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April 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
A smirk. A sense of confidence that was just plain shocking for someone who had only had sex once (Kakarot did not count any women the Prince might have been with in this figure) and was completely separated from anything that was familiar. “You.” He said. - ROFL
Wonderful story!! I\'ve read all of your work. Great stuff.
Keep it up!
Wonderful story!! I\'ve read all of your work. Great stuff.
Keep it up!
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April 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Well, alright, more m/m action. I really needed that after reading Never Before. Now...Kaki is so cute pouting. I can just imagine. This chapter was cute. Geez, I am really going to have to find a better adjective than cute. Ooow...how bout adorable? ;)
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April 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I loved this chapter. Goten was so wonderful with his mum, and I loved how \'Geta was reading his father the \'riot act\' The reversal of all roles was so wonderful, caring and funny.
Vegeta seemed a little out of it, and Goten was so soothing. I loved this:
“Its alright,” he said, “I’ll have you fixed up soon, I swear.”
Really love this side of Goten :-)
Really loved the scene between Goten and Vegeta by the river bank. Vegeta was so sweet, feeling insanely happy, but seeming to be not quite sure why, and using his attention to simply remain standing, so vulnerable, but with Goten there, he was completely safe, and the atmosphere you created here was wonderfully touching. :-)
Loved how Goten warned his mum what he was intending, so as to not freak him out. Really loved this scene. Even though Goten was completely disturbed by needing to do this, his attitude was very soothing. Still his reaction to Vegeta raising his tail, was very amusing:
\"“Can’t believe this shit,” he said, and moved behind him. Licked his fingers and then fiddled with the barbell on his tail.\"
Vegeta was so cuddle worthy in this entire scene, he was being helped and he so very much appreciated it, and was glad to lay back and let the young man see to removing the ki repressants, not knowing that this is his son from an alternate universe, who is feeling quite squicked by all of this. The imagery was touchingly wonderful, whilst Goten\'s thoughts created a humorously sympathetic counter to it all.
Loved Vegeta\'s swift change of mood, once the repressors were gone. Loved how he was planning his revenge, but most of all loved this:
\"But, before he did that… He was going to go back to camp and kick Kakarot in the balls.\"
LOL! True love never runs smooth :-)
Hmm, smart Goten. I wonder who the King\'s watchdog is?
\"...Just like that. Punched him—Radditz, the second in command.\"
Yeah, you go \'Geta! Still not entirely happy with Radditz.
Loved \'Geta\'s \'little talk\' with his old man. :-) It certainly made Kakarot think, definitely gave Saima some amusement, and hopefully is the turning point in his (hopefully) relationship with Vegeta. :-)
Yeah, gotta agree, that the Prince definitely needed to see this side of his people, see the way the third class were treated...although I\'m imagining that his time with Freiza has made his ability to see the nastier aspects of life only too well.
Really looking forward to how things develop between the Prince and Bardock and his family [particularly Kakarot :-)] at this point. I hope he doesn\'t go back to being all snooty, now that he has his power back.
Loved the end dialogue: Particularly Vegeta\'s *sigh* LOL!
\"Oh! I’m hoping I have outrageously cunning wordplay. *bounces up and down* Oh, I hope I hope I hope!\"
LOL!
Vegeta seemed a little out of it, and Goten was so soothing. I loved this:
“Its alright,” he said, “I’ll have you fixed up soon, I swear.”
Really love this side of Goten :-)
Really loved the scene between Goten and Vegeta by the river bank. Vegeta was so sweet, feeling insanely happy, but seeming to be not quite sure why, and using his attention to simply remain standing, so vulnerable, but with Goten there, he was completely safe, and the atmosphere you created here was wonderfully touching. :-)
Loved how Goten warned his mum what he was intending, so as to not freak him out. Really loved this scene. Even though Goten was completely disturbed by needing to do this, his attitude was very soothing. Still his reaction to Vegeta raising his tail, was very amusing:
\"“Can’t believe this shit,” he said, and moved behind him. Licked his fingers and then fiddled with the barbell on his tail.\"
Vegeta was so cuddle worthy in this entire scene, he was being helped and he so very much appreciated it, and was glad to lay back and let the young man see to removing the ki repressants, not knowing that this is his son from an alternate universe, who is feeling quite squicked by all of this. The imagery was touchingly wonderful, whilst Goten\'s thoughts created a humorously sympathetic counter to it all.
