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April 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Review for: Chapter 16
Really liked this:
\"...‘yes. He was the Prince.’ Good. Now to remind his father...\"
There\'s that Vegeta that I know and love. :-)
\"Vegeta’s mission was simple. Kill the King. Break him open and spread his blood everywhere, call out the challenge and initiate the fight. Ascend and defeat. Not exactly rocket science.\"
LOL! Not really, but I\'m sure that Vegeta will manage to split a few atoms along the way.
\"He had this vision of himself trying to fight his father and tripping on the beard he had accidentally grown in all the time it took for them to inch their way to the fight.\"
LOL! Gotta love a man who possesses a great sense of irony.
Hmm, yeanfornfortunately, what Vegeta was thinking in regards to the caste system, is probably the only way to look at things (until a better way is found), no matter how unfair it is for us poor bloody workers... Still dreaming of a world where Plato\'s utopian vision, actually becomes a viable reality for everyone...*sigh*
\"But sex did seem like a good idea, nonetheless.\"
*Chuckle* Yeah, way better than training. ;-)
\"He felt a bit silly just standing there, naked and thinking lecherous thought about whe woe would soon be doing (hopefully.)\"
LOL!
\"Ankarokarot closed his eyes, curled his hands into tight fists, his body shook a little and he grated the words out like they were causing him pain. “That you’d claim me.”\"
Liked the way that you played this scene out, it was very well done. I could sense the shift in Vegeta, and Kakarot\'s numbed reaction was perfect. Felt like howling, \'cause I like uke Vegeta, but yeah, *sigh* this does make sense. Vegeta is more powerful, and he is soon to be (hopefully) King... so it just makes more sense... but I\'m going to miss my writhing Vegeta...
Ah, the good ol\' days, when he was so innocent... *sigh*
Good Chapter. Looking forward to the next :-)
Really loved the end dialogue... especially loved this:
\"Vegeta: But…but…we’re both boys! How can I claim you?!\"
LOL! Shades of Goku. :-)
Really liked this:
\"...‘yes. He was the Prince.’ Good. Now to remind his father...\"
There\'s that Vegeta that I know and love. :-)
\"Vegeta’s mission was simple. Kill the King. Break him open and spread his blood everywhere, call out the challenge and initiate the fight. Ascend and defeat. Not exactly rocket science.\"
LOL! Not really, but I\'m sure that Vegeta will manage to split a few atoms along the way.
\"He had this vision of himself trying to fight his father and tripping on the beard he had accidentally grown in all the time it took for them to inch their way to the fight.\"
LOL! Gotta love a man who possesses a great sense of irony.
Hmm, yeanfornfortunately, what Vegeta was thinking in regards to the caste system, is probably the only way to look at things (until a better way is found), no matter how unfair it is for us poor bloody workers... Still dreaming of a world where Plato\'s utopian vision, actually becomes a viable reality for everyone...*sigh*
\"But sex did seem like a good idea, nonetheless.\"
*Chuckle* Yeah, way better than training. ;-)
\"He felt a bit silly just standing there, naked and thinking lecherous thought about whe woe would soon be doing (hopefully.)\"
LOL!
\"Ankarokarot closed his eyes, curled his hands into tight fists, his body shook a little and he grated the words out like they were causing him pain. “That you’d claim me.”\"
Liked the way that you played this scene out, it was very well done. I could sense the shift in Vegeta, and Kakarot\'s numbed reaction was perfect. Felt like howling, \'cause I like uke Vegeta, but yeah, *sigh* this does make sense. Vegeta is more powerful, and he is soon to be (hopefully) King... so it just makes more sense... but I\'m going to miss my writhing Vegeta...
Ah, the good ol\' days, when he was so innocent... *sigh*
Good Chapter. Looking forward to the next :-)
Really loved the end dialogue... especially loved this:
\"Vegeta: But…but…we’re both boys! How can I claim you?!\"
LOL! Shades of Goku. :-)
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April 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
O-over? *sniffle* So soon? Even with the epilogue still to come, I feel sorta sad. This was such a wonderful fic! Maybe a sequel? Please?
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April 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is realy good!
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April 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is realy good!
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April 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay, so I wasn\'t going to review until I had finished with what you have written so far, but.....
Vegeta: LOOKING HIGHLY DISTURBED THAT EVERYONE HAS PLAYED WITH HIS NIPPLES
ROFL or is it ROLF ? Oh, my Kami. That was the funniest thing I have ever read!
