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Why are your stories written like a computer is messed up I don't even know we're the story starts

I really don't know where to start in this review - there's just so much in this story that amazed me and entertained me and generally blew me away. The concepts and the ideas behind the characters were compelling. I hope you won't take it the wrong way if I said this could be original fiction. If I'd picked this story up as a piece of original fiction, I think I would have enjoyed it every bit as much as I did when it was fanfic. You seem to have a talent for quickly hinting at things and creating the concept of an entire race within a very short time. I was absolutely fascinated by the way Goten was punished by the Juro gods every time he used his mental abilities. And the spider people... And the amazing duplicity of Bardock... I think this is one of those stories that will stay with me for a long time.

wow i just read all 41 chpters today...being sick has some advantages. i loved it, it was like nothing i've ever read before.

Whaaa...its over. Ah well. It had to end sometime. I like the unanswered questions though. The best stories are the ones the leave you with something to think about.

“Don’t bow to me,” Vegeta said. Stood up. “You don’t ever have to bow to me.” --hehe, that is good and very nice. I\'m glad he said that. Seeing as how they have been through all of this together...makes me see he hasn\'t changed.

Goku is staying here.” A pause. “With me.” There was possessiveness there. Deep possessiveness,--that is almost creepy, but I loved it.

“You have the respect of every one of us. You don’t have to suffer alone.”--that is good to know.
And that lemon was very good...very different and I was a little apprehensive, but it was great. I liked it.

“But now I return to my home, to the Spiders that eat your kind and have long hated the traitor.”--hehe what a nice way to say goodbye...

“You’re an odd bitch, Chi,” Bulma said.--rofl!!! I am glad they can say things like this now. The war is over...they survived it and won.

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ch. 41

Or like Goten and Trunks who spent their free time proving just how powerful they were by fucking each r inr into blackouts. --rofl! and that is a great way to prove yourself...hehe

Trunks didn’t look convinced. But he also didn’t look like he was going to run out and kill Krillin.--LoL

“You are mine. You can fuck whoever you want and you’ll always be mine.” --as strange as that can sound, it is very sweet.

Offered to help him in exchanged for a place to fuck—yes, he really said that—and left it just at that-- O_O! lmao!

“He said you disgusted him. But he died thinking of how proud he was of you.”--:) oh gosh, that makes me so happy.(if it is true, Vegeta did make a valid point) But I believe Goten, because I like it...and I think it makes sense. But as long as Vegeta, Goku and everyone else is happy then it really doesn\'t matter.

This was such an awesome story, I loved it and am sad it is over...
thank you for such a wonderful fic.

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Once again, this was a VERY, VERY good A/U. It isn\'t often that I see and author put such a good A/U together. A lot of the time is see what I would call an alternate time line rather than a real A/U. (But A/U is what everybody uses for something that isn\'t cannon.) Wonderfully created and discribed alien types. Along with the personalities you gave them. Each character had their own place.

Great discription with the gore.

Oh, and once they came along, lovely lemons.

Thank you very much.

Excelent conclusion.

I\"m glad Goku is finally able to see the sights
on his home planet.

WAAAAAAAAAAA! I like the end of stories. I hate the end of stories. I\'ll be sorry to see this one end but I guess I\'ll just have to reread it. over and over and over.

Bleh..my computer is being so stupid and my review got lost somewhere between the review button and that dumb to may connections on line 11...-_-

But what I do want to say is that I totally loved everything about that lemon. I loved how Goku was the one being, caressed, loved, showered the affection just plain worshipped. I find that very rare in many fics and I really like it. He deserves it any way. Then it just kind of turned into them worshipping each other.

And they were being so sweet to each other saying please and thank you...
loved it

I was glad when Vegeta kept telling Goku he was nothing like Bardock. I think he needed to hear that...feel that someone didn\'t think he was anything like his father.

I don\'t think anyone could be that cruel.
Especially Goku at least I hope not.

I just about died when Vegeta put his hand over Goku\'s chest and said feel that...thought that was utterly sweet and caring...romantic even

And loved how this chap ended with Vegeta saying nothing like him...I do hope Goku takes that to heart.

Excellent as usual.

You never know I just might go to a cosplay as ChiChi and pass along your fics and then *gasp* you might rule the world...but if that day ever comes you have got to make a DBZ Yaoi anime...

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Ahhh I\'ve been blinded....My poor Virgin eyes!! Ohhh Card Krillin why why tarnish Goten, why...........J/k (sorta) I haven\'t reviewed in forever so I though now was as good a time as any....the last couple of chapter were wonderful! they always are with you though. Congrates, you know my brother (Spazzmasta) and I came up with a name for Krillin like when the show first started to air..........heheh \"the little midget bastard\" its not nice but hes a geek. But i felt sorry for him in this fic which was completely unexpected!

The New King Vegeta is awsome!! but wait isn\'t he suppose to like marry some chick of like royality or some high classed Saiyan chick? how is he going to keep Kaki? *Looks worried with big watery puppy dog eyes* well *sighs* I must be off I promised I\'d reread Get Psycho to figure out why Finch like bird names or something. and I have yet to review it beacuse my computer hasn\'t liked me to do that......your the first one it has let me reveiw! It must like you. *Smiles*


~*Noel*~