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April 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
oh, one more thing, I have this feeling \'My son is a prisoner, please go free him,\' isn\'t all that was said between Bardock and Vegeta.
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April 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hmm...I had been wondering about Bardock from the beginning of this fic. He seemed a little suspicious, now I know why. I had always liked the guy it\'s good to see him in a new light.
Guess what...Friday is my last day of school...Yes...Writing galore!
Guess what...Friday is my last day of school...Yes...Writing galore!
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April 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Loving it more and more...
Reminded him that it was the Prince’s duty to save his people. And Vegeta had been foolish, had been blind, so he blithely told Bardock they would save Goku.--How very selfless of him. and foolish and blind...but selfless. Because even being the Prince and knowing saving his ppl is his duty..he could have said no. Could have let fall to the wayside, but he went...not knowing he was being lied too. Just shows me what an incredibley un-selfish person he is. To do all he can for his ppl...and even if it wasn\'t the wisest of choices...no one is perfect.
Swore to kill him, to annihilate the basta-Goo-Good and he should. I knew ever since I read that thought of Vegeta\'s when he said what else didn\'t Bardock tell Goku...I knew something was amiss...
It makesso mso mad. And I never thought I would say this because I love Bardock...but I hate him! Iknow a parent can get psycho for their kid...I know because I am one...But I can not help the anger that I feel toward him. To trick his own Prince...but as wicked as that plan was I can see it wasbablbably the only thingeza eza would ever trade him for.
It\'s horrible...and at the same time brilliant...playing with Vegeta\'s Princely status making him feel as if it is his duty...(and it is in a way) but to lie like that...I do...I want Bardock to suffer...but then again...I dont know if I do... It is very complicated to me. To save a child but...but to treat your Prince in such a manner...yeah a price should be paid...
Was tired and hurting, and hating everything around him bhis his idiot that hung his head and promised that if that was all true—if it was true—that he would help. He would take down his own father. --That must be very hard for Goku...and loved how the if it was true part was repeated. just wow, being able to say that if it is true he will bring down his own father...this get\'s better and better every chapter.
Also loved all the questions Vegeta posed in his mind especially the question of why would Bardock save his son knowing that if and when the Prince was saved he would tell on him...or maybe Bardock though no one believe the Prince or maybe alot of things...I can understand why Vegeta didn\'t think aboutany any further...it is alot to absorb.
They thought those ears were just so cute that they could gag and die.--ROFL! Well I hope she doesn\'t cause any deaths...hehe
What a beautiful world they lived in, where icejins tried to kill them, and they helped out by killing each other.---LoL
it is touching...just like a hallmark card.
Because he could not bear the thought of going before the Saiyan Prince and asking for that forgiveness. He would. Would offer his life for the pain he had not prevented. ---good...and he should. and I am so ugh! *shakes fist* Bardock! he is just, words can not explain. He is so horrible and cruel...and what is his plan...what is behind all of this. And also having access to Goku\'s thoughts...*shakes head* I am at a loss for words abbout Bardock.
Thanks for thera cra chappie.
Love this fic...more than life...hehe ok not that much or I would be dead...but I love it alot.
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Reminded him that it was the Prince’s duty to save his people. And Vegeta had been foolish, had been blind, so he blithely told Bardock they would save Goku.--How very selfless of him. and foolish and blind...but selfless. Because even being the Prince and knowing saving his ppl is his duty..he could have said no. Could have let fall to the wayside, but he went...not knowing he was being lied too. Just shows me what an incredibley un-selfish person he is. To do all he can for his ppl...and even if it wasn\'t the wisest of choices...no one is perfect.
Swore to kill him, to annihilate the basta-Goo-Good and he should. I knew ever since I read that thought of Vegeta\'s when he said what else didn\'t Bardock tell Goku...I knew something was amiss...
It makesso mso mad. And I never thought I would say this because I love Bardock...but I hate him! Iknow a parent can get psycho for their kid...I know because I am one...But I can not help the anger that I feel toward him. To trick his own Prince...but as wicked as that plan was I can see it wasbablbably the only thingeza eza would ever trade him for.
It\'s horrible...and at the same time brilliant...playing with Vegeta\'s Princely status making him feel as if it is his duty...(and it is in a way) but to lie like that...I do...I want Bardock to suffer...but then again...I dont know if I do... It is very complicated to me. To save a child but...but to treat your Prince in such a manner...yeah a price should be paid...
Was tired and hurting, and hating everything around him bhis his idiot that hung his head and promised that if that was all true—if it was true—that he would help. He would take down his own father. --That must be very hard for Goku...and loved how the if it was true part was repeated. just wow, being able to say that if it is true he will bring down his own father...this get\'s better and better every chapter.
Also loved all the questions Vegeta posed in his mind especially the question of why would Bardock save his son knowing that if and when the Prince was saved he would tell on him...or maybe Bardock though no one believe the Prince or maybe alot of things...I can understand why Vegeta didn\'t think aboutany any further...it is alot to absorb.