Vegeta: LOOKING HIGHLY DISTURBED THAT EVERYONE HAS PLAYED WITH HIS NIPPLES
ROFL or is it ROLF ? Oh, my Kami. That was the funniest thing I have ever read!
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April 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Woo hoo !
Vegeta’s mission was simple. Kill the King. Break him open and spread his blood everywhere, call out the challenge and initiate the fight. Ascend and defeat. Not exactly rocket science.---He seems to be very detailed about this... and knowing exactly what and how he is going to do it. ooo and I can\'t wait!
and spit on his father’s mangled corpse as he took the crown and declared himself the rightful ruler.--how barbaric, but they are saiyajins, and I am loving every minute of it. Hope this is how it all gets to play out too. Oh wow...King Vegeta...*dreamy eyes*
He had this vision of himself trying to fight his father and tripping on the beard he had accidentally grown in all the time it took for them to inch their way to the fight.--LoL, awww no patience, eh? Well partially patient if he is imagining all of this.
“So?” Kakarot replied, “Right now, you’re just one of us.” -- *gasp and choke* One of them ... no never that... j/k I like how Kakarott talks to Vegeta, and that line made me wonder if he will converse with him any differently once the Prince is King...?
He just treated him the same. Like an equal. (That sof tof treatment was both humbling and fucking annoying.) --ok nevermind above statement was just answered...I review very weird...I read copy and paste the line and then I write my response so I don\'t forget and then go back to reading the fic...strange...I know...
Of course, before Kakarot, he hadn’t even been attracted to anyone.--of course not, and I can see why..Kakatott is goregeous...oh and it just seems like elites are never bothered with that stuff unless someone if forcing them to mate or something...
ooo what a wonderful explantion of classes you gave.
*is still wearing oxygen mask* and good thing too, because that lemon damn near killed me! especially this part: Kakarot moved harder—not faster, but harder— that line has been proven to steal the breath from mechanical butterflys ...but since I have this trusty mask on, I am alive!!!!!
And Kakarot closed his eyes, curled his hands into tight fists, his body shook a little and he grated the words out the they were causing him pain. “That you’d claim me.”--O.O Oh no...what is wrong with Kakarot? He? He doesn\'t wan to be claimed or he would rather be the once doing the claiming...? Awww...hehe this really does feel like role reversal.
I love GnR too!!!!! *dances at a microphone like Axl* hehe *shrugs* Why did I do that?
(The younger him, not the ‘I tried to come back at the MTV thing and I was too chubby, had plastic surgery and braids version.) OFL OFL I totally agree...that was very horrible when he came back and I was very sad. Axl looked very horrible. I wr whr why he chose that hair choice???ugh....
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Vegeta’s mission was simple. Kill the King. Break him open and spread his blood everywhere, call out the challenge and initiate the fight. Ascend and defeat. Not exactly rocket science.---He seems to be very detailed about this... and knowing exactly what and how he is going to do it. ooo and I can\'t wait!
and spit on his father’s mangled corpse as he took the crown and declared himself the rightful ruler.--how barbaric, but they are saiyajins, and I am loving every minute of it. Hope this is how it all gets to play out too. Oh wow...King Vegeta...*dreamy eyes*
He had this vision of himself trying to fight his father and tripping on the beard he had accidentally grown in all the time it took for them to inch their way to the fight.--LoL, awww no patience, eh? Well partially patient if he is imagining all of this.
“So?” Kakarot replied, “Right now, you’re just one of us.” -- *gasp and choke* One of them ... no never that... j/k I like how Kakarott talks to Vegeta, and that line made me wonder if he will converse with him any differently once the Prince is King...?
He just treated him the same. Like an equal. (That sof tof treatment was both humbling and fucking annoying.) --ok nevermind above statement was just answered...I review very weird...I read copy and paste the line and then I write my response so I don\'t forget and then go back to reading the fic...strange...I know...
Of course, before Kakarot, he hadn’t even been attracted to anyone.--of course not, and I can see why..Kakatott is goregeous...oh and it just seems like elites are never bothered with that stuff unless someone if forcing them to mate or something...
ooo what a wonderful explantion of classes you gave.
*is still wearing oxygen mask* and good thing too, because that lemon damn near killed me! especially this part: Kakarot moved harder—not faster, but harder— that line has been proven to steal the breath from mechanical butterflys ...but since I have this trusty mask on, I am alive!!!!!
And Kakarot closed his eyes, curled his hands into tight fists, his body shook a little and he grated the words out the they were causing him pain. “That you’d claim me.”--O.O Oh no...what is wrong with Kakarot? He? He doesn\'t wan to be claimed or he would rather be the once doing the claiming...? Awww...hehe this really does feel like role reversal.