Loved Vegeta\'s swift change of mood, once the repressors were gone. Loved how he was planning his revenge, but most of all loved this:
\"But, before he did that… He was going to go back to camp and kick Kakarot in the balls.\"
LOL! True love never runs smooth :-)
Hmm, smart Goten. I wonder who the King\'s watchdog is?
\"...Just like that. Punched him—Radditz, the second in command.\"
Yeah, you go \'Geta! Still not entirely happy with Radditz.
Loved \'Geta\'s \'little talk\' with his old man. :-) It certainly made Kakarot think, definitely gave Saima some amusement, and hopefully is the turning point in his (hopefully) relationship with Vegeta. :-)
Yeah, gotta agree, that the Prince definitely needed to see this side of his people, see the way the third class were treated...although I\'m imagining that his time with Freiza has made his ability to see the nastier aspects of life only too well.
Really looking forward to how things develop between the Prince and Bardock and his family [particularly Kakarot :-)] at this point. I hope he doesn\'t go back to being all snooty, now that he has his power back.
Loved the end dialogue: Particularly Vegeta\'s *sigh* LOL!
\"Oh! I’m hoping I have outrageously cunning wordplay. *bounces up and down* Oh, I hope I hope I hope!\"
LOL!
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April 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I\'m glad that you got it. Usually people never get it when I\'m trying to be humourous...at least in writing anyway. Poor Kaki, no ass for him. So sad! I can fully understand him not liking the twins they are soo taking his spotlight.
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April 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I think that its cool that Kaki is a ass in this one. He needs to stretch himself and get out of the clueless idiot thing he always has going.
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April 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You are a very bad influence on my school work... but in such a goooooood way! So the boys aren\'t going to give Kakarot any help to reach SS... probably just as well since he is currently a bit of an asshole. What are you going to do to Vegeta to make him change in only four days? Eagerly awaiting tomorrow - and whatever time I can steal to read your fics!
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April 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Loving it,
“Oh I can’t believe I’m doing this.” --rofl!!! I can...
Vegeta was insanely happy about this. Deliriously happy, in fact.--hehe, I bet he deserves a nice bath!
“Alright, Now before you go thinking I brought you out here to molest you, I’m going to help. Unfortunately, I only know how to do this with my mouth.” ---ROFL!!! I ..can\'t...breathe...laughing to hard.
and he was going to murder his fucking father and his idiot little brother and laugh while he played in their blood.--LoL...the sad thing is I can actually picture Vegeta frolicking around in this blood with sheer delight, oh yes and squeeling like a girl...ok scratch the frolick and the squeel...hehe
Most of them died long before the rest of them.--WHAT!? Why? Is their life expectancy half as long?
Radditz said, sticking his ugly face into the tent. -- LoL...and by ugly did you actually mean gousgous?
I love how Kakarott got in trouble for sexing up the virgin Prince. And now he feels bad...awww. I also love the title of this fic. I get into titles and stuff like that and I think this is a cool one. I sat and thought about the title for like 5 minutes, not that I was confused. I just liked it alot. I kept repeated it in my mind...oookkkk now I am sounding slightly crazy.
Anywho I luved this chap!
*whips out photographic evidence* Seeeeeeeee?!?!?! He is so much BIGGER than Vegeta! My goodness he’s like MONSTROUS in comparison… *upon careful inspection of the photo, there is revealed a picture of Goku standing next to Vegeta, both of them fully clothed and posing*
He. He. What’dja think I was talking about?!---ROFL...uh I thought you were talking about their heads...yeah that\'s it! You know since Vegeta has a very large head...*coughs* get your mind out of the gutter! I am talking about their heads, you know the one\'s attached to their necks... what do you take me for? A hentai of some kind? *hides G/V yaoi doujinshi* Gosh...have more faith in me...
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“Oh I can’t believe I’m doing this.” --rofl!!! I can...
Vegeta was insanely happy about this. Deliriously happy, in fact.--hehe, I bet he deserves a nice bath!
“Alright, Now before you go thinking I brought you out here to molest you, I’m going to help. Unfortunately, I only know how to do this with my mouth.” ---ROFL!!! I ..can\'t...breathe...laughing to hard.
and he was going to murder his fucking father and his idiot little brother and laugh while he played in their blood.--LoL...the sad thing is I can actually picture Vegeta frolicking around in this blood with sheer delight, oh yes and squeeling like a girl...ok scratch the frolick and the squeel...hehe
Most of them died long before the rest of them.--WHAT!? Why? Is their life expectancy half as long?