They thought those ears were just so cute that they could gag and die.--ROFL! Well I hope she doesn\'t cause any deaths...hehe
What a beautiful world they lived in, where icejins tried to kill them, and they helped out by killing each other.---LoL
it is touching...just like a hallmark card.
Because he could not bear the thought of going before the Saiyan Prince and asking for that forgiveness. He would. Would offer his life for the pain he had not prevented. ---good...and he should. and I am so ugh! *shakes fist* Bardock! he is just, words can not explain. He is so horrible and cruel...and what is his plan...what is behind all of this. And also having access to Goku\'s thoughts...*shakes head* I am at a loss for words abbout Bardock.
Thanks for thera cra chappie.
Love this fic...more than life...hehe ok not that much or I would be dead...but I love it alot.
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April 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
First off I read 8 before 7... seems a certain chapter challenged individual simply jumped straight to the last available chapter without looking at the beautifully correct chapter numbers. I like the plot within a plot you have going on. This is certainly dark but is no less wonderful for it. I hope Krillin can come to terms with what Bardock\'s dishonesty did to his moral standing. I kinda like the little fella in this fic (as opposed to wanting to filet him in another fic) and he could be a \'powerful\' ally to Vegeta and Goku when/if they stand against Bardock and King Vegeta.
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April 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
OH man that chappie was soo awsome!!! I swear if you keep writting I will never get anything done!!!
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April 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Cool! Two chapters in one day.
\"(Ah, the many uses of breasts.)\" Loved this line. Glad to know that even in the midst of all the dark and angst, there is some humor. Oh dear, Gohan, even slightly good, and having Bulma attracted to him, definitely strange, but I may be able to like that. But Bardock, evil, I can see. What a horrible father, to lie to his own son, and to allow Krillin into his mind knowing where he is at all times. He should die for his treason. Will Goku or \'Geta do the deed? I\'d love to see that. I can understand about Krillin being a prince, now, and I kinda feel sorry about that ending of the chapter, what with Krillin being ashamed, but at least now he knows the truth. Charm City loves you, Card, eve I\' I\'m the only one from here. Bai-Bai! o.O\' *mutters to self* OKAY, gotta go to sleep soon. \'Night!
\"(Ah, the many uses of breasts.)\" Loved this line. Glad to know that even in the midst of all the dark and angst, there is some humor. Oh dear, Gohan, even slightly good, and having Bulma attracted to him, definitely strange, but I may be able to like that. But Bardock, evil, I can see. What a horrible father, to lie to his own son, and to allow Krillin into his mind knowing where he is at all times. He should die for his treason. Will Goku or \'Geta do the deed? I\'d love to see that. I can understand about Krillin being a prince, now, and I kinda feel sorry about that ending of the chapter, what with Krillin being ashamed, but at least now he knows the truth. Charm City loves you, Card, eve I\' I\'m the only one from here. Bai-Bai! o.O\' *mutters to self* OKAY, gotta go to sleep soon. \'Night!
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April 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Did something happen around here yesterday? *feins innocence... badly... hopes she hasn\'t shot herself in the foot so to speak* ANYway...
The drugged scene in the shower in Chapter 7 brought back memories of a DBZ fic I ra loa long time ago by an author named little Saru, only in that Vegeta was drugged in a Shower with Goku. Heh.
I\'m kinda glad you added Chapter 8\'s explination, because I was getting a bit confused. *scratches head* It stoppers the flow of the fic a bit in the first part, I felt, thatthat\'s okay because as I said I was beginning to loose my way. I look forwards to the next part and where this all may be leading to, hope that Vegeta will be okay, Kakarrot will have hot monkey sex with him, etc. And ohh... you made Bardock a villian. Interesting...
The drugged scene in the shower in Chapter 7 brought back memories of a DBZ fic I ra loa long time ago by an author named little Saru, only in that Vegeta was drugged in a Shower with Goku. Heh.
I\'m kinda glad you added Chapter 8\'s explination, because I was getting a bit confused. *scratches head* It stoppers the flow of the fic a bit in the first part, I felt, thatthat\'s okay because as I said I was beginning to loose my way. I look forwards to the next part and where this all may be leading to, hope that Vegeta will be okay, Kakarrot will have hot monkey sex with him, etc. And ohh... you made Bardock a villian. Interesting...
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April 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Beautfiul opening paragraphs...
I really, really feel for the saiyajin Prince.
It\'s almost alarming...like how he feels wants to rip his skin off and such.
Yes this is a very dark fic, disturbing, and scary...not in the sense that I am jumping) but scary...
and I love it...
Goku firmly believed that there was no greater crime in the universe than the loss of freedom.---to think that there is no greater crime than that is to really understand what it is like to have freedom taken away...
I can\'t help but be suspicious of so many things...Bardock mostly...and everything....
I had suspicions about Bardock ever since Vegeta had thought of what else Bardock didn\'t tell his son. Or maybe more ppl were in on it than knew...bleh I have a brain ache now...