I love GnR too!!!!! *dances at a microphone like Axl* hehe *shrugs* Why did I do that?
(The younger him, not the ‘I tried to come back at the MTV thing and I was too chubby, had plastic surgery and braids version.) OFL OFL I totally agree...that was very horrible when he came back and I was very sad. Axl looked very horrible. I wr whr why he chose that hair choice???ugh....
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April 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I must say that Ishocshocked. I have never seen anything happen that fast in DBZ...But I will let you off the hook. This is a A/U and all. I loved your version of bonding by the way. It sounds sooo fun. Well, if your the dominate one anyway.
\"Echos\" huh? A chapter with an actual title. I find it hard not to title my chapters. Believe me, I have tried. I guess it is because it takes me so long to write them. He He.
\"Echos\" huh? A chapter with an actual title. I find it hard not to title my chapters. Believe me, I have tried. I guess it is because it takes me so long to write them. He He.
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April 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Kakarott is claimed...^.^
Royalty did not get bitten. EVER. Never had. --how rude! I like when royalty gets bittenmn rmn royalty, always not wanting to get bitten. Hehe but in this case it is very interesting because in my opinion Goku has always been a free spirit. Always went off and did what he wanted when he wanted to...so to have someone claim him is very interesting to me...and dominant Vegeta can be very yummy...
(Must have been having some pretty damn interesting thoughts, since he was hard again.) --*falls over* One minute they are all pissy and upset about it the next they are ready to have sex...saiyajins...sheesh! ^.^
“And you have to do whatever I tell you to do?” he asked.--aww so cute almost innocent...or clueless, but thats cute too!
He wasn’t entirely sure, be wae was fairly certain she had died.--ROFL!!!! that so freaking funny...I am fairly certain I DIED after reading that!!!! I have tears in my eyes...*sighs* that was too funny...hehe I wonder where he heard this story. Aww poor girl who had to wait for her mate and died...hehe thats awful. Awfully funny...
WHY it had to be him.--uh..probably because he is drop dead gorgeous and he is Vegeta...yeah thats a good answer.
But then again, being mated to a King could not be that awful.
Could it?--hm...I hope not...but the way that question was posed...I\'m not so sure anymore...
She disagreed with bonds because they limited the life of the bonded. --well that is a very good reason to disagree, I probably would too, unless I was getting bonded to Vegeta...I don\'t care if I only got to live for ten minutes...I would bond with him.. *sighs dreamily*
“Laugh if you will,” he said, turned to look at Kakarot—smiled—and then said—knew that instinct, bonding and tradition would not fail him—“Ascend.” --*screams like a crazed fan girl that I am then rips hair out* That is beyond sexy!!!!!! *drools* I can\'t read for at least 5 minutes...I must absorb this sexiness that you just described Vegeta to be...just kidding... But really that was very cool. Telling his mate to ascend like that and knew it wouldn\'t fail...awesome. I just hope Kakarott thinks that is awesome too...
“And you should have realized I always come back.” --YEAH!!! stupid King...never realizing the obvious!!! Kisck his ass Vegeta!!!!!
“Didn’t think we’d let you show off without seeing what you could do,” Vegeta (the twin) said, “Did you?”--*cheers* Aww the twins!!! YEAH! That was very nice of them to come back and see the results of what was going on.
Vegeta smirked. “And you’ll never see again.” --*sighs and clasps hands* Vegeta is too cool...ah but he didnt kill Cooler...hm..
Aww and Kakarott is standing by his side!
Don\'t feel bad, it really didn\'t seem like it was that rushed and I really enjoyed it. And I am happy there is a epilogue coming soon! YAY!
*sighs * I wish I could go back to the eighties when everyone loved him.--ah..me t.
W.
Well my best friend Kal and I thought we saw Axl on spring break once in 1997/98 in Florida. But his hair was like real long down to his butt and I was like OOooo lets folllow him...well to make a long story short we got close to him and he wasn\'t Axl...but we told all our friends it was...hehe. I dont think they believed us, and if they did..gosh they are idiots...
ROFL about having ppl guess if he was a boy or girl...When I saw Avril Lavigne\'s 1st video I asked my b/f is he thought she looked like Axl, b/c I think she does...maybe its her nose and her hair. But everytime I see her I just picture Axl...
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Royalty did not get bitten. EVER. Never had. --how rude! I like when royalty gets bittenmn rmn royalty, always not wanting to get bitten. Hehe but in this case it is very interesting because in my opinion Goku has always been a free spirit. Always went off and did what he wanted when he wanted to...so to have someone claim him is very interesting to me...and dominant Vegeta can be very yummy...
