a frog or rat! -_-
Very funny chap...sorry for the sucky review I just gote wre writing my stupid 15 page report and it is 4:30 a.m.
I am so sleepy....
^.*
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Very epilepilogue!
Vegeta smacked his brother on the back of the head. “Show-off.”--LMAO awil pil presta is born
Had beat the crap out of the first person that had complemented him on his ‘robes of office.’ --rofl!!! He is so mean.
Not the sort of news that made him all happy for very long. Yeah. Babies. Could he fight now?--hehe is this all he thinks about...well that and sex.
Frogs. Rats. Humans. That sort of thing.--@_@ *is offended* I\'m human!!!!! How dare he put me in the same sentence as a frog or rat! -_-
Very funny chap...sorry for the sucky review I just gote wre writing my stupid 15 page report and it is 4:30 a.m.
I am so sleepy....
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May 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Aww...That was so cute.
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May 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
A sequel would be ...nice? desperately needed? mandatory? Just imagine all the trouble Kakarot could get into with the Elites? And Presta has some pretty interesting memories about Kaki... don\'t you want to tell us where they came from? *sigh* It\'s not fair to ask - I realize that - since you have multiple fics on a daily schedule already but your worlds are so interesting that I can\'t get enough!
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April 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
(this is chibi_no_oujo witha face lift...*snerks*)...oh no!...not much bloodiness at all!...what happened?...*thinks the king was mostly pathetic*...and the way cooler died!...epp!...oh well...i loved in any case...especially and obediant kaki...heh...*thinks veggie-chan should always have an obedient kaki*...anyway...
toodlepip!...^_^
toodlepip!...^_^
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April 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Sorry Card. My day didn\'t go anywhere near how I planned. I will get down to the IC tomorrow and let you know what happened, but on the up side... my computers up and running again, and I can review again :-)
Review for: Chapter 13
Really like the opening scene with Vegeta and the twins. Love how he sneered at them before he removed his shirt, could visualise this, even managed to see a much younger looking Vegeta. :-) Love how he referred to Goten as \'the twin\' :-D
\"...the twin always let him take time to sleep and to have sex with the idiot...\"
LOL!
Well \'Geta certainly knew the right things to say to get Vegeta\'s rage up and running... still. not surprising really... he\'s his son after all :-)
Wow, he killed him? Looks like \'Geta angered Vegeta a little too well. Just as well they have that \'bringing each other back from the dead\' thing going for them. Still, I suppose they had counted on that.
Loved this:
“Well, Congrats, Princey-poo. You’re a Super Saiyan now.”
LOL! \"Princey-poo.\" :-D
“Well, you don’t look awake. Its no fun to have sex with someone’s who sleeping.”
\"A snort. “Only you would know that.”\"
ROTFL!
\"“Why the change?” he asked. Wasn’t protesting really, but Vegeta had mostly done the ‘here I am, aren’t I cute, and yes I think you should fuck me you bigong ong man you’ thing.\"
LOL! Yes, and I so love that. :-)
Enjoyed this, some fun moments, and I especially enjoyed the scene with Vegeta and the twins.
On towards the next chapter :-)
Totally loved the end dialogue. :-D
Review for: Chapter 13
Really like the opening scene with Vegeta and the twins. Love how he sneered at them before he removed his shirt, could visualise this, even managed to see a much younger looking Vegeta. :-) Love how he referred to Goten as \'the twin\' :-D
\"...the twin always let him take time to sleep and to have sex with the idiot...\"
LOL!
Well \'Geta certainly knew the right things to say to get Vegeta\'s rage up and running... still. not surprising really... he\'s his son after all :-)
Wow, he killed him? Looks like \'Geta angered Vegeta a little too well. Just as well they have that \'bringing each other back from the dead\' thing going for them. Still, I suppose they had counted on that.
Loved this:
“Well, Congrats, Princey-poo. You’re a Super Saiyan now.”
LOL! \"Princey-poo.\" :-D
“Well, you don’t look awake. Its no fun to have sex with someone’s who sleeping.”
\"A snort. “Only you would know that.”\"
ROTFL!
\"“Why the change?” he asked. Wasn’t protesting really, but Vegeta had mostly done the ‘here I am, aren’t I cute, and yes I think you should fuck me you bigong ong man you’ thing.\"
LOL! Yes, and I so love that. :-)
Enjoyed this, some fun moments, and I especially enjoyed the scene with Vegeta and the twins.
On towards the next chapter :-)
Totally loved the end dialogue. :-D
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April 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Review for: ter ter 14
Loved the lemon. Loved how they bantered with each other. Loved that Kakarot went from feeling a semblence of annoyance, due to how Vegeta was smirking over, how he was making him (Kakarot) react, - to, considering that everything about Vegeta was perfect. The change of position between the two, and how they both felt about this, was very well done. Loved how Vegeta \"felt like an idiot virgin boy.\" LOL!
Ooo, really like the way that you incorporated the interlude \"The Memory\" into this... very nicely done, very smooth... so it was at this point that it all happened...