Radditz said, sticking his ugly face into the tent. -- LoL...and by ugly did you actually mean gousgous?
I love how Kakarott got in trouble for sexing up the virgin Prince. And now he feels bad...awww. I also love the title of this fic. I get into titles and stuff like that and I think this is a cool one. I sat and thought about the title for like 5 minutes, not that I was confused. I just liked it alot. I kept repeated it in my mind...oookkkk now I am sounding slightly crazy.
Anywho I luved this chap!
*whips out photographic evidence* Seeeeeeeee?!?!?! He is so much BIGGER than Vegeta! My goodness he’s like MONSTROUS in comparison… *upon careful inspection of the photo, there is revealed a picture of Goku standing next to Vegeta, both of them fully clothed and posing*
He. He. What’dja think I was talking about?!---ROFL...uh I thought you were talking about their heads...yeah that\'s it! You know since Vegeta has a very large head...*coughs* get your mind out of the gutter! I am talking about their heads, you know the one\'s attached to their necks... what do you take me for? A hentai of some kind? *hides G/V yaoi doujinshi* Gosh...have more faith in me...
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April 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You have no idea how glad I am that I got the whole K/V lemon scene wrong... alright, not completely wrong, there\'s still Vegeta\'s vriginity issue, but the thing that really had me not liking those two, was my mistaken belief of how the whole thing had been set up, and I\'m pleased to note in this chapter that, that\'s not the way it happened...hate being wrong (who doesn\'t) but this time, I\'m glad I was :-)
Got to enjoy the lemon more because of this, and Vegeta was his usual responsively, sensual self. Really loved his thoughts as he realised that he was thoroughly enjoying something he felt he should be enraged over. ;-) I really hope it works out for these two, and seriously hope that Kakarot appreciates what he\'s got, still a bit worried in that department, cause he\'s a full blown Saiyan in this one, and this group isn\'t exactly the flowers and chocolates type :-D
\"“Oh, the Prince and Kaki are going at it,” Goten said. Smirked like this was funny.\"“W\"“We are not interrupting t Got Goten,” Vegeta said.\"
Gotta love Goten\'s smirk, don\'t know what he had planned, but it\'s dead funny that Vegeta obviously knew what, and put a stop to anything before it started. Have to wonder if Goten was just in the mood for putting a spanner in Kakarot\'s works. :-D
“They’re done!” Goten said happily, “Let’s go get this over with.”
Ah, Is this when they take care of mum\'s ki repressors? Btw, thought I\'d mention at this point, that I was also wrong in my assessment of Saima, I really am liking her more and more. I guess I find her a lot less abrasive now, and she no longer annoys me. In fact, considering the company she keeps, she\'s a pretty decent sort...I seem to be on a roll with misjudging in this one don\'t I? Actually looking forward to how Bardock and Red come along...not that I disliked Red anyway, she struck me as rough, but quite likeable. :-)
Hmm, so Goten hinted that someone from their childhood is responsible for the ki repressors currently on his mother? I have an idea who that could be. However, as you never asked for guesses, I 't s't say anything...besides, still trying to figure out the why\'s of my guess anyway.
Definitely looking forward to more. :-)
\"...but Goku’s twins sons are there now and you know they aren’t good at staying out of trouble…(or their parent’s business.) MWHAHAHAHAHA!!!\"
LOL! Why am I not reassured by this? Just kidding. Yeah, the twins always dance to their own tune, sometimes you just want to throttle them...actually, I never have...ah wait, yes I did, when they took forever to kill the androids, back in \'cross-eyed\' :-D
Anyhoo... I truly love the twins. :-)
Got to enjoy the lemon more because of this, and Vegeta was his usual responsively, sensual self. Really loved his thoughts as he realised that he was thoroughly enjoying something he felt he should be enraged over. ;-) I really hope it works out for these two, and seriously hope that Kakarot appreciates what he\'s got, still a bit worried in that department, cause he\'s a full blown Saiyan in this one, and this group isn\'t exactly the flowers and chocolates type :-D
\"“Oh, the Prince and Kaki are going at it,” Goten said. Smirked like this was funny.\"“W\"“We are not interrupting t Got Goten,” Vegeta said.\"
Gotta love Goten\'s smirk, don\'t know what he had planned, but it\'s dead funny that Vegeta obviously knew what, and put a stop to anything before it started. Have to wonder if Goten was just in the mood for putting a spanner in Kakarot\'s works. :-D
“They’re done!” Goten said happily, “Let’s go get this over with.”
