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Wow, great chapter!! I like the atmosphere between Trunks and Vegeta- really nice! Moreover it´s a good thing that Goku shows respect and consideration towards Vegeta, that Vegeta seems very rational in this one, but not overly arrogant- makes him more...uh... \"human\". And the way he has to struggle with himself is very well-portayed and realistic because when you´ve had to suffer like he has than I believe it´s NOT as easy (if possible at all) to go back to what you´ve once been. The statements about prejudice are especially fitting since they give off the conflicting opinions about Trunks so well and it´s great you don´t write the characters so stereotyped, but give them each their individual personality and good reasons(!) to act the way they do... It gives your story more depth and has me sympathize with the characters. And even if I´m not a regular reviewer, be assured I read each and everyone of your chapters with great interest!!! Friendly greetings, ~kodachi~

I find it interesting that Chi Chi would want Trunks to embrace his second heritage when she was ostrisized from her own culture. This could be an interesting developement in the fic.

Very touching moment before the lemon with V and G. I also liked the discription of the nest.

Was it Goku\'s own thought ( your discusting) Or was it still the something on the ship?

Thanks, that really helped me. I feel sorry for Vegeta, trying to cope with his new \'freedom\' without being chained, but he\'s having a struggle between taking the lead of the pack and needing the warm touches that the drugs tell him he needs. Poor Vegeta. Obviously Trunks knows that he\'s kick ass, and most people agree with him, by the way he looks, and his powers, except for a certain few. Can\'t wait for more!!

Trunks is sooo cool! *Sighs dreamily* I am glad that Vegeta is taking authority because it looks like everyone else is falling apart. Which is strange being that he is the traumatized one. Hmm...Anyway, I am waiting for Goten...You have to have Goten in this ficcy.

Oh and yes the running around thing is a good thing. I am finished with my paper too. Yes! Will be undating in an hour or two, hopefully.

*runs around in circles screaming \"Oh My God....Oh My God!\" then hits a wall but is still conscious enough to say..
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Hmm...I still think that Trunks looks pretty cool. I have always had a thing for pale boys...even blindingly pale boys. Strange that. Anyway...this story is soo supenseful...I don\'t think I\'m going to bee toe to sleep tonight thinking about it. Good cause a still got ass loads of paper to write. \'Preciate it.

ARRRRRRGGGGG!!!!! What the frick is going on? Why do I get the funny feeling that Trunks is the only one that knows? Will the others trust him enough to believe him? How did Trunks find out? Why did Bardock try to kill Trunks and when was this again? The really hard question though was why go through all of that rigmarole and sacrificing the prince to rescue Goku only to try to kill him? This fic is bringing out an inner saiyan. Well at least you have finally assembled the Heroes and maybe we can finally get some answers. Heaven forbid, though, you\'re not gonna make it this easy are you?

I love this fic!!!

Ten years he had looked for this kid—hardly a kid, he had to be at least nine maybe tears ars older than him— LoL, it is very good to know that someone was looking for him this whole time. Or at least trying to. Trunks seems pretty amazing...and very cool. He seems very scary when it comes to Bardock..how he could hardly be in his prescence w/out his vision blinking out...

Caught him by the tail and pulled out a knife, told him that there was only one heir to the throne. Trunks was not that heir. --Ugh! Bardock really makes me sick! He is REALLY bold, and rentrently must think he is unstoppable. He is not getting anywhere near that throne!!! At least he better not!

Could smell his filth and deceit on every thing that the mother-fucker threw at him. --Yes, and it\'s too bad that for this whole time he was the only one who knew the truth. How horrible that must have been. To actually feel the vile towards the man...that he could smell the deceit...*sighs* and to know that, it is Goku\'s father...

Ugh...and it makes me even more mad Bardock kept sending ppl after Trunks to kill him, yet Trunks killed every person that came to claim his life. How annoying to have to always be on guard like that.

And mixed races of any kind are looked down upon, I see... I\'m guessing that is just b/c most of these different races/species think they are better than one another. I think Trunks sounds pretty cool. Being half spider half saiyajin.

No one that served that man.--hm...what about the ppl on that ship with Goku and Vegeta...some of them served Bardock...does he want them to die?

In fact won wondered if Bardock had fucking mix-breeds running around the icejin world. --umm ewww, I hope you don\'t mean mixed with saiyajin...*pukes* hehe

“He’s a murderer,” Bulma hissed.--Oh no, with this misunderstanding, ...I sense a lot of unfun things happening in the near future when Trunks comes...

Those that kidnapped and enslaved and giggled and squirmed. --LoL, yes and that is very annoying..especially the giggling. please destroy them. ^.^

“You should be a cheerleader, Chi,” Bulma snapped, rounded on her and bared her sharp teeth, “You’re just so full of HELPFUL ADVICE!”--ROFL!!! hehe...but that\'s why chi is so cool she is always saying wise and sensible things.

Oh yeah Vegeta\'s wrist are not bound! And he has an attitude!!!!!

“Let the murderer come…”--O_O AH!!! Oh..gosh...thanks for the evil cliffy...and what a cool line that was!

End notes wre hilarious especially the un vegetalike dance...

I say this and mean that in the movie, Interview with the Vampire, he was hot when Tom Cruise played him, but when they made that horrible movie Queen of the Damned I thought that guy wasn’t really Lestat-like at all.)--Oh god I hated the Queen of the Damned movie. and that guy was VERY un-lestat like. Why in the hell did he have black hair!? Lestat\'s tradmarks are his icy blue eyes and his pale blonde locks! How could they do that!!! UGH! I can\'t even talk about it, that whole movie just pisses me off! But yes Tom Cruise Lestat was VERY hot!