Bardock and Red aren\'t the only ones feeling sad that the twins are leaving, I\'m so going to miss them. :-(
Looks like somethng is happening between Radditz and Saima... could actually see this happening earlier on the fic, but then I sort of forgot about it. I\'m happy for them, but Radditz sex just isn\'t the same unless Vegeta\'s there... *sigh*
Good chapter. Onto the next. :-)
\"Yeah, and everyone (who read Cross-eyed) knows that Vegeta (lil’geta) is afraid of dying. So he must really like his Mommy to let Prince Vegeta kill him like that.\"
Oh poop. I can\'t believe that I overlooked this! Of course, Yeah, \'Geta has this big thing about death... Oh that really makes what he did, such a brave act... and he did it for his \'mum\' love the little guy, he\'s so sweet. :-)
Loved the lemon. Loved how they bantered with each other. Loved that Kakarot went from feeling a semblence of annoyance, due to how Vegeta was smirking over, how he was making him (Kakarot) react, - to, considering that everything about Vegeta was perfect. The change of position between the two, and how they both felt about this, was very well done. Loved how Vegeta \"felt like an idiot virgin boy.\" LOL!
Ooo, really like the way that you incorporated the interlude \"The Memory\" into this... very nicely done, very smooth... so it was at this point that it all happened...
Bardock and Red aren\'t the only ones feeling sad that the twins are leaving, I\'m so going to miss them. :-(
Looks like somethng is happening between Radditz and Saima... could actually see this happening earlier on the fic, but then I sort of forgot about it. I\'m happy for them, but Radditz sex just isn\'t the same unless Vegeta\'s there... *sigh*
Good chapter. Onto the next. :-)
\"Yeah, and everyone (who read Cross-eyed) knows that Vegeta (lil’geta) is afraid of dying. So he must really like his Mommy to let Prince Vegeta kill him like that.\"
Oh poop. I can\'t believe that I overlooked this! Of course, Yeah, \'Geta has this big thing about death... Oh that really makes what he did, such a brave act... and he did it for his \'mum\' love the little guy, he\'s so sweet. :-)
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April 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Really liked the way that Kakarot was feeling. Kakarot is the one that was raised to believe that he would be the Super Saiyan, and now he was feeling a hate for the Prince, who just seemed to get all this massive power out of nowhere, with help from the twins, and bingo, Super Saiyan Prince Vegeta. Yeah, really like the role reversal. Nice twist. :-)
\"“What’s wrong?” he demanded. Didn’t really care. Didn’t want to know, really, because as cas caught up in his own dilemma. Didn’t want to have to go ‘oh, that’s too bad’ and pat her on the back. Unless he got sex out of it. That would be okay.\"
LOL! Kakarot, really is a bastard in this. Poor Saima\'s not going to get a scrap of sympathy here... not unless she puts out, that is. Shouldn\'t laugh, I know, but this was funny. :-D
Love how \'broken up\' Kakarot was over the twins departure. :-D Gotta say, I really like this side of \'Goku\' :-)
Really liked the farewell scene between the twins and Vegeta. It was touching, without being mushy. Gonna really miss them though. :-(
Although her attitude can be a bit annoying at times, I have to admire how Red thinks she can take on a Super Saiyan. Shades of Vgeta. :-)
“Save it kid,” Red said to him, “We’re movint int in two days. Save it for then.”
Liked this! She seemed to sense what was going through the Prince\'s mind at that point, and her advice was good... I sometimes forget just how young Veges ins in this. :-)
Hey, Radditz got to have sex... I\'m glad that he\'s there for Saima, she definitely seemed a little lost...
Enjoyed this chapter. Onto the next.
Loved the end dialogue :-)
\"“What’s wrong?” he demanded. Didn’t really care. Didn’t want to know, really, because as cas caught up in his own dilemma. Didn’t want to have to go ‘oh, that’s too bad’ and pat her on the back. Unless he got sex out of it. That would be okay.\"
LOL! Kakarot, really is a bastard in this. Poor Saima\'s not going to get a scrap of sympathy here... not unless she puts out, that is. Shouldn\'t laugh, I know, but this was funny. :-D
Love how \'broken up\' Kakarot was over the twins departure. :-D Gotta say, I really like this side of \'Goku\' :-)
Really liked the farewell scene between the twins and Vegeta. It was touching, without being mushy. Gonna really miss them though. :-(
Although her attitude can be a bit annoying at times, I have to admire how Red thinks she can take on a Super Saiyan. Shades of Vgeta. :-)
“Save it kid,” Red said to him, “We’re movint int in two days. Save it for then.”
Liked this! She seemed to sense what was going through the Prince\'s mind at that point, and her advice was good... I sometimes forget just how young Veges ins in this. :-)
Hey, Radditz got to have sex... I\'m glad that he\'s there for Saima, she definitely seemed a little lost...
Enjoyed this chapter. Onto the next.
Loved the end dialogue :-)