I find this fic very intricate...with many people I feel like should/shouldn\'t trust. The elaborate plan was exactly that...so much...and for so long. It\'s almost so hard to believe it was 10 yrs...so sad too.
Freedom was the curse.--The paragraphs before this were very emtional and I must say the saddest definition of freedom that I have ever heard. To know the extent of the effect this is having on the both of them is amazingly sad. But I wasn\'t expecting them to jump for joy of their freedom either. Because the side effects are just horrid.
and I feel a bit like I’ve done a stupid thing by having him ‘think’ tbefobefore I gave a glimpse into that inner plot. --eh, you shouldn\'t feel stupand and of course I believe that you think Vegeta wouldn\'t choose life. Like I said I do not question you...I trust you as a writer and you have never let me down...but from the other side of it realreally dont have to explain to us. Because I know an author likes to make his/her fans happy but at the same time they have to be able to write what he/she wants. That is how one is distinguished from the crowd...not conformed by thoughts or opinions of another...but it is also understandble to want to explain oneself. Anyway...
I am just happy that you write all of thse stories. Very greatful...that you take time out to do all of it.
and I am glad you and Getarian are fine...and also glad you think of us as a fic family! *does a dance*
(and impatiently drumming my fingers against the table top whilst I wait for some ficcies to get new chapters…) --hehe, I have been trying to write as those who read my live journal know...but I have no motivation. And it\'s a complicated thing because writing is what I desire most. A passion I have always had...but like I told Dragonheart287 I am working on The Way it Wan\'t Written...but I promise nothing..b/c I don\'t want to lackth oth or emotion in my fic.(since lacking the passion I usually feel when I write, I fear it will turn out blah) but I am now (today) writing a little, seeing what will happen b/c I found a little inpsiration a bit ago...
^.*
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I really, really feel for the saiyajin Prince.
It\'s almost alarming...like how he feels wants to rip his skin off and such.
Yes this is a very dark fic, disturbing, and scary...not in the sense that I am jumping) but scary...
and I love it...
Goku firmly believed that there was no greater crime in the universe than the loss of freedom.---to think that there is no greater crime than that is to really understand what it is like to have freedom taken away...
I can\'t help but be suspicious of so many things...Bardock mostly...and everything....
I had suspicions about Bardock ever since Vegeta had thought of what else Bardock didn\'t tell his son. Or maybe more ppl were in on it than knew...bleh I have a brain ache now...
I find this fic very intricate...with many people I feel like should/shouldn\'t trust. The elaborate plan was exactly that...so much...and for so long. It\'s almost so hard to believe it was 10 yrs...so sad too.
Freedom was the curse.--The paragraphs before this were very emtional and I must say the saddest definition of freedom that I have ever heard. To know the extent of the effect this is having on the both of them is amazingly sad. But I wasn\'t expecting them to jump for joy of their freedom either. Because the side effects are just horrid.
and I feel a bit like I’ve done a stupid thing by having him ‘think’ tbefobefore I gave a glimpse into that inner plot. --eh, you shouldn\'t feel stupand and of course I believe that you think Vegeta wouldn\'t choose life. Like I said I do not question you...I trust you as a writer and you have never let me down...but from the other side of it realreally dont have to explain to us. Because I know an author likes to make his/her fans happy but at the same time they have to be able to write what he/she wants. That is how one is distinguished from the crowd...not conformed by thoughts or opinions of another...but it is also understandble to want to explain oneself. Anyway...
I am just happy that you write all of thse stories. Very greatful...that you take time out to do all of it.
and I am glad you and Getarian are fine...and also glad you think of us as a fic family! *does a dance*
(and impatiently drumming my fingers against the table top whilst I wait for some ficcies to get new chapters…) --hehe, I have been trying to write as those who read my live journal know...but I have no motivation. And it\'s a complicated thing because writing is what I desire most. A passion I have always had...but like I told Dragonheart287 I am working on The Way it Wan\'t Written...but I promise nothing..b/c I don\'t want to lackth oth or emotion in my fic.(since lacking the passion I usually feel when I write, I fear it will turn out blah) but I am now (today) writing a little, seeing what will happen b/c I found a little inpsiration a bit ago...
^.*
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April 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I love you ficcy. It is so dark and wonderful. I am a twisted little something aren\'t I?
Hmm...about Kalika. I am trying. I really am. *looks sheepish and hopes that she will be forgiven for her slacking* I got two chapters going now. I will post them both at the same time. I am aiming for Friday. Ok?
Hmm...about Kalika. I am trying. I really am. *looks sheepish and hopes that she will be forgiven for her slacking* I got two chapters going now. I will post them both at the same time. I am aiming for Friday. Ok?
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April 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I am soo liking this ficcy. Oh yeah! That was a Chevelle song! I love that song too actually...I should have caught that. Anyway, I love how everyone is in the fic but are aliens...more chances to be creative...and very well done I might add. I can\'t wait for more. Oh...and I wasn\'t that smug was I? I was just so happy I finally caught something...I never catch anything. :(