Ah, Is this when they take care of mum\'s ki repressors? Btw, thought I\'d mention at this point, that I was also wrong in my assessment of Saima, I really am liking her more and more. I guess I find her a lot less abrasive now, and she no longer annoys me. In fact, considering the company she keeps, she\'s a pretty decent sort...I seem to be on a roll with misjudging in this one don\'t I? Actually looking forward to how Bardock and Red come along...not that I disliked Red anyway, she struck me as rough, but quite likeable. :-)
Hmm, so Goten hinted that someone from their childhood is responsible for the ki repressors currently on his mother? I have an idea who that could be. However, as you never asked for guesses, I 't s't say anything...besides, still trying to figure out the why\'s of my guess anyway.
Definitely looking forward to more. :-)
\"...but Goku’s twins sons are there now and you know they aren’t good at staying out of trouble…(or their parent’s business.) MWHAHAHAHAHA!!!\"
LOL! Why am I not reassured by this? Just kidding. Yeah, the twins always dance to their own tune, sometimes you just want to throttle them...actually, I never have...ah wait, yes I did, when they took forever to kill the androids, back in \'cross-eyed\' :-D
Anyhoo... I truly love the twins. :-)
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April 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
YAY!!!!!
that he was pissed off that this stupid, smelly, dirty third-class moron that hadn’t even taken a bath in the past decade was thrusting into him. --no bath in the last decade...ROFL that is so gross...
trapped under a man that was more powerful than him, bigger than him--*coughs* bigger than him...really? and this \'bigger\' that we are talking about, it wouldn\'t happen to be between his legs would it? Because if so I need a full description and pictures, you know for proof..hehe j/k I know what ya really mean...*Shifty eyes* yeah what you \'really\' mean...hehe
and obviously more dominant than him.---*cheers* Give it up for dominant Kakarott, that is a goregeous thing!
Polarity would return to normal, he would remember he hated Kakarot and his whole smelly world. ---no no I think the polarity is just fine...I like what is happening...I likes it alot!
But even that wasn’t enough. Wanted more of it, wanted his vision black and blue and red.---rofl is that safe?
He nakeded (yes, I’m using nakeded as a verb) Vegeta himself.---LoL I like that verb, very cool!
Another wonderful chappie! I love the twins and I loved the lemon!!!! Vegeta was making me laugh during some of the lemon when he was going through half hearted denial that he was liking it....loved how it was all written...
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that he was pissed off that this stupid, smelly, dirty third-class moron that hadn’t even taken a bath in the past decade was thrusting into him. --no bath in the last decade...ROFL that is so gross...
trapped under a man that was more powerful than him, bigger than him--*coughs* bigger than him...really? and this \'bigger\' that we are talking about, it wouldn\'t happen to be between his legs would it? Because if so I need a full description and pictures, you know for proof..hehe j/k I know what ya really mean...*Shifty eyes* yeah what you \'really\' mean...hehe
and obviously more dominant than him.---*cheers* Give it up for dominant Kakarott, that is a goregeous thing!
Polarity would return to normal, he would remember he hated Kakarot and his whole smelly world. ---no no I think the polarity is just fine...I like what is happening...I likes it alot!
But even that wasn’t enough. Wanted more of it, wanted his vision black and blue and red.---rofl is that safe?
He nakeded (yes, I’m using nakeded as a verb) Vegeta himself.---LoL I like that verb, very cool!
Another wonderful chappie! I love the twins and I loved the lemon!!!! Vegeta was making me laugh during some of the lemon when he was going through half hearted denial that he was liking it....loved how it was all written...
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April 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Sheesh! I think I may just have made a true connection to whom it was who placed the ki repressors on Vegeta. Still not fully sure of the actual reason why, but can now untandtand, that this would not be an unheard of action for my guess. If my guess is correct...allow me to congratulate you on some marvelloucunncunning word play. If my guess is wrong, you are so never going to know about it...I think I\'ve embarrassed myself enough just lately as it is. LOL!