(Must have been having some pretty damn interesting thoughts, since he was hard again.) --*falls over* One minute they are all pissy and upset about it the next they are ready to have sex...saiyajins...sheesh! ^.^
“And you have to do whatever I tell you to do?” he asked.--aww so cute almost innocent...or clueless, but thats cute too!
He wasn’t entirely sure, be wae was fairly certain she had died.--ROFL!!!! that so freaking funny...I am fairly certain I DIED after reading that!!!! I have tears in my eyes...*sighs* that was too funny...hehe I wonder where he heard this story. Aww poor girl who had to wait for her mate and died...hehe thats awful. Awfully funny...
WHY it had to be him.--uh..probably because he is drop dead gorgeous and he is Vegeta...yeah thats a good answer.
But then again, being mated to a King could not be that awful.
Could it?--hm...I hope not...but the way that question was posed...I\'m not so sure anymore...
She disagreed with bonds because they limited the life of the bonded. --well that is a very good reason to disagree, I probably would too, unless I was getting bonded to Vegeta...I don\'t care if I only got to live for ten minutes...I would bond with him.. *sighs dreamily*
“Laugh if you will,” he said, turned to look at Kakarot—smiled—and then said—knew that instinct, bonding and tradition would not fail him—“Ascend.” --*screams like a crazed fan girl that I am then rips hair out* That is beyond sexy!!!!!! *drools* I can\'t read for at least 5 minutes...I must absorb this sexiness that you just described Vegeta to be...just kidding... But really that was very cool. Telling his mate to ascend like that and knew it wouldn\'t fail...awesome. I just hope Kakarott thinks that is awesome too...
“And you should have realized I always come back.” --YEAH!!! stupid King...never realizing the obvious!!! Kisck his ass Vegeta!!!!!
“Didn’t think we’d let you show off without seeing what you could do,” Vegeta (the twin) said, “Did you?”--*cheers* Aww the twins!!! YEAH! That was very nice of them to come back and see the results of what was going on.
Vegeta smirked. “And you’ll never see again.” --*sighs and clasps hands* Vegeta is too cool...ah but he didnt kill Cooler...hm..
Aww and Kakarott is standing by his side!
Don\'t feel bad, it really didn\'t seem like it was that rushed and I really enjoyed it. And I am happy there is a epilogue coming soon! YAY!
*sighs * I wish I could go back to the eighties when everyone loved him.--ah..me t.
W.
Well my best friend Kal and I thought we saw Axl on spring break once in 1997/98 in Florida. But his hair was like real long down to his butt and I was like OOooo lets folllow him...well to make a long story short we got close to him and he wasn\'t Axl...but we told all our friends it was...hehe. I dont think they believed us, and if they did..gosh they are idiots...
ROFL about having ppl guess if he was a boy or girl...When I saw Avril Lavigne\'s 1st video I asked my b/f is he thought she looked like Axl, b/c I think she does...maybe its her nose and her hair. But everytime I see her I just picture Axl...
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April 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, I\'ve caught up on this one.
Hmmm, I like your take on Vegeta learning what third class is all about.
I like Red. I wish that would could have seen more of the craziness that Bardock was suppose to have possessed.(Spelling?)
I definitely like the twins,(this story would have been impossible without them, but they didn\'t take over the plot.) I have read some of your other stories, so I wasn\'t lost when they showed up.
Yeah, a story where Vegeta acends(spelling) before Kakarott.
Now here\'s a twist, Vegeta letting and enemy live? And not Kakarott?
And lemons, lots and lots of lemons. Hope to see more lemons in the future.
Hmmm, I like your take on Vegeta learning what third class is all about.
I like Red. I wish that would could have seen more of the craziness that Bardock was suppose to have possessed.(Spelling?)
I definitely like the twins,(this story would have been impossible without them, but they didn\'t take over the plot.) I have read some of your other stories, so I wasn\'t lost when they showed up.
Yeah, a story where Vegeta acends(spelling) before Kakarott.
Now here\'s a twist, Vegeta letting and enemy live? And not Kakarott?
And lemons, lots and lots of lemons. Hope to see more lemons in the future.
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April 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I\'d be one to talk when it comes to rushing, I always bring couples together really quick in my own fics. Killing the king was a little quick but he was really a weak coward so honestly how long would it take to kill him anyway? Probably in as long as you summed it up lol.
No defenantly not disapointed :)
No defenantly not disapointed :)