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April 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Nah, it´s okay the way it is now! Not too rushed... I do not like those drawn out fighting scenes aynway (well okay, sometimes they ARE damn good! ^-^)... Anyway, I´m not quite sure if there is real love between our two cuties... to me it almost looks like Vegeta only wants to fuck to get that lust-thingy out of his system and Kakarott ...well, the same reason, but the bond seems quite forced at the moment and in chapter...uh... 15(?) it looked like Kaky did NOT really like Vegeta...? (Was jealous and angry in fact) The question now is: Is there love going to blossom between those two? Alright, but- as always- I like your writing style and LOVE this chapter! It´s too bad it ghas to end, but we´ll still have all those other great stories ;) Am going to read TMOP now... Friendly greetings, ~kodachi~
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April 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Yes! Great Stoy!!
Interesting role reversal beteween Kakarott and Vegeta, realative to the twins\' timeline.
I wonder if they will make a final appearance, as in give Kakarott the hormoe therapy.
I can see that now. Living in that time period, as a hermaphrodite. ROFL
Interesting role reversal beteween Kakarott and Vegeta, realative to the twins\' timeline.
I wonder if they will make a final appearance, as in give Kakarott the hormoe therapy.
I can see that now. Living in that time period, as a hermaphrodite. ROFL
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April 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hmm...what should I say. Well, will say that I didn\'t see the bonding coming...when it did. I also loved the way you did it. I don\'t know, did Kakarot seem a little sad.
Kakarot just stared at him, still. And then sighed heavily. “I should have known.” -----My first piece of evidence...
“The salve’s still on the counter,” was what he said. With some strange sort of effort, as if it took a great deal of will to remind him where the salve was. ----Yet more evidence in my favor.
And Kakarot closed his eyes, curled his hands into tight fists, his body shook a little and he grated the words out like they were causing him pain. “That you’d claim me.”---- I think that about sums it up.
I rest my case. Oh and I really liked this chapter.
Kakarot just stared at him, still. And then sighed heavily. “I should have known.” -----My first piece of evidence...
“The salve’s still on the counter,” was what he said. With some strange sort of effort, as if it took a great deal of will to remind him where the salve was. ----Yet more evidence in my favor.
And Kakarot closed his eyes, curled his hands into tight fists, his body shook a little and he grated the words out like they were causing him pain. “That you’d claim me.”---- I think that about sums it up.
I rest my case. Oh and I really liked this chapter.
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April 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
It was unnerving to feel that tight grip of anger, and the twinge of jealousy that burned right through him. --This is so strange to me...almost like the roles have been reversed. I like it.
And he hated him, felt fury growing in him that this little idiot had just shown up arrogant and beaten and wounded and now look at him. Less than a month and he was gloriously powerful. --wow, he is jealous and sounded a lot like Vegeta. It\'s almost impossible for me to picture Kakarott\'s face staring at him thinking these things...almost...hehe
Kakarot had been waiting for years for his father’s little prediction to come true. Nothing yet. --ok again like Vegeta. Like when he father told him when he was young that one day he would become a super saiyajin. Which really drove Vegeta...obsessing that it was his birthright...I really am loving the simalarities. I don\'t know if you meant for it to happen that way or not...but either way it is very cool.
“The twins are gone.” --*sobs*
for that matter—twin’s life expectancy wasn’t that great anyway.--*sobs more* NO! I want the twins to live forever...but I guess nothing lasts forever only cold november rain...
and he felt as if he should have bowed to them. Should have acknowledged the power they held. But he didn’t. Hadn’t even thanked them.--Vegeta\'s thoughts always amaze me...and his actions make me laugh. It\'s wonderful he can think considerate things or acknowledge something of someone...but they will never know...
Nobody fucked with the Prince of Saiyans. --- except Goku...^.^ hehe couldn\'t resist.
Must be some sort of mental disorder that prevents me from making the word count.--LoL I am having that disorder too, only mine prevents me from writing chapterhehehehe
Krt: WHAT GOOD IS THIS GOING TO DO ME? We don’t even have TVS!--ROFL!!!! Freaking died when I read that...oh gosh...what is he going to do with that without a t.v....?
*sucks thumb and rocks back and forth in the fetal position *--LoL uh...I\'m sorry, I meant my computer screen melted b/c the lemon was so hot!
I already miss the twins...*sobs all over again*
Lovely chap and glad that Radditz is getting some action!!! Can\'t wait for the showdown between Vegeta the the King!!! And Caradoc, I am interested in what he will do...even if it\'s nothing. I just really like that name! But serioulsy I am very anxious for Vegeta and the King @_@!!!!
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And he hated him, felt fury growing in him that this little idiot had just shown up arrogant and beaten and wounded and now look at him. Less than a month and he was gloriously powerful. --wow, he is jealous and sounded a lot like Vegeta. It\'s almost impossible for me to picture Kakarott\'s face staring at him thinking these things...almost...hehe
Kakarot had been waiting for years for his father’s little prediction to come true. Nothing yet. --ok again like Vegeta. Like when he father told him when he was young that one day he would become a super saiyajin. Which really drove Vegeta...obsessing that it was his birthright...I really am loving the simalarities. I don\'t know if you meant for it to happen that way or not...but either way it is very cool.
“The twins are gone.” --*sobs*
for that matter—twin’s life expectancy wasn’t that great anyway.--*sobs more* NO! I want the twins to live forever...but I guess nothing lasts forever only cold november rain...
and he felt as if he should have bowed to them. Should have acknowledged the power they held. But he didn’t. Hadn’t even thanked them.--Vegeta\'s thoughts always amaze me...and his actions make me laugh. It\'s wonderful he can think considerate things or acknowledge something of someone...but they will never know...