(Sorry, I just feel the need to confuse more people --hehe, thats ok...now you have me thinking many more things...and ooo I do hope we get to hear Bardocks side...

the way the spiders ‘teleport’ it supposed to look like the spell ‘Demi.--ooo rad, I always liked how demi looked. Is ff8 your fave final fantasy? And have you played ff10 or 10-2 at all...

*Trunks blinks a few times. Then just growls out something and disappears. * --*shurgs and laughs* what\'s his problem...?

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-MB-

I feel sorry for Freiza. NOT!! I love the way you make Trunks out, being angry at his father, and especially at Bardock, for trying to kill him. I\'m guessing that Bardock was probably talking about himself when he said that there was \'only one heir to the throne.\' If not him, then one of the icejins. \'Those that kidnapped and enslaved and giggled and squirmed.\' Damn icejins are freakin\' creepy. You just have to love to hate them in any story, especially this one.
\"Let the murderer come...\" Chichi\'s statement seems to be foreshadowing of evil to come, whether it be to those on the ship, or to Bardock and the ones who really deserve it. So, if Trunks is more than a murderer, as Gohan claims, what els hes he, besides spider-Saiyan mix? Oh, I have a question, Card. Do you think you can send me, or just tell me, some detailed descriptions of the alien races, like Trunks, Bulma, and Chi? I want to draw them, but I wan be be sure I can get them mostly right. Especially since except for Trunks, details of the others looks havecome sparingly over several chapters, if at all. Thanks if you can, and don\'t worry if you can\'t.

Hehehe spider monkey HAHAHAHAHA thats great. Eww I like Trunks in this story he\'s usally such a pussy. And Gohan I fully believe he alone is responcible for the whole Buu thing so I just don\'t like him EVER, but he really isn\'t bothering me in this story. Ya done good. I was so happy to see Vegeta get hella pissy it was nice he is finally waking up..Grrrr Me Don\'t like Bardock....oh well I could keep going but i have to cut the Bloody grass.


***Noel***

Who the fuck was projected thoughts into hers?--yes I would like to know this too...

(Pretty when he bled.)--p* wp* when who bleeds..Gohan? hehe hopefully...no I don\'t hate Gohan in this fic he isn\'t being ass...well he is being a dumb ass but not an ass...so I will leave him alone.

Even the spider was upset—by her standards, which meant she had accidentally spun a web. --She is so rad! Slightly sscary but very rad!

“Stop him from bleeding,” Chichi said--o.O yikes...yeah that would be a good idea. that is like dangling a well veined and slightly bloody neck in front of a vampire...unless the vampire was Lestat then its ok..because he is hot.

“Oh, Gods,” Bulma breathed out, “You’re talking about Trunks…”--*gasp* Trunks is his brother? Cool...

Wow seems like things are heating up, literally. But Bardock is very interesting, and I can\'t wait to see what is up with him. Well he is more than interesting...he is a cruel cruel man Why everyone hated Trunks...but now that they see the truth. And wow Bardock has a lot of control...if more ppl hated Trunks than him...and Trunks was going to be thence nce that stepped up to take the thrown if Vegeta never came back...

Then cataonic Vegeta...and the whole mind message thing...I was slightly confused for a moment, but thats ok. It wasnt confused in a bad way. And I think this is such a very good story line. I am just loving this whole badguy Bardock. And he is very cool in this fic. I love his cocky yet cool personality. Like he has always got everything under control. I wonder if he is expected everyone on this ship not to live...but when and if they do...I wonder what he will do then. All I can say is that yeah Bardock definately knows what he is doing at least he thinks he does and had this planned for awhile. I just want to know why!?!?!? and man that is driving me crazy...that is why I love it so much.

Oh and another interesting point someone said the aching Vegeta has will go away in a week but it will not go away for ever...that is strange. So then Goku is still living with thate fee feeling I suppose...the same need as Vegeta\'s... anywho I look forward to your very awesome writing skills everyday...

This fic is like beyond amazing.

‘American Beauty’ --ssaw that movie and I remember that plastic bag seen it made me laugh...I liked that movie...never watched it again but I did like it a little... you didn\'t? aww...but yeah that guy with the camcorder was always creeping me out.

*grabs Squall from ff8 as he tries to run away after dropping a Phoenix down and hugs him until he passes out. *--*laughs then dies for no reason*
*gets up moments later only to see Sephiroth, Cloud, and Zell* Oh yeah 3 hot guys saved me...*turns to see Selphi smiling and holding and empty container of phoenix down* UGH!!! she saved me!!! *pukes* I never get any luck...
hehe I love FF7 and 8...and metal gear..not that metal gear had anything to do with anything.

But still… Chichi?!--oh yeah, on DBZ I hate her guts, but in this fic she is so beyond cool. I was telling my brothers and b/f about her. I talk about fanfics to them ALL the time...it\'s great. Although my b/f and my twin are sometimes like -_- but my brother Lucas doesn\'t mind hearing it.

*Bardock accepts his award, and when MB turns her back and attempts to stab her; only to have Trunks step in the way and stop him. Then he hands the knife to the boy and starts proclaiming that Trunks tried to kill MB. * Yeah, Bardock is a great actor.--ROFL!!! oh gosh...*glares at Trunks* How could he try and kill me!!!!??? And if it weren\'t for Bardock, here...I would be *gulps* dead... *sobs and leans on Bardocks shoulder*

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