Nobody fucked with the Prince of Saiyans. --- except Goku...^.^ hehe couldn\'t resist.
Must be some sort of mental disorder that prevents me from making the word count.--LoL I am having that disorder too, only mine prevents me from writing chapterhehehehe
Krt: WHAT GOOD IS THIS GOING TO DO ME? We don’t even have TVS!--ROFL!!!! Freaking died when I read that...oh gosh...what is he going to do with that without a t.v....?
*sucks thumb and rocks back and forth in the fetal position *--LoL uh...I\'m sorry, I meant my computer screen melted b/c the lemon was so hot!
I already miss the twins...*sobs all over again*
Lovely chap and glad that Radditz is getting some action!!! Can\'t wait for the showdown between Vegeta the the King!!! And Caradoc, I am interested in what he will do...even if it\'s nothing. I just really like that name! But serioulsy I am very anxious for Vegeta and the King @_@!!!!
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April 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I just first of all whant to say that you are my absolute favourite yaio writer. I love your stuff they are very creative, and unique. I love the conversations you add at the end.
I think this is the best fic you have wrote yet. love it so far and can\'t wait to read the next part.
I think this is the best fic you have wrote yet. love it so far and can\'t wait to read the next part.
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April 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
well hell fucking yeah!...there was claimage!...three cheers for the claimage!...can\'t wait for the bloodiness that hte next couple of chapters promise to be...until then!
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April 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful chap
felt Kakarot’s tail wrap around the hand that was inside of him, and murmured in appreciation of this.--ok, that is just overload for my brain. This lemon was already on fire...but you just melted my brain...!
Kakarot started to breath with a bit more effort. Shook his head. “No… You’re… Perfect.”---aww that is so sweet! and sooo right.
“I know.”--LoL, I love Vegeta!!!!
That loyalty would keep them at their mother’s side until he was King.--LoL this line just struck me as funny because you know...not all of us can fight along our mothers side and wait for her to be a...King...hehe
(THE DAISIES! He kept yelling. What a freak.) --Rofl...@_@ yeah I am going to have to agree that guy is definately a freak!
‘You’re so cute you make me want to puke.’ And it had been a great thing to say. --ROFL. I think I will say that to someone I love.
“Well, then, I guess you’ll just have to.”--aww Radditz and Saima they are cute. You know it is so strange reading about her alive, when I know she is going to die...and it is very sad.
If you feel like you’ve been cheated out of a lemon, raise your hand.
*raises hand*
Krt: Hey! Look! I’m silly now!--O_O ROFL!!!
End notes hilarious as always
Poor dear. I’ll be so glad when he reclaims his throne.--yeah me too...
I knew Vegeta was afraid of dying so when the Prince killed him I was like O_O. I couldn\'t believe it but seeing as how protective and concerned he is for his mother then yeah he must like him an awful lot.
*is very sad* I am sad that the twins are getting ready to go back to their own time...*pouts* Ah...I know they have mates and such waiting for them...
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felt Kakarot’s tail wrap around the hand that was inside of him, and murmured in appreciation of this.--ok, that is just overload for my brain. This lemon was already on fire...but you just melted my brain...!
Kakarot started to breath with a bit more effort. Shook his head. “No… You’re… Perfect.”---aww that is so sweet! and sooo right.
“I know.”--LoL, I love Vegeta!!!!
That loyalty would keep them at their mother’s side until he was King.--LoL this line just struck me as funny because you know...not all of us can fight along our mothers side and wait for her to be a...King...hehe
(THE DAISIES! He kept yelling. What a freak.) --Rofl...@_@ yeah I am going to have to agree that guy is definately a freak!
‘You’re so cute you make me want to puke.’ And it had been a great thing to say. --ROFL. I think I will say that to someone I love.
“Well, then, I guess you’ll just have to.”--aww Radditz and Saima they are cute. You know it is so strange reading about her alive, when I know she is going to die...and it is very sad.
If you feel like you’ve been cheated out of a lemon, raise your hand.
*raises hand*
Krt: Hey! Look! I’m silly now!--O_O ROFL!!!
End notes hilarious as always
Poor dear. I’ll be so glad when he reclaims his throne.--yeah me too...
I knew Vegeta was afraid of dying so when the Prince killed him I was like O_O. I couldn\'t believe it but seeing as how protective and concerned he is for his mother then yeah he must like him an awful lot.
*is very sad* I am sad that the twins are getting ready to go back to their own time...*pouts* Ah...I know they have mates and such waiting for them...
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April 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Awww...That was so special! Did I tell you that I like Radditz, cause I do. I have this wierd thing for the bad guys not that he\'s a bad guy in this fic...okay I will shut up be the this even gets out of hand.
I\'m gonnas ths the twins...Whaaaaa!
I\'m gonnas ths the twins...Whaaaaa!
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April 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hmm...I did just get cheated out of a lemon didn\'t I? I feel so violated. Just kidding...A wonderful chapter dispite all that. Hmm...so Raditz and Saima huh? I knew it! I am ever so clever.
I find that I have an exceptionally foul mouth...which is why all of my stories are rated R by default. I was surprised at first though because there weren\'t as many four letter words at the beginning of THOK but I soon found a way to slide them in there. It just seems to me that Saiyans curse...a lot.
I find that I have an exceptionally foul mouth...which is why all of my stories are rated R by default. I was surprised at first though because there weren\'t as many four letter words at the beginning of THOK but I soon found a way to slide them in there. It just seems to me that Saiyans curse...a lot.
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April 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
The spank the monkey shirt was hilarious...it works on more than one level...clever. And Vegeta finally gets to be the dominate one...always good. I loved the last lines at the end...always very funny. Mommy...he he...